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But of course now I'm going to still guys have a quick run through of the unseen poetry part of the exams. Okay, so as you can see behind me, basically what I want to do is begin by recapping on the different elements of unseen poetry. Okay, so when it comes to unseen poetry, which you anticipate for tomorrow's exam, but also what I want to show you guys is a walked through example of a past paper question that I have done. Okay, so this is the 2021 exam. And I want to walk you guys through how you can kind of basically synthesize all of this information. So it comes to, so for example, timings, essay structure, as well as what's to recap on when it comes to language and structure for this portion of your exams tomorrow morning. Okay, so guys, for those of you that are joining in, let me just see if my screen is showing properly. Okay, so for those of you that are joining in, guys, thank you so much for your patience. Not sure what's happening with the other one. But what I want to do is have like a quick revision live for unseen poetry, covering what you guys should consider when revising for this part of the exam. Okay, this is unseen poetry, not power and conflict. Okay, right. So as I mentioned, I'll quickly run through this part of the exam, beginning with timings when it comes to unseen poetry. Remember that the entire exam that you're going to be sitting tomorrow, guys, is going to be two hours and 15 minutes. And of course, you should allocate around 15 minutes to the inspector called or the modern text that you're going to be sitting, 15 minutes to power and conflict. If you're not sure what to revise for power and conflict, look at the two previous lives that I did on Sunday and Monday. And of course, the remaining 15 minutes are allocated to unseen poetry. And how does that work out in terms of unseen poetry? So when it comes to the modern text that you're studying, as well as the power and conflict, it's really straightforward, right? So you only have, for example, with inspector calls, you only have like one question, you choose one of the two, and then you write an answer based on that, right? So you literally just only have to answer one question and talk about, for example, one thing or one character, power and conflict, you're talking about two poems comparing the two. However, with unseen poetry, you have the 24 marker says divided into two bits, you've got the 24 marker as well as the eight marker. How does that work out in terms of managing your timings for unseen poetry tomorrow? Now, in terms of managing your timings, as I mentioned, you've got 15 minutes. So how you should allocate this time, this is my advice. Obviously, use what you think is useful, describe the rest. Remember to always spend the first 10 minutes of the exam reading through the question and highlighting the key words within both questions. Okay, so you've got your 24 marker, you've got the main poem that you've got to write and compare. And then of course, you've got a second question, we've got to compare two poems, okay, the eight marker you've got to compare your second poem with the first, okay, 24 marker, you've just got to write a response based on just the one poem. And then the eight marker response based on two poems, you're either talking about similarities or differences. Okay, so with the 24 marker, spend around 20, 25 minutes on this question. So spend around five minutes selecting the quotes that you're going to use. And then 20 minutes actually writing the response. That's for the 24 marker, okay, and of course, the bulk of your time should go into that. However, for the eight marker, which is where you asked to just compare similarities or differences between the two poems, spend a max of 50 minutes in this question. And this should roughly be around 50 or five minutes selecting the quotation, and then 10 minutes actually writing a response. The eight marker, you shouldn't maybe kill yourself to get too many points done. Usually I suggest doing like one chunky paragraph if you're not that speedy in terms of your writing, or you can maybe do like say two chunky paragraphs if you're fast enough, okay, but don't really kill yourself for the eight marker, you really need to make focus more on the 24 mark question. Okay, that's the lion's share of the marks are available for the unseen poetry portion of the exam, okay. Now, before we go into recapping language and structure and what you should consider when it comes to any unseen poem, okay, when it comes to structuring your response, remember, unseen poetry, I personally feel is actually the more straightforward portion of the exam that you're going to be sitting tomorrow. Okay, so the first part which is your modern text, that can be a bit tricky, right, because you don't know which theme question will come up, or even which character question will come up. So it can be a little bit tricky, okay, and of course, the power and conflict or lover relationships, it can be tricky because you don't know what to anticipate in terms of the question that comes up with unseen poetry. Yes, you've never seen the two poems before, but you don't have the expectations of knowing perfect context. You don't have the expectations of being judged very harshly on whether you, you know, accurately interpret the poems, right? So there's a bit more breathing room that you have. All you just need to do is when you have the poem in front of you, and the two poems even take it a face value and then think, okay, so what language and structure points can I talk about with poem number one, which is a 24 marker, what language and structure point can I talk about when I'm mentioning similarities or differences for the eight marker? Okay, so I personally feel like unseen poetry is a little bit more straightforward because you don't really have the pressure of having to remember quotes, you don't have the pressure of having to remember context, you literally simply need to be able to just read two poems you've never seen before, and then broadly interpret, okay, I think this poem is talking about this in the 24 marker, and I think these are the similarities or differences for the eight mark question. Okay, so there's not really the massive pressure of being completely crystal clear on what each character is saying in each poem, or quotations that you need to remember from another poem, okay? I personally feel it's kind of straightforward. Now, in terms of how I would suggest structuring your essay for unseen poetry, for the 24 marker, I would suggest if you can try to write a minimum of three paragraphs or possibly four. So in the model response, which I'm going to walk you guys through, this is the 