 Let's take a look at this one, and just quickly let's play this one through here All right, so pair your email you changed a rework to the turn based on You can see here the steps so before that it was pretty much a Single turn in Y without those steps. I just did it before Which funny enough, I really don't mind because it was such a quick way What and it was almost as if she lifted one leg? Stayed on the heel of the other one understood a quick turn. It kind of fits the cartoony style and One look at it here. I don't know to be honest. It feels labored It's almost like you want to split the difference But you know you're showing it to other people and you know you're gonna get a lot of Different opinions and subjective opinions to me it feels before that it had a snappy A snappy start. Hold on. Let me just bring it in so I can show it. All right, so Snap back to my critique here It's a bit higher so you can look at it. So here's the turn Sure, funny enough having not seen this for a while. I still prefer this turn, but There's something almost stiff in terms of I gotta change our critique tool here how this She she turns around so quickly and that is something I should have mentioned Before apologize, but it's just don't see it. Oh It's not so good. It's felt like she turns around and it's just not enough drag in the wrist and the flowers I mean, this is not rigged. I'm assuming I'm not sure But there's something in the arm the wrist and the flowers that could just be offset more so let me kill this here and just go back let's watch this and Way way back. I mean you're writing it here So I ended up adding steps like you'd originally suggested but in a way that felt natural to how I acted it out And to be honest, I can't remember the My initial notes and I'm just getting old but Looking at this it does feel very clean in why how she turns So a little bit of a maybe a little a little move to the left to anticipate a couple frames and then turn with a little bit of an Up and down in the route. So that's kind of that that quick hop like that's kind of I Like that aspect and it's the thing is it's also an interesting quick surprise So although let's go back to our critique here So imagine like that's the beginning of the shot and I like this because it has the contrast of quick turn pause and then So it's a nice contrast of quick action like Not to take or surprise, but there's there's a cool thing of quick and then a concerned face and then all relaxation into Her performance whereas if we go back now, I don't know. It just feels labored. It just feels like it's there's too much emphasis on it I think this is better That's what I was Seeing last time last time as it's just right now. So I think that's great, but there's something about a that lean in where now it becomes very Animated like it's very cartoony performance where characters to what did you say? What where am I going? So I don't know it just that is just not my style not my thing and Then those couple steps. I don't know again. I mean that's it's you have to go with what you think You know, you prefer in your shop It's not that it's not well animated. Obviously, you're really good animators. So it's not like that's not the critique Yeah, I don't know. I was kind of a morphine like the mechanics work The only thing I would say this feels very fast right now in the root So she turns around That in real time Bit too fast. I'm just looking at this section That mechanically Feels like someone just kind of push her over and it just feels like it just takes too long again. That's just that's just me It's almost like you want that beginning. I like that little anticipation I like the rework of the hand arm, but almost into this With a little drop stop and then from here Go into this where like when you when you're in this and you stop then you have the facial change into this and Then that but without those couple steps, which I know you just worked on And if that's I mean, that's what you reference and you feel like that's what you want to do in your shop That's totally fine It's just a danger of showing it to a lot of people But then you're getting it totally different opinions, but this is your shot. You got to do what feels right for you I think again, the only thing animation wise Doesn't quite work for me is this turn But it's turned this move in the roots just a bit fast And also you can see the speed of it if you then look at the flowers in the hands It is moves over pretty quickly if it was this fast I would have a bit more drag in the hands if there's anyway could rig this that would even drag the flowers over there Picky things again. This is after not having seen it for a while When she has that blink and she goes, huh? I would also start relaxing the thumb and the index finger Not in that pose here, but it's because she's like hey, I don't do that and that hey it works for me, but then There is a thought process change like wait a minute. I didn't do that and I would just relax at a tiny bit and Then when you go into this you can close it. It's always like you can relax it With a little bit of a moving hold like hey, and then Hold and then grip so you can have that move movement over the fingers going wait No, so you can have a little bit of that in there as well technically Super super picky. I'm not sure about text. I don't think you need that. I would always kind of look at work without text Not that you need it's technically for the shots or someone can't read English You know wouldn't understand the dialogue either, but from a visual point of view It's also a bit of a tangent there. It's a bit picky-picky something here that corner of that with the flowers there And then it's right there on their head it's not quite a fan. I would you could just take this out It's half hospital, but then again, I don't Don't quite need it It's still so super cute. Yeah, it's just Just that move I would say animation he bumps me Because now the thing is I think that also strikes me is that before that you had this Hey this quick intro and then hey and then that change where it was just No, that's not true and then straight into this, but now you have so much time lingering on Concern look concern look More concern look and then change into that where it almost feels an abrupt Emotional change where before that was what no, I don't do that, but I it's like hey, hey, hey No, I don't do that. It's kind of this weird long Long transition. I don't know. I'm not sure why I'm reacting