 All righty, let's play this in full first Sounds There you go sit down assignment So the first impression was that she feels a bit like a zombie with this off a part like this It seems like someone that's really really tired, which I get here. This is a nice clean silhouette I like all of this. I like how there's that little move of the chair and And bam, but I think where we could change a few things As compositionally, I think we can reframe and by we I mean you Things where it's maybe a bit more like that. We don't need that all that extra space She is fairly in that region and you can potentially also bring it up a bit So if I bring this up here And use the other drawing tool could easily be something this low So that there's room for the feet a little bit of widescreen is enough room there Let me just change it to this again. That would be the first thing I feel like she's just just a bit low And we're really concentrating then on kind of a lower Part with the feet cut off. It just feels a bit weird that would be that Pose wise I would try to find something where We still have a little bit of the shoulder and the neck visible and I know this will take away from I don't know that is that supposed to be a head It takes away from the sleepiness, but maybe it's something where Where she could be maybe tilted sideways There's just something once we lose the neck and shoulder. It just feels like this oversized Helmet mask costume thing on top of a body And and it just feels almost broken like that head like with this the neck would be here You know if you have the neck here you have to be careful that it's not just from the upper Part right so you have shoulders the neck usually there's joint here, but then you have a controller here So if you tilt the head It just this feels like it was not tilted this way With a little bit of lower neck, you know that neck and the head it just feels like That's the head it was rotated where it's like this The pivot is like it's weirdly pivoting in a in an off way. I don't know if that makes sense, but This to me it feels like we could have like a progression where we could maybe see the neck And then she gets into this Where then she would almost be tilted this way And then that can lead into Adjusting here a bit and into that it just feels like there's a table imagine there's a floating table And that head it's just resting On this floaty table with a pillow Until there that to me is the biggest thing Because I do like the steps And I like all again all all the things here So to me, it's mostly the pose here and then timing it just feels all a bit slow if I Make this a bit faster. Let me just see I know it takes away from the sleepiness, but I think What happens here is that I will go this is 50% faster You can go 50% faster and then slow it down a bit here Back to what you had And then you could keep this I would still start to speed it up a little bit here And then I would wait here a bit longer for a For a faster drop because right now if you look at the steps, it's one two three Four five six seven eight. It's all very even in timing So to me it feels like if she's faster here and then slows down here It's like she got a hold of this she can lean a bit then she slows down Okay, let me speed up again because now I gotta do some more work. Oh, I'm almost ready And plop into that. I think those variations in the overall speed Is gonna help us in in timing again. It's it's it's the royal we as in you And that's kind of that again. I like a lot in here watch out for this This feels like the head is kind of going through The wrist I can imagine it's lower here and the wrist comes up or the hand and there's this Dip where the forehead can come in, but it just feels a bit low Like this is almost hurting your nose at this point and we're also losing Her eyes so they could be something where you're a bit more Like this where we see the eye It's further a nice expression or if you go this way He might as well go big and maybe squeeze the nose up and like the the cheeks and they're like a really squished face And really play that fact like oh, I'm so tired of My face is on the table This is almost kind of in between the two And just because I'm framing through this even this here feels like that neck is Really broken where she would be up here This feels like if that where is that that neck? I can buy it here Even this feels broken though So I would just go a bit higher and it's rotate lower. I think that we're getting into So broken. Yeah by now again, this feels like a Ahead dislocated. This will be the body here. I can kind of buy that one and from here on it's fine, too All right That's kind of that so most little changes here and there in terms of posing With that some broader timing changes, but I like what we have and then an overall Reframe not like this, but kind of a camera reframe And you can always you know start Here ish and then at the ends we are here and you do a little bit pan and tilt the follower at the very end And super picky when a polish this one of these guys have controllers, but pull the chair And and where is it here? Those wheels will rotate obviously not now, but at the very end this will be a fun detail Since you do have a bit of it seems like Compression I'm just imagining this. I don't know if you can maybe Push that compression. I mean if you do the thing of hold the bit and then plop down It'd be nice to get maybe a bit of a stronger compression there in the chair And that is that thanks All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you