 All right, so let's check this out. I'm gonna play this first and There is another version without wings, I mean with wings Which I want to take a look at which I think is a bit more important because we need to know where those big shapes are And it's important to for balance You gave me some notes. You gave me someone else's notes to compare And I have some agreements and some disagreements and there's some some some changes So let me just cut this out here because some of the balance things are also dependent on where the wings are to some degree but Watching this I had I had some similar thoughts so I'm gonna go through their notes and then just out my two senses probably the easiest So one of the first things was that it looks like he is dodging The arrow and I agree just because goes down goes down. This happens at the same time and Looking at where that arrow lands. It seems like It should be going this way But then it's going down and then it lands here and the confusing thing too is that a really tiny arrow that lands on his horn Or is it behind him? So this is slightly weird So he sobs and goes down. Yeah, it seems super super strange So I would I would take this arrow out because that's already the aftermath So I don't think you we need to see this arrow plus. It's just confusing So I would agree there another note was feels like a strange way for creature like this to cry The way he or she's crying is very human. I'm gonna go with the heat just because of the Coloring given that this is probably female, but you don't have to go with that trope. You can just add whatever colors So this could still be a she Try to pull from other animals to see so So saying that this is strange how they cried that kind of depends on you like how Human life you want this to be like that would be my before you do anything You have to decide is this full-on creature behavior despite the cartoony look You know, you can't go full-on hundred percent photoreal, but you can still go very very human if that's something that you want to do I don't think it's wrong. I think you you empathize a bit more because you can relate So my thing would be What I would do To get a bit of a mix I'm a massive fan of having creatures and then doing a mix between animal behavior and Human behavior so what you could do here and I think you're alluding to this in one of your notes at the end I will bring these guys closer and especially the child. So it's gonna be probably more sorrow about the child than the wife or the husband I'm just being cliche here and Imagine that they could be the head who be here You can always reverse it where the other person's dragon's head is here But the the baby's head the kid's head is here and that the dragon goes down and then here is the Nuzzle whatever the nose right or animalistic you want to go here and the dragon pushes Pushes the creature up a bit moving as if there he's not or she's not understanding What's going on? They're not moving. Are they dead? I don't understand. I'm sad Just kind of like it's a bit of a nudge like come on move move You can't be dead which is a bit more animalistic and the reason why I'm saying that one is There's something else later on but I'll get to that later here So I would personally I would have that more a bit more for connection It's a bit to me would emphasize their emotion a bit more than just him looking at grass You know me and he doesn't even look really here. It's just kind of there So there will be a bigger connection. I would do that. So Nick's the arrow. I will personally do the nudging and not this Then this comes in And here I agree here the note was Quite overacted a giant dragon like this being poked by toothpick of an arrow doesn't seem like it Will elicit that big of a reaction. Yes, so there are a couple things Again, this all depends also how human you want to go a yes. This is tiny. This is way too big also If you're going creature-y I creatures don't really bring out elbows I mean, it's like it's you know a big cat thing as well But nothing when bases on a cat, but it's like I was kind of using the cat example Elbows out is very human and creatures keep elbows in so You might have to bring one of the wings out there for better silhouette if you want to go all the way and if you go all the way and then I will bring the chest pointing this way and The other arm here, so it's a bit more like that So the elbows are further in but again such a big turn feels slightly unrealistic given that toothpick thing So to me it would just be hit And it would be kind of a couple steps back head up Like what's going on quick look at the arrow and quick look left and right like scanning what's going on? What's going on something hit me is kind of painful, but not really but what's going on here? So that will be my thing. I wouldn't go this big So you could Take all this out you can go from here or you know wherever the head is on the nudging to here Freaked out eyes. I mean a crazy freaked out, but just enough to go. Whoa. What is this? Like he got he got shocked out of the sorrow And that's just kind of a involuntary move of oh something something's there and he goes wait. Oh That's an arrow. That's what hurt me and the thing is The reason there's this note here. Oh I'm hurting pain. Oh, I'm going to this massive list of notes. This is completely unnecessary He doesn't need to look back to understand what has already happened. So this is where I