 Let's now look at question number four of the English language paper one exam This is the question where we're always told a student having read this said or somebody having read this said Whatever they've said for this question I would suggest always remember to allocate 20 minutes to this part of the paper before you move on Let's now examine question for this is the question which always gives us a statement from a student If you recall the statement for this particular question is the students said This part of the story where the men encountered the tyrannosaurus rex shows equals is right to panic the monster is terrifying Now you're asked to what extent do you agree? I would say for question number four. Usually you always agree Okay, usually they don't give you a statement. That's completely Inaccurate or just completely crazy where you have to now make an argument. This is not a history essay Okay, so history you have to balance perspectives Okay, even in religious studies you have to balance perspectives But in this case just always agree for question number four here when you get the student statement and here We can agree that actually when the men do meet the tyrannosaurus rex from lines 31 to the end Echoes is right to panic. It is really terrifying the way this monster is portrayed, right? So now what I would do because of course we've already highlighted the keywords Okay, our own impressions of equals reactions to the t-rex Evaluate how the writer describes the monster. I would now go back to the insert Okay, and I would go back to the specific part of the passage which I'm being asked to look at Okay from line 31 to the end, which is basically just this entire page What I would suggest to not do is don't use any of the evidence you've already used if you remember in question 3 We have used this as impossible as well as the rifles Okay, and the final bit so I would suggest don't recycle these points because it's going to be seen as a little bit lazy By your examiner Go back to question number 4 in terms of timing because this is worth 20 marks You want to spend 20 minutes on this question You need to write an introduction very brief introduction using a bit of the question to begin on your answer Saying that you know the right uses of mix of language and structure devices to support the students statement Then write four pill paragraphs and a conclusion if you find that you're running out of time three pill paragraphs can also be good Okay, however The whole point of this lesson is that to show you how to structure this and then what I would suggest is try to Practice as much as you can the fast the more you practice the faster you get and the faster You get the quicker it becomes to write each pill paragraph and it becomes more realistic To do four pill paragraphs plus intro and conclusion within the time Conclusion is simply just restating and just reusing and recycling the words from the question. Okay Now with the introduction you're not introducing any bits from the passage. Okay, we're not going to use that in our introduction However, what I would suggest is before you dive into answering the question pick out the four things You're going to talk about in your point. Okay This idea that echoes is right to panic and the monsters terrifying There's two elements of that you can focus on Some of your pill paragraphs talking about why echoes is right to panic But then of course some of your pill paragraphs can also relate to how the monsters terrifying a little bit kind of like the Paragraphs you did for question number two where the monster. How is it portrayed? All right? So I would make it a balance of language and structure points. Okay, remember language is words things that nouns verbs Adjectives similes metaphors and so on Structure is sentence types interesting punctuation repetition, you know beginning middle-on-end. Okay, all that is structure So let's go back to this. Okay, how the evidence I'm going to pick out the evidence where I'm thinking about the impressions of echoes And I will really may need to be honest focus on just the highlighted bits. Okay, so the first bit I would suggest is I'll skip when Travis tells him to shut up because that doesn't necessarily support the idea that of course is right to panic In fact, actually Travis is punishing him. Okay. Now here perhaps the the way the Tyrannosaurus is portrayed as a tyrant lizard almost like an overgrown lizard that does show that the monster is quite terrifying so I would probably select that and This really powerful simile Yeah, so tyrant lizard So the blizzard is this is a metaphor and of course also the adjective armored Yeah, so what this adjective does Is it shows just how well-protected this monster is and this creature and then I would also actually Pick this simple sentence out as well. Okay, so that's a structural point It's a simple sentence And of course, this is just showing how this is creating a lot of build up the way it breeds out And it's almost like this wave of smell and it's a stench because it stinks like raw flesh Okay, so I'll probably use these two for the creature. Okay, so I'd pick this for one point and then this for another probably and then Hair where echoes is speaking. He uses rule of three good guides good safari good safaris good safety Okay, so this is rule of three showing his panicked and I would say actually to be honest I do feel like he has lost faith in Travis his guide because Travis doesn't is disregarding how he feels Okay, so he is kind of right to panic because his fears are being ignored and we can see that he feels a great deal of uncertainty Seeing this creature. All right. All right, so I'll probably select that and then also I might