 All right, play this in full first Still cracks me up every time. All right, I got a couple notes. I think this is all headed in the right direction the first thing on her And I can bring down the sound here. I think It's always something that felt a bit odd with the walk and I think to me it's just especially right through there It's a bit Poppy how that knee goes forward, but it's that immediate Bent leg where she's she's almost not squatty, but she's always in this Kind of a meek pose. Maybe that's also To me it was like once he berates her she could get into something where she's more, you know hunched over and Where you have it here and I know if that if you need that at the beginning, there's something where I would just try this Where you would have slightly straighter legs on that passing and don't bend so soon if that makes sense You'd stay on that on the straighter leg a bit longer to then get into this. That's like my main impression Especially here Like she suddenly has that dip in the root right there I'm kind of tweak personally. I would tweak that just a little bit more Watch out. You got a bit of a pop in here how you go from your foot roll to a straight watch that See that you kind of start sliding off with your foot and then suddenly pops into this So for polish since this is all looking really good You want to get into those really fine tuning polishy things. I think the eating is okay It's definitely push in terms of how high and low it goes, but I think how far away we are from our things Okay, the other thing on her is when she goes back It's a bit strong in terms of the stock. I like that you have a recalling and then come back But there's something where it's almost like I would ease into this a bit more So it's not such a strong rotation sudden stop. They really keep this forward move It just seems just a bit strong and forceful how she suddenly stops and this might be very subjective, but The rest is cool. I like that. She has a bit of a look down and it over. That's great The other thing I was thinking and I've seen it never occurred to me and so apologize if I never mentioned this There's something where when she looks at him He comes towards her so quickly and has that arm raise Like who knows how friendly they are. I'm not saying that she would expect him to punch her but it could have a little bit of Put that back where she has a little bit of a recoil and maybe a blink It's a little moment like what is he doing? Like why does he get so close actually since we're there? I will probably I never noticed this either since we're so sideways where we can see into this hole I think this feels a bit better I would stay within this angle closing up So don't see that hole in here and at least seeing more of the thumb Where he it's again, it feels like that's a fist that he's about to strike her I think if we are staying within this like I like this a lot. It's a nice change there We see still the thumb blocks out into a shape versus Hold there says a quick aside and never Look at that, but I think that's the main thing on her It's just that little walk especially this this feels like she's suddenly Stepping into a ditch and we're getting this quick dip and then that bend in the leg Then I think that move back is just a bit strong. Just a little one or two frame or two frames of Slowering slowing this down slower ring. It's gonna say This is cool. I love that. She has a dart. She follows him Then I feel like that might be really something to explore you don't have to do it I don't want to dictate acting choices, but it could get interesting that she's a bit more aware of this and maybe surprise that What he's gonna do with a little bit of recall maybe a blink or half blink I like there is just great for him something Watch out for this game for final things where when he goes back and Moves the leg over now the leg right through there as the the heel goes down. That's when it really starts to Settle on the ground where the the muscles can activate and push in a way this way for him to stop going this way Right, so I've got a big root movement over down here, and then we are what couple frames and immediately stops You know, this is a bit Ricky was I like the lean I like that. It's all like this, but either Take a stronger step and it might even move your it might even just help to bring out the shoe More like this so we're not straight on we have a little bit more of the heel if I can find a pose Really, it's also very very straight on but even that would help for contrast, right? We're straight on takes a step, but we're actually he's a bit more outwards Is that could also? Kind of give us a bit more almost the feel that it's more this way to push, but I was gonna say Maybe reduce Let's go back here No, I see I like the speed at which the root goes back I think what I'm reacting to is just that the foot comes down and right when the foot has all the strength to stop the root movement We're stopping right away, and it feels like we will continue for maybe five frames took over there But then I'm concerned that we're leaning too far already It could work If you're like this, and he has a bit more of a bend that could work Or my other thought would be to bring that leg a bit further back I'm exaggerating here, but it made me move out to shoot He might feel like almost a bit too V like this But it could also work in his favor like he's just strong You know V shape base there as like a mad guy So says the general thing you can add a few more frames and easy There's a bit more because imagine it's gonna take some time for the leg to finally push this way and Fit route to stop and turn Because you're not super cartoon your animation So I think this is still within the naturalistic feel of it and then Have it like that or Move the leg out a bit further But I would still give this a couple more frames It might even be a combination of these you might be okay with leaving the leg where it is I would still maybe move out the shoe a bit more for this kind of silhouette But give this a few more frames through in and come back Or you can do that and move the leg a bit further from of a triangle pose Maybe just turn that out there. The other thing is I think this is still a bit too floppy The amount of dragon and form but especially this coming up. I think you can Get to this and then stop a bit harsher See that it's just a bit soft and it's down and up So a lany made it's got really nice, you know triangle shapes all that stuff is great But I wonder if his whoa shrimp like the energy and tension that's in here It's a bit betrayed by that soft move Every time it's me up every time Yeah, the other thing is again would be just like I said with the hands and I think he's okay There's a slight I'm looking too high here So I would watch your eye line This could work But then we're really getting a bit high and that I Think you can go a bit lower with his eyes Think this works better It's a nice shape there good separation maybe a bit close for almost a bit of a tangent there I will probably stick within like that gap maybe a bit less But this is almost like is he not touching his nose or not You know either you have it under his nose and he's touching and it's the hand is on his face or Stick within like this range of negative space versus right there Rest is okay Happy super picky. I would try it might get a bit too much, but it's always worth it Try take just that one eye and without bit to the left. I don't want it to be wall lines But there's you know, you have to look at the mind of a negative space a white space You have here around this and how it's blocked by the nose. I know that's normal. It's probably all correct But sometimes it helps to just move it out a little bit to give this a bit more white here To match this without it looking wall lines and try this out It's kind of that little things here and there. It's so super close My main thing is this and then this is a bit soft. It's still it's a bit more subjective Him like her dip and this For me a bit more technical things That head thing is definitely subjective. I put it at the bottom of the list of notes and then this Hand pose I would definitely tweak But her reaction that again is very subjective I think it could be interesting for this where she almost thinks he's gonna do something to her and Then that's that all right super cool. I still love this whole sequence is great. That's it. Thanks All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want You can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you