 Hello. Hello. Hello. Hello, guys. I am back on yet another TikTok live. Guys, I haven't done a TikTok live in forever. I've not done a TikTok live because guys, I'm going to keep it real. My masterclasses have been super busy. I've had over like 100 people a part of my masterclass and it's just been super busy and it's just a busy period. And guys, I'll be honest, I think I mentioned this in my previous live. These lives are not going to be that regular because things are just, a girl is booked and busy, right? So, you know, obviously today I had a bit of time, so I'm just popping up. But, you know, these lives are going to be, they're going to be as and when, okay? Because a girl has been booked and busy. My masterclasses are absolutely popping. I didn't realize so many of you guys found it so useful. So I think we're over 100 plus people who've signed up to my masterclasses. And of course, guys, I am going to be running one off GCSE literature classes next week. So on Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday, Friday, guys, I will literally be going over Macbeth model answers, Christmas Carol model answers, inspector calls, power and conflict, as well as unseen poetry. The reason why I'm doing those Easter GCSE revision classes is because literature paper one is going to be in 50 days, literature paper two is going to be I think 52 days time. So obviously I'm going to be doing and spending the Easter break, going over how to literally practice and revise for literature paper one and paper two, okay? So if you guys are interested in signing up for those GCSE one off literature classes, the link is in the bio, okay? However, as I said, guys, I'm going to keep it real. These lives are few and far between because a girl has been booked and busy, okay? Like these masterclasses have been have me in a chokehold. Obviously in a positive chokehold because my group members are absolutely amazing. They've been brilliant. However, today, I do have some time. So I'm going to be going over English language paper one. I'm keeping an eye on the time because guys, I'm not going to lie to you. I've got to be off by 6pm. Okay, so I'm also keeping a very keen eye on the time. But guys, I have been receiving loads of you kind of sending me feedback on emails, even on YouTube, basically saying, hey, can you go live? When are you going to go live? So that's why I'm going live today. And also guys, by the way, bear in mind on YouTube, I'm very active on YouTube, okay? So I've been posting lots of collab videos. The latest collab I've done is with a teacher called Stacy Ray. So make sure you check out that video. I'm also going to be doing a collab revision series with Mr. Sally's. In fact, on YouTube, I put up all lots of YouTube subscribers voted, right? What you guys want to see in the GCSE 2024 exams. A bunch of you guys wanted to prediction videos, fire collabs, right? And we're going to be releasing them from April. Anyway, guys, without further ado, we're going to jump straight in. And guys, I'm going to only cover the questions that I have time for up until 6pm. Then I'm jumping off. What I am going to do, by the way, guys, is I'm going to try my best to also upload this live onto YouTube. I always say this, but this time I'm going to try my best to remember, okay? So it's going to be hopefully on YouTube, like maybe in a few days time, okay? To help you guys along your Easter GCSE revision break. This live, by the way, is for especially the class of 2024, right? So those of you in Year 11, those of you that are sitting your exams in 50 days, this live is especially for you guys, okay? You need to make the most of this final major holiday so that you are ready for these exams, okay? So that especially if you hate English, you get these exams done in 50 days time and you never have to look back and you go on to do exactly what you want. As I have done in the past with my lives, I'll always talk about timings, okay? At this stage, if you're in Year 11, you need to be able to be super thorough on timings. In fact, at this stage, guys, you need to be working your speed reading and your speed writing, okay? Timings should be second nature, but let's quickly go over it. Now, in terms of timings for this paper, this is language, paper one GCSEs. Remember, you've got one hour, 45 minutes. How do you allocate that time? Remember to spend the first 10 minutes of this exam reading the questions first, reading question paper first, then insert. Work on that speed reading. Remember, people who do really well in the English GCSEs are really good with the speed reading and the speed writing, okay? Now, after that first 10 minutes of your exams, you've read the question, gotten a lay of the land and then read the insert. Spend a max of five minutes on question number one. This is where you've got to write four statements that are true. You don't need to quote, but you just need to write in full sentence. For question number two, which is a language question, spend a max of 10 minutes on this question. Make sure you start writing in peel paragraphs, point evidence explanation link, then and go for at least two peel paragraphs, right? So two peel paragraphs, question number two. Question three, this is a structured question. Again, it's worth eight miles just like question number two. Spend 10 minutes on this question, try to aim to write two peel paragraphs or at the very least one chunky peel paragraph for question number three, talking about something at the beginning versus something at the end. Question four, this is the student statement. It's worth 20 marks suspend a max of 20 minutes on this question, aim to write at least three peel paragraphs. And then for question five, which is creative writing, spend the remaining 50 minutes on this question. Okay, this is your story, or your descriptive writing. Okay. So as I said, guys, today, we've got an hour. So I'm probably going to have enough time to do questions one to four, and then probably at a later live at some stage, not sure when going to look at question number five. Okay. And of course, for those of you guys who do want a little bit more and you want a little bit detail and stuff like that, you can always also sign up for my master classes, which I run every single Sunday at 5pm. However, now that we're clown timings and we're clear on what you need to do. And especially if you're currently in year 11, and you're starting your Easter revision break, make sure you were super clear on your timings. Okay. Now, as I said, as in terms of exam technique, right? So now here at this stage, you are practicing for your exams, right? Meaning what you need to do before you start reading your insert in a panic, okay, we're going to be looking at this. But in terms of exam technique, always begin by getting a layer of the land. Okay, read the questions first, so that you're reading the insert looking for answers. Okay. So you're asked to read the first part of the source from lines one to five, find four things about Zoe surroundings from this part of the source. Okay. Why is it good to read the questions first before you read the insert? Because it gives you spoilers, it tells you what to look for and answers to look for as you're reading the insert. So you're not wasting valuable time. So therefore, as I'm reading the insert, or even the questions, I