 Alrighty, let's play this in full first. Hey guys, I was just uh, I was just This never leaves this room All right, so I got some questions. I got lots of questions actually, but you gave me lots of feedback How far along this is basically blocking plus? I totally understood why it's empty and then full I got some thoughts about that So now and you talk about certain cartoony moments you want to enhance and push My immediate question is because I'm a foreigner Does he say I was just about to leave this room? I was just This never leaves this room. I think so. There's something about really Just about the leaders who I know there's something but I mean it's not crucial. I think I get the point My so my thoughts I have more broader thoughts than minutiae your critique like watch out for Twin poses right off the bat This character has massive hands. I know this is part of the rake, but I would personally scale these guys down. They're so huge Now my thoughts on this I understand that he is singing by himself and I like I'm assuming this is like you said don't make fun of my Intentional bat singing. I'm assuming that's you and then that turns into an audio piece that you found online All this that's you saying this as well I was just this never leaves this room So that's true. Let me know what this second piece is from Now but generally what I would do this is massively subjective So as always take this with a grain of salt Or block of salt at this point What if what if Because you're talking about this guy turning down the amp and everything which I kind of missed to me It was more like a pose Kind of miss this It's kind of close to this character. It was pretty cut off There's a lot of empty space with a lot of colors and textures. They're almost Drawn during I draw my attention there. It's become not confusing. We're kind of distracting almost So here's my proposal And by proposal, I mean you can completely ignore this and do whatever you want My thought will be if we simplify this what if What if it's like this and out of mind the camera going back But imagine Maybe that step is not as far Let's look at the mechanics of that step. But what if What if you minimize that step a bit but my thoughts will be you start like this You get to here you do your thing But I'm envisioning when I make this all weird go like this Imagine it's a bit small and maybe that's a bit too small but something may be more Like that and as he sings and he does his whole That type of thing what if Now that we have room almost feature different drawing tool here Now imagine you have Throughout this whole thing top lights, which could be blue Red whatever disco lights or something that you can fake it So there's just light from above and the rest is pretty much Blackness just dark. You can't see anything and then instead of that that cuts Let me get out of this tool here instead of cutting To a new angle Hold on. It looks like I did not get out of that tool instead of cutting To this which the character kind of pops in the new position. I know you you pose this Based on this which you mentioned in the email What if You do all this right we're here But then instead of a cut all you do is you turn on the lights It's basically suddenly the character other character appears here With that's a horrible thing Imagine I mean they could be they could be a door could be whatever But I would imagine like a light switch and other characters standing here hand on the switch mouth open I don't know if you want something another character standing there But you could be wondering where did that did that guy come from? So I mean a couple things you could do again. I'm just brainstorming thinking out loud You can absolutely disagree. What if what if we take because it's not Do we not massively important where they stand in this shot? So what if we do all of this? And like I said, we make this where it's actually what a bit like this Now at the beginning of the frame since this is where I'm recording here Your character might be around here and with that camera move back the character ends up You know again, we're looking at My crappy drawn thirds. Holy moly. Oh wait, that's the other drawing tool too. This is the this is the messiest critique in history Someone's going to chime in in the comments. No I saw all words from you So imagine these are my crappy drawn thirds and you keep your character always kind of within Within that and you have that bit close up the camera tracks back Right, and then we see him he does his thing and maybe ends up maybe around here That's just kind of his his box of pose Where then Let's be fancy here Then the lights turn on and this could be this could be a door With one character here Light on the switch another character here and that way we have this separation between the two It's almost like it's not like the characters surrounded by the two characters Coming in trying to pick a color whatever we have this Clear line here visually where there is this group of friends All the lights are on now. You can have additional lights. The whole room is is um lit up And there's the other character and his singing pose. I hope that makes sense when you erase this whole thing here So let me just go back So again, my thoughts would have been You start with this let me go back here. It's so messy. Apologize you start here Goes back does all this thing here. Maybe it is not that much right Left movement is covering a lot of ground here. So maybe cut that in half But I'm imagining this whole beginning all of this and like I said, it's just the Top light spotlight coming down the pool of light. It's just in here and the rest is black. It's all dark Then he does this thing and once he's here Lights turn on but again, he would be framed somewhat here And then you have like I said, there's a door frame if you want a door frame The two characters are standing mouth open And then one just has arm here on the uh on the switch So it's very clear so it wise to turn on the lights And all the lights are now on this could have a little bit of rem You know remaining blue or red light whatever But then you got the regular lights that illuminate the rest of the room Like that to me would be something at the beginning Uh that we could envision And then Let's go back in my messiness here Then we cut to this and I don't know if you need to go from here to here. You might even go this but Does he move around here because he looks pretty much at me, which is also kind of weird. So to me it's more like That but the framing. I mean the framing could be this high Right, you got your white screen More on the on the right side and these kind of eyes are looking This way it's right to left and it's mostly a a close-up performance. So then you can go from You know the white shot Body acting and all kind of pantomime and big broad stuff to a more close-up Facial performance of him being all sheepishly saying, you know, I'm I'm about to leave here Whatever you're saying at the end. Anyway, it's a long ramble But these are my thoughts before I go into any of the details. Let me know what you think are you open to Changes like that because it might just be It might just be a camera change to be honest because you can keep all the animation, right? Just watch your twinning and the ginormous hands and stuff like that But it would just be a camera change. He that's probably the biggest animation change Maybe just toning this down a bit But to me other than other than that, it would just be camera change Lights on since they're not really animated. I mean all you do is globally move them I mean he has that expression here, but he would globally move them so that he could be here Light switch, right? This character standing here and this character here doing his singing This is all in one shot and instead of a cut We're showing that change just through lights turning on I would again Take out those textures It's kind of all realistic textures and lots of busy stuff And then with these kind of simpler texture characters, especially that contrast is a bit with um jarring I would simplify the background for now. Let's keep it, you know, solid colors And then for the second one, uh, I would spring in The camera bit closer again with all those textures here Modeling the silhouette and stuff. So I'll keep this fairly simple And onto a fairly close-up where it's just facial acting That is in summary. Let me know what you think you can completely disagree But I would love to hear your opinion on that. Thank you All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want You can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way the like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you