 here's a shot let's play it there's no sound what's over there what let me go and out okay so character goes in thief with a tie that definitely works i mean the question is before i go into the animation is the idea is that this guy is breaking in it's not his house because otherwise he wouldn't get out unless it's another person's house that they know of maybe he thinks that someone is cheating on him and he goes and checks i don't know there's a bedroom here because if that's the bed there could also be something where i think maybe in terms of pushing the tension because right now what's happening my general impression is that it's all a bit even and spliny in kind of it's moving it's moving it's moving it's moving it's moving it's moving whoa it's moving it's moving it's moving it's moving and so on versus you can do all this goes in does that and then and it's just kind of hold hold then look back a bit then maybe the door is opening a little bit and it goes to maybe a bit of a sliver and you can see maybe a character maybe it's a kid i don't know like something and then that prompts him to go oh no no no no i gotta go i gotta go maybe during all of this could also be i mean you could do this where you do this all dark with some white dots and it's nighttime and maybe you could have a light here and it's not it's not super bright again enough so that we can see the character but it's still a night timish thing because i would assume he would break it at night and if it's the day then maybe that would be a whole different story or something else and then all of this happens this happens here and then you have that moment like i said of waiting and then the door handle rattles a bit and stops he has looked like this pause the door slowly opens and that lets in more light and then you can have a bit more ambient light coming in he looks over there but all he sees is that the door is slowly opening and he thinks someone is opening it and now i'm adding a lot more work to your shop but hear me out the door right is opening more light comes in but it's it was the cat or the dog was my dog in open hand doors with the handles here and it's a dog that comes in that sniffs around or it's a human that's really sleepy they could have you know the the thing over their eyes so they can sleep they're almost sleepwalking going in anything that is slow that he can't see because the door is not completely open that gives him time to get out because i'm only saying this and i know i'm adding a lot of work and that is very destructive in terms of notes but you're saying here i would like to add the shot to my show reel so i'm just thinking in terms of okay here's your character comes in this is a problem to okay that's a fair problem to have and they need to get out but if no one's coming nothing's happening or the audience has no inclination that something's happening or coming in there's no sound or anything right it's pretend we don't work with sounds there is no reason for the character to rush so they could also be a uh not annoyed that doesn't work looks around maybe uses the lamp to open this you know this is a whole different situation so for me i'm seeing all of this just because well this is problem number a but the urgency is because of problem number two and we have a door in frame so you might as use might as well use this as a story point something's happening again doors doors opening it could also be that this is happening he does this door handle opens or does some shaking he goes looks over what if there is not this but it's a table it's like a night table and there's a chair in front of it and he kicks the chair so that the chair goes and perfectly hits this in the air right and this is blocking this so now you don't have to animate any of this here you can just show the door opening a little bit rattling but the chair is um what's it called it's just it's stopping the door from opening he was just really you know very good at throwing this over there or you do something where he goes oh grabs the chair and with a maybe you should change the colors you can't see anything or the character is really uh you know able to bring this over that's my awesome drawing and puts the chair there and then scrambles back and has those crambley legs to go back there does all of this you know that's pushing more maybe the door is bending over he looks back a bit and then does this and instead of this it's actually the other leg so that you can have the head this way to look because he's freaking out because maybe now the chair fell and he's about to get out and I wouldn't do this either because if he's in such a hurry this to me feels more like all right it's Wednesday I gotta get to work like how he exits oh okay versus no no let me get and there's someone's coming here doors opening the chair slowly breaking then you have this and it's more of a character falling over it's finally open and you can see the the legs are just he's just falling jumping out and trying to get out of there more in a hurry so I think that's how I I'm approaching this critique where it's think about what you want to do to me this is less about the animation where he kind of magically watch out you get the sections here he kind of magically gets up there's no sense of weight he's kind of floats up I think I have some body mechanics imposing issues he feels very stiff when you got the body arms and head all moving as one here so I do have technical animation notes but the thing is none of these matter to me at this point because I have more watch out the sections more story and conceptual thoughts on this which obviously you can completely ignore and just say nope I want to do this let me just critique what the animation is doing and then it would be stuff like twin poses two more offsets you know work on the line of action so that it's not just this it would be more like sneaking really arms up maybe really trying to be quiet and then you have to decide is this guy clumsy you have this here because I'm seeing props right to me I'm going oh let's play with props then what if he bumps into this because he's looking at something else and then you got the the lamp that stumbles and almost falls and then he rushes over to to hold the lamp and then puts it back so is he a clumsy thief burglar is it like a mr bean type of thing or he is super smooth so should maybe still dress differently and comes in here as well like a stealthy ninja but then this is now causing a problem but that's why he is so adept at kicking the chair and it locks in place perfectly and then it's just him how to get out of there even though I'm really good at my job this is a problem that's new and you mean like I would just play with is this guy good at his job dropping a burglar or not is he getting somewhere because he forgot something you know maybe there's a suitcase here you know me like I would think of it the scenario who the character is why they're going in there what's the what's the purpose of this so he doesn't really look like a regular burglar or a thief not saying that they don't look like this this is your you know your uh whatever he has a tie I know to me just because of this because it's not these stereotypical ski mask type of thing where they don't want to be seen he doesn't care about his face is he's desperate I don't like I have so many questions about this in terms of what is the you know the the the typical thing of what is the motivation why is the character doing this and then is this a brand new place he is breaking into or not is this a familiar place is this his own place for some reason is a friend's place then you're showing all of this do you want to play with this or not is maybe someone sleeping in here did he accidentally go into a bedroom and didn't know it was the bedroom now has to be quiet because someone is sleeping in here or the door is already open and someone's in the bathroom and then again realize he's in the wrong room and now that person is going to come out to go back to bed and so on I know this adds more work with the second character but I think you can look at what what are the ways of raising the stakes so can't get out but there needs to be a sense of urgency because he you know someone's coming that's why he has to get out and so on and so on and so on so I'm gonna leave it at that lots of thoughts for you to think about to filter through obviously you don't have to do anything I said but hopefully it's a springboard of ideas and something to consider all right thanks all right there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome all right thank you