already know there's going to be someone called Zoe and, you know, maybe there's something interesting about her surroundings. That's why I've been asked to look for it. Obviously, question number two is always you always get a little bit of the extract here in front of you. And it's a language question, okay, so you're always asked how the writer uses language to, in this case, describe Zoe's feelings. Make sure at this stage, guys, year 11s, be clear on what language is language is stuff like similes, alliteration, metaphors, personification, hyperbole, all of that stuff. Do not mention stuff like beginning versus end. Do not mention things like circular structure. All of that stuff goes into question number three, English, you will not do very well. If you are not clear on language versus structure, because this is testing your A02. If you do not know what A01, A02, A03, A04 and A05 is, which you're going to be tested on in 50 days, you should literally become clear on what those assessment objectives are. A01 is, can you answer the question? A02 is, do you have subject terminology, language structure? A03, are you able to compare, right, which is tested in paper two. A04 is, I'm getting lost. So what is A04? A04 is, can you write creatively and A05 is your spag points? I think I've gotten that right. Anyway, if I'm not going that right, head over to First Rotators YouTube, tell me off and obviously look at that assessment objective video, which I think I posted all the six AOs. I posted that video a few weeks back, just watch that. I'm saying this off the top of my head and I feel like I've got one of the AOs wrong. Anyway, guys, A02, be clear, which is tested here is your terminology. This is your subject terminology. This is your awareness of things like similes, metaphors, all of that stuff. In this case, we're told and we're asked to look at Zoe's feelings again. Now, here, you're always given the same bullet points, words and phrases, language, teacher's techniques, sentence forms. Sentence form is technically structure, but you need to be able to answer all three bullet points, as I always say, guys, and I've said this before in past lives and I always reinforce this to all my students and my master classes. For this one, just mention how a writer uses a language technique in a declarative sentence. Remember, a declarative sentence is a sentence that states a fact, feeling or mood. Right now, I am talking in a series of declarative sentences. That's question number two. It's always a language question. Let's have a look at question number three. Now, this question always asks you to talk about structure. Look at the whole of the source. This text is from the beginning of a novel, okay? If it's at the beginning, it's meant to captivate our interest and intrigue. How has the writer structured the text to interest you as a reader? You are always interested, okay? Your examiners don't actually care whether you're bored to tears. You are always interested. Obviously, in this case, also, you are being tested on A02, right? Terminology. Meaning, when it comes to structure, you're not mentioning language. You're not talking about personification, similes, all of that stuff. You are talking about beginning versus ending, okay? Which is also indicated in these two billet points, beginning of the source, how the writer and why they change this focus, which can be middle or ending. Also, structure is things like circular structure, Volta, which means turning point in media res, which is in the middle of action, all of that stuff, right? And also, you're asked to talk about any other structural features. For question number two, by the way, and for question number three, in terms of exam technique, right? And I'm saying this especially for those of you in year 11, who are entering your final major holidays before your exams start in 50 days? You need to be clear in terms of how to answer this paper and this question. Aim to write at least two PIL paragraphs. PIL is point evidence explanation link. Minimum of two PIL paragraphs for this question, eight marks, see each paragraph as roughly worth four marks each. And then for this question, try to aim to write two PIL paragraphs. Or you can potentially in number three, if your first PIL paragraph is detailed enough, you can potentially get away with one PIL paragraph as long as you juxtapose and you add a bit of evidence from this start versus either the middle or the end. Yeah. So you can, as long as your first, as long as that PIL paragraph, that one PIL paragraph is chunky. If you're able to do that in lots of detail, you've basically addressed all three bullet points. Okay. However, of course, in this live, I'm going to do two PIL paragraphs because I always like being extra. Let's look at question number four. Question four is always a student statement. Focus is part of your answer and the second part of the source from line 28 to the end. A student said, okay, it's always a student statement. In this part of the story was Zoe and Jake. Okay, so now there's a person called Jake. A court in the avalanche. Oh, there's an avalanche. I can't believe Zoe is so slow to react to the warning signs because in the end, the situation sounds really dangerous. Okay, interesting. So I've really got lots of spoilers of being told in question one, there's someone called Zoe and she's in some surroundings, which should be interesting because I'm being asked to talk about the surroundings in question one. I also have been told something about Zoe's feelings to look out for in question two. Question three is interest here as a reader, but in this case now, I've gotten more spoilers. This is the value in reading the questions first during your exam. Okay, so guys, year 11. When you are doing these actual exams in 50 days, do not panic and start reading the insert. Read the questions first because they give you powerful spoilers. Then you look at the insert and then you're reading it, looking for answers. Okay, now in this case, to what extent do you agree? Guys, in all honesty, this is not history essay. Okay, you don't have to talk about a greeting extent, disagree to an extent. If the statement doesn't contradict what's going on in the extra and and it often doesn't, just simply agree. Say, okay, here's reason one, two and three and have a nice mix of language and structure. Okay, as I said reason one, two and three, that therefore means for this question is worth 20 marks. You want to go for at least three peel paragraphs in terms of exam technique. And in this case, you're asked to talk about Zoe's reactions. And as part of the story, evaluate where you're talking about language and structure, how the writer makes a situation sound dangerous. Support your response with references and text. Okay, I've read the questions, I've gotten a lay of the land. And as I said, guys, because I need to jump off at 6pm, I'm only going to be looking at section A and then at some point, not sure when, guys, I'm not going to lie to you. This is a super busy period for me. At some stage, I might be able to jump back on live and do the creative writing question that came up here, right? But that one, I can't tell you when that's going to happen, because as I said, guys, these master classes have been keeping me really busy. There's over 100 students that have signed up. And