 Let's play this whole shot here. We are in polish mode Yeah, it's very cool. I think generally everything is good. I think the framing is Good we're getting a bit top heavy here, but I think it's okay Still pretty high up I wonder if you can have a little bit more of a follow because you have movement here when it's not distracting I think you might be able to push that camera move just a bit Now so this is in polish mode. So let me Just point out the things that struck me the most looking at just general Body movement before going into fingers and detail stuff. So to me what stood out was in Especially in this section through here the head feels a bit IK or Or headline or head follow like whatever the controller name is where Once he gets into this position, the whole body starts to kind of float forward. I Think you could almost have a bit more of a side-to-side Way shift since he's taking a long slower step But it's just something about how the head just stays very smooth and It's just all a bit floaty and then this might just be visually but here It's not just being IK arm, but that hand just comes straight towards us Giving this kind of a it's stuck in screen space again height screen space And you can see how this is moving up Especially through here. You can see all that movement through here But that arm stays put so this seems to be an IK arm Same thing through here. Just that there's a slight rotation in the head this way But overall it just all seems just a bit Floaty because of that. It sounds like the head is on a gimbal into the head. It's just so so smooth Then the other bigger thing was If you do this, I'm not quite sure if I'm seeing any elbow involvement I mean if I look at that line here, it does go back a bit, but It seems very very isolated in this section I don't feel like that shoulders really involved and after that it would involve the chest and because of that the head would adjust There's a little bit. So this arm movement here seems a bit dislocated there here gets a bit Better here. I wish there was almost as you go in here Was like a slight adjustment in here that would then bring up the shoulder Just something so it doesn't just feel like the body goes over there. It all seems a bit Simple in its move Because even in the chest, there is no adjustment even if that arm goes out and then behind her And this is a completely random thought. I don't know why she runs in poison ivy the hair the skin in the green Never mind this regard that note And I wish that here There would be just a slight on this He goes away from her and she has a movement in the head, which is cool But I almost feel like you could push him down just a bit a little bit of a squash on the lips And I know he tries to be gently not to wake her up, but there's something where I think I would Push forward a bit It feels like you get there and then we don't want to go too far into sections and things and then head goes back And I know It's a bit tricky with the position here, but there's a slight feeling off and let's see if I can draw this here If that mouth is here He gets kind of through there right somewhat that's somewhat the arc Let's see if that's still That's gonna stay and then as you go back. I know it's a bit lower We're doing kind of a lower arc there, but there's something about him coming back pretty much at the same point And there's just there's just a slight AB feel to like he starts at a goes to B But comes back to a and I think there's something in polish lands just to kind of give you a bit of complexity where Maybe he gets there and then as he's done It might be like he might go a bit up in this where the root goes up a bit Maybe pushes himself up a bit. That's where that hand thing comes in and with that shoulder up and then after this He could compress and then kind of when he's here that mouth is actually here. The head is lower He kind of decompresses into something lower You know, it's almost like he gets there There's some tension the body goes up to not touch her here to not wake her up and then imagine after this He's just so happy and in love that it's almost a sigh. He goes Because the other thing that happens here is that he goes back and then it's right there. There's that He's there's a very harsh stop in his hold and then watch out There's something where he seems to be looking a bit here. I would have him look a bit lower But imagine like I say it goes more in the upper move upper move there and then when he's done It's that I'm in love side type of thing of And then that would extend to the shot where again, it's a much lower arc in here Then his shoulders could could slump and you could have a bit more of a head tilt over either way probably towards her Might be visually more interesting. I Think that that is my thought there. I think the rest is cool Take a look at this is super picky. I don't think it is needed, but There's something about him coming in where everything feels very Straight on the line. There's not that much up and down and I think again I don't want to change too much, but the thought was potentially Imagine that hand would be this low And there's a bigger move up and up until here The why move feels almost like stagnant and you can go much broader So it's almost like down there. I'm yeah. Yeah. Yeah, like he's happy. He's happy