 all right let's watch the whole thing here okay so you are pretty open to changes looking at your email I think the first time I watched this this is not like a hundred percent confusion but because the cat does this I was assuming you know especially because the joy is not opening that the cat was talking the tricky thing is that once you're past that moment and I know he moves that when he says for act but then we're supposed to look here but we're almost not seeing I mean not seeing this eye at all but we're covering this in this current layout form here it's kind of hard to connect and then as it continues to talk the cat doesn't move that's kind of working with the audios if you just watch this and imagine that what we're hearing is actually coming from the cat and I know that you wouldn't say it is as you play it there's just something about we're supposed to listen to this character but we're not quite connecting because of the face and there's so much movement here that we're always looking at the cat I'm not sure I'm not sure if this is the right idea it's very subjective but I'm not quite sure I'm connecting enough with this it's a bit tricky too as there's no audio and then it just suddenly like you already have a move and then it kind of clicks in I'm not sure if you have more I hear birds in the backgrounds I don't know if you can have a bit of a ambient sound with little birds and stuff that kind of matches the the room tone here you can't really copy paste anything because they're always talking so there's a couple things the sound suddenly starts and there's already like to me it's almost like the cat would be saying I see during here you always have a bigger head move I see and this is your C part instead of starting here and then the other thing is I wonder if a staging wise you want to bring in thinking out a lot I'm not saying this is all correct I'm kind of going through in my head what we could do imagine the dog would be here just a bit the staging is a bit nicer than being so cut off not cut off but so edgy on this here and what if this is going to destroy everything I'm thinking out loud right so you can go what I don't want to do this I'm thinking out loud here imagine the dog is a bit more here and the cat is here so center they're but they're both on that side and then here the ball will be here and then you would just see part of maybe a leg upper body and an arm and just the finishing move of a character dropping the ball and then exiting and then they will they will both kind of follow idards and head moves in the cat too and then let's see imagine I'm imagining here in real time so you have that and it's very clear that the character brought this and then when she says that we're connecting that okay that's what they're referring to was right now the ball and everything I don't know it's all a bit nebulous I'm being super picky I mean it's I mean once you watch it you understand okay I know what they're thinking but what they're meaning but I wonder if we can make it just clear nice person who brings you gifts bingo yeah just the the main thing I'm reacting to is that all he's saying I'm starting to connect it with those moves but then it's not it's dog actually saying it she's not really listening she's kind of just playing with it and then she says bingo I don't know I'm not quite sure and I hate to just say do the whole thing over with something else but I know what you're saying here in the email you're saying that you want to um you want to capture very typical cat behavior and mix them in with the audio I just wonder if we can get more or different behavior that fits the audio and and the conversation more so where she can do things and then stop it and look back where we can tell they're they're engaged together so if I'm extrapolating again with my idea that ruins everything with the cat here ball here and then I see through real as you imagine you're almost mirroring this where she's here and goes down and ends here she would end looking at um you know at the the ball then stops when he says her act that's when she would turn her head and then look at the dog because you know take a few steps but she would turn around and then they will look they would face each other so there's that connection there and after nice person you then you could potentially start playing with it and then it will be here so then you will be almost around here and then you just end it like that but I still wonder if this is too much it's too big there's too much energy for then the cat to be all relaxed and go bingo so I wonder if you can take this idea of now there the cat is playing with it but turning it down excuse me doing something a bit smaller with it it's not this ginormous jump in that action so it's a bit more relaxed so that then it ends with this with a relaxed cat pose and with her saying bingo so to me the whole performance would be yeah it's a bit more yeah I know what she's doing yeah bingo it's that kind of feel and I feel like that amount of action kind of betrays that that energy and the feel of the voice and I think if you have dog here a bit further out there right cat here ball you just see that arm plop down the thing and then arm disappears and then you do basically this idea down here stops and then her act she looks back their faces are connecting visually right to look at each other he says all this nice person and then because there's a pause nice person and then right before that pause the cat starts to play and that's kind of him pausing because he's not suddenly looking at the cat and kind of processing that the cat is playing with this and that's why the pauses could work and that's kind of it so I don't know that is very destructive my notes are super destructive um well I don't know that's just those are my very subjective thoughts on this was even here the dog looks this way we don't quite see the eyes cat looks this way and it's never quite feel like they're connecting together and I'm I'm even though I'm giving you horrible notes by destroying what you did to me this would feel a bit more connected where they're both on the same side so they're not they're not going to fight like visually to me they're together and then with that color that's a nice separate thing where maybe you know the the adult's colors are green or something so there's just a very clear connection and that's this side and then the cat goes on to this side and looks back there's a there's complexity in this they look at each other they connect then there's still some playfulness and at the end that where again they can connect like this and there's movement in the cat I don't know this that's kind of how I would imagine the shot in my head now that being said let me know email me let me know what you think and we can email each other and kind of do a bit of brainstorming to see how much you want to change if at all I mean you're saying you're open to changes but I know this was a very destructive feedback round so let me know what you want to do and we can plan it out together all right thank you all right there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome all right thank you