 All righty, let's play this in full first 1037 and NJ here's Pink Floyd All right, let's turn down the volume adjust a What the main thing is that there's a little bit of We say this specificity kind of gone in the in the movements where it feels a bit too I hate to say simple, but there's something where we can We is a royal we you're doing all the work. I think we can push some moments where Like this I don't mind It's all cool Works all good Leans all there. I think that is all too defined 103 I think it even starts with That I mean, it's not I guess he gets out of his state of mind just taps that 1037 and it to me from some technical point of view before going to the one is just watch out You have a little bit of a harsh start where all of this including the head all move as one This one big piece that moves back a bit on a linear key It's not actually in a key. I know I see the ease out of that But and there's a little bit of a hiccup stop in the chest Where it stops going back. You can see this whole thing going back BAM stops and that's a slight away from us rotation on top of that watches in real time. Oh It's a bit of a I Don't mind texture in this where we kind of vary the timing of all right Let's go and go. I don't mind that. It's just a little bit I think that initial Joel to me feels at least too fast 1037 and then once you get into this 1037 1037 it's like I would take the this moment and that Which feels a bit too animated where? We are definitely getting into be tracked that nose into Pam a linear key A bit of a mushy arc where it has a bit of a hit I'm there So it does does a little bit of that and watch out here and then suddenly drip down here. I Would give this a bit more variation here's pink Floyd It's got here's pink Floyd where it's kind of here's and pink Floyd something where it's just Less of a just one arc one circle excuse me With a bit more variation in it 1037 and NJ here's pink Floyd. I Think it's a combination of the stat that simple circle there and then With that Like I don't feel this in his voice. That seems fairly exaggerated pink Floyd. I Know he wants to try to get the energy in there, but this just seems like holy moly I've seen the craziest thing on this screen that being said that rotation I would add that type of thing at the beginning here 1037 and NJ what's going on right now? It feels like it's just going forward in one axis with a little bit of up and down in the head 1037 Versus to me I would almost go again is very subjective, but I will go back with a slight rotation y Where that nose favors us comes towards us a bit more and then leans in mitz with that Side that we don't really see that you know behind the no side and then comes in with a little bit more y rotation as well NNJ And then an an an NNJ was kind of comes in for a thing goes up and hold and NNJ and has a little bit of a da da da Where there's a little bit of more y rotation, maybe the side to side roll NJ here's pink floor Just that moment feels a bit too simple and then here that Back also feels a bit fast that rotation here in the back and NJ here right there. Hey here. Hey here's pink It gives a bit of a hiccupy feel of this suddenly going back and then suddenly stopping and then the nose BAM suddenly coming down and doing all of that and then same thing with this here This just feels like a heavy wrist because it's angled that way and it's the way it's in and out here I wonder if you could do you know again we it's a royal we if we could play with something where it does all this and before he does that it's kind of like the Imagine the wrist is a bit lower. What does the wrist do does this goes back? So maybe here imagine It's just a bit lower Does this whole thing and then void? Floyd and right around Floyd it goes up maybe to that height Because it's more tension in it. He's getting ready to do this He's can't wait to turn this off and then before he does it There's maybe a slight change in the fingers. I might open the hand a bit more so that this is less of Tapping with this front part where I would you to have it with this backside of the of the fist there But it's almost a more belabored where it might be this backside, but then You know like fingers out maybe you're just something where it's more painful not that my drawings are helping But it feels like can we make this even an acting point to where that pose and how he hits that button It's kind of that bridge between I'm trying really hard To pretend that everything is okay, but at the same time I'm just falling apart leading into oh This is just such a pain Same thing here that chest move back here right there. It was a bit too fast. This was like he's being Roped up and then suddenly pulled back or someone's pushing him forward Pushing screen left and then this too Forward here has a bit of a hiccup. It's a bit much. I comes forward and then stops and comes back and comes forward again That's nice to like that and like That inhale. It's almost like you want to see a You want to see a little bit of that that inhale so go What a day just a little like one more second of seeing an exhale, I mean But that's just me. So yeah, these are kind of my thoughts So it's a tricky thing getting out of steps and I feel like Everything everything is there technically everything is is clear like it's not confused by anything But I wonder if there is something we could do where there's just a bit more texture and variation in something Like that turn this and I wanted even at this at the beginning Like it could be something where he does this And even that and then has a little bit of a tap with the finger I don't know like something where I feel like we could add something more that Tells us something about about that character I mean, I might be way too picky and just asking for weird stuff here But that's just kind of thought my main thing is if I have to go with the big notes It's this this big arc. That's but a bit bumpy this massive expression that looks like And overall a bit of a clunkiness in the spacing and arcs of things moving back and popping and and moving quickly Like these are to me the biggest three notes The rest is just me rambling Saying things that you would have to do You do all the work. So that means that you take all the notes and you filter whatever you need And you can always Email me let me know what you think and we can always email back and forth with some ideas and that is that all right. Thank you All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want You can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you