Yeah, we're gonna pop corn and watch a movie and then it's oh and Then after that he goes, you know shoulders up into oh you and then it's a bit more Would let me be quiet. So you got that contrast of all right. All right. Oh You let's be quiet, let's be quiet Let's be quiet like these are kind of the energy levels that I'm Envisioning there and he seems a bit straight floaty coming out there And not by much just a little bit of up and down just give it a bit more happiness in there and a bigger Our move from here to here. So it's really drawing our attention Which I know it is I mean he comes out like everybody's gonna look here But it's kind of pushed out a bit more and this is extremely picky and I know he has to hold That bowl there's just an ever-so-slight if you could When that elbow is up here and then goes down Because just involve that that hand that wrist a bit more There's some sections there and through there And I know you asked to be a picky so these are my super picky notes There's an ever-so-slight hint of an IK hand Which I totally understand why you have it. I'm just saying and I know you don't want to bounce around the bowl and Rotate too much because it would be too light and too loose It's just a slight feel of IK there So every time there's movement in the in the elbow up and down is to kind of involve that wrist up and down as Well, just a bit just as a slight immediate move there Polish stuff will be to me when you see a hand like this Well, this is cool But if I look at the other one to me It would be if he brings this up there might be a bit more tension I will press the fingers in maybe bring them in a bit more for that tension and then Here seems like it comes off the bowl But it will probably two or three frames two or three frames earlier start changing the finger the pose on the fingers there Because the index could come off and curl a bit and it's not just a roll off just a bit more figure involvement there Which is again super picky because once you get to here Excuse me. I Should pause before I cough got nice triangle poses there Because you know party to politician pose there But you got nice changes there. All of that is really nice. You got interaction there on the cloth For the blankie That's all cool Now that being said this seems harsh. How does fingers? Hit or cheek boom. I would actually that's where I would ease in and really be gentle with that This is cool. That's nice, too Ever so slight floatiness through there. I would probably go from here and Then speed up and by speeding up. I mean maybe two or three frames cutting out of there This is cool There's some really nice stuff there with the compression and adjusting the fingers. It's very nice Here from here to here and I again I understand why you're doing it It just has this feeling of it's the racist curve in and then comes out while The elbow is kind of staying put and I know this is tricky to do but again, it's just it has that slight IK feel of a very independent wrist compared to the elbow So to me, it's just I think it's the visual of as you bring out that wrist But the fingers out with the hand out that wrist comes kind of in if you see this It's super subtle, but there's again a slight IK feel to it and probably also reacting and probably more so than that That's straight line through there The The timing is a bit even it just all floats a bit like that straight path the floatiness a little thing on the wrist Gives it again a bit of an IK feel The drop is nice though. It's a bit of a pop Again, you're asking for pickiness here right there. Beep beep that how it stops Seems like you're hitting a constraint or just It could roll a bit not that that's to go wiggle there, but just a bit softer Careful when you relax and you bring up that arm again. It has that feeling of There are two things a it just goes straight up and I don't see much of a wrist a wrist a shoulder involvement with a bit Of a chest over this way, even if it's subtle It just has a bit of a dislocated feel of only this is moving and the other thing is it's slightly unfortunate in its Silhouette it has a slight bend this way, but there's an overall feel of bending away from camera where If he brings down his arm and goes like that you might be able to bring out that arm out This way instead of up like that it would be a bit more up this way so that your your bend would be a bit more pronounced There's a slight bending away from camera that gives us this weird foreshortening silhouette there on that arm But this is the bigger issue that the IKEA arm floating towards us. I wonder if you might be doing too much y-rotation hips right there There's something weird about seeing so much in why but this line here Stays put Where I would be expecting more Changes like that And by more I mean you know like 10 15% just a bit more It might just be something in on the looping. I'm not sure. I'm not sure if this geometry is independent from this if this is a separate piece Geo piece. I'm not sure but there's there's something just feeling where it's very isolated in y-rotation, but nothing In Z if that's your z-axis there Glasses are cool This is a bit of an IK head if you screw up three you can see how you basically just go straight up There's no rotational complexity in there I think which I think you could push that you could almost