 All right, let's play this in full. We will risk our lives blah blah blah. Okay done. I did my part cool We will risk so this is your spline version We will risk our lives blah blah blah. Okay done. We will risk. We will risk our lives seems a bit too conveniently Done with this leg and this is weird. No, but if you watch that leg here in that turn and we will risk Where it feels like she would take a step It's like she would be Stepping on this leg I mean you will know better, but it feels like this is the leg that is is moving up here so the hips would be a bit like this and then She moves this leg Back away from us to get into this position Give us a bit more weight on this leg and Then she brings over that leg, but this leg just kind of goes and stops Versus, you know potentially Imagine that leg goes maybe this leg would be down here and this leg goes maybe over and Then down to settle and lean on that leg potentially This just seems a bit too That's a convenient, but just kind of clean. We will risk our So I would just look out for that Adjusting there and because of that if you're doing this and the leg goes over over the leg and comes back down to settle You might also have a little bit of root over to the right and then back to the left. It's just a bit Oops, sorry We will risk our lives blah blah. Yeah, it just feels too clean as it feels like this is a pose pop next pose Into into what she's saying here. You can make this a bit more overlapping organic We will risk our lives blah blah blah. Okay done I did my part rest is cool though. If I look at I'm turned the sound off here Goes up you might want to go up It feels a little bit like you go up this way Versus a bit more of an arc. It's not so harsh And you can you can might even go like this with a bit of a hold, right? So if you go up, what's she doing and she goes back down since basically Feels like right now. She goes up stops goes over there Then kind of comes back down and you can go a bit more up like this in an arc, right? So it's not doesn't have that That type of feel it was over and it may be even like this we go like this and then down blah blah blah and then down It's a minor thing, but since we're now in spline mode. I want to look at arts and things That'd be nice, but I do like your settle And how it has a bit of a keep alive and the moves That's cool Usually gonna I usually go root first just kind of see where We can make sure that we can push some things that's gonna, you know, the effect the rest over here. So I think that's pretty good looking at The chess move on something like this where Not that it's a big move away behind her, but I wonder if on this move here We have a little bit of shoulder up here If there is all that movement of that arm if we could push the chest For a bit more of a wire rotation following that arm very subtle I'm talking subtle like stuff like you have in here where you can see how How there's a rotation in the pivot over here a little bit of move up or even if you come down here You have some good subtleties there and I think we can push that a bit more Just in the chest area through there So it doesn't feel so separate So I'm seeing this go up this go down this go over, but then nothing really here Besides, you know, they move over this way. There's there's stuff in it I'm saying there's nothing, but I feel like we could have a bit of a move in why That's all cool Rhythm is good. There's a slight feel through there Where this arm just feels like one piece like one unit Where you might want to go a bit more in your arcs With a potential move With the wrist up a bit that brings the bottle up a bit a little bit of a pinky out There's a little bit more detail on that moment Or you can even have you know a bit more pinky and then on that drop down the fingers might These two actually might not straighten out completely But be further out just on that drop and then go back into what you have here It's almost like a re-grab, but not quite just for a bit more of a flourish That lean is good. I feel the weight on that shoulder. That's great for this I'm gonna need some I'm just curious if this is too close to pose that she goes down and then You know slides Heads, you know, it's kind of feel like one two Three Okay, done. I did my part. Yeah, but it's in the audio kind of matches there. Okay done. I did my part Done I did my part Our lives blah blah blah. Okay done. I did my part Okay done. I did my part. I wonder if you could just loosen up the okay done I Think that sharpness is good on done, but I think you can have a sharpness on done how that is in the Facial performance there on that jaw But then instead of that long hold here continue to go down with the with the The neck so if you track the the chin Check goes up, which is nice and bam down and done and then it locks But imagine you're just softening that and it's almost like a moving hold down to then Flow into that move that you have here My part. I did my part. I did my part It's the lives blah blah blah. Okay done. I did my part It's really subtle just a little subtle. So it's not quite as boom That harsh