2021 paper so that you can kind of see how it plays out, I have approached it by writing four paragraphs. If, of course, in the space of 25 minutes, you don't have the speed or even like, you know, the ability after you've done your modern text, then your poetry, then you go into your unseen poetry for 24 marks, if you feel like I literally don't have mental bandwidth to be able to, you know, at the tail end of this exam to do three or four paragraphs, at least aim to do three, right? And when you're working through your response, pick something from the beginning, something from the middle, something from the end. If you're going for four paragraphs, select one bit of evidence from the beginning, something either from the kind of later in the beginning or in the middle, third paragraph, something from the middle, and then fourth and final paragraph, something from the end. That's for the 24 mark question. However, of course, you've got the eight marker, right, which is where you've got the final, final question in this exam. You've got to talk about either similarities or differences, and it's always either or. You can either talk about just pure similarities or pure differences, depending on what you find easier. For this question, because it's literally just worth eight marks, just write one chunky paragraph where you talk about either one similarity in poem number one and one similarity in poem number two, or difference. One difference in poem number two, one difference in poem number one, and one difference in poem number two. Of course, if you are very speedy in your writing, tomorrow you're going to have lots of adrenaline when you go through, you know, the exam questions. Maybe if you can try to write two chunky paragraphs, but again, as I mentioned, this is just for the keen beans who are super speedy in writing. You can go for the two chunky paragraphs. Again, guys, when I walk you through the model response that I've prepared, I'll show you what kind of two chunky paragraphs for an eight marker would look like. But to be honest, if you could only manage to do one chunky paragraph comparing the first on scene poem and the second on scene poem, you are absolutely fine. Now, whilst on scene poetry is actually really straightforward in the sense that you don't have to remember any quotations. You don't have to remember context. And actually, to be honest, the examiners know that you're not like, you know, doing A-level English or university level English, meaning that the expectation of how accurately you interpret the poems that you've never seen before, their expectation is a little bit lower. Of course, you can't just completely misinterpret the poem. But if you look at a poem that talks about sun and you say, okay, I think, you know, this is talking about the sunshine and maybe this word is showing that the sun is really clear here and this other word is showing that the sun is not so clear. The examiner will kind of more check the accuracy, the how you structure your argument and how you're able to use terminology, so language, form and structure to justify your argument rather than also checking is this person what they've written actually accurate, right? What they've written is it accurate, okay? So in terms of actually developing your response with on scene poetry, make sure you always have a mix of language points and language techniques that you mentioned, but of course also structure points and structure techniques that you mentioned, okay? So for example, going back to the 24 marker, you've got one paragraph where you're given a poem about the sunshine, right? And then you look at something from the first stanza and you say, okay, I think this poem it uses this quotation and this simile to illustrate blah, blah, blah. You simply just need to use reference to technique and terminology to say this terminology and this technique is being used by the poets to illustrate blah, blah, blah, right? And as long as you're able to show an awareness of terminology but also an awareness of like, you know, different techniques, so different language and structure techniques that are used in the beginning, middle and end of the poem, you are absolutely fine for on scene poetry, okay? Which takes me now to the techniques that you should be very well versed in and you should be very aware of when it comes to on scene poetry, okay? So with on scene poetry and to be honest, this also applies, I guess, to the power and conflict-solving relationships. With poetry, there are certain really popular techniques that you should anticipate will come up in tomorrow's exam, okay? So in tomorrow's exam, when you go to section C, you're opening the 24 mark question and the 8 mark question, literally look for these techniques and use them in your response. Use them when you're justifying, I interpret this poem in this way and I interpret this other poem in this way, right? Now, in terms of language, I personally feel like if you remember these techniques, they are bound to come up in any on scene poem that you see tomorrow, okay? So in terms of language, these are the most popular techniques that poets tend to use, look for them in your exam tomorrow. Alliteration, two more words that start with the same letter. Sibilance, two more words that start with the S sound. Simile, comparing two things using like or as. Metaphor, saying something is, something else, poets love that. Oxymoron, opposite words, okay, to create some kind of contrast. Onomatopoeia, be careful with the spelling, onomatopoeia simply means some words, boom, bang, crash, fizzle, pop, etc. Also, this is a castle favourite of mine because it sounds so much more clever than it actually is. Semantic field, okay? Semantic field simply means two or more words that belong to the same category, i.e. roses, lilies, daffodils belong to the category, or the semantic field of flowers, okay? Semantic field is just another way of saying cat to tree. Again, this is just a really fancy sounding way of just saying two more words, you know, this word that would, for example, dog, cat, lamb, belongs to the semantic field of animals, right? It sounds clever, but actually it's really straightforward. The other language technique, hyperbole of exaggeration, personification, describing something as something else, imagery, is also another language technique and this can be subdivided into auditory imagery, so sound words, which is basically a similar thing as onomatopoeia, boom, crash, fizzle, also olfactory imagery, which is to do with smell, so for example, like a very pungent smell or the citrusy smell, and finally tactile imagery, so imagery related to touch, that's techniques when it comes to language that you will literally find in any