on top of that, I'm doing these Easter literature lessons. Loads of people have already signed up for them. So that's going to be keeping me fairly busy. Okay, however, now that I've gotten a lay of the land, I'm now going to be reading this exam paper looking for those answers. Guys, when you're doing your GCSEs in 50 days time, do not be, don't start reading the source and then reading leisurely and being like, oh, this is interesting. I'm just going to highlight that. No, like that's a waste of your time. Read the questions, then now you're reading it strategically looking for answers. Okay, so I'm going to obviously begin by reading the context or a little bit of the blurb here, which is what the only context you're given. So you told that this extract is from the beginning of a novel by Graham Joyce. Okay, so the, this is the author. A young married couple Zoe and Jake are on a skiing holiday. Okay, in the French Pyrenean mountains. Okay, interesting. So that's the surroundings I suppose, right, which I've been asked to focus in on in question one. So let's have a look. It was snowing again. Okay, so it's snowing in the surroundings. Gentle pointed, gentle six pointed flakes. Okay, there's these six pointed snowflakes from a picture book was settling on her jacket sleeve. The mountain air prickled with ice and the smell of pine resin. Okay, so this is the smell around this area. The author is using what we call olfactory imagery olfactory imagery. Really powerful technique especially it relates to what you can smell, taste, touch, see, feel. Okay, so they start off with really nice powerful olfactory imagery. Several hundred meters below lay the dark outline of some Bernard en Orte. Their Pyrenean resort village. It's a resort across the west. They're regular peaks of the mountain range. Interesting. So there's lots and lots of really interesting description, okay, which I'm going to be using for question number one. Zoe pulled the air into her lungs. So now she's like breathing in really deeply, feeling the cracking cold of it before letting go. And when the mountain seemed to nod and sigh, so the mountain is nodding at her personification. Back at her, she almost thought that she could die in that place and happily. So she's like oh my god I love this, I'm so happy to be on holiday. If there are a few moments in life that come as clear and as pure as ice, interesting simile. When the mountain breed back at her, Zoe knew that she had trapped one such moment and that it could never be taken away. So here there's lots of hyperbole similes to show just how happy she is, this Zoe person. Everywhere with snow and silence. Interesting simple sentence to focus in our attention. Snow and silence repetition, which is structure. The complete arrest of life, the rehearsal and pre-echo of death, interesting. And echo of course is onomatopoeia. She pointed her skis down the hill. They look like weird talons of brilliant red and gold in the powder snow as she waited, ready to swoop. I'm alive, I'm an eagle and here it's an italic, so of course this is what they are thinking. This one was up now, pathetic fallacy. And a few minutes it would be more scarce to break the eerie morning spell. So it's like really enchanting the surrounding. But right now they have the snow in the morning entirely to themselves. So now here we've got this really really nice picturesque description. It's so scenic, it's really nice. So as us as readers, we're almost feeling like Zoe, right? We're like, wow this is so nice, I want to go here. There was a whisper onomatopoeia behind her. It was the effortless track of Jake's skis. Okay so this is the Jake that's mentioned in question number four. Again I'm reading all of this stuff thinking about the question. I'm not reading it for the sake of reading it. It was the effortless track of Jake's skis as he came over the ridge and caught up with her. Okay so they're like skiing and having fun, you know it's all a vibe. This is perfection dialogue. Dialogue is structured by the way guys. Okay guys I'm going over this for those of you near 11 who are starting your Easter break. I hope you're paying attention to all of these different things because you need to incorporate that into your own self-study and self-practice for English. You ready to go? She asked. Yep let's do it. They got up early to beat the holiday making holds for this first run of the morning. More pathetic fallacy morning there's a sense of promise. Because this the tranquility the silence the undisturbed snow and the feeling of proximity to an eagle's flight again there's this reference this eagle right so they feel like they're on top of the world. What was what was what it was all about? Jake hit again Jake hit the west side of the steep but broad slope and she took the east carving matching parallel tracks through the fresh snow so like the the skiing having fun but at the edge of the slope near the curtain of trees metaphor she felt a small slab of snow sibilants the s sound tension slip from underneath her it was that she she'd but so she took the fall line to recover her balance by the way there's a star here showing that the examiners know that you might not know what that means and here it's always at the end right so fall line means the most direct route downhill uh so carrying on so she took the fall line to recover her balance before she dropped 300 meters the whisper of her skis was displaced by a rumble so now it starts off with a whisper then it becomes a rumble right onomatopoeia sound words Zoey saw the periphery of her vision so this is the side of her eyes that Jake had come to a halt so Jake has stopped at the side of the pist and was looking back up the slope irritated by the fall start they've made she edged a few turns before skidding to a halt and look back at her let's carry on to the next page husband so here we can see that there's something shifting and if I think about question number four which is telling me that you know they're in a dangerous situation because I've read the questions I know that something's going to happen I've been given spoilers and how is Zoe have reacting to all of this to this whisper than a rumble and then this small slab of snow well she's actually reacting by feeling irritated you know she's not really paying attention so already as I'm reading this I'm thinking okay I'm probably going to agree with the student statement in question number four the rumble became louder there was a pillar of what looked like gray smoke unfurling in silky banners at the head of the slope like the heraldry of armies lots of simile here it was beautiful it made her smart so rather than kind of panicking because I've been told they're in a dangerous situation in question number four she is smiling and she's like oh my god it's so nice it's so beautiful then her smile iced over now this is volta right this is a turning point remember volta is really really powerful structural technique if you are able to spot it in a narrative a story in your paper one or paper two and of course also in literature okay in fact volta your examiners are going to be like frothing at the mouth if they're like oh my god this person found volta this is exciting everyone else is just talking about long sentence short sentence but you're not doing that you are pointing out really advanced techniques