 Alrighty, let's play this in full first what is it you want Barry? What do you want? You you want the moon? Just say the word and I'll throw a lasso around and pull it down Alright, let's check this out Okay, so I zoomed in a little bit because you gave me a super white screen version and I need to be able to see stuff. So I just zoomed in. It's kind of I think pretty much the same Framing that we have before so since this is More advanced. I'm going to some nitty gritty details What is it you want Barry? And I think the main impression is that the The lip sync and the jaw action could just be pushed a bit more. I think other than that if you watch this What is it you want Barry? What do you want? You you want the moon? I think this We could ease into this a bit more overshoot a tiny bit more not through here. I see stuff going on Coming back, but it's the arm controller that I would once See the couple of things here as you go out Through here now should start from the beginning what this is the one that that stood out is that you it seems like you have An icky arm so you're here and then it goes out towards us Nine in this could be fk as well as matter, but at this point that hand comes towards us So there's not that much of a perspective change You don't quite know what's going on and then suddenly you have this move That seems to be massive on the linear key as opposed to a little bit of an ease out Telegraph are we going? And then you have those two big moves and after that you can see how that wrist is pretty much in the same spot And it comes out towards us Now there's still movement in here. There's still movement in here But with that wrist going from Stationary here to popping over two frames and then staying here that seems a bit harsh to me at the moon So a little bit more Visually in screen space going down for an ease in and he's out of that pose there just a bit more I Think will work. The first impression was that was a bit too snappy You want the moon? Just a bit and it's only just in this area because there's some other stuff that fills Squish here and nice and you're reshooting and I can see it in the head here, too That all works. It was just that moment. I felt a bit weird, but then and this goes back into some IK stuff I'll get to the technical things a bit later, but then when I look at the lip-sync just say the word now Just say the word now. It seems very slow and a bit off and a bit too soft Just say the say the word just say the word now. Just say the word now I'm not seeing how you do hold on. Sometimes the scrubbing is not super great, but That's it not so great, but sometimes you know depending on the program and computer and delays and stuff It's always kind of like a frame or two. You get laid or something. So I'm always a bit worried about Lip-sync Critiques here, but it feels like say the word needs to be a bit more distinct Just say the word just say the word because he's you know, it's pretty upset there Just say the word and I don't feel like you're saying the word especially word say the word now throw a lasso And a throw a lasso now throw a lasso Now throw a lasso. I see this one like he's going rare rare a Was supposed to throw a lasso a lasso for me lasso I go out on my corners lasso Lasso around and pull it down Lasso around and pull it down and then the pole even though we have a big move this way With that and the head and everything. I think I would just push the Pull and pull it down The pull happens during this I wonder if you could push where you have a little bit of up or Put it down with the head or a bit of a sideways with the sideways tilt like a little bit in wine a little bit in Whatever your tations are so it seems like X but a little bit of an accident on pole and pull it down And then pull it down Pull it down. The down is on that curve. We're just good It just seems soft there and even at the beginning. What is it you want Barry? What is it you want? What is it you want? What is it you want Barry? You want Barry? Even though Barry has a head down. It just seems all in One axis out to make this a bit more complex. What is it you? What is it you want? What is it you even though though? What is it? I feel like we could have a bit more of a sideways or a strong or maybe the jaw comes out a bit to the side with A slight curve. I feel like it's a bit harsher. What is it you want, Barry? It is a bit of movement in the Y, but then it's just mostly up and down. There's a little bit there But it just feels like there's a Visual just up and down on Barry Barry Barry like a little bit of a curvature in there. Barry What do you want? This is okay because here the voice goes down. What do you want? I don't mind this one. What do you want? What do you want? But even then what do you want to be? What do you want with a little bit of a sideways? Again, if you track the nose, I'm not saying the nose has to do all those crazy curvatures But it's a bit more a bit more complexity instead of down a bit of a down over Just a bit. You can always go big and then scale it down later. What do you want? You want the moon? Yeah, here we go back to the The snappiness and it's mostly when you have That wrist it kind of stays locked through there. I know it goes up a bit But it feels locked because A because you have so much elbow movement And then we lock but then this continues pretty big. It seems like you want to ease into that a bit more You you want to move those other things don't snap as much as it seems like that arm just kind of stands out a bit And how that elbow really snaps up there. You you want the moon? You you want the moon? To me, I would snap less here and have more in the chest and the head because he goes To me is that you is kind of a head bob a little bit of a head a chest Um accent there because of this the stuttering and him finding the words you you want the moon Or almost feel like you want to see and feel this more in here Versus here you want the moon and that's fine except what I mentioned here in the wrist But if you go back to the beginning Things that would pay attention to is not that we're getting into all those details. It's just finger um Finger transitions and some arcs and things so what is it you want? Like for instance, how this remote goes up it goes up and I can you can track that tip here It seems like it just goes up like this holds and it goes back down. So it's a little bit of a wider arc and then kind of down like that What is it you want and I think you can go always, you know, what you want Like, you know, you have a little bit of an up over shoe and then back down There's a little bit more again subtle, but a bit more in your arcs and it's a bit more flourish And it's tiny. It just seems like it goes up holds and down and I feel like you want to go You know, what is it? What