 Alrighty, new shot here with sound towards the middle. Let's play this first So I think the moment this audio starts so we're halfway I think that works. That's definitely a bit of a Little attitude there in the neck and with that. That's a good accent now Apart from that, I would say I would personally start turning down The amount of detail I'm all for sets and props and you know kinds of things But there's just a lot of edges. I like that you have leading lines and lines pointing You know some degree towards the character But it's just a lot of black a lot of hard edges a lot of Easy stuff that gets a bit harsh. You know just kind of simplify that stuff a little bit There's been your character here and he got whoa, it is me shaking things non-descript stuff here with all the The thick frames. I was just kind of simplifying smooth out just that look Now if you listen to the audio here There's a fairly, you know harsh attitude in there, but if you watch the first half It's just not quite there. Especially once she starts If you take this sound off, it's more like, yeah, I don't know. I know did I do I like this? This is for the broadest this one to get definitely bigger, but especially that first half Could this be I don't know. I don't know that I do this. I can't remember. Are you stupid? I don't feel stupid like you know, they could be it feels fairly soft and especially how you get into the shot That that amount of energy is just not visible. So to me, but the biggest common is to really Just really make sure that the visual intensity matches the audio intensity if that makes sense So then my question is what do you want to show? Why do we need almost the first half to be silent? to get into this This could be something where She could have imagine this is the back of her head And she has her hand here and it's kind of Throws that arm turns around. Oh, that's me throwing her all my face turns around And that turn that 180 turn Gives you that energy of I Think I was stupid will like to have that like that with my recommendation You want to do something where why do we have that much at the beginning? Do you want to show something else that brings up the energy could be something more physical? She could walk into frame It doesn't have to be, you know, just static in that area as we scrub. She's always in that box It could be something a bit more now if you just use Just that short amount and if I bring this up you can see When it's really here like literally just the second half if you just have that it could be okay You just being here, but I mean you can also then explore That she's a bit, you know actually standing here and when she goes I didn't come in from stupidsville Stupidsville that could be that attitude but also with a step forward so that her head goes from this To this she gets closer. I mean she invades the space Not that she has to do like a point and point on his shoulder like and tap him all that stuff But it could just be more aggressive so the aggressiveness is not just stuck in here But use that in space and you get closer in his you know personal space and Challenge the character more that way So for me it'd be stuff like that think about what you want to do at the beginning Is there something where you want to push the actions a bit more with something at the beginning like I said coming closer here like I said But I get I don't want to dictate so let me know let's discuss this these are my thoughts on that from what's there The other thing is that this Doesn't quite match the intensity if I just look at the eyes Right, so I mean I'm gonna do this here It's all very quiet stick the sound off and you just you never quite get that intensity you definitely have it in the speed of the head And with that with that Right there other than that. It is it doesn't quite match. So the biggest thing to me is facially and Such a general attitude especially the first half with that intensity is just not there really listen to that audio and Let's go back here What I like about your About this is that if you listen to the audio I don't go from stupid will All that's nice boss. You want to think about that? Like you want that also to be a bit with her head and the body which you start having in there But again if you do something at the beginning you might have to think about How you lead into that by then you ramp up into that energy I'm gonna do a stupid for last night's bus You know like just maybe potentially broader, but that's a question for you how stylized and brought you want to go with this So I have half comments have questions, and I'm gonna go leave it at that. Thank you All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you