 All right, I'm gonna take a look at this before reading your email as you're writing out what the story is Lower that volume just a tad back. You know, it's so interesting how to me sound design helps I always say that if I wouldn't do animation out to sound design But I just love how there's just that extra layer because of the sounds. But anyway, let's watch it again So my two impressions would be This is all cool here It's a bit of a tricky pose with this stump out here We don't quite know what's going on with the legs, you know the hands It's very dark. So the hand silhouette in front of the head is not quite working That stuff, you know, it's just not very clear So for that little peak I would do something a Bit clear and this to me looks like he is He's looking out. It's trying to get out and then here He seems dead So I'm not quite sure what's going on there and in terms of style it feels like when this happens Could be faster and snappier and just I don't know how far you want to go in terms of style and cartooniness and having bounce up and do some leg scramble, but I feel like this could be bigger and Then when this happens, it's weird because this seems like whoa like what happened there But then on this it feels more like, huh, I Guess that's where I put my corpse or whatever it is. So I'm not quite sure Either you make this less of a surprise so this seems more in character or If you want him to be surprised and shocked, I would make it bigger But then this here I would open up the door and have to take a couple steps back to kind of Be in them more like what's what's gonna happen? Why is this person in there? I don't know. That's kind of that's the reaction that I had I'm gonna read now what you wrote and pause this critique Alright, this was just a split second for you. I read your mail It's totally Different okay for those that are watching there's another couple things So you're saying he is happy and really focused while working in the kitchen. Let's turn off the sound This to me seems fairly relaxed like up. All right I'm gonna put this in here and put this away. This seems very very relaxed and kind of like I guess it's Wednesday. I gotta do this except for this which is Interesting, but if you want to say happy and focus, you know They could be a little bit of a bounce and and the way he turns this off cookie Where's my hand getting over there could be a bit of a like he's doing kind of this and Instead of just going turning it off the knob a little bit of a you know Snap to it. There's a bit more and you can probably push them this a bit And then I would probably Where is this hand here? During this I would do a switch from the cup to this to this hand because right now the silhouette is a bit muddled I was thinking imagine that hand could be here and imagine this arm, you know, I Mean you could have it open like This right if that's that's the body, but it's just something where I get my arm It's not like hitting like this, but he could do Like arc and then Like just there's more exaggerated motions and kind of like I'm putting this in here I'm gonna put that in here like those type of moves you could add to give that impression of he's really really happy Because that's what I'm reading here. That's what you're trying to do and for me. It seems a bit more relaxed Now here's the biggest change from what I got from this you are saying He wants to put the garbage away. He's really in a flow. Sure Then he opens the door and his child say his children is there, but I think you just mean his child is there and wants to scare him This given the colors, you know, excuse me. You also say it's a placeholder, but That's I was wondering what that poses but with the red eyes and the black this to me seems more like You know, it's like it's a thief or someone But then because of the ending He's knocked out or dead so for those that are watching it's his child that tries to scare him He is so freaked out, right? He's turning really he's closing his door really really fast in his reaction and basically knocks the child unconscious and Then when it opens this happens, I think it's just fairly confusing a what I mean He is smaller in scale, but it's a bit tricky, you know, I mean, it's it's like you want to put this door over there and Make this a bigger door, you know And even if it's not opening or like this it could be a door that kind of folds I would just give I'll find a way to Give this character more room and you can potentially again Scale it down even more and then definitely have the same color. So just visually understand that they're connected This just gives me a weird see if robots droid vibe, you know, I mean So That's not you want to see the kid. Okay, so yeah I would I will give this more room make him smaller so that we just see we have a room for more clear poses And when you open this I would have the kid in Very very clear poses of potentially arms, you know again I can't draw I'm gonna be horrible at this but the point being that there is a clear pose of the character waiting Anticipate this can be over two three frames this and go And you can see the animation hands doing this going Right so that it's clear that the characters alive doing this and Then when you close this You're talking about also how the timing is between this I still stand by what I said before where Let's make them happier by what I said here about this It's too slow and you said you're not a fan of this. I don't mind. I wouldn't maybe stretch out this as far. I Think you're okay with this more bent But I like this being far away. He wants to get away from the door But I will give this a little bit of a jump back maybe our again legs bit in the air just a bit of a holy crap like it was more freaked out and And You don't have to the thing is he can freak out and go on his way back Slam the door and that will probably make for greater contrast of him in the kitchen That that a bit more subdued maybe a little bit bouncing there because he's happy and then you have that sudden explosion of holy crap Goes back and really shots that Chots that door and what you could do again. This changes a lot But just as a thought I have right now. What if he jumps back? Slams that door a big arm move so the door Slams goes boom, but then slowly opens again and Then this happens meaning He opens it or goes what in the crap Jumps back slams the door the door Pits the kid, but because the door opens again slowly like that. You see you see the kick going And fall down so we understand visually that This character in there was alive gets knocked out and then falls down and then you could just end with You know the door will be open. He just kind of you see him wiggle falls down and He could be here. Maybe still one leg in there holding his face And that could be your trembling moving hold while all the movement is here so that the audience knows where to look This just felt really too casual opening this but again, this would change the idea of Him opening it again, but I think I Mean that that would be my thought of really big explosion jump back big arm Closing the door and just again the door hits and then immediately bounces back and slowly opens so that we We don't see this character for maybe a frame or two But then you can really focus on your animation on the kick. Oh and an arms drop and Falls down. I Think you know and as he falls down, maybe a little toy comes out rolling or there's just more stuff that you can do here While the other characters in the moving hold being freaked out that that's kind of probably what I would do and be What more fun than just they'll quick take and then slowly opening Because if you do it like this, but this is another way you can do this where it's not the kid and you know maybe this is You know, what if you have blood splatter and He's just cleaning and he's not making a pop But he's just kind of cleaning and he has a sponge in his hand He's just kind of cleaning and you want to get like what's going on with the contrast will be blood And maybe like broken parts him still happy. You're like, why is he happy? There's blood everywhere and he's just kind of cleaning things and then as he opens this You can do still this maybe less of a surprise and then when that opens You have him then use the leg to kind of shove him back in close this and he continues to clean I don't know if that's a good idea, but there's something where I'm cleaning like in the audience goes Why is there so much blood and then he opens the thing and he falls out He goes out because he just killed this person and he's more relaxed going. Oh, yeah, I forgot I gotta put him back in there while I clean I don't know that could be something if you want to change the whole shot obviously that don't do that but just a thought but Yeah, that's kind of what I have you're asking about the hands definitely, I mean, you know him cleaning and Smacking the door you can do like all the big poses on the hands and it gets back where the hands are like this on His face as his concern the kid doing that with big hand poses I think there's a lot of stuff you can do there And you're also asking if it's okay to see just see the back to me It's okay because you're doing broad Silhouette moves and the character has no face except maybe eyes, but so it's okay. We don't need to see the face I think that's totally fine So yeah, that's kind of it. I'm curious what you think these are just kind of my impressions Before reading and I'm glad that you wrote spoiler So yeah, let me know let me know what you think and how you want to proceed Obviously, it's your shot and agree with what you want, but these are just my impressions on first time viewing. All right. Thank you All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you