 Quite a number of students have asked if it's possible to go over what a really well-crafted peel paragraph response would look like to an inspector calls past question response. And essentially what you guys have asked is to dissect what a perfect paragraph looks like when writing about one of the inspector calls characters. So what I decided to do is to answer what came up in the 2014 paper relating to Sheila's character and more specifically how her character changes and what I want to do is to really dissect within this lesson how to craft literally the perfect paragraph when it comes to writing about an inspector calls and writing about a character and what I want to show you is how you can put together all of those different components into a fairly straightforward peel paragraph to aim for your grade 8 and grade 9 answers. Okay so the question as I mentioned is taken from the 2014 exam and the question is how and why does Sheila change in an inspector calls. Now if I were to look at this question I would first begin by focusing in on the keywords. What are the most important aspects of this question and I would say the most important aspect of this question is Sheila changing. Of course you can say how she changes and why but most central to this question is the fact that Sheila transforms and I would argue from looking at the players a whole Sheila probably is a character that has the most dramatic transformation followed by Eric but I would argue that she does one that changes the most. Now as I mentioned when crafting a response to this question and this particular play I always stand by the peel paragraph structure I think it is really really strong really powerful and equally within a peel paragraph so point evidence explanation link you can still really coherent really put everything that you need including you know techniques context and discussions relevant to the question and still score those grade 8s and grade 9s okay let me show you how to do so. So as I mentioned I would suggest going for the peel point and the peel paragraph structure so as you can see here in blue this is the opening point that you can relate to how and why Sheila changes then in red this is the evidence you want to always make sure you embed the evidence and embedding simply means if you were to take out the quotation the speech marks the evidence still flows as part of the sentence this is in red then as you can see here the bulk of my writing is my explanation this is where I would argue the bulk of your marks within you know when you examine or your teachers looking at your response this is where these marks live okay this is where you start okay here's technique here's context here's even theme and this is why it's relevant to the question before as you can see at the bottom here in purple I've simply linked it back to the question and closed off my paragraph so let's begin with the peel point as to how you can discuss how and why Sheila changes so starting off with this point Sheila changes as the play progresses because at first she was naive about how challenging life was like for women like Eva Smith once she learns how appalling life was for working class women Sheila transforms her attitude and defends Eva Smith so that's my opening point what have I done within my opening point what I have done is firstly I have began by referring back to the question and I mentioned how she changes so she changes when the play progresses because she shifts from being really naive kind of like clueless flighty she doesn't really know you know how the world works and she goes from being naive to realizing how hard life is for women like Eva Smith who she had a hand in having fired from Millwoods but equally what I then do is develop this point just a little bit by explaining okay she also changes because she learns how appalling how terrible life was for working class women okay I would suggest when you're opening your opening point so this is the first part of your pill paragraph I will suggest go for two sentences the first sentence is addressing the question directly the second is just developing that a little bit and unpacking that that's exactly what I've done so that's my point okay that's the first step within my pure paragraph now I'm going to move on into my second step which is my evidence she admits I started it first bit of evidence and she's enraged at her family's dismissive attitude as they pretend nothing really happened ellipsis nothing to be sorry for so I've added two bits of evidence where I've included I started it this is how she says you know I totally take responsibility and also at the end she says nothing really happened nothing to be sorry for she's been really critical of her family now as I mentioned if I were to take out the speech marks here so in front of I started it and afterwards as well as nothing really happened the sentence will still flow quite seamlessly okay it will still make sense as part of the overall sentence this is what I mean by embedding quotation but also what I've done is I've given some really good quotations and picked out different parts of the play in order to kind of show a range in my evidence okay so that's the first E in my pure paragraph however the second E is even more important so let's have a look this is now your explanation where you go into analysis and this is also where you go into things like context or theme so let's have a look at the second E she dramatically changes as the repetition of the word nothing reveals her disgust that none of her family aside from Eric take responsibility for the treatment of Eva Smith contextually so now here I'm talking about context okay contextually Sheila was sharply criticizing how harshly upper-class people in Edwardian society treated working-class women her early naivety reveals the gulf the gap between upper class sheltered women like her and vulnerable working-class women like Eva she evidently transforms her attitude as she empathizes with her struggle so there's quite a lot that I have unpacked within my second E in my pure paragraph this is my explanation I have gone into language or rather structure analysis because I'm talking about repetition so I've talked about technique this is pre-ceased technique as a playwright I've also gone into context I've made it really clear okay so Sheila's change what she can text you trying to allude to what is previously contextually trying to allude to and then I've still made sure to illustrate how she was naive at the beginning versus how she shifts and she takes on responsibility and really fills empathy and pathos for Eva Smith who represents working-class women so let's have a quick look back at this explanation okay so as I mentioned I start off my first explanation sentence is basically mentioning technique okay so she dramatically changes as a repetition structure of the word nothing so I'm now going back to my quotation reveals her disgust that none of her family outside from Eric take responsibility for the treatment of Eva Smith that's my first sentence in my explanation okay I talk about technique however in my second sentence within my explanation and now tie it to context contextually Sheila was sharply criticizing how harshly upper-class people in a society treated working-class women so now I'm mentioning context I'm really making it explicit and making it known to my teacher and my examiner that I have a very strong awareness of context I know how this is relevant in terms of this juxtaposition between girls like Eva Smith and women like Eva Smith or working-class as opposed to upper-class and upper middle-class women like Sheila there was a massive gap in their experiences but then I don't stop there I then go into a little bit of detail to kind of explain it and to juxtapose how Sheila was like also before I then state her earlier naivety so this is Sheila reveals the gulf the gap between upper-class sheltered women like her and vulnerable working-class women like Eva again I'm showing that there's this massive divide but Sheila is now aware of it she wasn't aware of it before when she was naive when she was really aloof and she was kind of thinking that you know her head was up in the clouds now she understands it then I round off my explanation by stating she evidently transforms her attitude relating it back to her being changing as she empathizes with her struggles okay so as I stated you need to really pack a lot of this information in your explanation this is where the bulk of your marks are this is where your analysis goes in your context or you can substitute this contextual discussion for a theme discussion now this is my final L this is the link back to the question and this is how I round off my peel paragraph okay so the purple bit thus Sheila arguably experiences the most dramatic change she shifts from being aloof and flighty to seeking penance and accepting responsibility when you're aloof it means your head is up in the clouds when you're flighty you're kind of you know like really you don't think about really serious issues and serious things you just kind of think about very surface artificial and superficial things okay so I'm saying that Sheila has gone from being very surface superficial artificial and she shifts when she realizes how pulling life is for people like Eva Smith and now she becomes quite serious okay and she also you know develops empathy and pay thoughts for women like Eva Smith okay so going back to this literally all I've done is just make sure I've linked it back to the question this is my linking back and I'm basically saying that she arguably good terms to use the most dramatic change okay and she shifts from being aloof and flighty so this is how and why she changes to seeking penance seeking forgiveness and accepting full responsibility for her actions okay so that's really it when it comes to how to kind of craft a really really powerful and solid grade nine paragraph using the peel structure point evidence explanation link where you really add in techniques evidence and so on and you want to try and aim to do at least for these types of paragraphs in your essay so that's really it and thanks so much for listening