right so this is a turning point because now she's gone from smiling to now there's going to be a sudden shift in her um demeanor in the way she is jake was speeding straight towards her his face was rubberizing the mouth something as if you are her get to the side to the sides now he's shouting she knew that it was an avalanche this is the avalanche has been mentioned jake slowed battling at her with a ski pole get to the trees hang on to a tree so now here there's lots of exclamatory sentences the rumbling again there's this rumbling had become a roaring in her ears the author is using onomatopoeia right so it starts off as a whisper then a rumbling then now a roaring right so now this is increasing the tempo it's going to a crescendo right a really really high point in the narrative the rumbling had become a roaring in her ears drowning jake's words she puts herself down the full line scrambling for traction trying to accelerate so now here she's suddenly gone from being you know really happy really peaceful feeling like an eagle she's trying to escape trying to accelerate away from the roaring cloud breaking behind her like it's not me at sea lots of interesting language similes jagged black cracks appeared in the snow in front of her she angled his keys towards the side of the slope heading for the trees but it was too late right so now here we're like as readers right again i'm thinking about question number three how does this interest us as readers towards the end we can see that there's all of this action in contrast to the beginning she saw jake's black suit go um bundling past her so he's like tumbling right as he turned uh as he was turned by the great mass of snow smoke and snow sibilants then she too was punched off her feet and carried through the air twisting spinning turning in the white out she remembered something about spreading her arms around her head for a few moments it was like being agitated inside a washing machine metaphor turned head over hills a few times until at least she was dumped heavily in a rib cracking fall really dramatic language then there came a chattering noise so now this crescendo has gone down right now it's gone from a roaring to a chattering like the amplified jaws of a million termites chewing on wood so this is what you can hear during this avalanche right and maybe the avalanche is now quieting down the noise filled itself in the air has muffled everything then now it goes from chattering to silence and the total whiteness faded to gray and then to black so this is really interesting so here we can see from the volta everything really speeds up but then towards the end the noise which runs through as a thread through the narrative goes back to silence which is really interesting because how did it start at the beginning we were told about silence so ready also as i'm reading this i'm thinking oh actually there's almost like a circular narrative because it's really really quiet at the beginning right so you know zoe is at the top of the mountain she could you know the mountain is sighing back at her it's really really quiet and there's silence here right so this is really interesting circular structure again rather than in question three saying the writer uses really long and short sentences which every single student across the country in 50 days time is going to be saying during the GCSE exams and examiners are going to be absolutely bored and over it point out interesting advanced techniques pick out things like circular structure pick out volta right look for that and obviously to become really good at doing that you now need to invest this time that you have left during your Easter break in practicing all of these questions and looking out for these trends and patterns okay try not to be saying the same obvious thing right the writer uses you know listing and this makes us want to read on as readers guys like don't ever do that right like literally the examiners keep on reading stuff like that and it's boring this is really really stuff that's not going to do you favors in passing your exams okay so pick out things like that now finish reading this I'm now going to turn my attention to obviously answering the question okay so as I said guys we're going to be starting with question number one working through it but as I said guys running against time so we're going to be moving a little bit rapidly today and then at some point in the future I'm not going to lie to you don't know when because things are getting too hectic on my end I'm probably going to get around to creative writing at some point not sure when not going to be not going to lie to you guys okay don't hold people's hopes too high and then you're just checking TikTok every single day thinking I'm going to be coming on because a girl's booked and busy okay however let's go over question number one list four things about Zoe surroundings from just this part guys number one is really easy and straightforward the only way you can go wrong with this question is either picking out evidence from beyond question beyond line five or writing one word sentences okay don't do that so write in four sentences what are the four things about the surroundings number one it's snowing number two the gentle six pointed slicks number three below this slope or even below Zoe is this place called some Bernard on hot and also this there's a smell of pine resin those are the four things okay so this should not stress you out it was snowing that's the first response the second thing is the snow had six pointed flakes that's the second thing write in four sentences um the air smells of pine resin third thing and then the final thing is uh below her is Saint Bernard on halt like halt couture sorry to any of you guys who are French amongst me that's probably a really terrible pronunciation but that's it for question number one guys the only way to go wrong with this question is either selecting the wrong um information from the wrong lines or writing one word responses again guys if you're joining this live that means you guys want to do well so please don't do that okay that's question number one done over question two examiners have done you a favor a q is on your favor they want you to save your energy you don't have to look at the extract again you can only use what's in front of you here lines nine to fourteen and you asked how the writer uses language to describe Zoe's feelings and of course i need to make sure i mentioned sentence forms and at least one of my pill paragraphs so let's go back to this what's really interesting about here and what can we see in terms of Zoe's feelings a good way to select evidence by the way guys let's go back to exam technique for those of you class of 2024 who are sitting your exam in 50 days time a good technique to adopt is when you're given this select something from the beginning versus something from the end nice juxtaposition and also your examiners are going to see that you're not lazy when you're picking information okay so if i looked here definitely and as i was reading this this stood out to me right this really interesting simile she's saying that you know this air and you know her feelings whilst she's on the mountain she feels you know this this moment feels as clear and as pure as ice what is interesting here is she almost feels at one with nature