 Alrighty, let's play this in full first. There is sound. You have no idea what it's like to be a card. See these horrors and do nothing. You have no idea what... Alright, now you're asking here the email about the character you're about to break down and cry and how to push that. Just quickly before I get into this. Careful, we are so edgy on this character here on the left. I think I remember it's been a while actually, but I remember we talked about this where either bringing the character more into frame or it could be over the shoulder so that it could be more balanced so you don't have to show the face, you don't have to animate anything. But right now this feels a bit awkward to be there and then once we cut there's a slight tangent there and then it's just also so close where I feel like this would be... I might have to go back into the previous review we talked about, but I think you'll be more comfortable to at least center it could also be on the left. I mean, maybe at least a bit more here so that we are within my clumsily drawn thirds here so that the eye could be... the head would feel like it's more concentrated here than so far on the right because it's not like the character turns around and ends up being here. That's why we need to anticipate the space here. So just that I think is going to help as well. The other thing too is that I think given that the sound is so elevated it feels like he's breathing a lot or sounds like... which I mean he is but the thing is I would just treat this as... you know, maybe it's just a really good mic or the boom operator like the mic is right there. I don't know, maybe it's something just over dialed but I think it's just too much in terms of what you're doing with the mouth shape so I'm going to turn off the sound here so just if you watch him hey this already pops it's a really big move over one frame and then after that it's like one frame down and then actually goes the other way it kind of locks and goes back there's no ease into this same thing here it's not as poppy here it's still pretty big though in terms of shape changes this gets better and then we get to this and I mention this just because there is a tone to this to bring the sound back it's not like he's yelling at the beginning it doesn't feel like there's a big yeah, something it's just... I think you want to keep the the emotional impact of the shot and kind of the tone of it and having this pop into this to me there's a disconnect where it's emotional and there's definitely a lot of energy in the voice but this is like a big he's going into a poo poo poo poo, weird it's so much energy in here that I feel it doesn't quite connect with the audio but then after that there's an odd pinching of the corners which some rigs have like this is something you can dial in to pinch that in but it's an odd shape for a breathing it's like a very intentional sound or a mouth there and then it continues and that's kind of what bugs me too is that I am suddenly distracted by this shape and I'm looking at what is going on here it's like this wavy thing where it starts to intersect and it just keeps going and if I put the sound back like to me this would just be and I know it almost sounds like where he purses the lips like this but to be honest I would personally ignore that and just keep it where let's go back even this mouth here like that is like a big big inhale then you have looking through the camera really offset lids and this open it feels like everything is dialed up way too high in terms of what is going on and again if you turn off the sound just look at him there's so much stuff going on the bottom part and it's there's also a slight look and feel to it as if this whole lower part is translating down versus a jaw hinge from here where we have a rotation and not a translate and I'm saying all this because you're asking about how can we how can we make this work where we can feel the emotion more the reason I'm saying all this because I am concentrated here I'm not looking here that's my issue there where I want to look into his eyes and feel the sadness and all of this but the problem is that with the profile in this nose it's kind of like my nose I have a bump as well like you can't see this so you're only stuck with one eye not that that's wrong wrong I mean you can do stuff and there's definitely examples of this but I think if you had something that's never really comes back doesn't even here it's like we kind of see it so to me it's like either you turn them around so that we see both eyes so that it's more ish like that you can push it maybe a bit more or you push it where it's always like this and we only see one you do see two or see one but this always kind of like am I seeing this like I always feel like lean over and see past that that nose bridge there and again I'm saying this so that we can connect more with this like I feel like the emotion is going to be sold more through that than this this to me is upstaging what's going on here there's too much movement there let's go back see these horrors because if you let's see if we can do this here I think what might help you is just to do this just concentrate on this let me just see how much we see here okay alright see you can see how much if we only see the top part how there's not much going on there here it freezes do nothing and I know we talked about this where he might stare off this is the memory it's not like he's processing stuff so you wouldn't have that many idards but I think it would serve you to and I don't remember if he did like if you film some reference you look find reference or better if you film reference and you act things out like what is going on do you is there anything where like this is also pretty high in terms of a squint this could also be lower so that through this section when he's here do nothing like this is imagine he is see these horrors see these horrors and you might have one or two blinks right like he's re remembering stuff and again I might go back and contradict what I said in the previous review I apologize I can't remember it's been a while I know we had some back and forth but looking at this now and the way this is animated my current suggestion would be to keep this see these horrors see these horrors have one or two maybe two darts not huge but imagine he is is trying to remember things right it's just processing stuff and that causes the darts he's looking like what happened and then he gets that imagery of the horror and that's when he starts to stare but imagine the lids are lower and even this could be I mean depends how far you want what you want to go with the eyebrows but imagine from here to this instead of having just the stare this is where he is mentally looking at the horror and maybe that's when the lids go up that's when his brows go and the furrow they go lower you might even bring in a little bit of a tear imagine like there's a tear forming in but something where like a few would act this out how would you if you're mentally just imagining that whatever horror image that he has in his head how is that gonna affect the character right so to me instead of just staying still and just looking out it could be also something where he might start here hold a bit this could be another idea where you just do this instead of all the way up here you're here and then as during this section where it's all quiet we're actually here and then he goes up a little bit more and he goes up a bit more it's almost like the imagine he's a certain headspace and mentally just gets worse and worse and worse and worse until he just breaks down and that's when we have this here you could also do something where see these horrors see these horrors like I said like darts and then it's just kinda it could also be a whitening could also go contrast wise where you start here and then slowly it whitens it whitens it's like the horror and the shock is going back in the brows go up the eyelids whiten and you know it's it could almost be like more than more than two eye darts but then it starts to slow down and then as the horror sets in and the lids widen and the eyebrows go up do nothing do nothing and instead of this do nothing you I mean you can go up but you close his eyes that's the big contrast right you go from squinty to big to closed that's your big contrast at the end do nothing it's almost like this is so horrible I can't look at this anymore mentally and everything is just so horrible I have to close my eyes this is too much and then maybe he can he goes back down maybe that's the moment where I said before maybe if you do more three quarters we see both eyes so it has more impact to see both eyes whitening at the end do nothing he closes his eyes and turns away in profile and then looks down he looks down he's almost like in shame he looks away from the other character that sits there if that makes sense I mean that could be a transition where you know imagine not that he's talking like this but that's kind of the feeling in his head as he's saying this he's kind of talking to him but then as he realizes and just do nothing that's just the worst part in him then he just wants to look away if that makes sense imagine he would say the whole thing like that and then he looks a bit more this I'm not saying you should change the whole thing for me mentally it's like he's talking to him a little bit then he's imagining what's going on so he stares away just pass camera and at the end and do nothing that's when he turns away here and closes his eyes but now imagine this is all taking place from this angle right so when he says all this he might come back up bit three quarter we see both of his eyes does all this eyes widen to full shock in his face and then he looks away head down profile so he looks away from from the guy here with his eyes closed that could be a way I mean there are many ways to do this as always I don't want to I don't want to dictate anything so I would recommend just act things out try different versions you can always email me with your references none of these counters any submissions so we can kind of decide maybe on some ideas that would be faster to act things out then block things out and then go from there 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