 Alrighty, there is sound. There's music. Let's play this to turn off the sound here And you are mentioning here that the hair is not done yet some funky twitching in the lower eyelids But you want to work a bit more on the face detail and hands especially All right. Let's take a look at this So there are a couple things. I'm just curious Bring this up up here so you can see a bit more framing There's something about it when a character it leans towards you towards camera It's just not as much of a change as we can see and depending on the lens It would just make the head grow From here to here I mean kind of just kind of miss what the body is doing there's a line of action because it is straight towards us and With this angle it just seems also like just a very long arm So my question to you is what would you think? I mean clearly there's something about her being turned away from him and Then there's the hand that comes in for comfort and then she turns towards him And then seems okay. Although she still seems a bit in pain and painful. I'm not sure if that's What the exact Intention is there. She just feels just a bit like I don't know I know you're holding my hand, but I really do want to break up with you Like that's kind of what it what it looks like So let me know in email what your intentions are there My thought would be is there anything where we can just push this a bit more and are you going for more subtlety but could it be something where Thinking out a lot is probably not gonna work But what if he had him over the shoulder and it would be his left hand? I'm just curious when you have to do all the keep alive there I'm just kind of reacting to this really long arm and everything taking place in that right half And it's getting fairly empty empty as in me moving my framing around here. I was gonna scrub around here So my thought was is there anything we can do where we can? Again, it's probably not right thinking out a lot here if we move her a bit more screen left And she's a lot more Profile three-quarter to almost profile so we can see that line of action that that hunched over bent away from him and that hand You would then keep it here and her hand would be maybe here might just be you know something lower I'm just trying to find a way where again line of action is a bit more clear So that when she turns around when this happens towards us, it's more towards him I'm assuming that this is all friendly and then she actually likes that he did this again I'm not sure if that fish expression is supposed to communicate that let's pretend that she likes this The reason why I'm feeling it what if she's further here bent over there and when she turns around It's a bigger turn so so that she can actually turn towards him and then when this happens with this It's also a bit more again more valine. I'm looking at here's a character. She's unhappy. So she's leading away He does something that comforts her This computer is protected That came in at the absolutely worst moment here and Because of that comfort she now straightens and then gets towards the element that she likes This is you know, this is very rough idea here, but this is kind of what I'm thinking Also, my thought is might be more interesting to keep that hand much further away from hers To have this a bigger moment like right now. This is so subtle like the hand is already on her And is that is that a problem for her do we want to have it away from her? So that it's a bigger deal that you get say it doesn't have to go all the way high up and then smack that on her hands But it could just be something a bit more You know still subtle but the reach is bigger and then I would look at her in her pose This seems a bit default. It's almost twins and it doesn't I think there's more that we can do in terms of Maybe their hands are one hand is on the table one. It's just here Not super smitten by this pose either And then she can just bring it up and then does this even if it's on the table She can bring it up, but I feel like I have more questions than a critique to be honest So my question is what does she really feel this doesn't feel like she looks comfortable So is that something that she doesn't quite like that gesture or is she supposed to like it? And what are your thoughts on potentially pushing this? Where we can have her just a bit more mission enough to be here could even just be here But just a bit more three-quarters so we can see a change in her spine as she turns around and gets closer to him It was to me right now. She feels Fairly not change of color but change the On is getting that so to me she feels fairly boxed in as you can see we're as I'm scrubbing through She's in here. I wonder if we can break this a bit more No, I'm judging color where we can have her get out of that box a little bit And then in the middle, she might be there and at the end when she really has that change She might get out of that box again closer to the object that she likes that she's in love with if that's the intention again I got some questions about the intent here Yeah, the only other thing would be potentially having him I Was thinking three quarters only so we can see the bend not three quarter But over the shoulder bit more so we can see the bend in his arms You have a bit on the setting of that structure with that bend being so straight the camera She feels like a very long arm. That's very low in frame So that's the other thing I'm reacting to everything is kind of halfway in here with this being really low I Feel like you want to have a more balanced composition a bit of a different feel to this Was I mean you could do a quick test What if she is here and he is over the shoulder and it would be you know dark and you can blur it and then His hand would be here and then she could still be slightly turned away from him And then he gets that hand closer and then at the end She could be you know, she would be moving over towards him show that so the torso would be here She'd be closer again with him something like that darker and blurry So more questions than answers in this one. Let me know an email Let me know how you want to proceed and and if I need more clarification in terms of acting choices and what she Actually feels here. All right. 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