that's the first thing i'm going to talk about in terms of her feelings now i'm not going to select anything next to it because i want to show off to my examiner hey i'm not a lazy student i'm going to select something towards the end okay so here maybe what's really interesting towards the end here is this reference to how this feeling that she has right the snow in silence snow in silence there's a complete arrest of life hyperbole right and there's this kind of element and this sense of she almost feels as if you know this the feeling that she has is almost like this pre-echo of death almost that the feeling that some people have just before they died that kind of exhilaration right she feels almost like she's rising above her body use this word by the way which is really powerful ambitious language she feels a sense of transcendence if you're doing ari by the way you probably have come across this word right rising above your body rising above your human limitations if you don't you're not doing ari and you're like what's transcendence i've said it but if you still don't understand google is your best friend okay if you're in year 11 you need to also start taking initiative to empower yourself so that you can do well in your gcsc's anyway so this is going to be the two points right i've selected something from the beginning and then for my second pill paragraph something from towards the end i'm showing my examiner again i'm not lazy i literally you know i understand the assignments so then now i dive into my first pill paragraph pill is point evidence explanation and link that this paragraph structure by the way is not i'm not going to write four lines okay that's not detail the reason why i love pill paragraphs is because you you are told what steps to it includes all the steps that examiners are looking for but in very easy and simple to remember steps okay of course there's lots of other paragraph structures but i'm going to use pill paragraphs and of course pay attention to my explanation which is where the bulk of my mocks are going to be okay and i'm also i need to do things like word level analysis now my first point is firstly opening point it is clear that zoe seems elated which means really happy whilst she is skiing indeed she seems or she appears to feel at one with nature on this mountain that's my opening point step number one done as you can see it's not four lines okay that's my opening point now and also by the way guys pay attention to the fact that i'm using keywords from the question again you need to do that now i'm going to go into my evidence okay so her experience was was as clear and as pure as ice that's my evidence i'm not quoting long reams of lines paragraphs all of that don't waste your time writing long bits of evidence guys by the way students during the exams who use long bits of evidence what examiners can see through is that you don't know what you're talking about you're writing long quotations almost to try and distract them from the fact that you don't have analysis that's not going to work okay what you need to do is have concise and brief quotations and then you need to go into lots of detail in your analysis now of course now i'm going to dive into my analysis i'm going to try and make sure i also include sentence form declarative sentence remember a declarative sentence is a sentence that states a fact feeling or mood all sentences are declarative sentences okay that's why it's so easy now um it is clear this is now my explanation that zoe seems at peace as she stands on this mountain and this simile getting my A02 in conveys to us just how clear headed she feels however i'm not done with my explanation my explanation needs to be the longest part of my paragraph now i need to pick out one word and zoom in identify and label that word and do my word level analysis i want to talk about this idea of how this moment feels pure which is an adjective right now um i'm going to say the adjective pure in this declarative sentence form sentence connotes a feeling of connotes is a good word suggests conveys connotes a feeling of clarity clearness and it is evident to us as readers reader effect that zoe feels peaceful and um joyful on this mountain that's my explanation done i've analyzed and i've gone into lots of detail now simply need to finish off with linking back to the question thus zoe seems happy or joyful seems as if she is at one with nature and she appears to be at peace first pill paragraph dons started off on my point then added my evidence then my explanation then i finished off by linking back to the question now because of address sentence forms i simply just go straight into the second quotation this idea of the complete arrest of life which is hyperbole of exaggeration and also this notion how she feels oh it's like a pre-echo of death right so this is my second pill paragraph additionally it is evident to us i keep on mentioning words like us i'm talking about reader effect okay i also don't say me i don't use our statements because i'm trying to show that not only is it impacting me as a reader but i'm showing an awareness that maybe other readers also feel the same thing again this is really powerful techniques to start including and incorporating into your own self-study and self-revision as you make the most of your Easter break that is starting and the reason why you need to be making the most of your Easter break is because you've got these exams in 50 days okay so make sure you were incorporating and doing all of this stuff okay try and practice it and then the more you practice it's going to become second nature so additionally it is evident to us that Zoe feels weight less as she stands on this mountain indeed she experiences what seems like a transcendent feeling okay if you don't know what transcendent i've literally just said it just now but if you're still not clear on what that means google it now i'm going to go into my evidence okay so my second bit of evidence which is complete a rest of life dot a dot pre echo of death i'm not going to be quoting long quotations okay um standing on the mountain felt like and by the way i'm embedding my quotations i'm not saying in this quote okay try to also embed your quotes right felt like a complete arrest of life and she um sensed what was a pre echo of death second step in my appeal paragraph done open with my point evidence now i'm going to go into my explanation the author uses um hyperbole and onomatopoeia to convey or to illustrate to us just just how weight less zoe fields as she takes in her surroundings i need to now zoom in okay so what can i resume in and i'm going to mention actually this idea of death which is an abstract noun right um the abstract noun death is intriguing to us as readers because it is clear that zoe fields as if she is having an outer body experience explanation done that's the bulk of my marks um gotten right and on top of that in the explanation this is now where you are assuming you're kind of making educated guesses and also you're zooming in all of that stuff needs to go into your explanation as i said guys appeal paragraph is not simple it just has the steps which examiners are looking for as you are answering the question they're seeing okay is she answering the question or is he answering the question are they adding evidence are they also