 Alrighty, let's play this in full first. There's sound I love you. I've loved you since I met you Cool actually listen to some of my headphones Could you this extremely picky and it's gonna be probably too much work. So you can Say what I'm gonna say it out loud. Anyway, could you I love you Guess you're doing all this time where they don't talk I it sounds like there is a piece of audio that you repeat it And I can hear like click link like link like link like link link link link link link that being said I would love for you to add this at the beginning Because there's silence and it's only kicks in this is so minor and just me and you probably not do it Well, but just something for so it doesn't feel so copy paste it But of course if you add this section that you did copy paste the beginning It's gonna just make it worse, but there's any way you can smooth it out I don't know or some add some ambient noise. There's something that is really just me This is so extremely subjective, but nevermind That being said, let me check it out here. So you have notes here I made the shot slightly longer to add more breathing room. All right, slow down actions and beats up until ending part All right, add a new hand pose when she places her hand on his All right, let's check this out. I love you. I Love you. I Love you. I Think it's insane. It's always this thing of you know, whatever software you use to play something And it might always be a frame or two off but in animation a frame or two can actually make a big difference The only thing I would probably say that maybe this is this to me feels too big and too much. This is more like For something where she just goes, I love you where Feels like that's the max is a bit of unwieldy shape there with that that curvature I don't know if that's something you can tone down what there's something that feels a bit Too much. I love you. I've loved you since I met you. I know there's something where Apologize if that was before and I didn't bring it up every now and then I see something too late or it just only feels different So I'm 100% aware that sometimes I'm speaking idiot there, but It just feels like the tone of the voice Doesn't quite match this massive action. I love you where it feels like it would just be more direct with this a direct Move forward and again. I hate if if you're thinking right now. Why didn't you tell me this weeks before I totally agree That's just for some reason right now This strikes me as I would make this more direct and less arky, but then you can add more here Because now she she said it. She told him she does this he pulls away She's potentially more hurt and panicky. I love and now you since I met you That tone of voice is stronger than I love you than here I've loved you since I met you and I think now you can have a little bit of anticipation in Ark into this which will work with the hand That's my current Opinion I just horrible horrible if this is just going against everything we talked about before for some reason it's just And to be honest, I need to look at your previous version. Is this a much bigger? Move them before and especially facially. Maybe I'm reacting to that but again, I apologize If this is something that was before and and now I'm solely changing my mind. It's horrible. It's horrible. I Love you The other thing I be careful about is that his hand drops and I'm kind of looking at this And I'm slightly distracted and I want to look here. It's also the hand drops I know a bit later, but it kind of all falls together when she is done. He is done So you watch this It's just something together and it's just It's like when this the shot starts I'm kind of looking here because I see eyes in my my eyes go to her eyes Then this happens and I'm going over here and then it's such a slow and deliberate drop That I can't I'm kind of late to the party to watch this. I love you and I wonder if that's too much I do like the idea of him like this and already kind of makes that Work even better like she's contemplating why he's so distraught. Yeah, I understand why I mean What about this? How about a compromise? What if you start like this like seven frames? We hold this and then he puts his arm down. There's no pause, but he goes straight from this to down and By the time the hand is around here. So almost maybe two frames before it hits the end This starts Right, so you would delay that a bit more she can still look and maybe you can have you know some darts and maybe a whining of eyes Because she realizes all men this is not gonna work and that's why she decides to do this. I hope that makes sense Yeah, I mean you did say please be picky with notes, but there's picky and there's destructive So feel free to throw everything out that I just said But these are my just the current things that I feel about the shot and apologize again This goes against what we talked about before what I said before I Love you Love you also careful. There's something just generally about This goes down and this goes up and I know this is later than this But there's again a slight feel of love you Almost at the same time and there's something almost a bit too deliberate about Lifting and then the fingers in and then that thumb in at the end. It's just something where it's it's Like to me it seems like she will bring that arm back now It's almost like she wants to realign her balance and so she can put weight on that hand Because she's she is Putting the weight off of this arm if that makes sense. It's almost like a weight shift instead of doing this at the end is She does this at the beginning For a rebalance and now that she's balanced and she can hold that weight on here She can move and lift this arm to do this. Hope that makes sense You I love you You see there's something about the lower lids I'd be careful like this seems like that lower lid