 Check this out here. I'm still deciding whether or not to kill you princess If I were you I'd avoid doing anything more to antagonize me All right, so my thoughts will be I'm still deciding whether or not to kill you princess That's okay. I'm just curious about the reveal. I'm still deciding whether or not to kill you princess The thing is as he looks around I think you could you could delay your rotation in the camera your pan So we're looking at him we're looking at him looking at him and then he looks over there We're going why is it looking over there and then he starts that head turn and that is a signal to the camera guy Oh, I'm gonna follow that move And go over there not to kill you princess if His voice I'm still deciding whether or not to kill you princess It's pretty even throughout. I think this reaction is too big the shoulders up and down especially him being so huge It's a massive move that is not quite Hearable if it's a word you can't really hear that in the audio and it doesn't quite marry your performance to the audio So I will take that out and keep it within this type of realm Acting wise and not so go not go so big head wise and especially shoulder wise Siding whether or not to kill you princess if I and then you know technically Keep some keep alive so he doesn't just die And the thing is acting wise for her you princess If I will you I devoid doing anything more to and tag It's very very even how she goes one two Three which to me seems like it's very determined right since there's no timing change It's gonna be like fuck it. I'm gonna go. I'm gonna go. I'm gonna go and it's not like it's this It's she's panicking and she wants to go faster faster. Maybe trip a bit faster faster So if she's that determines right and even here eyes are closed and he goes You know, she feels like a fucking got me. I don't care that feels weird that she's suddenly now in This emotional space and then she sees the knife and it's surprised like that's a crazy panicky look. It's like well What did you I don't know it feels like we have what did you expect? I mean he has If that's your your ending like that's a strong frame You got this massive hulking muscle behind her with The knife you might argue that it's a bit the usual man versus woman where the woman is the victim I know she says princess, but princess could be anything right? He could call a guy princess or it could be something else or creature or whatever But not saying that you at this point change characters, but just something to move forward But if that's your emotional ending Then to me Excuse me. I would make this a lot more panicked where it's more, you know timing wise. She feels she's doing one two three and grabbed and stop versus You know, they're moments where she she goes faster faster and then off the way Tired I think try again and try try try try try maybe you know, you will get the biggest Biggest effort will be right here right when he pulls her back And then when he does that, you know on the pullback her legs will come out a lot more Given that she's you know, she's panicked and she wants to run and she would she would maybe go forward And then she would bring her her legs back and trying to lean forward and like I want to escape I want to escape. I want to get out of here So that when she's here, it's more of a you know, she's a bit more active I know it's a close-up you can't wiggle her head around in the frame, but it's a bit more active and Panicky so that when the knife comes on To me, I wouldn't do this. Oh I'm I'm observing a blade and now I'm freaked out to me. I would do That cut this it's a bit tricky, but I mean it's hard to cut the two weird frames there Ideally, I will you know again panic panic panic you get to this and it's more of that Or too empty So I'm gonna take this sound out and it will probably even cuts There's a lot of good movement here But then that seems to slow cut that It's panic panic panic knife. Oh Like that's the beat which I know he says stuff But then you might have to just make this reaction earlier and then he finishes the line and and the tension comes from You know she gets into this pose at the beginning of the shot And then it's just slight tremor and and shaking in the head and and her Looking at the blade and maybe maybe looking straight and maybe some dark left right like there's no exit What should I do and that way to me intensity wise you have him talking so quiet Reveal someone's fleeing holy crap Then oh she's trying trying trying he grabs her knife and then tension tension tension Which doesn't mean it's boring, but it's just this this you know, I guess level 11 here all All eyes are on her literally Not literally, but you know what I mean. I hope so again tension tension tension Gets to their holy shit, and then she holds and holds and holds and it's this Medicine voice while she has to stay there and not move and is freaking out like that to me is something that would work better Unless you want to keep this because she is strong and resolved and I'm not scared It's not the first time or whatever it is and then this wouldn't be this it would just be she would be pissed off So that's kind of where I'm a bit confused and where I would change things But then it's also a bit up to you in terms of what you want to do, but Either way in the mail me just give me some feedback in terms of what this is why you're doing this for whom for yourself What stage are you open for changes and stuff like that? All right? Thanks All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you