 Alright, so here we have a sequence with sounds play this your problem is you've got too much ambition. I have a conscience Your conscience is too ambitious So watching this I think we could potentially extend the length of the shot a bit To make it clear as to who is talking. I know this is just the layout pass. There's no animation in there But my concern is that Your problem is you've got to at least he is moving an arm and he's gonna have something to say so we know Okay, he's the one talking you've got to but then as we are trying to concentrate And you kind of look at what he's saying. He has a turn while this guy sits down To lay down and then we are compositionally very low in frame with all the characters in here. I know it's This here kind of okay, you would have to have him Maybe a bit higher Keep that balance and I think instead of sitting all the way down It could be something in between Where he's you know, he's about to sit down and it just has that initial indication of movement And then if you just kind of cut to this Although probably have him somewhere around here ambition into this Now shot wise your problem is you've got too much ambition. I have a conscience There's so much where I Want to listen to him your problem is you've got too much But like I said in its current form I'm suddenly looking at him much ambition and it feels like it's all about him So my question for you is like, where do you really want to have the focus? Is he just kind of there as Not as a background character and but is it just kind of there and we really want to look at him first But something else you could do is that your problem is you've got too much ambition And actually cuts, I know it's a bit maybe too Normal your problem is you've got too much ambition But just cut after ambition To this like do you need this to be so close to camera with that could it also work For him where actually you make him you bring him closer to camera So his head we don't do we need to see the rest of the body not really and he takes this down fine But imagine his head could also be here, right? That's my guy He's that big so he will always be in that third if you look at the rule of thirds And then with this character goes down and lays down. It's gonna be somewhat. Okay balance wise because that character is always here So your problem is you've got too much ambition. I have a Because you could also do is potentially What your problem is but don't move the book right imagine he's that big in frame Says all this so you're and while he says all that he's actually laying down If you want him to be a bigger focus you've got too much and And then imagine he is already laying down at the end of the shot Then he turns which ambition and then we cut to him already on there saying I have a conscience With a slight You know that's towards us with a slight lean over there. So we can really going Right to left so that he is left to right, but again, what is he doing here? He advances Do we need to be like to me it feels like that again? That head would be in its thirds instead of so low the low centers right now and if he comes closer To what you have here You know the heck would be even bigger We might cut off the forehead and that is really big and then that could still work You know a little bit of a camera move to reframe if you want, but that's kind of my current impression there I don't know if we need that much visual overlap in terms of characters doing something take book down turning Well, this character is doing all that stuff here Ambition and then the dialogue is still going on while this guy is doing this And then he says something Hold on let's see got too much ambition. I have a conch. It's very short there ambition It's almost like you could cut this guy's line and then artificially at a second of silence until This guy talks. It's almost like you have his full line in this shot Like I said a bit bigger and then you can get a bit more wiggle room to time things around where he might say all This your problems you've got too much ambition Where he could say your problem is that and he says all of this while turning and Then he has you know the head of it this this big here He's not exact looking at him But visually it's it's indicated that he is kind of looking almost over his shoulder a little bit and Then since you add a bit of a pause that's when he could Lay down because if you if he starts talking and turning and he's not moving. He's just in his whatever pose All the folks will be on him. We understand everything he says what he's doing at the moment He turns around and looks at the guy. It's guiding the audience again. Imagine. He's like this He's guiding the audience to him and now even though he's he's still talking We can now look at the character sitting down and Starting his move backwards and even completely laying down because you could add a couple seconds and then cut to him Saying the line like that. I have a conscience. I Know it takes out the urgency of that almost overlapping audio. I'm just throwing out ideas and I don't see Anything in your mail. It's just there. It's just layout of the animation Yeah, so I'm just I'm just throwing out some ideas and you can totally do whatever you want to do with it and To me if the whole shot would start here and end up You know, maybe bigger frame like I said like with a bit of reframe feels more comfortable then So below the center line with the eyes, there's so much upwards room here I'm always expecting something to come in so to me this would be like a reframe to something like that and Then as he talks it could still end like this right with this cut off like that and that's kind of that I don't know little Thoughts let me know email me. Let's let's talk about this as we're chatting my ideas. Of course That's not a that's not a submission. We can just talk about Shot composition or maybe you want to change the shot completely in terms of angles or whatever and let me know We know where you put the importance Do we really want to focus on him? Is he you want it like a B is he just kind of man And it's all about him just stuff like that for context. You can let me know. All right. Thanks All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want You can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way and like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you