 All right, let's check this out. There's sound I said it before and I'll say it again Life moves pretty fast. You don't stop and look around once in a while. You could miss it All right, that is audio from Ferris Bueller So the first thing just into the presentation. I'd be careful mixing CG elements where you know the textures can be a bit simple depending on the lighting and stuff and Super detailed photos or paintings in the background. I'm not sure that's needed. You can easily Easily, but you know, maybe find a skull model for free somewhere or put some blocks in there And maybe with some depth of field or hardware fog Kind of blur that out and soften it just because it gets very busy around the character even here It's a bit much. I will keep it simple You just do a flat color maybe something right in the background if you want just for now and then watch out This must be one of your background guys that peaks in here. And the other thing is He has just in terms of direction. Yes, the candle is on the right But he's looking right to left and now we're having left to right so I will Probably you're still doing left to right here. So I will probably have something where instead of this He looks this way candle could be the other the other side But I would just have the expression go the other way that way. We're sticking to the left to right screen direction In terms of what's going on I Said it before and I'll say it again I like the beginning. You said definitely have contrast in terms of the character leaning and having different poses, let me just see your audience give me there you go I mean, you know, you're starting out straight here. You have a change in here I like that you go all the way back here and you're using the space. So to me this all works Careful with big moves like this that and that if you listen to the audio It's it's it's kind of it peters out and it's it's it's a soft exhale And you don't really feel and hear any of that strain of that moment It's not I'm picky about this because it's it's just something common in Shots and in movies even the word just sometimes the action just doesn't match the audio. It's kind of picky about it So I'm not sure if you want to delay that even after Like here maybe, you know, I might have to jiggle stuff around or he does it or he does it doing the biggest Exhale here. He does that just kind of be mindful of that. It's up to you But that's something to just point out quickly Yep, I do like this here All of that works Yep in terms of the energy watch out you got some stray keys on your on your camera It feels like he key going somewhere and you get with the spline bump. I Said it before and that's fine here. This one is probably the one where I have the biggest notes. I'm just continue here That's totally fine you're gonna have something over here. That's good balance. There's a framing and then Not sure that you need to Truck back here, I think you can just be here and just zoom out or just Dolly up, you know, I could translate up I'm not sure you need to go all the way down into this because then we're getting some Some tangents and uncomfortable framing on him. I will keep Some room here. So I might just be you know moving up straight up to make them small So small smaller so that you know the life Fleeting here in hell whatever life they have there. So this one say it again Life moves pretty fast. There's just a lot of time spent once you hit this pose We're in here for quite some time Let me just go up here You can see this we get to here and then it's like from here on Pretty much till here. I mean and then we cut out or we move to this and then we cut out So I think not that I want to dictate acting choices, but and I'll say it again life moves pretty fast You can hear the audio too moves pretty fast. It's like he almost turns it on camera You can have something where he might address a couple people have some I darts, you know I can have some maybe a little bit of a lean again, and it's kind of addressing the people You don't stop and look around once in a while You could miss it So to me it feels almost like he could get in there and he kind of he's playful Until he's about to kill or double kill the person whatever that setting is, you know, you mentioned Hercules and and that kind of On their world setting it could be something where he's just kind of playful You mean like he still has some movement in his head head turns He looks around and dresses the crowd until the very end You don't stop and look around once That maybe that's the line where he gets very still and serious where you realize some's off I'm not I don't try to feel right with him saying this and then he gets into that and does his thing If that makes sense, so I think it's just it's just a bit too still We need a bit more and you can even have him come a bit closer I would just still move in space, you know within like this range and you can even get head that much bigger Head accents eye accents with that in I darts that he addresses and it's kind of like the fake out of oh, yeah I'm playful. Oh, yeah, but I'm actually serious and I'm gonna kill you like that kind of Vibe and energy and contrast that makes sense And I don't know I don't know if you need that big of a move subjective, but it could just be It could just be in if you ignore all that movement here just that Kind of that face with the slight head turn That's subjective I'm just curious if you if you have playfulness playfulness playfulness moving moving moving and then at the end when he has a bit of a You could miss it you could miss it would just be him This framing in a slight, you know Maybe doing all those head accents that I mentioned he could slightly walk closer so that he's maybe this close to the to the Frame and then he just has a bit of a more like a subtle head turn you could miss it with little twinkle in the eye and then the big move is Bringing up the candle Again, the framing would be like this, but then you move up the candle where it's a movement across the cut into this and Then that's the big move and reveal. I don't know. I know if that's if that big move is There's so much energy and there's so much movement That now suddenly this could be flat and flat imagine this is more subtle more than the evil head turn and Then then you go big move in the frame And then this guy falling and I know other people will be falling, but I did that's your big contrast reveal moment Just curious. Maybe that's upstaging everything else afterwards with so much energy and being so close to camera Just a thought and I'll leave you at that and that's it. Thank you All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you