stop Okay done. I did my part Okay done. I did my part Okay done. I did I'm really talking very subtle. So the thing that also happens here is that on your done You're also hitting those brows. Okay done It just has a slight feel of post-to-pose Even though this is overlapping and not happening at the same time Done. I did my part done. I did my part. I do like how you're dizzy be that shape here though I did my part I did my part and I think you can go I did my part. It's it's an extension of your mouth corners I did my eye I did my when you go out on the corner here. Hold on. This might not be super accurate, but I'm scrubbing here I think on my I would personally go out on my Extend those corners my par and then par you can go what you have here Mainly so that you have a bit more contrast in the shapes But then when you do that you reduce your jaw up and down by like 30% So what's happening now is you have a lot of chatter And it's also a lot of where the jaw goes down down up over one frame like if you hit a jaw There's a jaw direction change over one frame And it's almost multiple times there. It gets very chattery kind of the skeleton chatterbox done. I did my part This gets not so stroby, but I think I did my part We can play a lot of it in the shapes. I did my part and reduce the jaw just a bit. Okay done. I did my part Done. I did my part. The other thing that adds to that Done. I didn't that blockiness of plum plum is your your What's the word the blinks easing out of that, but it's these guys. It's like how you open up And it kind of stops as a watch out. It feels like you're you have a bit of a Freeze frame here that lid seems to be in the same spot over those two frames We'll pick a thing here, but delete this you can see here kind of stuck That screen left lid But I would ease into that a bit more if we can a frame or two and then when you close on that closing ease out of that more And then don't forget the squishiness in the lower lid And then when you open here instead of so big again ease out of that a bit more Into that ease into this with the head raise is nice, but I think all of this Having those turn the sound off again You got that head down lock and then you got your blinks that are a bit harsh and then you got your eyebrows And they come down all that gives a bit too much of a to me kind of a clunky post-to-post feel It's very subjective, but Because you have all that nice subtlety the head bobs the arcs are nice And again, I'm talking really really subtle because you do want contrast. You don't want this thing to constantly move And it's good to have a bit of a done doesn't have a bit of a sharp move I'm not I don't want to take that out, but it's really just sometimes even just one frame like one two three frames of Softness and easing ins and outs there here and there on parts There's some great detail on the fingers though as you transition into the whole The only other thing I would say the first thing that struck me so when I was watching this We will risk our lives blah blah blah cool. Okay done Just that moment I did my whole cool cool cool and then this that's the last thing that starts to feel too mechanical where Not that in sync, but there's something about this elbow and this coming up Mostly this being so isolated or I feel like not that she has to Bend herself all the way back Down this down right, but I think you know like 15% of that where when she does this Have maybe a bit of a adjustment me Maybe the chin goes forward and brings the lip over this a little bit of a head raise Maybe the head forward a little bit of chest movement here just something a bit more this that very end feels Too separate and this feels like a person pretending to drink Where I don't quite feel the connection on here and that she's actually about to you know Put liquid in here and drink That's the only thing it felt like if I turn this off again the sounds That's cool cool. Yeah nice like this arcs Nice all nice and then what's that? That's kind of how I ended the shot with hmm. That was weird. It's just this That in part Nice, but then of course you have the awesomeness of the cap going Oh, I love that stuff Do you know Now if I be picky because of all that momentum, I will go And on that turn it still keeps going this way and Even on this landing a little bit more so at the end it's about here. It's the only thing I would say It's it feels like it hits a wall or a magic magnet there and doesn't move Right there. I love the detail I'm a massive massive fan of stuff like that. I know it's silly because we should concentrate here But I love doing stuff like this But all I would do is keep going with that arc so that on this turn This imagine in a graphite it feels like you're going and it's this this harsh linear Thing we just stop and I would go and really slowly ease in where the the top is spinning That makes sense, right? So during all of this here spin spin spin spin spin drop and settle It still keeps translating with the very slow ease in to maybe here All right, that's it from me. Thank you All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you