kind of skip a few lines and Going to hair where the monster is described but also even the way equals takes a few steps back blinking shuffling Okay, now hair the listing of These verbs So this is soliciting especially that's a structural technique and of course this Sentence is a complex sentence All right, and again here this shows that equals is panicking and he's right to panic, okay? He literally he feels like the life isn't a great deal of danger now I'm gonna see if there's any interesting element which I haven't used okay, so here perhaps The idea that it was going to crush them like berries, okay showing just how tiny they are Again, this is an interesting simile all of these elements. We don't have to use all of them. Okay, however, it's always good to try to Pick out interesting elements that you can then use as you're writing and actually just slightly above here I'd forgotten to highlight this Interesting simile describing the rifles how minuscule how tiny the rifles look in contrast this great big reptile Okay, they're literally overpowered and the final thing perhaps is this idea that It's it's constantly the repetition of alter the word lizard. Okay, so lizard is repeated as well Okay, so there's lots you can use here. You've got the simile like a toy gun You have the simile like a thousand green coins adjective armored the metaphor tyrant lizard It excelled as a simple sentence rule of three here We've got the complex sentence here as well as the repetition of the word lizard and simile lots and lots to use Okay, so now I've selected all my bits of evidence. What I'm gonna do is write out my introduction So I'm gonna begin by writing out the introduction and then afterwards I'm gonna walk you through how to write the introduction and it's really really simple use a bit of the question Affirm and assert that you do agree with the statement and then dive straight into it. Okay Right, so let's quickly go over my introduction I'm gonna use elements from the student statement You're gonna see okay to help and then basically use words from the student statement say that the writers effectively use language and structure techniques to do so and then just basically say that and try to write in third person rather than I say I agree. We can agree or it can be accepted and so on. Okay, so let's read through the introduction really quickly This part of the story which reaches a dramatic climax does indeed show that equals is right to panic So I'm highlighting this idea that equals is right to panic. I am showing that I already agree indirectly Okay, the right has effectively used a range of language and structure techniques I'm highlighting that I'm going to talk about these to portray the monster as terrifying linking it back to the student statement And it can be accepted that equals is right to panic. So I'm going to read the introduction one last time This part of the story which reaches a dramatic climax does indeed show that equals is right to panic The writers effectively used a range of language and structure techniques to portray the monster as terrifying and it can be accepted That equals is right to panic. So that's my introduction. I've basically borrowed language from the student I've said that I agree but in indirect way. Okay, try to avoid using I and first-person perspective Always say it can be accepted because you're including yourself in that Acceptance, okay This is the story does indeed show this that's your way of saying yep, I agree Okay, so that's really it for the introduction as I mentioned you then want to write four pill paragraphs Okay, so I'm gonna begin my first pill paragraph and I'm actually gonna begin with this simile All right, so my first pill paragraph is going to be to do with this language technique and this language device. All right So I'm gonna write out my first pill paragraph and then I'll walk you through it afterwards Right, let's go over my first pill paragraph remember pill is point evidence explanation and link now I'm gonna begin by reading through the point Firstly, we realize that equals is right to panic when they encountered the tyrannosaurus rex brackets t-rex as equals realizes Just how gargantuan it is in contrast to the men So here as you can see I've used elements from the question to show and to highlight to the examiner that I'm answering The question I've also stated tyrannosaurus rex in full, but then I've put it in brackets Usually I don't suggest using brackets all the time However, if you have a long sentence or a long word like this, of course putting in brackets First spelling it out always make sure you spell it out once then put it in brackets to highlight to the examiner Okay, this is quite long. I'm gonna put in brackets and then shorten it Okay, and then you can use the abbreviation going back to this as you can see I've then stated that you know This t-rex is really gargantuan in contrast to the men. Okay, so obviously here I'm supporting this idea that equals is right to panic and the monster is huge in comparison to them So that's the point. Let's look at the evidence Eccles is gun seems like an Adequate play thing as it looks like a toy gun in his hands. Okay, so this is my evidence Exes Eccles is gun seems like an inadequate like a useless play thing like a Something he uses a game as it looks speech marks like a toy gun close speech marks in his hands So I've used the simile from the insert. Okay Now that's my evidence and as you can see within my evidence I've embedded my quotation meaning if we took out the speech marks is still flows as part of this statement Okay, so this is my evidence. Now. Let's look at the explanation the writer Successfully uses this simile to show just how