 Alrighty, this is a longer sequence. Let's play this first in full It's cool, I like it You are asking here. It seems like there is no sort of punchline thing Should I change the choice that made to make it better or move on to your next shot? It's a good question. I kind of like it though My main concern is is the size. Would you be open to? In my horribly drawn reframing here to reframe into this because he's so tiny and We only go this low because you could go a bit closer So it's just a bit bigger So we see a bit more of the awesome animation and you can always then tilt up and down more for reframing It might get a bit fast as you go up here, but it could be cool. It's not just the follow by the more of a More dramatic up and down with the camera I'm slightly concerned about Silhouette wise which starts cool, but it's just so small Then even this here We could be framed lower and closer And then just do a bigger Pan with the character, you know for something like this where even if we're just this much Closer, I'm really horrible by drawing straight lines and Then we have that That'd be my first thing Other than that, I Like this. I like that. I'll scramble there. I like that Stretchy there. I think we can push the timing a bit more I mean you are saying here that you are Between IP and polish my thing is that if you do So if you do that type of stretchiness, right? So we're getting into fairly cartoon mode here in terms of that stretchiness even though it's fast It's there and it's cool. I really like it. I think we could do something where you can do a bit of a Jump up with a bit of a longer hold a little bit of a snap your down And up and down just exaggerating the timing a bit more because doing this tells us all right We are in a specific cartoon timing or at least posing lands World that means that you can push the timing a bit more to be a slightly more exaggerated just a bit I feel like this could be a cool moment of whip It's a bit of a whip hold and then Kind of snap down a bit more into this Now regarding your ending which is your main question Because this is all cool again, I would it's just too small for me, but that's totally up to you And I really like that transition by the way of I like that. I like that turn is great now You might argue again, I know any of these questions here are helping you but since he's just swinging right and there's Nothing going on in the background. He's just there just swings like all right. I get it You're going who is he saying by to who is this target? So is that something that you want to add later? Is there something where? It's gonna be a stupid idea. So don't do it, but you know, maybe there are people out here Shooting maybe windows this is a wrong angle, but shooting shooting and then Shooting here so that maybe once he does this It's gonna be very distracting, but maybe Maybe someone's I'm adding way too much work. Don't do this. I'm just thinking out loud What if someone's running here with a gun ready to shoot? Missing him so that when you're here, it's kind of like a thing of there is a leg with a foot here Perspective makes zero sense. You mean there's a foreground element where a character is standing here Maybe with the angry fist out of something where we understand that what I'm saying by to this guy Whoever is there chasing the character? I don't just thinking a lot. I know this makes zero sense. I just wondering Does this So I mean then you would argue well JD if you want to put someone there and they're shooting all the time Well, they would be shooting here all the time and he's way to relax and this would make no sense I totally understand. I'm just thinking a lot Going back to your thing It seems like the shot doesn't have some sort of punchline thing. What if Hmm was it like all of this right again thinking out loud about maybe something goes on That motivates this right something that does this I Mean or or you could have a bunch of pigeons here And then they fly away land here does this or there's a cat I Get scared and and runs towards the thing and it's here like something where the characters here was also framing wise There's so much room here. It's almost like it's asking for something to be here Cat this is by to And then When he jumps out comes up here, and we think this is the great exit moment I mean, I know this is mimicking the movie too much with the pigeons But maybe then suddenly the pigeons come back in and attack him and this is more like And it falls down pigeons following or he goes up here in the chopper Hits him and for I don't know. It's all stupid. I know what you mean I don't mind the ending because it has a nice pause and then we and I like that Because you're going this way. It's almost expecting something here ish But then it's actually coming here and it's a nice surprise that it's actually more left than we thought With the exit. I know what you mean that we could also add something. That's a bit more punchy in terms of like you said a punchline delivery So since that's your main question, I don't even know if I've answered this in any satisfying way But it could be kind of fun. I'm kind of smitten by the idea of What if you have a couple birds here? And you know they get all scared and that's He is technically disturbing them and then this makes it a bit of a cocky like yeah, it's fine. Bye. Bye. You know a couple birds here freaking out and Then the surprise punchline would be that then other birds come in to take him down and Falls down and which a ton of birds following. I don't know that could be something. It's a good question Or it would be something like I said where he is actually escaping people that shooting and blah blah blah and then goes back into again sing by to someone and And then at this point, I mean you can also and have a chopper ready here It means that the chopper coming here is not so much of a surprise and maybe just make that building a bit higher Still have a bit of negative space with the blue But hiding the chopper that flies him and maybe that gives it kind of a splat It's splat onto the side of the chopper then that flies by That could be something could it be something where it's a chopper with With missiles flying by and maybe this would be changed into bye-bye and then that's more of a Further hunching down a bit faster than that missile flies by over his head And then that's the look back up. Yeah, whatever it was that thing went somewhere He goes, all right. Bye-bye. It goes up here and then here comes that moment of hold and then suddenly again building might be a bit higher To then that hits him and then pushes him away with smoke and him in a funny pose That's being pushed behind that building that could be something I'm gonna leave it at that. It's a lot of rambling Not sure if it's a lot of helpful stuff. It just in terms of your ideas. I would say watch this email me Tell me how stupid those ideas are Just let me know maybe there's something that sparks a new idea in its chat over email It's kind of go through some back and forth about what you think could work or not think that I'm super picky But I would take this line of that building move it over here There's no tangent on that knee super picky You just talk about that and then once you're there same thing with that drop It's right where that line is that will bring that building over here. There's little things here and there and then maybe Yes chat over email about some of the ideas Maybe one of those weird crazy ideas sparked something better in your head or maybe you like some of those ideas So let's chat. All right. Awesome work though. Thank you very much All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you