 Here are three things that all GCSE English examiners absolutely hate to see in any essay. Number one, cliche story endings. It all suddenly went dark. It was all a dream. Don't do that. Pointless introductions. Please stop saying things like, in the extract, the writer uses a range of language devices to present the garden. Just go in with the language device and how they present the garden. For example, the writer uses personification to present the garden as menacing. Number three, massive crime. Never define the technique, i.e. the writer uses a simile. An a simile is when writers use like or as to describe, don't do that. And also, don't describe what's happening in the play or the novel. The examiner doesn't want to hear it. You need to go straight into analysis.