does it want a little bit of almost moving hold into a curvature like this and a drop? So just tiny little details. What is it you want? Also, he tenses up a little bit, right? What is it that you want? So I would have you could have that thumb a bit more relaxed. Maybe one finger a bit higher What is and what is that you want? You can tighten these a bit more so that thumb could be a bit tighter. So a bit of a finger change And then here too because as you go up now Apps will tighten muscles will fire here Everything will fire and he's going to change his His position and I would again maybe change the grip a tiny bit a bit of a finger change there And how he gets up is fine. I see a little bit of a Bit of a wiggle there a bit too much Softened though that knee a bit On that turn you could go a little bit pivoting off of here with a little bit of a roll on the side of that shoe there And even this as you go down and then he finishes the lean it could pivot off of here with This going a bit to here a little bit of an adjustment in the foot What do you want? You and especially here now that he has that big move And we see the fingers out like this like two frames earlier. I would I would tighten them a bit more Into this you want the moon? And then I don't know if you can fit it was it's a fast But even this would have a bit of a change of definitely a grip a stronger grip here. Was he so mad now? just And then he can relax again. I like that you have this here you can say the Seems like you have it a little bit on the remote which is cool Just say the word and I'll throw a lasso around and Say the word and I'll throw a lasso around and pull it down that handoff could also have a bit of a A change in the fingers right before that, you know, the pinky could come out maybe first That gripping could have this maybe the index is out and then index finishes that grip Something that's a playing going by her and if you hear this I even this could have a bit of a grip change towards the ends. Watch out. There's intersections through there That's fine there There's a little stuff like that like I said on the feet and on the on the fingers What is it you want back? So arcs there You might want a little bit. I don't know if it's going to be too much But a little bit of movement in that chest here I don't know if you want to rotate is in y if you have kind of controllers But then she pushing the shoulders shoulders a bit more, but I see stuff here You know where I see in the shoulder going down a bit But then and I was kind of a stickler when an arm moves that it should fan out that influence should Fan out in terms of how that arm is going to affect the rest And I think a little bit of a visual change of that that chest muscle right there Back a bit Could be interesting move it in y you can try it out just a bit more All right, it seems like that elbow stays put there because he's pushing off a bit that means he's going to be Tensing there You could change the fingers a little bit if I look at this hand the fingers don't really move at all So a little bit of a post change to indicate The tension Be cool. What does it you want Barry? What do you want you you want the moon? Especially on this whoop, then I would also have a bit of a again a rotation pivoting off of here Both of these guys You have the foot going back that works, but on something like this it feels like a very straight line so during this I thought you want a crazy arc, but just a little bit of an arc But also a change in rotation so that foot can come back And potentially go a bit more in and then on this go a bit more in again Not that you want them parallel, but you know, there's also something about this being foot out slightly relax And then as you go in into like what you can bring in these knees a little bit and defeat a bit straighter Just so that everything is a bit straighter a bit more tense and then when you go back into this You would relax, you know on all of this you might have a little foot change But you have a foot change here again and at least here you can see again I just goes back in a straight line This goes forward in the straight line This will be your opportunity for a little bit of a sideways roll a change in rotation so that we're back to Spread out pose meaning a bit more relaxed So I would play around with that a bit more Here's the other is the bigger thing here that you can see this how the wrist kind of goes only in this direction Nothing else, but I see a lot of movement in that elbow the elbow will go up to me That wrist will come down a bit. This seems like an iK arm And there's something more Here you can see this here how the chest goes back But that move is pretty much in this line only and you can see how that arm goes from a bends To a much bigger Straightening but if that happens if you look at the alignment of forearm and wrist if you go back It's always kind of the same Not that you have to be fully fk and have that wrist like this, but I would still rotate that wrist down a bit So that there's an influence of that arm straightening otherwise again It looks like this dislocated iK arm the word and I'll throw a lasso around and pull it down I think I'll leave it At that now you might even have a little bit of asymmetry in your eyebrows. Come on, Barry An overall facial symmetry would be good. What? Eyebrows could have maybe a frame or two of an ease in the kind of linear pop into the face Stay put there. What? And even if you if you have that frown Going down it's quite a bit you can even super subtly Bring that head down maybe tensing up the the face a bit more the lips together You want the moon? Just say the word and I'll And again some asymmetry as you go back potentially in You know that overall mouth could be maybe a bit more to the side just a little bit again Exaggerating here, but a bit more asymmetry word and I'll throw a lasso around and pull it down Now throw a lasso Yeah, the big thing that was also lasso like I said before where the words don't really say lasso But I also imagine it goes lasso like the heck can go up a bit and a bit down on the o I think what I would do is really exaggerate and and do your head accents according to the sounds And then it will sound look a bit too on the nose where the head is really mimicking each word of your sounds But then you can start scaling down and kind of deciding when do I want to keep bigger assets Assets accents, but right now it just seems all a bit too soft All right, I'm gonna leave it at that some picky picky notes Because the shot is getting better better and better. Um, and I'm sure you can handle it because you're a good animator I don't have I don't have any problems giving you a detailed note. So I'll leave it at that. Thank you All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you