now unpacking it analyzing it and then obviously now linking back thus hence right linking back to the question i'm just linking back to show i still remember the keywords in the question i understand the assignment okay hence zoe evidently oh evidently has a transcendent experience as she stands on the mountain and that's it okay so as i said guys for question number two try to aim to write two people paragraph see each paragraph as roughly worth four marks and as i mentioned guys i'm keeping an eye on the time i have to jet at 6 p.m so today's live is going to be very fast paced okay as i mentioned guys if you want more detail just literally join in on my sunday masterclass is at 5 p.m or if you want to go over literature that's going to be happening and taking place next week from the first of the fifth of april those ones are going to be one offs but i'm going to be doing with beth inspector calls all of that stuff okay now moving on to question number three obviously i'm super familiar with the text right i've read it i have also read question number three beforehand so i was looking for bits of evidence to answer this question now guys as i said for question two and three you want to spend 10 minutes on this question to give yourself enough time to invest you know your 20 minutes into question number four and your 50 minutes into question number five if that therefore means you don't necessarily have enough time to do two pill paragraphs how you can maybe have a hack for question number three is you can in the in one chunky pill paragraph contrast a bit of evidence from the beginning versus something from the middle or the end i'm going to show you that and if you go into enough detail you can potentially get seven if not eight out of eight marks i'm going to go for two pill paragraphs well i'll show you how you can do one chunky pill paragraph for question number three in case you're like oh i don't know if i'm going to be able to do two pill paragraphs i'll show you how you can juxtapose that before you move on to question number four okay i'm still going to do two because i'm a bit i'm a bit extra but i'll show you guys what you can contrast definitely what stood out to me is this circular structure really silent at the beginning and then really silent at the end but the middle is very tumultuous another really good grade nine ambitious word to use okay the silence at the beginning right versus the silence at the end of the disaster at the end so the silence at the beginning is really peaceful it's calm it's tranquil oh my god she's having so much fun whilst the silence at the end is eerie yeah so it's eerie versus calm that's going to be my first point and as i said guys you're going to see that paragraph is a little bit more chunky if you only have time to do one paragraph juxtapose something from the start versus something from the end however as i said guys i'm super extra so my second point is definitely going to be about this volta this turning point which interest us as readers because it suddenly shifts from being really calm this nice holiday to being a really dangerous death trap so i'm going to make those two points okay so now as i said guys this is a structure question i need to show my awareness of structure terminology a o two in addition to obviously a one on my answering the question which is tested in question number three let's show paper one so this is how i will begin my first chunky paragraph if you only have enough time to do one paragraph in question number three this is how you do it okay to begin with starting off with my point right so to begin with the writer uses silence as a powerful structural feature to interest us as readers make sure you use that type of phrasing in question number three silence at the start creates or makes us feel at ease and we sense she she is enjoying her holiday yet silence by the end or yet this silence by the end is ominous as we are unsure if Zoe is alive that's my opening point of juxtapose beginning versus the end now i'm going to talk about and to be honest actually i'm only going to use one word quotation guys by the way literally you can get a grade nine point with just one word quote okay let me show you how to do it again don't waste your time on long bits of quotation in fact what you want to be spending more time on is your explanation and your analysis so i'm literally guys going to do a one word quote from the start and the end because it's literally silence right that's the powerful structural feature which i'm going to talk about and mention the idea of circularity circular structure okay there is silence whoop quotation silence at the start and silence at the end that's it that's my evidence from both parts of the extra from the start in the end this now i'm going into step number three this is where now i'm gathering all the marks that are available for this part of the paper okay the writer uses a circular structure and this interests us as readers because the silence at the start makes us also feel a deep sense of tranquility peace guys pay attention to the fact that i've not said the reader uses silence at the beginning and this interests us and makes us want to read on you will literally drive your examiner's crazy by saying this makes us want to read on don't do that okay you want to do this type of analysis okay but i'm not done so i've mentioned circularity i've mentioned what's happening at the start versus the end i'm racking up marks as i'm going along okay so the writer uses a circular structure and this interests us as readers because the silence at the start makes us also feel a deep sense of tranquility as the passage develops our intrigue increases as the scenery begins to grow noisy and frightening by the end this silence is menacing and ominous as we are petrified that zoe and jake may have died in the avalanche that's my analysis start off by what's going on at the beginning then i've talked about what's happening at the end i keep on mentioning why this is interesting for us as readers i never lose sight of the question and on top of that i have juxtapose and also of course if i'm only talking about silence i'm talking about circular structure that's another structural feature i've literally knocked out all three bullet points within this paragraph all i just now need to do is bring this discussion home and to a close by just linking back to the question consequently the writer activates us as readers by using silence as a powerful structural feature as the silence is joyful at first and terrifying by the end in all honesty guys if you only had enough time to do this i would probably say not trying to toot my horn too much this is probably a seven out of eight paragraph right this is how you can knock out all of these points that your examiner is looking for and ensure that you're getting as close to eight marks as you can with just one paragraph but as i said guys i'm extra so i'm going to do another additional paragraph for those of you that are speed writers and you're like you know what yeah i could potentially get seven out of eight with one paragraph but i just want to be completely secure i want to like bring it home i'm going to make an additional point okay so here i'm going to talk about the use of volta towards the end additionally as the passage draws to a close our interest