minuscule how tiny the men are and how pointless the guns seem The adjective toy Adds a sense of dark humor as we can see equals feels powerless to defend himself against the monster So that's my explanation I've talked about simile language technique and I've also done some word-level analysis talking about the adjective and then highlighting the toy Element okay, then I've said and I've explained why Eccles is right to panic now. Let's look at my link back to the question Hence equals is right to panic because the monster is depicted as gigantic and terrifying It's sheer size will protect it against the guns is minute bullets minute in it again another small another Synonym for small. Okay. Here's you can see hopefully you can see I'm using ambitious vocabulary. That's really important Okay, make sure you use advanced ambitious vocabulary in your writing So as you can see here, I've linked it back to the question the idea within the key words of the question That equals is right to panic. Okay, so this idea of panicking and the monster is gigantic and terrifying Okay, linking it back to the students statement All right, so that's my first pill paragraph and I've made a language point Okay, so I still have three more pill paragraphs I need to make just one other language point But then also balance it off with the structure points before I conclude So I'm gonna write out my second pill paragraph and then walk you through it afterwards Now in terms of this second pill paragraph as you can see with the first point I started off with firstly therefore It's always good to always start off your paragraphs with firstly secondly thirdly and fourthly Okay, so I'm gonna read through the opening peel point. Okay, so this is my point Secondly, the extra reveals just how terrifying the t-rex is as it is depicted as monstrous and menacing and its defenses outweigh the men Okay, so here. This is the second reason I give showing that the Tyronosaurus is way better defended than these men Okay, so that's my second opening point highlighting and supporting the idea that echoes is right to panic Let's look at my evidence The Tyrant Lizard had armored flesh as it approached them it excelled Okay, so here I've got three separate bits of evidence. So you've got Tyrant Lizard That's my first bit armored flesh That's my second bit and then the full simple sentence it excelled. Okay, and I'm showing how it's approaching them So as you can see here, I've embedded my quotation. Let's look at the explanation The author's use of the metaphor Tyrant Lizard coupled with the simple sentence it excelled Illustrates just how intimidating and petrifying the monster is It also seems indestructible as the adjective armored reveals that it is well protected and its skin is Impenetrable. Okay, so as you can see here in my explanation I've actually coupled a language point, which is to do with the metaphor with a structure point Which is simple sentence. Okay to make sure that I've got both my language and structure covered But equally I've done some wide-level analysis here talking about the adjective and talking about how Equals is right to panic because the monster literally looks like it's so well protected and it's like really scary, right? So that's my explanation. Now. Let's look at the link back to the question Therefore equals is right to panic as the monster approaches them in an Intimidating manner as it breathes in them. Moreover, its skin seems hard and difficult to slice through Thus the guns are a poor match against the monster. So now here I've linked it back to the question this idea that the monster is terrifying It literally is totally outweighing them physically literally physically outweighing them, right? So the men are totally outmatched and these guns literally they can't get through the skin Okay, so again once more this pill paragraph supports the points and I'm still using keywords from the question All right, and also bear in mind that whilst my first pill paragraph looks at language This one has both language and structures now. I've got another language point, but also most importantly I've also added a structure point. So I'm going to move on to the third pill paragraph again I'm going to write it out and then walk you through it afterwards Right, so let's look at my third pill paragraph. Okay again starting off with my point Thirdly equals seems extremely petrified and his fears are not eased by his tour guide Travis dismisses his panic which makes him feel little faith in the tour guide company Thus we can see he is right to panic as a good tour guide would have eased his fears. That's my opening point Okay, so I'm saying that literally even the way that Travis the tour guide treated them It seems like you know, he just doesn't really care and actually a really good tour guide company would have eased them guys We have you know, don't worry to worry this monster. We know how to do it Okay, and Eccles therefore is right to panic. Okay, so that's the point I'm making now. Let's look at my evidence Eccles says that in previous trips he had good guides good safaris and safety yet Travis had dismissed him already By telling him to shut up now here my evidence as you can see I've got his what Eccles says so speech marks good guides good safaris and safety But also I've juxtaposed it with slightly earlier when Travis has told him and I put the quote to shut up Okay, so that is my evidence and as you can see again, I have embedded my creations and let's look at my explanation The rule of three when Eccles refers to guides safaris and safety show he is right to panic as this tour guide on this trip underestimated and Estimated the threat of this T-rex The alliteration and good guides