disagree But it also depends on how animalistic you want to go So if you have this here an animal Crying about you're being sad about their family dead Who's to know that this creature understands humans knows humans So she knows their weapons and knows that this is an arrow and this is what killed him Like, you know, like creatures wouldn't really know as yet again depends how far you want to go So to me I like this just because it would be a man. This is what hurts me wait. This looks exactly like this This is painful. There are lots of them This is what killed him. So to me. It's not an unnecessary thing to double down to show to the audience To me, I like this because the dragon makes the connection of weight. This is the thing that hurts This is the thing that hurt them At the same time, you know, if you want to You can cut it and we just have to assume that the dragon understands. That's totally fine, too I'm not saying it's wrong. I just disagree that it's unnecessary. It just depends on the mindset and On the the premise of the creature their world and what they understand and how much they know of humans That's that was kind of that was my thought on that You know, and you can always do something where maybe there's some knowing or some pulling out Like he bites down and tries to pull this out That maybe pulls this creature closer to to him because he knows this killed them You want to take them out? So it's it would take the pain away and because now they're the creatures closer because of the pulling Which could be nice little animation then he puts the nose down and does its last little Nuzzling and snuggling of saying goodbye like that could be something so we connect to this the creature understands Yeah, this is what will kill them and I'm really sad I'm doing my last touching because this is my family. So then you would tone this down and then Cut this out That would be I don't so the couple ways of doing it. I wouldn't it just all depends on your premise basically And then there are some other points here Put for balance and push more together. There was something on I'm gonna go on that frame quickly what there are some drawings about The leg in so hold on let me just try to find this and the audience listening is gonna be very confused But there is on 314 I will replicate this There's something of a slight disagreement. So they're this here and then the front leg in here. It's a nice look My only thing is again, it depends how human like you're going to go So the thing is when creatures walk slowly their stance is wider because of balance the faster They run the closer they're together because of streamlining and less balancing because of the velocity momentum going forward So walking slowly going there like a catwalk not like how a cat walks cat actually has the legs out I'm saying like a supermodel catwalk. It's a wrong user of a term there I'm not sure if that's also appropriate. It's like what I would actually like How far are you going here? You think steps? See there's that little pause to me. It would be actually Like this head down Chest down ass up. So it's actually bring out the legs for a triangle position and posing Which is much more it's just stronger. It's more balanced and To me, it's just it's a pose of I'm ready. I'm ready the pounds I don't know quite no I don't know yet where that danger is coming from So I'm not going into stocking mode because I don't know where where that danger is So that to me makes less sense again. It's just all depends how creature you want to go So to me, it would be Getting up here. I disagree not disagree. I agree with the balance. I will bring out one leg just again for balance So that there was a drawing I think around here, which I felt a bit off balance Especially with the tail here and it's massing wing out there So I think that's why the wing here having that wing there is important. But then again if if that character knows that the danger is off-screen and starts to Stock that then it would start walking and then you can go into a bit more narrow piece. It gets a bit faster That's okay But to me at the very beginning but those are adjustment steps and to me they will be dependent on where that dragon is looking So it looks around Like the big looks right and then okay like this I'll be careful with this now looking this way Feels like he or she knows where the danger is coming from and that's a bit premature Because this is more like whoa, I got shocked out of my sorrow. What's going on? Wait? I'm seeing this what the hell and again I don't mind this because he will connect it or she but it's only up to you Then once you go into this I would start the looking so careful with this pause here this To this is too specific looking I would like knowing where that character is or where the threat is I would immediately go into looks hold I darts I darts look around I darts I darts and then Then locking it in You know and then the thing is here to me that that night feels rushed now They're fine them and he must be or she must be so Angry again that depends on how creature you're gonna go. Is this gonna be a human thing of oh? That's where they are and then into a really angry face and then go so realizing pause change of emotion attack or Is it just gonna be a quick of here? They are I'm gonna go because it's very creaturey So less human so I would look out for that then as you go into this this is yes when you bring Those