 So, today I have to talk about another Patreon request. This was another self-published thing on the Kindle Store requested by Evan Stagall, so thanks Evan. Also, it was 90 degrees yesterday and it is currently snowing outside, so I don't know if that has anything to do with what I'm about to talk about, but it is weird. This is the introduction song. It's not very good, but it's not too long. So today's book is called Galactic Entente and, man, I have weird feelings on this because, look, they pay me to be honest in my reviews and this one I will come right out and say it's not good, I didn't like it, but I can see, yeah, there's some aspects to it that if you just tweaked it a little it could be really cool and there's some aspects where you just need to expand on it and it would be a lot better. So the plot here is, I'm not 100% sure what the plot is because it goes in a couple of different directions and then it's also told in such a weird way that I had difficulty telling what was going on and it's interspersed with a couple of author's notes, almost like a fan fiction, so all I can say for certain is that it starts off with people getting onto a spaceship which is all outfitted for battle and everything and then while they're flying they get attacked by pirates and then there's a big battle with that and after that there was just a sequence of events, like there was someone got murdered I believe and there was some sort of competition with the main character Hans or the closest thing to a main character that Hans is and I feel kind of bad for not knowing what's going on but I genuinely could not tell what was going on for large chunks of this and part of that is just because it's written in a very strange way so part of it seems almost like a movie script, like this is supposed to be one of ten books or something and this one it starts off with like scene one and the name of the scene and then it'll have characters do things and scene two and that and at first I thought it was going to be the dialogue and everything was going to be written that way too but not really the dialogue doesn't have any quotes around it, it doesn't have tags so I can't really tell who's saying what a lot of time and a lot of the characters don't have much description like one or two of them have some but not much. The biggest thing that made it difficult to read and I feel bad hitting on this because it's a really cool idea is that whenever certain characters were talking or when it was describing their actions it would, the text would change font and it would also change color so like you know the average text is just I don't remember exactly it was like regular Times New Roman or something and it's just you know regular black text like you would see in anything but then when certain characters talk it'll get into this like cursive and it'll be bright pink and I think that's really cool and then there's others where it's like highlighted and it's blue and there's others where it's highlighted in black and then the letters are like these really thin squiggly red lines and I think that's really a neat idea because it does give a visual element to it and if you did it properly it would help to distinguish between characters but my god was difficult to read like you need to pick fonts that you can actually read because the the pink squiggly cursive for example I had to stop and really look at that to see what was going on and the one that was highlighted with black boxes and had red squiggly lines and I could not fucking read that to save my life like every like fifth or sixth word I could make out but a lot of it I genuinely just could not read it and no matter how I tried and it's not like I could highlight it and it would look different or anything it looks exactly the same so there's a lot of bits in this that even though again I think that's a cool idea adding a visual element to it and taking advantage of the fact that you know if there was a printed book you probably wouldn't be able to do all the different colors because that'd be a lot more expensive but just when it's on a screen yeah you can do that no problem so I think you're taking advantage of the format that you're using which is a neat idea and the visual aspect of it is just neat but you got to go back to the drawing board you got to make sure that people can actually tell what's going on and can actually read it because this was just kind of a mess in addition there are just a lot of typos and grammatical errors and parts where I'm pretty sure that the characters or what different character was talking and so their text should have been in a different color or something and there's parts where characters have conversations and rather than in addition to not having quotes around the dialogue rather than having a different paragraph for each person talking it'll have one person talking in this color and then right next to it another person in this color and then back to the other one so it took me a while to even figure out that yes that that it is dialogue and so you know it really is just a mess and this needed at least one or two more rewrites and that's part of why I couldn't tell what was going on with the story but another part of it is just that a lot of stuff is never really explained they just kind of put characters out there and then they start doing stuff but we don't know exactly what it is they're doing or why and at a few points we figure it out but and I'm sure it made perfect sense to the person writing it I'm I'm certain it did but this is why you have other people read it and not just your friends your mom or someone because they're gonna you know they're gonna tell you yeah it's good most likely but you know get some strangers and beta readers and editors and stuff like that because they they will be honest with you they will come right out and say yeah this is I have no idea what's going on here you should go back to the drawing board when it comes to positives I will say that the battle against the pirates while it does take up like a third of this book and it kind of comes out of nowhere we don't know exactly why people are fighting well I mean we know you know they're pirates they just attack stuff and steal things but we don't know exactly who they are we don't know quite who the good guys are I will say that it is kind of cool you know if it had been written a little in less of a confusing way I think I would have liked it a lot because you know I just like space battles I don't see them often enough and I will say that there's a lot of detail about the ship they're on and how it's run you know what officers run what and how things work it does but it doesn't go into a lot of like pseudo science stuff about how oh nanomachines blah blah blah and the mass effect fields and our nuclear reactor they don't go into all that but they still give a pretty good rundown of the ship and what it does what kind of weapons it has which I thought was cool and I can clearly tell that there was passion in here you know this wasn't just scribbled out and then thrown out in an attempt to make money like it it is something that someone wrote because they wanted to write it and in that regard I I can't I can't fault them for that you know you should be glad or excuse me you should be proud of yourself if you have the energy to do that the creativity to do that and you're willing to put that out there to be judged by the people so congratulations on that but that said this really is a mess I'm sorry I'm sorry to be that blunt but it is a mess and it needed a lot of rewriting before you could put it out there and especially because on on the Kindle store it's like $10 I think like I'll be honest it's not worth $10 like I would suggest dropping the price down to like $199 or something like that because then you might actually get some people buying it but that as it stands now congratulations on actually reading it congratulations on getting it out there but it's well it's it's just not good and so I don't know if I can really recommend this to anyone unless you're really intrigued by some sort of space opera-esque thing that has an avant-garde style of writing if you're interested in that then I guess go ahead and check 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