 All right, no sound. Let's play this in full It's more a more fleshed out one between the poses set changes Especially at the end. Ta-da Cool, I think what I want to dress here are the broader strokes In terms of timing was there some cool stuff Through there There was the complexity and the turn and all of that like I'm not super worried about Almost detail work to me. It's more about timing and pushing poses. So when she comes out there's something I've never mentioned that before but It's a bit busy that background with her Which just could be a clean and so many lines in here that from tensions and busy up the silhouettes Never have I mentioned that before if you want to you know, short Short, what's it called? Make the set smaller add something here Whatever you have that keeps her in the clear But the general thing would be There's something I think it's better for sure like everything is better. It just needs like a fine-tuning of This feels like it's like an in-between pose it could be more dynamic in terms of Holding this out in terms of a big stretch in the body and the and the legs almost close it together She feels a bit halfway through almost holding in that pose. I know she's changing I can see it But it seems more like an overall global rotation change where Arms and legs always kind of the same. So I wish like you would do it and then really stretched out Pose so that you have it's almost like a squash bot within a stretch. That sounds a bit weird but Like that, but you know the legs are closer together. Maybe even arms could be to close it together and then She comes out into that's your in-between you break down between those two poses into another stretch And I'll probably cheat that leg over Get a bit of a cleaner That's cool here with a cleaner Leg silhouette, but timing wise it feels like you want to It still feels a bit like You're pulling her down There's always been that remnant from the beginning and I think it's because the timing of that jump through here Into that hangtime is all fairly soft and suddenly we get that pull-down frame and what's happening too is that This gets very small like you have suddenly acceleration in the timing here through the spacing But then suddenly this feels Smaller in spacing and then suddenly an accelerates in it especially through here But then from here to here not really so to me feels like there's so inconsistencies in the spacing where I would go Take a couple frames out of this. It's a bit faster Hang hang hang in that pushed pose then turn into this. That's a bit more Bump bump bump bump bump bump You really feel that shmoop around going down so it doesn't feel small small big small and then another big change here The shape-wise blond to gray That's that section then There's so much energy in that roll Going forward and that translate that suddenly right through there. It suddenly gets slow You got to take a couple frames out of that so it goes from this this this To this take this one out take all of these out to maybe already up here and then getting up. I Just feel like a weird pause through there and Then this in return feels a bit slow on The she feels like she's going fairly up and then suddenly she's accelerating forward So trajectory it feels a bit like this versus Role jump and in timing wise we're small small small suddenly moving forward so again I would blend that a bit more And even this feels less like an impact compression and then up More like a I'm tired and then up and all feels a bit stiff because this To this there's a little bit of courage here, but other than that it feels like this whole thing Goes down. It doesn't help that. She is never really You know if she will go down and keep her head up and then eyes go forward to keep the focus But she feels looks so spaced out and feel so stiff through there quite Same thing here and talk about that having a bit of a stronger Cepation to this feels like that much of a jump I'll go a bit Brought and again through all of this. I'm just sensing a lot of stiffness in the chest and head relationship How there's nothing really going on there terms of compression and change even through here This happens later on as well. You have a jump and then we're suddenly Spacing wise, you know, I know this there is a camera move so it's Hearts to fully track, but even within this you can see That sudden jump through there, but I'm not feeling it's a in the pose Where she brings that leg up, but then she gets to this but then we kind of staying put to me as opposed to She's like that and she will go lower Really bring bring that down and then on this you can stay in that I would drag that foot a bit But on then that leg is up maybe extending this a bit more Curling you're bringing that that line of action more like this versus this and then forward And just being able to hold that leg up a bit longer for you want to feel that Extension full extension with a slight swing over the arms as well like this arm goes up But now we have a down up up here and then we're staying in that pose We're not following through with that swing up and also bringing the shoulder up the shoulders feel low here So like a bigger swing bigger full extension stretch then you can get into this Here it's cool Getting into this great compression there, but then it feels like oh we want a full extension But we're not we're already bent and we staying kind of bent Which again takes the force out versus stretch Then for this And the same thing where I would have her Like she feels like she is about to go this way and then she sounds she suddenly goes this way There's already kind of you know bent there basically what I'm looking for is a full stretch really towards the goal and Then towards the end she can bring Her body up of it into that bend for that pose to get ready And I think the legs are okay Yeah, I think that feels better The idea of this force going this way this going this way then down this colliding I think it's okay It feels a bit stiff just because This feels straight as it goes forward and then the legs do more Maybe there's something where I can do where that's on stop will actually bend the knees Bend the knees then the knees catch up And then it's a bit more Like that right you got something bend in the legs and then they shoot forward feeling of snap This feels slow too. I would go and then To to slow hold on if I speed this up here Even that feels slow. This is 25% faster. Let me just play this at 50% and That feels better 50% faster How about What is this twice as fast? How about twice as fast? bit fast maybe 50% maybe a bit more 60% Now we're back at Normal speed we are so slow Even this here feels a bit slow and then we're also getting stuck in that pose at the end You might look like well He's going down there so she's dragging but to me feels like we're seeing that top and then we keep seeing that top And I would just cheat so that you're landing here That's your length there. All right. Hold on. Let me delete this and put onion skinning So that's your length of the body, but then at the end Cheated that the head is here So this the cheated impression of the rotation that has her go Continue to go down into this, you know That's cool. I don't know if I will compress a bit more. Maybe here if you can Wow, and the same thing here in terms of the hold I will go and shot It's kind of Here bit deeper jump up down hold Slow and fast Right now it feels all bit even here one two three Give this a bit more flourish of whole and then All right Hope that helps. I know these are a lot of notes a lot of hopefully not too destructive. There's a timing notes But that's what you paid me for. I want to be honest. This is kind of well, you know, it's my subjective view But I feel like it's all cool. It just needs a little bit of Spicing up the timing to push certain elements. It doesn't feel slow and even Alrighty. Thanks. All right There's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you