reveal Eccles is upset that his tour guide does not even try to reassure him So here as you can see I've Restated the quotations guides safaris and safety, but also are focused in on alliteration, which is good guides Okay, and again, I'm explaining why Eccles is right to panic, you know, maybe Travis is underestimating this threat Okay, so that's the explanation and let's look at how I link it back to the question Hence Eccles is right to panic as it seems his tour guide Travis is incredibly dismissive of the threat the monster poses Eccles does not feel like this safari company accurately judged him and judge this threat and he's right to feel petrified So here I've linked it back to the question why Eccles is right and why he's justified in panicking whether they're gonna get out of this alive Maybe Travis is underestimating this threat. So as you can see here in my third pill paragraph I made a mainly language point Okay, I've talked about alliteration. I've talked about rule of three Therefore my final pill paragraph will have to be about structure again I'm gonna write it out and then walk you through it afterwards Right, so let's look at my final pill paragraph and as you can see here I've got my trusty notepad because I have overgone the space. Okay, there's no more writing So of course if you write more than the pages which are available Literally, all you just need to do is raise your hand and then you're always gonna be given extra paper So let's start by looking at my point Finally, we can see that Eccles is right to panic as the monster seems terrifying The T-Rex is described as excessively gigantic and it seems like it can easily crush the men in one fell swoop So here in my point I'm basically saying that the T-Rex is huge and it can easily kill it can crush these men So that's the point that I'm making and of course again here I'm talking about how it's Eccles right to panic the monster is terrifying I keep on restating the key words in the question I'm showing the examiner that I'm answering So now let's look at my evidence We learned that speech marks the monster twitched ellipses to fondle at the men ellipses to crush them like berries ellipses Okay, so I have condensed this really long sentence here Okay, this is between line 61 61 to 63 I've condensed that or even 62 even but I've condensed that and used ellipses a lot Okay So I've embedded my quotation Now let's look at my explanation The author uses this complex sentence to portray just how ravenously hungry the T-Rex is and how easily it can eat the men The noun berries shows how tiny and delicious the men look in the monster's eyes We can see that in contrast to the men the T-Rex is humongous and it can easily kill the men Okay, so that's my explanation I've talked about complex sentence a structure point But also I have made a little language point talking about the noun berries showing how just yummy and delectable these men look in the monster's eyes And of course I'm still contrasting how huge this creature is in contrast to these little tiny men Okay, now here's my link Therefore echoes is right to panic as not only is the monster huge but it is hungry Hence it can easily overpower and devour the men eat devour Okay, so that's the link back to the question and that's my fourth and final pill paragraph But I'm not done because there needs to be a conclusion. Okay, so if you remember we had the introduction here Okay, so you want to always open the point with the Essay really well, okay So this information but then to be honest your conclusion can literally just borrow from the introduction Okay, so if you remember open with a brief introduction restating the keywords and the question and so on and then conclusion Just literally use the same language not word for word but similar language for your conclusion Okay, so again, I'm going to write my conclusion and then walk you through it Right, so let's read through the conclusion In conclusion, it is clear that when the men meet the monster echoes is right to panic The t-rex is large menacing and threatening and the men's guns seem inadequate to deal with it The authors effectively use a range of language and structure techniques to show that echoes is right to panic As the monster is terrifying as you can see here in my conclusion I've Recycled these keywords. Okay, because I'm showing the examiner always that I'm answering the question I understand what I need to do And I'm mentioning this I did that echoes right to panic the monster is terrifying And hopefully you can also spot from both introduction and conclusion. I've never at any point said I think this I agree I have Indirectly agreed. I've indirectly stated that yes, we can agree this. Okay, so Remember that if you say, you know, it is indeed Evident that, you know, and then you support it echoes is right to panic. That's another way of saying yes I agree. Okay, so you don't have to always say I in fact It's a bit more of a sophisticated way of agreeing a sophisticated way of writing when you try not to use first person Instead of saying I think this I agree do it indirectly. Okay, so that's really it when it comes to question number four Remember, you want to start with an introduction You want to write four pill paragraphs and then a conclusion But to be honest the conclusion and the introduction you're not adding any evidence from the intro conclusion You're just briefly summarizing it you can borrow language from both and really that's it And of course try to make sure you do this within 20 minutes. Remember practice makes perfect So the more you practice these questions the quicker you become and the easier this becomes. All right, so that's it And thank you so much for listening