 All righty, let's play this in full first I know, I was so surprised too They like you and... That's such a good line They like you and they would... I would say, and I was bringing on this sound here I think I would concentrate on the body first before we're going into the lip sync Really? It has the extremes already in there I think that's a definitely good start My main reaction is that they're both competing for attention So if I start the shot I'm looking over here Right off the bat They're not moving, right? I like the posing, right? She has a bit more of a serious and concerned about her future look to it I like that she's slightly tilted and I definitely like this pose Shoulders up, she has a lot more tens head down It's almost like her hair wants to hide the face Oh no! And then how she opens up That's cool, shoulders go down And then how she goes back I think you might even... When she goes... She's still tense, right? She goes, really? I think on that... I see you're having your shoulders going back there But I wonder if it would be something where you can push this I'm not sure if you can go higher with this But when she goes like this Is it such a happiness move there that I would start to lower the shoulders And then when she goes back there either you bring them back up Or maybe you have a bit of a twist in the body And that's why also the shoulders come up again But I was tempted to say at first to bring them down here as well But I can see how he would go Like it's a bit of like So to me then I would maybe emphasize one shoulder and turn the chest around to... Just to give it... That sounds weird to give a reason for the shoulders to go up But I'm trying to avoid also a lot of up and down on the shoulders But to me it seems like she has tension tension, tension And that's already a bit of a release because she's listening And that... I can see the idea of of that or that So to me personally I think at least it would be worth to try to see to get that progression of You know it's tense Everything is tense And releases, releases, releases Until here where it's really down And then you go back into That way you have a bit more contrast of down, down, up And then down again Question for you I will probably This might be legal in terms of where she looks even though watch out I would look a bit lower We could potentially cheat it and have her only look this far Not that it's a shock killer But my question to you is that when she looks over Is she completely oblivious that she's not happy Would you consider when she looks over to have a little bit of a Hey, hey Just a moment of oh no Now she's mad And you can see that in the profile when she comes back there She has kind of a forced smile with a little eye dart this way and then back to her Just wondering Again, not that the shot doesn't work like this, I'm just throwing it out there If she's happy and goes hey Oh, like that She looks back and then back there So she wants to be happy but realizes oh no She's not exactly the happy one at this point Now in terms of eye direction we're saying competing So right off the bat my eye goes here because she moves the most And then we go back Do you want Again, it works because you have a clear back and forth at the beginning But my question is would it be cleaner to just focus on her where we don't think that they're talking about her Unless that's what you want, unless as an audience we're not quite sure yet who who they're talking to And then the they is like they draw on anticipation like what could they, what like you and that's the reveal I mean I can see that too, throwing it out there that could be something Now, now I'm invested Now I know it's her and now I want to see her reaction That's already a bit much That head move just makes me look at her and then we look back at her and right when you go back here she has that move in the shoulder head So to me it's just a bit much Again, it's not a massive shock killer but I wonder if we just keep it all really subtle Let's put it this way What if you start like this, right and then they like you they like you when you hear that she actually does this move meaning that they both look this way they like you head turn so that she leads the audience's eye to her which then leads to this reaction and then you already have that nice look in there This is just very attention grabbing but let's see then what about if during they since the audio is not giving us new information then she can do this right she leads over she has that reaction and they because now she's not saying much and we saw her reaction then she does her like so we look to her and then would like to she has that reaction which means we go back to her because she draws the attention and then I would nix this here because it's too competing there so then we have all this we look at her and now to cut the attention out then this happens and then the rest I think is fine again subjective thoughts and I know this might be a bit destructive and you might have to move things around but as always I give my my honest opinion doesn't mean that they're right but that's all that's the main thing is like how could we we need to restructure a little bit where the focus is and so we can appreciate both performances because that's my main concern I like them both I'm concerned that we miss things or that we just I won't point out we're not quite sure where to look that's that I think that would be the end of that it's really nice work so I'm curious what your thoughts are so let me know email me let's have a plan alright thank you alright there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome alright thank you