peaks when there is a sudden change in zoe her shift in mood from joe viality happiness to fair makes us interested and entertained now i'm going to add my second bit of evidence okay this is just for those of you who are extra and you just want to make sure that yep i need to make sure that i'm getting that four eight out of eight and i'm a speedy writer at this stage so i can do this right so now here i'm going to talk about then her smile iced over we learn that her smile iced over that's my evidence this volta turning point powerful structural technique this volta in the passage accelerates the events the or this turning point interests us because we realize that the mountain has gone from being a paradise to a death trap done now i'm going to finish off with my link thus the writer uses a volta towards the end to accelerate the narrative and this keeps us interested as readers done with my second peel paragraph this is for those of you who are part of extra gang you're really speedy in writing you've gotten your um you know practice in since the start since the start of january especially and you just want to see how can you maybe add another additional structural feature another structural observation okay that's the two pill paragraphs done and as i said guys only going to have enough time to do question number four before i have to go okay as i said guys just a reminder going to be doing literature easter revision series from uh the first of the fifth of april from next monday literally monday going over mcbeth tuesday going over christmas carol wednesday inspector calls thursday pound conflict and friday unseen poetry if you want to be part of those literature revision lessons i know there's a bunch who have really signed up already make sure you literally just use the link in the bio sign up it's going to be a vibe and of course obviously the model answer that you're going to get afterwards you will therefore use them in your revision to the exams okay now as i said guys this part of the question line 28 to the end has a student statement does this student statement contradict what's going on in the extract when they say this part of the story with zoe and jaker caught in the avalanche i can't believe zoe is so slow to react to the warning signs because in the end the situation sounds really dangerous i would agree it doesn't contradict what's going on right so from here onwards what stands out to me why would i agree by the way as i said guys here you can just completely say yes if of course you want to turn this into a history discussion and say no i agree to an extent i don't agree it can be argued do that okay more power to you but for those of you guys who are team lazy you want to get the same amount of marks not through you know having these complex arguments and not through you know cracking your head and thinking about counter arguments just say yes unless literally the statement itself obviously is like a no statement right you've got you know agree to an extent but then disagree okay i would say yes have three pill paragraphs and this is what you can talk about okay so let's go back to the passage once more i'm going to select something from the kind of beginning ish part here towards the middle and then at the end okay definitely what is really really interesting here and what makes me agree with the student statement that you know this part of the story zoe is way too slow to react is definitely the sibilance here she felt a small slab of snow sibilance what does this show this sibilance is illustrating that there's there were numerous clues that the avalanche is coming but zoe was way too slow to react that's going to be my first point also the other aspect that definitely stands out to me towards the end is it seems like it was jake that was the catalyst in alerting her to the danger right actually zoe became really irritated she's like oh what was that rather than being like wait wait wait why is the slow snow slab moving right and here i will talk about dialogue which is structure jake is the person who acts as the catalyst right hence definitely zoe is way too slow to react that's going to be my second reason and that's going to be structure third reason finishing off and wrapping up my question number four response is definitely you know she waits until the rumbling becomes a roaring then that's when she starts scrambling but by that stage the avalanche was far too close right and this obviously punched her off sending her twisting spinning turning there's lots of stuff i can talk about here right i could talk about this simile like a tsunami at sea and also i suppose this idea but it was too late right the smoke and snow so here i'm going to probably talk about the simile language and also this uh listing a syndicate structure so i'm going to mix it up a little bit okay so this is going to be my final three pill paragraphs guys before oh i've literally have five minutes let's see can i do this in five minutes oh my god okay so let's get into pill paragraph number one firstly it is abundantly clear that in my opening point i need to use keywords from the student statement right it's abundantly clear that zoe is far too slow to react to the warning signs indeed right so now here i'm going to talk about this shift right so she is so distracted from the dangerous movement beneath her that she does not realize the peril the danger they are in zoe felt cute quotation so this is step number two in my pill paragraph felt a small slab of snow beneath her move yet she did nothing this um the writer uses sibilance language to convey the slow um the mounting danger that they were in in fact the slab was a crucial warning sign that zoe simply ignored so we can agree that she was too slow to react explanation done now i'm finishing off with my link back to the question consequently um when zoe and jake are in the avalanche this was a perilous situation that they could have avoided had zoe's reactions been faster first pill paragraph done i've talked about um language so but also i've made sure throughout the question i'm not only referring back to the student statement keywords from the question but also i keep on evaluating keep on saying okay yes this is why i agree here's some language here's how we as readers feel i use words and pronouns three third person pronoun like us we to illustrate that not only can i agree the student statement but perhaps other readers would have a similar perspective now second pill paragraph what else is interesting as i said i'm working through this part of the extract so now i'm going to mention how actually it's jake that triggers them to action right it's jake actually that says hey we need to do something right so additionally um it is clear that zoe's reactions were far too slow um in fact jake is the person who triggers them into action that's my second point right i'm saying yeah it's actually jake not zoe that is quick to react now i'm going to add my evidence from the text he tells her to get to the side exclamation mark that's my evidence pay attention to the fact that i'm not using long reams of quotation this exclamatory sentence in jake's dialogue got two bits of a structural observation dialogue plus also exclamatory sentence is a sentence that ends with an exclamation mark conveys to us as readers i'm mentioning our reader