unseen home and to be honest, if you even can't remember all of them, just literally remember these techniques, literature, symphony, metaphor, oxymoron, onomatopoeia, you will absolutely find, look for them in the exam tomorrow, like actually be like a bloodhound, you're looking for them, okay? That's language techniques. Now in terms of structure, this is what you can talk about when you are analyzing an unseen poetry and what you can definitely find that poets love using in any unseen poem in your exam tomorrow. So repetition, anaphora, this is when you repeat the same subject over and over again, caesura, this is when there's, when you've got a line of poetry, so a sentence and then there's any type of punctuation in the middle of the sentence. Listing, that's pretty obvious. Rhyme, two more words that sound similar. Rhetorical question, okay, so that's a really, really good structural technique that you can use when someone asks a question that's not meant to be answered. Hyperphora is taking rhetorical question one step further, so when a question is not meant to be answered and so when a question, a rhetorical question is asked, so that's not meant to be answered, but then it's immediately answered, okay? So what do we want? Rhetorical question, we want fair pay, right? That's hyperphora, so there's a rhetorical question and then it's immediately followed by an answer, but it's the answer that you yourself have generated, and of course the poet themselves have done this, okay? That's hyperphora. Also, the use of tenses, but more specifically when it comes to structure, is there a shift in tense, okay? You've got fast present future, is there any kind of shift? Also, one word sentences, really, really great structural technique. On John Mont, this is opposite of caesura, caesura is a midline pause. On John Mont, is when there's no punctuation at the end of the line. Declarative sentence is a sentence that states a fact, feeling or mood. Exclamatory sentence is any sentence that ends with an exclamation mark, and finally, imperative sentence is a statement that issues a command. Now guys, as you can see here, this grid is basically what you should have at the back of your mind in terms of anticipating what comes up in unseen poetry, but also in preparing for any unseen poem that comes up tomorrow, okay? It's impossible to anticipate what poem comes up. There's been literally like millions and millions of poems that AQA can choose from. However, how you can control this process is number one, especially with the 24 marker, literally look for language and structure techniques that poets definitely love using, really, really popular language structure techniques that they love to use, and then pick those out when you're justifying the keywords and the question, okay? So you're using these language techniques and of course also these structure techniques. In terms of how to actually apply this knowledge and how to write responses and how to even arrange your answer for unseen poetry, for the 24 markers I've mentioned, have your first paragraph take something out from the beginning of the poem. You're working through the poem. So it takes a quote from the beginning, either tie it to language or structure, then take in your second paragraph something from either later in the beginning or in the middle, okay? Again, justify your responses in reference to language and structure. Third paragraph, something from the middle or end. So if your third paragraph is your final paragraph for your 24 marker, take something from the end. If you are kind of going for gold, you know you're really kind of doing well in terms of time and you want to go for your fourth paragraph, you obviously take something from the end. That's for the 24 marker in terms of structuring your eight mark response, in case this is what you're asked to talk about similarities or differences. If you are totally wiped, do just one chunky paragraph picking out one quote from the first poem, one quote from the second poem talking about similarities or differences, still making sure you mention language and structure. However, if you literally find in the final, final bit of the exam, you are so in your element, you're like I'm doing so well in terms of time, I totally get these two poems. I know exactly what I can talk about, then you can do two chunky paragraphs, okay? So if you're feeling like really like great, I'm just doing so well, do one similarity, one difference, and of course that means in your first chunky similarity paragraph or difference, you've got your two quotations from the two poems. Then your second difference or similarity point, two quotations from the two poems, okay? So guys, that's really it with Unseen Poetry, and what I want to now do is to show you guys how you can apply this information, okay, so literally like essay structure, as well as language and structure techniques in writing a model response. More specifically, I'm going to be looking at the question and the Unseen Poetry that came up in the 2021 paper. So guys, I've pre-prepared this because I'm not trying to sleep late and I'm not trying to be up all night writing and writing and writing, I've literally been up since 8 a.m. teaching, okay? So I'm like finished, but obviously guys, I'm trying to do this live, I don't know what happened with the first live, so I was just like, why is this glitching out? But guys, what I'm going to do now is I'm going to see if there's any questions, but if there's none, I am going to shift and then obviously put the, show you guys how to write a model response to this, okay? So guys, I'm going to finish and maybe the next, perhaps 30 minutes maybe, okay? So guys, I'm going to shift the 2022 questions, 2022 questions. Guys, by the way, for those of you that want to do 2022, I literally did 2022 yesterday for power and conflict, okay? So guys, what I'm going to do is I'm going to move this to face my table, okay? And I'm going to show you guys, hopefully it's kind of clear, hopefully YouTube is not going to be an op tonight, because it was being a bit of an op with my first stream, so annoying. Anyway, let me move this right guys. So hopefully guys, you can see this and you can see how I'm going to apply the point evidence explanation link structure to this 24 mark question, okay? So you've got the question that came up, so this is the 2021 paper, okay? By the way guys, I'm just looking at this paper, but it could be any, one thing about unseen poetry, it can be any poem ever, right? So the main thing is more about like technique, are you able to get your technique down, but also with the poem that comes up, it's not so much about being a thousand percent accurate, it's more about, okay, when you've got