 Alrighty there sound here. Let's play the whole thing in full. I have been stabbed, shot, poisoned, frozen, hung, electrocuted, and burned. Oh really? Every morning I wake up without a scratch on me, not a dent in the fender. I am immortal. I have been stabbed. Alright. I'm gonna turn on that sound way down here. So there's some interesting stuff there to see. I have some comments here, of course, and I got some questions and mostly also some character motivation questions. So let's go one by one. So let's see. I kind of like that beginning that we actually focus on hands. The thing that's a bit tricky is that we also have movement here. So I'm looking at the fingers. Shot, poisoned, frozen. And I guess it's just a reaction to frozen that she has here. I don't know. To me it seems like it's also a bit of an overlap with this. Like if then I will put them further out, you know, where the feet are maybe here, just kind of cheat that distance. We don't really care about the, you know, the real-life distance there. And then potentially, since we are a bit low every now and then on this, bring up that arm in the hand. So that, excuse me, the fingers are more about here. There's something where we globally take the whole thing and move it up a bit and hurt a bit over there. Personally, just just in terms of composition and yeah, and readability. Watch out at the end. Like I don't mind the way it's here and the contact point is good on the fingers. Just this seems a bit odd at the very end. Once we hear how the fingers kind of spread out to the side. To me, I would just go boom and then cut or if you want to hold for a little bit, just keep it around here and have the moving hold more in the in the wrist and arm. You know, potentially just kind of keep whatever you have, but not move. Personally, I wouldn't move the fingers up. That feels like a weird deliberate move mainly because also this finger doesn't move and this one really wants to go over there. Now the thing is now in the transition to this shot, if we keep this, and we look at this. They're moving fairly slowly and kind of softly as if it's kind of listening maybe, but not really that tense, but then we cut to squeaky face. What am I listening to here where it feels like the feet would be staying like this maybe with some movement every now and then, but sharper movement that kind of reflects the tension that's in there. electrocuted and burned. Oh really? The thing that's kind of odd, and I'm gonna put the sound back in here, is that electrocuted and she is reacting to what he sings. All right, that's fine. Electrocuted and burned. Oh really? But then this seems more like sarcastic. Oh really? Oh really? She doesn't really believe it. Really? And I know it's in the sound but But this seems weird because it's oh really? I don't really believe you but then I'm really shocked at what you're saying. Like that just doesn't quite work for me. It's either you're gonna minimize the really that sound and just stay in that kind of headspace and doubtful look or Or go into like a sigh smile. Really? Where it's more like oh really? And then imagine she would just kind of almost go from here to here but not back but imagine this goes down a bit slower to match that sound but then more with a bit of a smile and I roll like I can't believe he's saying all this. That to me would make more sense given this especially the tone here. And burned. Oh really? Of how she says how really. Let's bring back the sound of it. Which then would have to kind of match to you know so you don't end up with this so whatever you end up here will match there in terms of her. And then the weird thing is that let's go back up with the sound. Every morning I wake up without a scratch on me not a dent in the So he says all this. Without a scratch on me not a dent in the fender. She reacts you know and they're still very doubtful at the face. Watch out with eye line doesn't quite look like they're connecting there. I am an immortal. Like the way he does this like I don't mind what he does because he says all that stuff. A dent defender. I think this beard is really strange how much there is movement in a beard and the chin. This is usually fairly you know fairly doesn't really move at all if there may be this thing but if there's a ton of wind. So to me I would take out the animation on the chin and the hair. That type of flappy overlap is very strange. But for him to go like oh I did this I did that haha I guess I'm immortal. Like that works. I don't mind that. Watch on me not a dent in the fender. This I would be careful because then you get into that classic W pose where. Watch on me not a dent in the fender. Like what is he pointing to or towards. Like why do we need that. I think to me it would be more offender. What is he going he goes back there. I don't know to me personally this are usually overused gestures in animation. The doubly pose and just arms out and you know pointing and stuff like that. It could just be since you've been using arms. It could just be something where this is purely told through the chest, shoulder and head and the arms actually just go back down with hands on the thigh. Personally that's kind of how I would explore that. Silhouette wise I would try to bring that hand a bit more over here. You're gonna have to cheat that cup over here and then have that hand a bit further out so that you have a bit more room to show that bends. Right now it just looks like a very short arm. Silhouette wise and we're really losing the structure of that arm whereas this is better. I mean if it's something like this imagine arms just lower. Hand here, hand here. Really understand the length of both arms. And then so the other thing that's kind of odd is that he says all this and she's all suspicious and then suddenly like why is she suddenly going crazy eyed. You know really just showing a lot of white on the eyeball. Looking at this. I am an immortal. To grab this and again we're back to doubly pose watch out for stuff like that. I am an immortal. To grab this and if there's something in there this would just spill. I don't know to me if she is if she's not really interested you could to me sell this although it's tricky because we want to look at him cup without a scratch on me not a dent in the fender. I'm not super worried about this even though this stills the focus of that scratch on me not a dent in the fender. He does just keep talking repeating himself kind of so it's I don't actually quite mind that she does that thing but thinking out loud what I'm thinking here is that he does all this she's not really believing any of this. So do not have this shock reaction and when this happens it could just be maybe she drinks and realized oh it's empty and because she doesn't have any coffee anymore that's why she wants this and this would just be more maybe at this point you can also do it where he's done talking since you already don't have any eye contact he would be looking here and then almost looking at camera and then looking over and looking over so you have a bit more of a gradual you know progression of him looking away and because he starts looking away she then puts the coffee cup down but then just kind of grabs this and kind of slides it over and not to draw attention just to kind of sneak it over and then to drink. I hope that makes sense it just to meet all those elements seem odd where she has shock and then if she's back into not trusting then she's going into like a big thing that he would absolutely notice and that is a huge gesture that would spill everything else and I think I would combine or think about moments of well if she is out of coffee if she wants that coffee why does she want that coffee is that because she's out of coffee or this tastes bad and she just wants this and then she would just kind of grab it or you know a bit more sneakily grab it into that and I know like I have a bit more I'm okay with all the stuff that he does he seems fairly in character it seems all okay I'm just slightly confused about that so I guess it's more questions than critique I guess so let me know let me know an email let's talk about this and what we can do about all that all right thanks all right there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome all right thank you