is 50 or 60 percent dialed up. I would go not more than What you have already to be honest like the lower lids I would dial them It's really minimal. I know you want to squeeze them in but this seems like she was just beaten and then you know You have a blue eye a black eye and she's swollen. I Think you can be a bit more conservative in the lower lids Maybe you know between this and this this seems almost 50% but just visually I know it's not but Something where maybe that is your max at this point. You just want to feel that because of the cheeks being up Feels a bit much of you You I Love you And there's something where I would probably once he Does this and that I would probably go with a bigger Dart and a bit sooner even with a little bit of relaxation on those eyebrows because she's so heightened in her Acting and in her emotions and you know everything is so extreme that I think even something like this here where he is breaking eye contact and moving away from her would have a bigger impact on her You know mentally emotionally I Think you can make that a bit less subtle. I See a bit of a dog But I think you can go a bit bigger and even then you would relax the mouth even a bit sooner and Then when she goes down here, it would be a down with a bit of an opening of her eyes Because right now it feels like she's already so invested that When he goes down and pulls her arm away or his arm away She has a look down and then it's still also sad and closed And then she has that reaction, but it's still all closed like to me at this point You would see the white above the pupils You know she'd be freaking out and then this would be the freak out face plus Grabbing the hand then you can really do this like then it's appropriate to do that But I feel like we can go a bit broader here on her emotional reaction subjectively Careful just from a technical point of view as you go back like this like she has a bit of a Shift in her weight as she goes back a bit with the body I think you can have a little bit of a Rotation down a flattening of that wrist and maybe a change in the elbow It seems like everything is moving, but this is fairly locked and still Which it is when you scrub so watch out for stuff like that And I think her arm move this way it's almost too much of a telegraph anticipation for this Where I feel it it's a feel slightly disconnected from her emotional state where to me it feels like she would that hand goes I don't know again this is sorry if this is totally different, but like if she is invested hands on hands on this invested on him with him This happens But for her to move that arm away so much Doesn't quite work with this because if I look at her face, it's kind of like I Felt something on my hand. What's going on down here? Oh wait, he took his hand away But the amount of arm back here Fits more this moment and if that makes sense where it's like this is a bigger moment of he took my hand away So it feels like he will keep that hand. He takes that hand off But her hand would still be here and be kind of close and maybe drop But it would still be very close to here and then when she goes On this then she pulls her hand back this way and then you can go Into this I've loved you since I met you Into that, right? I've loved you since I met you I've loved you since I met you The rest works. I think that I've loved you since I met you. I Like all of that the head moves the body moves how he reacts to this. I think this is all cool I loved you since I met you Ever so slightly I K watch out feels like it goes it goes down on pretty one straight axis here with a bit of rotation Which is cool, but I think we can bring it either either way over and a bit of a twist Just a bit more complexity to get that I K feel Out was it to get it gets a bit broken at this point just in the way this rotates up what stays aligns Like within that line while there's more going on in the elbow. It's a bit of a technical thing Even though here at the end it gets a bit better But throughout all of this here. I know this extremely picky, but because you're doing it You're gonna have to have some Compression and changes in the fingers every time she just changes there where it's just ought to have it feels a bit light there You want to start compress So compressing those fingers a bit more there and we'll probably lift that head a bit more. It seems almost like a Just a temporary tangent there, but like are we connecting there? Is she putting that on the finger? Yeah, I'll keep this baby. There's always this much negative space probably I love you. I've loved you since I met you now that being said since you are animating this guy dare I Dare I say just for a test would you be able to Do this Because I wasn't quite sure how far you want to go with that far right character with the right character So if we move this much Over right So we can see a bit more of him Because it's always it was always a bit unbalanced leaning more screen right And I think that way towards the end it could still work where this feels a bit more Crochet, but we see a bit more Because right now it was always a bit heavy on that side and especially towards the end I Feel like if you want to eat a pan over or from the beginning be further And you like I said this way, I'm just curious Maybe you have to animate a bit more of the shoulder there I'm just wondering I want to I still want to throw that out there Is that something you can do does that break too much into animate more stuff on him on the right side? But that would just help with the balance But I'll leave it at that feels like this is a very destructive critique So let me know you let me let me know what you think about all of that. All right. Thank you All right, there's an email You can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe Would be awesome. All right. Thank you