the poem in front of you, based on the keywords that you can see, are you able to justify why you think the poem is written the way it is, using reference to language and using reference to structure, okay? So guys, if it's blurry, is this any clearer guys? Let me know if it's getting any better. Is it ever so slightly less blurry? Hopefully it is, okay? So guys, let me know if it's less blurry, okay? So guys, as I mentioned, if I were looking at this question, no it's not any blurry, layout question, yes, that's exactly what I'm going to do, okay? It's still blurry, less blurry, so I'm going to zoom in even further. Is this better? Okay, so guys, this poem, as I mentioned, is just, this came up in the 2021 paper, but guys, like, don't focus more on like, oh, this is 2021, unseen poetry, it can be like literally any poem ever, right? It's more about technique, it's more about being like, okay, whatever poem I see, I don't have any context, I don't know what this poem is written about, but if I look at the question itself, right, so if I look at this question, what I'm asked to focus in on, right, so if I even look at this question, right, even before looking at the poem, I'm told, in a London thoroughfare 2am, which is the main poem, how does the poet present the speaker's feelings about the city at night, right? So literally, when I'm looking at this, I'm already been given some clues, I'm told, okay, there's somebody who's speaking in this poem and they're talking about a city at night, so they're going to convey some kind of feelings, right? So if I go back to this poem, I already have that at the back of my mind, meaning as I'm reading through the poem, I'm thinking, okay, so what is the speaker trying to show? We know that it's at night and we know that, you know, the feelings, the feelings some type of way, right? As I mentioned, going back to the structure, 24 marker, I want to pick something from the beginning, I want to pick something from the middle, and I want to pick something from the end of the extract, right? So, looking at this, right, and then guys, I'm going to show you also what I'll pick out for the eight marker, okay? So it's called London thoroughfare at 2am, so the water the street it shines in the glare of lamps, cold white lamps, okay, so already here, what can I see? I can see the reference to lamps, this repetition illustrates that there's something about the light, there's something about the maybe brightness of the city at night that's being conveyed to me, and lies like a slow moving river barred with silver and black cabs go down with it, one then another, between them I hear the shuffling of feet on a matapia, tramps doze, so we're told that homeless people doze on the window ledgers, night walkers pass along the sidewalks, the city is squalid and sinister, again here, because I'm thinking about techniques and what the poet is trying to convey, I'm being told as it's squalid and sinister, and I'm probably going to use red pen here, by the way guys make sure tomorrow you're going to have lots and lots of pens, different types of pens, there's sibilants, so you've got here repetition, structure, we've got here shuffling, and also squalid and sinister, so sibilants is being conveyed, what does this tell me if the city is being described as squalid and sinister, it's telling me that maybe the city at night doesn't look that great, it looks scary, it seems menacing, with the silver barred street in the midst of slow moving, a river leading nowhere, so again here nature is being mentioned, but it's leading nowhere, and of course I know that this is to do with London, so it's basically saying that the river Thames, this is a reference to river Thames, which is going nowhere, which is hyperbole, but what does that convey to me, that conveys that there's this sense of hopelessness, right, so moving on, opposite my window the moon cuts clear and round, so here we can see that the moon, nature is being mentioned, okay, so we've got nature here, this river as well as the moon, which belongs to the semantic field of nature, right, so language belongs to the semantic field of nature is being used, unlike the river which seems to be going nowhere, we can see that the moon seems like really really clear, right, this is all the stuff that should be going on at the back of your mind as you're reading through this, right, and this can be with any poem, because I already know what I'm looking for, I've seen the question's keywords, speakers feelings at night, okay, so I've been given some hints, I've also been given a really strong hint in the title, right, so I've gotten some negative language in the first stanza, however in this second stanza when I'm looking at this moon, the moon is described as being really clear and round, and it's shining through the plum-coloured night, and she cannot light the city, so the moon can't light the city, that's interesting, why can't the moon light the city, is it because these lamps are too bright, they're too harsh, it's too bright, oh yeah, here we go, the lamp is too bright, it has white lamps and glitters coldly, okay, so again here we can see repetition of the city, but also these lamps, there's this kind of contrast between the lamps, something man-made, being cold, and something soft like the moon, so this is nature, being warm, okay, final stanza, I stand, so the speaker, first person, perspective, I stand by the window and watch the moon, she is thin and lostaless, the moon is personified, personification, and then we're told, but I love her, and I know the moon, and this is an alien city, so of course here what we can see is the city at night is being conveyed as kind of negative, if it's been described as an alien city, this is a metaphor, you've got personification, in terms of structure, we have the repetition of lamps, we've got some enjambot hair, remember enjambot is when there's no punctuation used at the end of a line, we've got, so actually to be honest, for even looking at this I'd be looking for certain techniques to highlight, so caesura hair, I'd be looking for, I'd be like a blood hound, when I'm looking for techniques to select and then just justify to my examiner to say, okay I think the speaker who's looking at this city at night feels really negative, they are perhaps pessimistic when it comes to this city at night, so if I want to answer this question, let me show you guys what model response looks like for this 24-mark question before I then move on to the eight marker, okay, so I'd literally dive into the first paragraph, again guys look at this more as just a way and how to structure your unseen poetry response tomorrow, unseen poetry, the examiners know you have no context, all you simply