 All righty here we got this version here into the exit there and then there is this version into the exit. Now let's just quickly take a look at them both of those guys side-by-side. All right and here they are so shot length will be a bit different but we kind of see the difference and it cuts out at the end so we have a beginning here where she's looking going what's over there on the left I'm looking at this guy and then exit grab the gun and out and then the other one on the right she just does this, smaws immediately and then it will be the out. So with this version I'm actually zoom in again here so we have a cup beginning where she goes straight into the thought process there. It's almost like a fake out and then okay I think that works better I know it's a smaller exchange but it just adds just to me an extra layer of just the thought process of something she's registering something and then we wonder like well if this seems a bit worrisome because of that face why would she just kind of smile walk away it's because it's a fake out you got that slight moment of being a bit more serious going into this getting ready but then getting the question is is she it seems like she is shooting and then it's the power of the weapon here that throws her way that's my guess right it's been a while and I think that's what I remember and it's not her being shot at and then reacting to that looking at this here I still think that the end is a bit fast I do the I do like the rest that you have here I think that's all cute like you say it's long twos it's gonna be a lot work to tame that hair I think where we can push things a bit more is this is the only bigger exchange smaller exchange where we see a bit of a but it's it's this one here where she just has a squint and a head down into that and I wonder if this could be a moment that we go where she goes if there's time or if it will read but something where maybe a tightening of this a little bit a raising of the shoulder just kind of a broader sense of tension and alright let's go into this I'm just my concern is that she sees this goes into that and then we're practically you know at that same level where she does all this gets into this and that's like the lowering here the change of pose and everything is is because she has the gun that's a surprise and I wonder can we get something out of this moment here that is different than this a broader visual change in body language to get ready into this because she doesn't have to go that way up here I know it's kind of a fake out but it could be maybe like a slight change of a step as well with you know like I know she has to be hunched over and shoulders I know you want to spoil it too much but that's the only thing I'm wondering is that too subtle you see it just enough in that change here but maybe through here like even more squinting and I'm just wondering if since it's so fast could it work that we tilt her forward a bit more we have like a big shoulder raise and the head is almost buried in here you know it's almost like her like that shoulder is almost like a cape covering her and then you can still have a moment where she gets bigger here as an dissipation to go back down again and then maybe in here when she goes even that would still be in the squinty angry pose in the face so that here maybe that's a bit too much that stretch here but maybe on that frame you open the face here that the face could still be up with white eyes so basically we're going huh what is this then yeah yeah yeah it's all fine and maybe I mean I know I know you like the squinty or the the race cheeks was of the smile but then I wonder from here on that expression continues until until here I guess it's a continuous tension maybe shoulders up evil eyes and that impact here after she shoots that's when those eyes open and then they still open so it's not such a huge dry here and then the head will be down like that and it's a small change but I just want to make sure that we squeeze everything out that we can in terms of readability and contrast was that be picky I'm still wondering like what is what is this pose what is she looking at to get into this could it be something where this is almost like kind of action where she was just doing something and could it be a bit more innocent of her maybe maybe the pose is more like oh I'm just kind of standing here and and and looking at something and and then she goes oh what is this but again the legs could be already or could be down not like this and she then she could bring out her hands or arms and then she goes whoa into that and that might be a step back or the feet are still down straight and then she takes a little shuffle step over and then into that if that makes sense that's my my worry some that basically is what is this pose telling us I understand this that's a that's a clear change maybe I'm also overthinking for a short shot like this do we need to really know what's here but that's the only thing maybe maybe she does something adjusts her her sleeve or maybe she even has her hair around and she does something to her hair and looks down at her hair and something goes oh what is this oh and that you know then the hair kind of swings around my maybe or you still hold on to it because you don't want to distract from this we want to see and read that but that might be something this like as a as a throwing out of an idea could she be doing something here instead of just looking through the emptiness here then into that that's fine that's fine too and then that moment here push that moment and keep that moment till basically the impact and even this here I wonder if this is also a bit odd to get that is that too much she's all happy open eyes or not closed eyes and then it's almost almost squint serious but then it opens up again and then squint serious I'm also inclined to say take this out and either keep those eyes closed closed closed until into this or you keep them have a blink then and then stay within this pose instead of that pose and that's kind of that hope that makes sense little things here and there which of course you can always say nah I'm gonna keep whatever I have but these are just thoughts and yeah let me know what you think alright there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way like and subscribe would be awesome alright thank you