 All right, let's play this in full here We got the student and the mentor the mentor tells him go go go and he goes All right, so looking at this here a couple thoughts I think overall It's it's fairly clear to some things at the beginning. I will tweak a bit. I think once you are in In this section the look back the jump all that is cute and That all makes it clear kind of rushing the end there and Right there. I will give this some more time. Let's go. Let's go right away. So as the shot starts There's movement right here. So I think the audience is going to go pretty quickly there in terms of focus But Let's pretend they're not there's something slightly odd with the head so far this way yet the eyes are here I would just give this bit of a clear pose You know, I would potentially even why not have the head just there and maybe even that arm could be a bit lower You know bring up that leg a bit just clear silhouette for all the limbs and it's looking somewhere and again Excuse me again a little bit of a Something moving in there. So we all know they're looking at something together I mean the the mentor here is looking there But he does jump here. So I don't know. I think This creature is a wise creature. It could already know where it is unless you have something here And he goes blue like little mounds of snow whatever that thing gets small then disappear And then we wonder where it went. I think you could do that right looks here There's that and then you can have the little Piles of snow kind of mounting and go down and disappear which is movement this way leads to to this guy ripped to the head Creature also looks over there and the snout leads over there. Everything leads back to this guy. Let's make sure that You know later on you're gonna have a bit of a Organic snow mount and then you got your snow background Snow covered trees and things but anyway Once you have that again, I keep that post clear But also make that transition work because right now if you look at this bam There's a lot of movement right there. So just make sure that once you spline this that it just explode into this move so they could be Again helps depends how far you want to go is that is the head still there but has Enough room to show the pupils to look up and down to kind of what is he looking at and what is he trying to tell me? So I know I would think about that there's a story telling and acting what that human here wants to do Then you get into this which is okay But again, you got some twin legs overlapping limbs here So keep things more at least in this direction in terms of separation for negative space That's okay Having that head tilt like what is there and again, and this could be cute with a little bit of things here Moving a little bit Not super sure about this block coming out of the mouth. So you guys still you might have to Imagine neck is here elongate this and have the head here So that you got, you know the upper chest here is though somewhere We have a bit of a view of that in terms of arms and it could be you know further out And then this leg could be further out just something where it's a bit clear in terms of silhouette Because again, you have some moments where this arm just kind of grows out of that head I'll focus on that probably there and then then he gets a bit funky right so you have the moves Okay, okay. It's there. It's there. Okay, and then you go into this which is a bit odd You go all the way down with this completely horizontal still trying to look there Shoot back up here and again once you spline this is going to be a really fast move So what does this mean? Why is it so low with the head tilted so far and then this big move is this? Kind of an excited I'm ready or a slow Hmm, I don't know what's going on right now and that's why he goes well We'll go and then maybe he has a bit of a heading of going well now It's you know go like the way you have it here, but a bit sooner go like okay. Okay, come on You got to go jump so a bit more acting in there so that he realizes. Oh, okay. Well, I guess that's what I got to do so this is something that could be pushed in terms of clear poses and acting moments of like I'm not sure what's going on here. What does he feel? What's the question there and I think this could be your your interesting moment of Them communicating and I think this could be a good pantomime moment there that feels a bit underused That's okay. That works in terms of not going back You know the poses are a bit strange You also got that overlap there that goes straight into that the leg and the arm this very twins All very twin there and I think you can have I think that legs could drag a bit more so that once you get in there You got that compression there I think overall just the posing could be a bit more interesting and then this definitely has to be splined out Like once we see all the splines come interesting in terms of the timing, but I think It could be okay, I think you could have a probably a bit of a Longer hang time up there and might just be okay, but this is pretty banana So this will need some more finessing once you are splining this Then you got that and I think in here once you get into more You know complex stuff some movement in there obviously I know this is just fine But as you I mean stepped as you spline this don't just give this a hold I'll probably do some movements so we know is rummaging and trying to get something out And then given depends how you have that geometry. He might be a bit close You might want to go up and since you're going this way. He actually goes back With his steps so that he ends up being here And then he drops the mouse again that the mouse is here and he is here. This might be a bit Cleaner and then you need a couple more seconds here was once you're done He looks up and then we just cut out Which brings me back to the point of you have to look at your shots If this is your current shot You got to put in another shot before and after and then watch the whole thing to see how it cuts in and cuts out so this is the seaving was we See we look back and it's just we're missing something and this again could be a moment of How is he looking up? Is he excited? Is he kind of disgusted was it his first time? Maybe pining this? And then how does the mentor? React is he shaking his head looking down or excited wagging tail doggy style. That's weird to say So anything that again tells us something about their relationship I think that's you're missing opportunities there and in the middle During this section there Alright, that's all I have and that's it. Thank you All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you