just need to do is justify using language and structure why you think the poem is written the way it is, this is why I say it's actually slightly, I would argue easier to answer unseen poetry than poetry because all you just need to do is just waffle a bit and then justify using language and structure, here's some terminology, this is why I think it's the way it is, right, now what I'm going to do is I'm going to kind of, I'm going to read this and then color code like the point evidence explanation links so that you can kind of see how I've laid out my paragraphs, okay, so just to remind you the question is asking about the speaker's feelings at night and what I'm going to do as I mentioned in my structure, my first paragraph is going to be something from the beginning, I'm going to go for four paragraphs, then my second paragraph is going to be something from maybe towards the middle, then my third model response paragraph is probably going to be something from later in the middle and then my fourth and final paragraph working through the poem and analyzing different bits of the poem is going to be taken from the end, okay, so what I'm going to do is I'm going to read through the first paragraph just so that you can see how I'm justifying why I think, so my perspective from looking at this poem is the city at night looks like you know it's quite negative, the speaker feels like London seems quite dismal, gloomy and so on, okay, with this question I don't do any intro, I just dive straight into it, so this is the first paragraph, okay, firstly it's clear that the speaker feels like London is a dismal and gloomy city at night, that I'm referring back to the keywords in the question, don't forget to do that, okay, so these are the keywords in the question, okay, even if it's illuminated with lights, the artificial lights seem cold and unnatural, that's my opening point, as you can see I've not had just one sentence for my opening point because I'm trying to make a strong case to my examiner why I think when it comes to the city at night from this poem I've never seen before in my life, I think they have a negative feeling, right, so this is my opening point done and what color am I going to give my opening point, I'm going to give my opening point, this is the P in my peel paragraph, point evidence explanation, so this is my opening point, just so that you can see guys with a fairly simple straightforward peel paragraph structure, you can kind of develop a really strong grade nine essay, that's my opening point, okay, here's my evidence, so I'm going to use orange for my evidence, the speaker notices the city and then I'm embedding my evidence, shines in the glare of lamps, cold white lamps, so here I have included evidence from the beginning, guys when you're answering the question tomorrow pick something from the beginning, something from middle, something from the end, you are also showing the examiner that you're not lazy with examples that you're given, okay, you're not being lazy with examples that you're given, you're not just taking something from the first bit and then you're moving on right, take something from the beginning, middle and end if you go for the three paragraphs, something from the beginning if you go for four, two things maybe from the middle and then something from the end, okay, so I started off talking about what's happening at the beginning, let's look at the evidence as I mentioned, speaker notices the speaker, the city shines in the glare of lamps, cold white lamps, that is my evidence, I've embedded it, again I'm not used to many bits of evidence but what now I'm going to do is really dissect why I think this idea that the city is dismal, guys as I keep on mentioning, unseen poetry is actually quite easy to get like really solid like 20 marks out of 24, even 22 out of 24, it's all about thinking about language and structure, can I justify why I think the way I think using language and structure and terminology, so now this is my explanation where I am going to be talking about language, structure, terminology, Loelle uses, oh let me use a different color, Loelle uses repetition, structure of the noun, language, lamps, to convey how forbidding and gloomy London seems, then I'm going to now zoom in and do some word-level analysis, again what am I doing, I am making a case for why I think the speaker sees the city at night as like really really gloomy, so here's my zooming in, the adjective cold, so I've taken one word and now I'm really really analyzing it, emphasizes that even if the city is illuminated, it's bright, it still seems dull, this is my explanation, this is where the bulk of your marks are guys, and as I mentioned don't put too much pressure on yourself when you're doing unseen poetry tomorrow, the examiners know that it's not like you know the parent conflict or love and relationships or you've had two years to prepare for it and so there's no excuse for getting it wrong, this one you literally have never seen it before in your life, so it's about kind of thinking okay language and structure, how can I use that to justify my response, okay, this is my explanation, the bulk of your marks are here, then linking back to the question showing that I still have an awareness of what I need to talk about relating to how the speaker's feelings at night are shown, repeating keywords in the question, thus it's evident that the speaker sees London is dull and dismal at night, that's my first paragraph, okay, I've established the question, referring back to the speaker's feelings, taking something from the beginning, now I'm literally, even if I'm super tempted to talk about what's going on next after, I need to kind of move more towards the middle to show that I'm not being lazy with my examples, so here's my second peel paragraph, okay, again, point evidence explanation link, the bulk of my marks I know is in my explanation, so I'm going to pick another quotation but also need to make sure I have a mix of language and structure, so here is my second point, furthermore the speaker notices that the city at night seems filled with isolated and alienated characters, by the way guys, when you're looking at this response, pay attention to the clever, ambitious vocabulary I'm using, rather than saying oh the city is really sad, everyone just doesn't seem happy, I'm saying alienated, I'm saying isolated, I'm saying words which are showing an awareness and a range in vocabulary when it comes to English, okay, so this is my second point, furthermore the speaker notices that the city at night seems filled with isolated and alienated characters, everyone seems to be alone in this city at night, second point, I'm now going to work through with my evidence