 All right, so let's watch this in full first beginning here. Actually, let me Zoom in since we have a mask here. All right Fun good stuff My biggest comment is already be pretty far. It's less Technical since it's looking already pretty cool for something like this. I just look quick thing I will probably move those the hand a bit over so that we can see a bit more of the hand And then the fingers will be around here, and it could be a bit of a staggered Finger pose. It's a bit more. There's a bit more variation in the pose So it's not so even and so straight at us and then by rotating this a bit away from us We'll also give the mirror or whatever it is. I'm assuming it's a mirror a bit more dimension It's not so flat so we can see just a bit more of this Still recovering from the last time you wore it this all very cool. I'll like it It's maybe a bit I'm always be wary of of eyebrows and eyelids kind of matching Same thing here where it's like the eyebrows or the eyelids are almost Mimicking what the brows are doing almost Bring this at this part up of it kind of flatten this and do it do more Attitude with the eyebrows might just be me. I mean still appealing, but just throwing that out there. Sometimes it goes a bit far The biggest thing here is that there is a specific focus and it's basically No one's here and what bumps me is this It's a very specific look as if someone is standing just off-screen. So imagine no one's around right if imagining there's really no one around here and Watch this Still recovering fine. She's talking to an empty space Especially since it looks like one direction now a different one. That's okay. That's all fun. You wore it now Since she is throwing something You might argue. Okay. Oh, hold on. So there is someone standing there. So it's a bit of a issue Should there be a couple of idards to track what the character is doing off-screen is this Coming through This area, we can't really see it through there. What's that character never there? But if that character is out there, there might be already a bit of an earlier reaction To this like she would see this coming bit sooner Watch out. This is a bit strong. How does that one eyeball is moving more than the other? Because to me basically why I'm saying all of this is that Bring down the volume. This all felt okay. Totally fine Totally fine and to me it felt like okay that there's a character in front of her And especially here because now we're really changing direction from Looking bit here to more to her right and now it's more to You know to her left and more to our right. This was like a very specific look at someone that's there But then we cut to this and there's no one around it. It just seems like an odd cut But we also have a little bit of this opening that gets kind of hinted at and shown but not really And then it the hair just kind of ends right where that line is with a tangent It just it just feels like an uncomfortable Composition just because there's so much stuff right in front of her and nothing here And then we have that reveal that okay, okay, that kind of works But wait that means that there was no one around where is she looking? Why wouldn't she have her head angled more towards the opening? You might argue I guess she is I can see more of the back of the ear and this kind of shows that she is Doing a head turn so to me it almost feels like this could be something where The character would be maybe here and an opening would be there and the character goes through there We're Then the character would be around here and then Elsa will be or you know character will be here Moving backwards and then that will be covering that much of the curtain if that makes sense. It just seems like a really odd Composition through there especially given what what we've alluded to here Where she has such a clear focus in terms of looking at someone but that someone's not there I hope that makes sense. I know it seems a bit convoluted, but that was my first weird impression there The rest is all fine. I'm not worried really about your animation. Like there's some really there's a lot of really cool stuff in there I like the look so like the attitude. I like the head accents You might argue that now that we I mean she could also be staged like that So that we're more in that in more comfortable Thirds, so it would just be Tool here, so she would be more like that within the frame does she have to be Off-center left Because then when we are at the end here, it's almost like with this open we're expecting then almost someone to come in That's an open-ended question for you. Like you are you why not stage it like that a little bit more comfortable? but that's my That's my biggest thing and then you might argue well, but then shouldn't we just change it at the beginning as well Shouldn't this be maybe framed like that? I think that would totally be fine And then this would just be shifted a little bit here and then she would end up somewhat centered and then I Will personally frame it like that Where You know, I mean you could maybe then have this could almost be centered and then we have the This opening here, you mean like but it's it's almost I'm thinking out loud. It's probably not gonna work But very can see not this ear but the other ear so she's here and it's a bit of a cleaner look left to right But then of course you might argue well, that's weird because we are savishing right to left cut to an odd Left to right and it's a bit messy So I think for now I would say I Think it would be okay to stage this here There's not good some good room there this happens And just have it a bit more to the to to the left she can end up center like that and then when we cut This is the actual framing She's pretty close to the edge. I would just bring her a little bit more Over there. So she's a bit more like this and then you might Maybe not quite as much Maybe it's a bit more There and then we have This building move over so that we can see The curtain here. I just feel like it's just odd that we cut to Not seeing what we're looking at just such an all-cut with this emptiness You might argue well, we want the surprise of her coming out But I mean couldn't this also work if you had Again, she was a bit more to left and the curtain was here and she comes out of the curtain And then she would just end up a bit more to the left current still here and then she wouldn't go as far back It's a bit more balanced And then at the end I would Say the same thing that we're just a bit more like that Out of that makes sense. This might be an odd first submission feedback, but That's my main Quote-a-quote concern. I'm not concerned about your animation. There's some really cool stuff in there already There's some fun stuff like I like all of this to me It's more the overall staging and as I want to ask all those questions and think out loud and you know throw some stuff around so that we can Decide on things or we as in you you can decide and you can also say you know what I like I like everything that's there. I don't want to change anything and that's only fine, too But I wanted to mention it and see what you think So I think even on something like that. I will probably have her more here and her a bit further Over she feels like she's really hugging that frame on the right All right, I'm gonna leave it at that. Let me know what you think and that's it All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you