to this It just it doesn't quite fit to me if you just start. Let's pretend we just start here Feels already prepared just because we don't linger so much on that emotion Never reworking mechanics. I feel like on that and she says that you can have a little bit of a dip in the head So she would go to do that. I'm exaggerating now What we try to do that that where that where the body goes down the heck was down But very very minimal and to me mostly in the head And right now it just feels like it's a head move Where the lip sync just feels copy pasted? Do I do that? Do I do that? Me a little bit of a head forward just like just a little bit of a head accent on that is missing And then maybe you have a change in the body, which is good in terms of it doesn't feel like it's just one axis back There's something a little bit in this where that's a strange Parts to scrub the feels like there's a slight pivot off of this section We're the head just kind of pivot off that point You might want to have a little bit of a translate over to not have that sticky frame there But when she goes back here, maybe a little bit of not saying she needs to do Hold on Do you do that like not like a twist or much in why but that but much smaller So it's not just one axis back in the head. So I do do that So I do maybe you care a little bit. I do do that a little bit of a side and tilt just a bit Not too much because I think I like the wide-eyed and it's the shock But just a little bit. It doesn't feel it quite one axis and actually Super picky. I wouldn't open up the hand here I would do the opposite where the thumb is out and then it goes in because Technically technically much to me emotional. She would wait what she would tense up because she goes into that emotion Wait what so excuse me to me? It would be I don't have anything like that, but It's my glasses holder. Okay, so it's more like I'm holding those flowers You know more relaxed way and imagine she just heard something Someone told her that and she goes way and it's it's a firmer grip for the turn Because you don't want to loosen up before you turn quickly. So I would actually technically do the opposite there Again, you can noodle this forever Every time you see you look at it You might see something else and this again This is not wrong, but it could be an interesting exploration of that mouth shape to that holding it longer in the wider shape and Then go into when you do this that move close it up into this only because I was like do I do that Where she brings the mouth closer almost too soon where you could almost hold it where she goes do I do that? That idea so it's that with that and you hold the wide The image it gets more concerned with that little dart over there That's when you can close it or close it get into this pose here And you can almost explore and she goes even through here close the corners even bit more it's like a Not I that right, but that's the idea of just a little bit of And then you have a bit more contrast when you go big and you widen it on here Tricky thing, you know, you can loop this forever and you might always see something where before that it was Totally fine or it felt better. I don't know It's always a tricky thing. It's you know, it's I'm looking at this hand here, you know You could technically exaggerate where we see this and then as she goes over She's going to hold on to this more tightly so you can push that by now The fingers might be further out because you are you're holding it like See my fingers, you know something like that then she goes So just by holding it more tightly that that part this part of the fingers will go up Meaning it will go from this flatter pose to a more more pronounced because of the grip And this can be tiny tiny and I'm only saying this because I see you do tiny work here Like you are into all those details So this could be something where you can do that here and then bring down the tip of the thumb so if you want if you have Thumbs silhouette here, you know, if it's that's more relaxed and then she tightens You have a little bit of that in there just to show the tension in the grip I do do that and then you can relax it again because she is completely relaxed at that point Where it's almost like you could relax the index or the pinky bit more So it doesn't feel like it's just this flat shape here Visually, you can have a little bit of a more relaxed round the pose Give that overall feel of softness there Because you do have it here, which is good. I do do that. I don't think I do that Hold on So when she goes here, I'm just curious if the rig has that I would assume so it seems like a very detailed rig It goes when she is like this in a frowny face and goes And relaxes I think you have it in there I mean, I see the jaw going down But I wonder if during this you can scrunch up the nostrils bring the nostrils up a bit So it's overall more of a squash in the face And then when she goes, oh when she has that little moment here You can bring down those nostrils just a bit And definitely through here as she opens the jaw I can pull That just that section here of the face down a bit for more squishiness and polish And you could probably try to sneak it in there too And she goes I do do that I do do kind of a bit more of a scrunched up even bring up the nostrils here is of the shape So instead of down like this, it's almost like a rick and morty face there I do do that it's almost higher in the Who shape so that when she goes that you can bring that lower I do do that, you know Yes, I don't again don't want to start unraveling too much But that could be interesting. It's a funny shape I do do that I just wonder if something it's I do do that so that on that you can elongate the face again I'm going to stop here See things forever. So Yeah, the biggest thing I personally would reduce those steps here I like that anticipation move over there. I'll probably reduce the lean So it's not so much of a lead with the head. I love this new change. That's great It's just this section. I would reduce so that you go from this straight into Technically that so you just have this change again. I explained a lot before totally up to you. Um, let me know Show to other people with those notes in mind and see what they what they say a bit of a mix of notes there So ultimately this is still a really great shot really well animated. So You know, whatever you feel best To move forward with all right. 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