something from towards the middle, okay, so this is my point, then here's my evidence, the speaker watches the tramps who does as well as the night walkers in the squalid and sinister city, I have taken bits from this part, chopped it up a little bit and mixed it up, okay, but I've basically moved from the beginning of the poem and I'm now working through my middle, okay, so this is my evidence, again the examiner is like okay great, she's not lazy in giving us different bits of evidence from different parts of the poem, now here is my explanation, bulk of the marks, I've never seen this poem before so I need to use language instructor to make the case why I am interpreting the poem the way I am, okay, the poet uses sibilance to emphasise how unwelcoming the city seems at night, in fact it's both uninspiring and frightening, then I'm going to zoom in a little bit, the noun tramps focuses our attention on the weakest members of society and they seem forgotten, that's my link or rather that's my explanation, use language sibilance, I've also zoomed in, talked about language some more using nouns, okay, so here's my explanation once more, again guys don't think about this only in connection to this poem, right, when I'm going over this don't think okay now I know how to write about this poem, no it's not about that, unseen poetry is like it can be any poem, it's more about your general approach, okay, your general approach is opening point linking back to the question, evidence having something from the beginning middle and end but then when I explain I then say okay here's some language, here's some structure techniques but also zooming in on one particular word this is what it shows me about this poem, okay, so this is my explanation bulk of my mark, so here this is the information that the examiners have not supplied to me, okay and my teachers haven't supplied to me, then my link back to the question how the speaker's feelings at night shown consequently which means thus the city at night is depicted as alienating alienating is a good word, if someone is alienated it means they feel isolated, they don't feel together, they don't feel seen, you know they just they just hate it, so it's alienating and incredibly lonely, that's my link back to the question, okay, again first paragraph from the beginning second paragraph slightly later on, okay so I've taken something from this something I'm working through so now I've got to take something more from the middle part of the extract in my third paragraph because I'm trying to go for gold, I'm trying to be like hey Mr Examiner, oh my gosh look at my work it's amazing you know I'm going to go the extra mile that maybe other students are not going to go for, okay, so here's my third paragraph the city at night I never lose sight of the question I always also use keywords from the question, by the way guys, tomorrows and unseen poetry, same by the way for your modern text as well as your power and conflict slash love and relationships, in the question don't be like oh I can't repeat the words in the question all the time I might actually repeat it guys your examiner firstly is a human being over the summertime where you guys are like living your best lives they are going to be sitting indoors reading 40 to 50 scripts a day do you think they have time to be reading between the lines being like are they answering the question okay I think they're answering the question make their lives easy so use keywords from the question okay don't be like oh I'm just going to be really subtle you know I'm just I'm just gonna you know like hint at what you know the keywords are right don't be subtle so this is now the third paragraph okay let me just double check that I'm using the right yep so third paragraph here's my opening point purple moreover the city seems the city at night keywords from the question seems unwelcoming even to nature remember I talked about the moon how the moon is shown the moon is portrayed as attempting to heal the city at night yet it cannot illuminate it hence London seems to eclipse nature at night here's my third point okay so here I'm now talking about oh actually um the way the moon has been described it can't light up the city can it so actually London isn't really um it's not vibes yeah the vibes are not vibing in London that's what it's basically saying then um here's the evidence okay so then I embed something from the middle of the poem okay I'm working through the poem that's what you want to do tomorrow evidence we learned that the moon is clear yet she cannot light the city this is now taken from the middle part of the poem okay this bit here's my explanation the poet's use of personification guys as I mentioned literally like there's some language and structure techniques you'll find in any unseen poem be a bloodhound tomorrow look for them and then just use that okay the poet's use of personification portrays the moon as a healing woman who simply wants to nurture the city personification by the way guys if personification is used in the poems tomorrow decide are they talking about as a man or a woman then you can then just say oh yeah it's trying to be like a man um it's trying to be a woman and you know uh it's nurturing like a woman it's strong like a man whatever right so the poet's use of personification portrays the moon as a healing woman who simply wants to nurture the city yet the verb lights i've talked about personification then verb emphasizes so now i'm zooming in how desolate how sad london is nature cannot redeem it at night nature can't save it at night that's my explanation analysis then i end by linking back to the question so as a result so now here's my link referring back to the question using keywords from the question i'm not being subtle i'm basically like mr examined i'm answering the question as a result the city at night seems to be beyond saving beyond redemption okay that's my third pill paragraph i'm now going to finish off strong talking about something from towards the end by the way guys if you're looking at this and you're like oh god i'm probably only going to have enough time to do three paragraphs fine take something from the beginning something from the middle and then something from the end you're good okay this is now for the keen beings those of you who are like look i'm trying to get this grade nine right i'm trying to get into i don't know cambridge university i'm trying to head to oxford right so i've got to get this grade nine so this is now if you're really going for gold you've managed your time really well and you've got some extra you know not necessarily extra time but you you kind of have like you know a few minutes to do this and your speed writing is really