 Alright, new version, let's watch this in full, no sound, looking very cool though. Watch this before, L, you have just general timing notes on I think three areas. It's very cool though, I have to say. I think that timing of the jump is really great, the hold and then that drop is great. I love you got that stuff in there in terms of the face, I love that pose, holding all that's great. I think on the picky note I will probably keep this here and then I'll stretch a bit more and then keep it longer and then you start to go up there. So it has like two more frames of hold. If you watch that arm, it's very light and I think it would help with that push off and then that arm push off by holding it two more frames I would say. And this is great, I love that that turn into a jump also with this pose is great, she's a bit too crazy, this point like so I would relax probably the face at this point and it's okay to open the mouth, this is a big big moment there and it's a bit forced to have the mouth closed there but I love that it just makes it adds the energy and she would still have that energy momentum so they have the little extra jump and then to come down a bit low into this I think it's great. I like this that there's business and she does some stuff here but it's almost like we're expecting something like a second character to run next to her. That's very subjective here but I'm not sure if you need it, I do like cleaning like sort of business like that but what is she looking at and she never gets back to that moment so it feels always a bit misleading but it's all cool. So here's the biggest note is this feels light and I think it's just that the frames of getting up here and then suddenly accelerating through there if you watch this here it's just that sudden speed up it doesn't quite compute even though she gets low there's something about there's something about this that feels light it's like I would add two or three more frames of the body down just a bit longer I know we already that and that stretched out position but then she would get to that position if that makes sense just a bit I just need a little bit more a little bit you know this but there's such a drop in this and what you can see here in the spacing if I put on onion skinning is how the chin drops and then hits that wall so if imagine you go down down next frame it's a little bit lower I can't even draw on it a bit lower than what we have there so which adds to that being a bit more compressed and she would have to have you know here a bit lower I know there's a camera move too but then you can shoot and catch up I think that's going to help that's to me the biggest thing all great stuff I kill detailedy things like big eyes kind of defaulty eyebrows nothing in the mouth there but great stuff that's just like that felt light that I think works already better timing is great just here right there again it's almost like you want to hold this it's up here a bit longer and you can see the spacing how it's small and then suddenly right there it's made too big literally like a frame or two put two frames for me yeah it suddenly feels like and pull down was that a mind having then a speed up through there just that there's a sudden speed up there and you call a bit more gradually again just by two frames then I will buy a bit more of a salad that's okay that's cool the editing is good too if I'm a picky he feels light I think I will bring in this hands already it could almost be telegraphing that I am about to catch you with my ginormous hands you know then I would be further in already out here and then turn off the skin here turn it off there you go and then still big big basically you know this kind of range it just comes out a feels a bit you know parallel and then yes there's there's a shape asymmetry but it comes out in couple frames and you have that kind of elbow pop through there and then it's out there and I think if you watch this in real time really fast and you want to have a little bit more contrast between these two so to me having that arm come in it's almost like what is this oh it's telegraphing I'm about to catch you with my hand I think that would be totally fine and then this one felt fast it's almost like a little bit longer more frame or two and then let me see you have to add frames I wouldn't just make it longer than subtract from the drop you just you want to have a little bit more of a just a bit longer up there and then and then I think what adds to it you're easing into this easy maybe it's also because you're rotating back I'm sure that's part of it too but it feels like a slight ease in there yeah that's what makes it light too so give this maybe right through there should be like here she would be maybe here and then not ease into this we'll really make that then and then you would feel that sudden and even here on that jump up I would give this two more frames just a little bit you attack push compression you're gonna have a little bit more continuation on that momentum and then drop beautiful pose nice line there could potentially even push it a bit more this might be much but push that maybe a bit more and that is that it's very very cool compared to that very first version it's huge progress I love it all right thanks all right there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome all right thank you