just favor a little bit of a tilt this way because he's holding the glasses there Not that he's pulling his head down here, but it would be very subtle So that when you go, it's a slightly more tilted this way and when he goes up here He readjusts to that line so you have a bit of a rotation back rotation this way So it's just some rotation is involved. They're not just a straight up and down And speaking of up and down your eyebrows It's tricky because this is hiding it, but I have a slight feel that this whole structure is moving and what's What's a bit funky is that it the the lid here comes down and it's very in sync it's wind with that brow and the amount of Upper lid coming down is almost the same as the as the eyebrow I would decouple that a little bit and I would make sure that this side of the brow is barely moving I would use that for some fleshiness and concentrate all the movement on Here and this middle part fading out with almost nothing here And this just feels like the whole thing goes up and then timing wise if it's a bit harsh in its top right there So I would ease into that a bit more and you can almost go up about really Subtle ease into this whole thing and then relax down a bit through here See dies a bit through here. I see something in the lids but in terms of the face He goes hmm, and then it's just kind of dead I think a little bit of a another move in here not to throw out the cliche I dart or something but some life It feels a bit dead But I think it would help just the complexity in the rotations is not just the translate through here decoupling this Also help Yeah, just mechanics wise it's not so separated through there. I would Personally reduce your lower lids you have some lower lid there and Lower lid there I would just keep that in the upper lids to mean their lower lids are a Function from squashing through there or a very specific squint, but there's something where I see it bobbing right through there seems a bit involuntary Watch out your head rotation this way and in why It's a bit harsh there Strictly was it so slow and soft and then has that sudden stop. That's nice to like that Relaxing through there Cool like all this Yeah, that one's definitely harsh right there that's top. I think that's it Of course you would have to animate all of these guys separately moving there It's really cool again because it's so good I'm being super picky and you asked me to be picky So it's the kind of the things that if you have time to noodle some of the things I would do I'm gonna be so extremely picky that That lower side of that glass is forming a tangent there with that line I will bring that glass back so that it's a bit higher and we see the stem of it I know this is extremely Ridiculously picky and stupid It's just me and I will probably either move it here or here so that we don't we don't crowd this silhouette there again Super picky, but why not? Why? Not and for her. I mean she has Think I look at her. She's got a breathing. I Like that. It's got a little bit of it That's cool That reaction there you could probably I wonder if you want to play with again, I would soften that impact there But once you do that that you might have a little bit of a Like a little bit twitch there or maybe the eyebrows twitch or the lids or something might be too much I'm not saying do it but something to consider maybe You can find something in there where she has a little bit of a reaction something in there and Then it's there's quite a structure in the jaw and this seems Very isolated where it's really just the jaw I would have that nose tip go from here to maybe here just a bit more Involved in the heads. It doesn't feel like this this dead skeleton Like that is nice here where you have The jaw go down and there's fleshiness in the cheek and the nose whereas here. I don't feel that at all It's a little bit of a scrub, but I think you can push like the whole head up a bit She's pushing her up and it's still I mean it's There's still some structure muscle there. That's all cool Yeah, I think that is it. It's very very cool. I'm gonna leave it at that Well could be also nice and this is super picky again. I will probably to be honest Just take that clock bring it up. So there's no No Dark shade there crowding this moment. I know this is super picky. I know hear me out I would just take that out a spring it up a bit higher and it would be really cool if you just put in Whatever light direction light or spotlight, whatever you have to give him a bit of a rim Backlight so there might be you know it comes from the kitchen Maybe and there's a kitchen light in there so that it gives them just a bit more of a highlight Visually and and everything else Just because I mean, you know, it is darker and lighter here It's okay in terms of a color silhouette, but I think it could be a nice moment just to really have him Be separated from that background a bit more And I give him a nice little little accents through there and then as you get in here you have stuff here because of the TV and since like a You know a lamp shape coming down here, so you got you got light there, which is nice I think everything in here is great That's it. I keep saying that's it, but I think that's it Alright, that's From me so far Any other notes? 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