 All right, let's watch this. This is a longer sequence with no sound That was my cartoon sounds cute There's some really good stuff there. I've seen this before Academy there's definitely update on the on the bird Seared I wonder the only thing that strikes me here. I'm going there for my friend But I think what I would do This might be weird, but just as a thought like when I was watching this and obviously I know What is going on like this is all? Still good. You got a bit of tail-acting Only thing maybe that I would do here is maybe you can take this and have it go down this way That's a bigger change. We're not having seen this for a while. What strikes me here is that this Kind of even though there's a bit of a drag in the tip there It just has a feeling of This is the head body tail and everything pivots off of here and moves as one piece As the tell comes down the body comes down Maybe this could be something where this goes down straight where it will go down and then the tip would drag Go down more tip will be here. It's kind of like a wave down and then this would be Less of this over one frame What is massive shape pops in but it could be either body and in the head down here and it's kind of the back that leads So then this is here and the head might be, you know, it's a bit lower Then the body stops then the head snaps over or might have still One in between like here and then into that. It's the only thing that strikes me here Is that it feels a bit too much of a solid piece that kind of goes up? I Think there's some good moments in terms of All the reactions or even here when you have home the little reaction in there as that goes forward I Think the thing that we talked about before this kind of hurts You just kind of the the modeling of it where it's just very pointy has a lot of Shapes that we're enveloping is not as clean as it could be but I don't know how much control you have Or with this because you do have all the All the drag and everything the only thing I would say this feels a bit much when you go from here to here And then the next frame go forward, but in the small spacing here, especially this to this it gives it Like it hits that wall there So to me I would go here and then the next frame This headline is here Somewhere here and you can still do that with the arm But it does a little bit of continuing motion going back Then you can maybe pop to here and then into this that might be a bit more fluid but It's just tricky. I don't know if you can rotate the hand so that there's a bit more of a fluid Line there even this I don't know if you have pen bows You know like stuff like that where we just kind of soften those lines a bit like this feels very messy Where I would just bring that wrist down. I mean, I know you want to put in the drag But maybe something where Might just for the moment be okay, but I'm just registering this It's just of such a weird shape Maybe the drag would just be more it'd be flatter or doesn't have no drag at all. I'll give it a nicer more appealing silhouette Like it's something like this again I would just bring in those fingers like this and simplify That shapes it doesn't have that in there That's kind of my comment For most of those elements here I give them through here and I might just be raking just to To all of this I think that's probably The biggest thing if you can go in there and I know if you have to go even like something like this still Simplified the shapes to have this come down into just the plant and not have all of these out there Even that Just feels broken So I think because everything is there and it's cute and I like it. It just feels it just feels messy in terms of Those shapes and I know this that's not your fault. It's just how to model is But even like a stop like that Maybe give this a bit more room Maybe here would actually be a good thing to bring out those fingers because now it's a plant I think I would reduce the amount of craziness was to me at this point. This just becomes strobe And it could just be who I could just be going up into a hold a couple frames like take one of the You know leg arm forward moves. It's a bit more hold and then It's almost like he wants to get up All right. He does all this Gets up and then feels like he's stuck in the air and that's when he starts treading here in the air To get into this to go forward Just right now it feels like it's Just so strobe. You might want to run this with motion blur and then We'll have a different opinion on that. Maybe then that will be better Actually, what's going on here in the camera? I feel like your camera is doing a translate right there It might just be me, but this feels like a translate and also kind of messes up the entrance of The birth there. I would just go translate backwards for all of this, but any type of reframing is done with rotations This just seems odd at this point and I would probably still bring in that bird from top down Little eagle attacks. It's it of low. This feels less threatening. I would go straight down into this But it's cool. I really like the the flutter and Adjustments in the wings. I would have a little bit of an adjustment in the head here that kind of not in sync with the legs might go earlier maybe right of it at the end but Given that it's cartoony how we can push this and have it more of a head Move outward eyes, maybe end up up here and open the beak just more this kind of Falls into the same line and maybe rotate the head a bit So that the head here has a beak here and then a beak here So we see the separation between that top part and the lower part and you might cheat and open those eyes a bit more Because it's going past us so fast so quickly You can cheat that maybe a little bit So the initial comment here before I was started at the beginning I wonder if at this point we can take this hill away Keep those clouds up there. So this is basically just blue ground here this green my end here so that here Because he gets into this hole. I would have Jump give it contrast, but also make it a moment. So we understand Bam goes in there and hides right now It just feels like she's kind of disappears because I'm also looking at the eagle coming in And I feel like we want to have just a bigger moment And if that means maybe you have to extend the shot a little bit since he's just kind of coming in There's not much going on there. I would have a little bit of a Flutter in the in the wings here. Just like you have here, which is cool But you might have to open up the shot make it a bit longer. Just give it is a Jump hang time. So it's almost like it's almost there grabbing it And I know that means that maybe the eagle will be higher because Maybe not. I think it might just be Do this jump up down and just kind of re-time the eagle so that this still happens that it's an almost grab But this this he should be grabbing it. So I would still back time that guy so that when the Squirrel is here. I feel like this is the pose of the eagle when this girl is here This feels like it would still grab the guy so it's make change a little bit for another for bit more of a near miss And then it feels like It slows down. So me personally I will go Here and then on this you could have a flap but I will probably do less of a flap with his left wing and Have the bird look Maybe back with a little bit big eyes and as well cartoonified this whole thing and Look back bit side with slight of slight flap and speed ups really This feels a bit more like he's easing in But do like this though here and then that's cute comes out and that's that alright. 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