really in top form fourth and final paragraph taken from the end finally the speaker seems completely distant and detached from the city at night as they survey it whilst the natural world feels familiar the city feels like a strange place to her i've said her because i've looked at the poet and it's a woman so i'm just going to assume it's a woman okay if you said her or him it's fine okay anyway so that's the opening point fourth and final point then i'll move on to the evidence to embed my evidence okay guys this is how to lay out the question i'm going to go back to um the layout uh on the board again but guys what i was saying about laying out the question um is just to be clear guys the 24 marker i keep on mentioning this with the 24 marker paragraph one take something from the beginning make it either language and structure reference paragraph two something from the middle language and structure paragraph three right so if you want to give yourself a fighting chance of getting a grade seven and grade eight you need to try and go for three paragraphs something from the end talk about language and structure however if you're going for gold you can do another paragraph okay so as i mentioned guys how i've structured this essay beginning something from later in the beginning something from the end okay so obviously here i've mentioned something in the middle and then end made a language and structure point that's the structure for your 24 marker which is what i'm following in this response beginning later beginning middle and now i'm in the ending paragraph i'm taking something now from the end of this poem right here okay so ending part as i mentioned started off my evidence or rather my my final point so finally the speaker seems completely distant and detached from the city at night as i survey it they're looking around whilst the natural world feels familiar the city feels like a strange place to her that's my opening point here's my evidence they stand in the window and watch evidence and even if they know the moon they believe it is an alien city that's my evidence here's my explanation i'm using a pill paragraph structure okay um lawel surname of the poet use the literation coupled with assonance to convey how the moon is the only beautiful feature of the city at night none nonetheless zooming in on one particular word alien reveals that the city only has positive qualities as even nature cannot rescue it okay that's my explanation talked about alliteration talked about assonance zoomed in on one particular word um developed it here's my link back to the question hence it's clear the speaker detests the city at night it seems alien and unnatural to her 24 marker done okay point purple evidence orange explanation green link blue in my first paragraph talked about structure use of repetition and language second one point evidence explanation here i talked about siblings i have talked about um noun zooming in language third paragraph point evidence explanation sonification zoomed in link final paragraph point purple explanation or rather evidence orange explanation green assonance eliteration coupled with assonance then link back to the question but of course you are not done when you are done with this first bit you've got to then think about how um to answer your eight marker okay so of course the eight mark can be a little bit challenging because you're probably like wiped at this stage first thing of the question itself think about okay the must be a theme that ties in both poems i'm going to look for one quotation do like one chunky paragraph or two quotations do two chunky paragraphs from the first and the second part okay so obviously we're told in both november night uh edinburgh london thoroughfare 2am the speakers describe attitudes towards the city at night right what are the similarities and or differences between the methods techniques the poets use to present these attitudes the similarity and difference the general theme is to do with cities so when i'm reading this i'm just looking for like two quotes to talk about and that's it right i'm done the two quotes would be this quote what can i compare it with in the first poem and then a second quote in my second chunky paragraph what can i compare it with the first one right so here we can see it's called november night edinburgh unlike london the night tingles like ice and glasses so we've got simile here leaves are glued to the pavement with frost the brown air fumes at the shop windows tries the door and sidles past so the hair again we can see the brown air is um trying the doors is being personified and then it slides past i gulk down winter raw so it's like really really cold here the heady darkness swirls with tenements and we know that tenements means blocks of flats in a brown vase of cotton wool laps fade up crags die into pits so we can see here like there's kind of like a darkish image right so here again it's really really cold in this pace in edinburgh frost in my lungs is still cold scraped up on parts i look up their high roof sails the mast head fluttering grain ragged star the world's a bear shrugged in its den so the world is hiding away from nature in this poem whilst here actually it seems like it's um the city that's overpowering nature right so the moon seems to be overpowered but both of them seem to be quite dark um the city seems to be quite dark it's not getting close in the snoring light and outside like chrysanthemums again another simile the fog unfolds it's bitter scent okay so here what i'm probably going to think about is what's the similarity between the both of the poems when i'm thinking about this eight marker the similarity is um it seems like the city is quite dark there's more and gloomy the difference could be um whilst in edinburgh in this poem the nature seems to kind of overcome people and the city in the first poem it seems like um the nature is overcome and over one by the city right so those are the two things i'll probably talk about and obviously i'm going to take out quotations so let me show you guys how to answer this eight marker if you only have enough mental space to only write about just you know like one comparison poem one and poem two just use this style of chunky paragraph okay so this is the eight marker this is how one chunky paragraph could look like if of course you're speedy enough in writing when comparing both poems you can do two chunky paragraphs okay this is the first chunky paragraph for the eight marker so to begin with it's evident that both poems that keep on talking about both have significant differences in the speaker's attitude towards the city at night i am comparing both of them from the start loel portrays a city that's been