effect that zoe's reactions were far too slow right once more i'm not losing sight of the student statement right she's way too slow to react to the warning signs and the situation is dangerous she was too distracted and it is clear that jake was the catalyst that drove them to seek safety when the avalanche began explanation done now finishing off with my link hence zoe is too slow to react and this places them in a dangerous predicament position final point done okay so um guys i'm not even sure what's going on so guys i'm not entirely sure if uh i'm gonna be able to finish this live tick tock is telling me some crazy stuff about dragging something into oh guys i hope you can hear me um tick tock is telling me something's very very strange it was trying to verify i'm not sure if i'm going to be able to finish this live tick tock is telling me some very very strange it was trying to verify me guys can you hear me i hope you can um anyway i'll have to slide something to verify that i am a real person or not a robot anyway guys final point okay so tick tock was just bugging out i don't know why it does this um anyway getting back my trail of thought yes right so guys um finished off the second point i think right so she was distracted oh yeah okay so i think this exclamatory sentence sorry guys i'm just uh right gonna finish off by linking back to the question okay so therefore or hence oh no no i've actually finished sorry guys tick tock totally threw me off it was asking me to verify midway not sure why anyway guys finishing off with the third and final point this is the idea that in spite of seeing jakes warning um zoe was still too slow to react right and of course i'm going to mention this similarly and also mention how when she did eventually react it was still too late right so finally it is evident that zoe is too or even was too slow to react to the danger and despite um receiving jakes warnings her reactions or even i'm gonna shorten that and i'm gonna make that a new sentence despite receiving jakes warnings her reactions were still far too slow final point now i'm gonna add my evidence okay so i'm going to talk about this idea of her being caught in this avalanche right the simile is really really powerful and of course that therefore means that she acted far too late okay so the um she and actually i've just remembered i wanted to also use this listing right so in fact i'm going to change too late to twisting spinning and turning she gets caught in the avalanche which feels like a tsunami at sea and it sends her now i'm going to add my listing twisting spinning that's my evidence step number two done i'm going to go into my final explanation the writer uses a simile coupled with a syndeton this is listing using just commas to convey how zoe was so slow to react to the danger meaning she was caught up in the avalanche it is clear to us as readers that zoe was um um listened or even was too slow to listen to jakes warning signs and this led her to being um knocked into the ground and rendered unconscious done with my explanation now finishing off with my link as a result it is evident that zoe is still too slow or even was still too slow to react to the warning signs meaning they faced grave danger and that's it okay that's it for question number four um i'm a little bit late from my um ending time tech talk is so weird i'm not even sure why it asked me to verify midway super annoying but um guys just to be clear in terms of exam technique okay as i said for question number four try to aim to write at least three pill paragraphs okay and make it a really nice mix between language and structure and as i said guys um because i have to head off at six we're even i'm even a little bit late i only have time to do section a i'm not sure when section b is going to come round as i said guys i said this back in when i did my previous live i think that was back in december right i'll just pop up when i have time just like the way i did today i'm not going to lie to you guys a girl is booked and busy okay so between my sunday master classes where i go over language with one and paper two as well as these upcoming literature exams literally i'm going to be having i'm booked out so for those of you obviously that need any extra help any extra support any extra guidance guys join in on these master classes lots of students across the country have joined in the funds them super useful and as i said guys i'm going to be running a series of one off literature paper one and literature paper two exams or even revision series um next monday every day so on monday at five p.m to six p.m tuesday wednesday thursday friday going to be going over mcbeth christmas carol inspector calls power and conflict and unseen poetry if you want to sign up for those classes just follow the link in the bio so guys um have a good evening okay happy revision pay attention to the fact that now you need to start implementing this in your practice you've got 50 days left okay class of 2024 this is especially for those of you in year 11 i do know that there's a bunch of your 10s and year 9s that follow this channel obviously for you guys you have a bit more time if you're in year 11 you need to have a solid revision plan in place okay you have this is the final major um holiday that you have right east is going to be your final major holiday get that revision plan in place get those um revision times in okay so english you should you need to now be spending a minimum of two to three hours revision each week in addition to of course math science all of that stuff get that plan in place and of course implement the points that i have gone over in today's gcse revision and as i mentioned guys i am going to try my utmost best to upload this live onto youtube um because i generally just didn't have a chance to just reread back over the um the paragraphs that i've written okay so i do i'll always say this i'm like oh guys i promise i'm going to upload to youtube and then i don't but um guys i've actually been quite active on youtube so i'm going to try my best to upload this it does take a bit of time for tiktok to um i guess download the thing and obviously today it was like bugging out so i don't know when that's going to happen but i think to be honest it should um be available to for me to upload tomorrow okay so guys just keep on eye out on youtube you're hopefully going to see this class and this live um and the youtube page obviously is first-rate tutors okay so just look out for first-rate tutors and obviously guys as i mentioned i'm having a collab series right now on youtube with stacey ray and in april mr sally's and i are collabing okay a power poll lots of you guys voted you asked for all of these videos pound conflict mcbeth inspector calls paper one paper two we've literally created lots of those videos based on the poll that you guys had answered so obviously keep an eye out for those videos as well okay guys i need some water and i need to go straight into yet another lesson okay so guys thank you so much for joining in um best of luck with making the most of easter okay so guys you know obviously do as much as you can during easter break class of 2024 and um have fun guys make the most of your exams and in fact not exams make the most of your revision so that you start off your exams strong love you guys bye bye