in that's good, and then he goes for the attack. That's fine I would straighten out that that part with the tail But I know you this is still roughing this in and that probably as you go in I Would start folding in the wings just because of again stream lining up being slowed down or Or you could always go this and go so as Basically as they look around I would also bring in the wings Because he wants to be small or she and look where is the attacker and not be seen Not not display where we know it doesn't want to What's the word? Not transmit display it doesn't want to you know present himself as a big target There's a threat and he's looking where is that threat so he or she's gonna make itself as small as possible Then again you can you can go in here of oh here it is and then you can do a big roar wings out and going Ah, I've seen you and it's a very emotional reaction. It's not a creature reaction It's an emotional reaction. That's more human-based where here you are wings out. I'm a threat to you I'm you know making myself big and I'm attacking you That could be something right so I know to me lots of options So yes, I know on some of the notes again all depends how far you want to go I'm a big fan of mixing those things. So I personally will go This see this is strong. I really like this pose So legs out for balance then as you go in here and there's some more looking and especially if you want to keep a pause I will bring out the legs because of the powerful stance of it And then as the speed ramps up then bring the legs in of what that's what a creature would do So these would be my my creature notes cool shot. Yeah, this is weird, but it really like this that Very cool That's too big. This is nice to I really like this the timing of it And you understand that the creature is thinking and putting things together And I like the timing and I like the lowering of the head ahead here That's all cool. And again, I don't mind it. And again, it just connects of weight this is The same and that's what happens, but You know, do you want the audience to assume that the dragon knows this totally fine Totally fine and you go back potentially to what I said here You can bite this and pull it out because in its desperation, you know and push the emotion I still I know they're dead, but I want to help them and I want to try to to Take the pain away Maybe I want to pull the arrow out and that pulls the creature over then it's closer Then you do the last nuzzling head down eyes closed because it's the last 10 the moments then arrow So it's big contrast of not a lot of movement and the big Bam, but not this but it's more straight into this like what's going on and that's just Creature reaction of the muscle spasm and the nerves in the pain You know, that's what that's what arm goes up And then because of that look because I like this that if he or she would look that the actual arrow will be here In its eye line and then he follows the eye line down to wait. This is what pains me and so on and so on Repeating myself, but again, I'm a fan of couple things and again. I think this is going to be all up to you how you want to proceed um And that's about it. All right cool. Shaw. I'm very curious which direction you're going to go and That's it. I'm sorry. I'm looking at your very last one to keep saying that's it But I want to try to I don't miss anything Because you are mentioning I need to move his family back closer to him and we talked about that To an ash the initial timing the arrow is confusing. We did talk about that cut the beads. It depends Maybe I should turn down his pain reactions clear. It's just a surface wound. Yes Him discovering arrow is confusing Depends not really so after he's done with his scan for danger. We'll try to such But he turns aggressively towards the wound and maybe goes from removing the arrow with his mouth That could be cool Actually, but that might take too much time. I think at this point there is There's kind of an attack revenge Being careful. Where is the attacker mode? Where if this is just a surface wound, I don't think The dragon will care as much. It's not something that's going to um debilitate him or her Enough so I I don't know to me taking the arrow out Kind of slows down the pacing. I think at this point You want to ramp up ramp up ramp up into this then taking the time to pull out the arrow personally? I wouldn't do that But again, it's all very subjective shoot tweak is mechanic some more during the walk and run bit. Yes And again depends how far you want to go in terms of human and creature um And that's it. All right. I hope I address all the notes I'm actually a big fan of getting notes from other professionals. I like this. I like how Because it gives you an option to compare Because I would hate for you to do exactly what I say. You should not follow Everything I say because it's just one opinion. It's one subjective opinion And I'm a big fan of hearing what other professionals think because you know, this could be different This could be much better. This could be totally wrong and again wrong in this objective way Um, but it's cool. They're always like learning from other people in terms of their approaches. It's very cool So big fan, um, and very curious which way you're gonna go. So thank you All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want You can submit whatever beyond you get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you