a that's eclipsed nature yet mccaig which is the second poet describes how nature has overpowered Edinburgh at night this is my opening point talking about both poems then i add evidence from both poems the moon in London is thin and lost still less so i'm taking something from poem number one to support my point okay so i'm mentioning here how the moon is being described as thin and lost still less yet the night tinkles like ice in the second poem so now i've compared it with how the night is described in poem number two i've opened my point talking about both poems i've added my evidence both poems i'm comparing both of them and this is similar this is a difference points okay so i'm talking about how they are different here's my explanation using language and structure talking about the poet's methods loel's use so this is a surname of the first poet loel's use of personifications language conveys the speakers discussed how london has overpowered the moon in the first poem however mccaig's use of simile again language in the second poem shows how unimpressed the speaker is with nature which is consumed and covered the city so here's my comparison for both poems when i'm talking about methods and i focus specifically here on language that's comparing both poems here's my link back to the question talking about both poems and how the speakers show different attitudes so here's my link thus whilst the speaker feels irritated by how nature is eclipsed night in the first poem the narrator of the second poem seems in awe of how nature has covered the city at night if you only have enough time in your eight mark question to write just one comparative response this is how a chunky paragraph looks like before you're done with the exam tomorrow if of course you are like okay i'm going to be able to at least do two chunky paragraphs this could be the second point you can talk about okay final point before i wrap this thing up quickly recap you know structure and then i'm done for the night guys so this is the second paragraph on the other hand it's clear both speakers seem somewhat overwhelmed i'm talking about both so this is a similarity point in their respective cities at night okay so both speakers seem overwhelmed in their respective cities at night the speaker in the world's poem is overwhelmed by feeling of loneliness at the narrator mccage's poem is overwhelmed the city's cold wintry conditions here's my similarity point talking about both poems and then i'll move on to add evidence from both poems the first speaker notes so now this is my evidence for both poems the first speaker notes that london has a river leading nowhere evidence from poem number one nonetheless the second speaker gulps down winter raw that's my evidence from both poems here's now my explanation lawel's use of hyperbole language depicts how overwhelmed the speaker is by london and even the river appears sad despondent and dreary yet mccage's use of caesura structure so i've added language here hyperbole here i'm talking about structure conveys how overwhelmed the speaker is by the harsh winter in edinburgh's rugged landscape compared both poems now i'm now going to finish off by linking it back to the question in terms of how the methods the methods that they use to convey their similar attitudes so here's my link back to the question consequently both speakers seem overwhelmed in the city at night the first speaker is overwhelmed with sentiments feelings of isolation yet the second speaker is overcome with how crisp and cold the city is guys if you only have enough time to do one chunky paragraph for the eight marker tomorrow make it like this point both poems evidence both poems explanation both poems link both poems if obviously you are super speedy in writing you can also do a second chunky paragraph and then you're well and truly done with the unseen poetry okay so guys what i'm going to do is i'm now going to shift back to um the table as i mentioned this is basically just the model response for the unseen poetry it's more about it's not so much about um like um oh but this poem this poem never comes again where we don't have nature it's more about just having a certain approach when it comes to the questions that come up tomorrow right as i mentioned for the 24 marker beginning middle middle and then end versus the eight marker where you've got the um either one chunky paragraph or two chunky paragraphs then we just move this back a little bit so that you guys can see it one last time before i wrap this thing up um so guys just to recap as i mentioned i'm sweating right now because i've had such a long day as i mentioned guys just to recap with essay structure 24 marker as you've seen from the example that i gave you have one paragraph something from the beginning second paragraph beginning or middle third paragraph can either be from the end if you finish with just three paragraphs or if you add a fourth paragraph ending and of course with your eighth marker either one chunky paragraph we've got enough time right add the similarity or difference taking it quick from one poem versus another or two chunky paragraphs if you are super speedy um one paragraph can be similarity one paragraph can be difference from what i've mentioned and as i mentioned guys when it comes to what to look for and how to justify your response remember these language techniques use them in your response and of course remember these structure techniques use some of them you don't have to use all of them but just be aware of both and when you're looking at your example for tomorrow for unseen poetry be like a bloodhound you're like looking for specific techniques you're looking for repetition you're looking for caesura you're looking for semantic field you're looking for alliteration you're like a bloodhound and then all you're just doing your job is now to then say okay so when i look at these techniques this is what the poet is trying to say this is why i interpret it in that way when i see this structure technique this is why i think the poet is trying to interpret it in this way right so guys um i'm going to see if there's any questions but if there's none guys i'm super tired so i'm going to be ending at this live sharpish okay so uh let me see if there's any questions but if there's none for team hardcore um i just want to say thank you for your patience i'm really sorry about the um technical issue at the beginning okay um i'm going to try and make sure that that doesn't happen in the next life so guys um happy revision i'm going to wrap this up uh let me see if there's any questions um i don't think there is so guys have a good evening best of luck with exam tomorrow and um have a good night guys love you all bye bye