 Alrighty new update on this there's sound. Let's watch the whole thing when you finish you can take the kids swimming swimming ah Gee, I forgot my bathing suit. I guess I can't go in the water all summer. Oh Jack nobody cares what you look like in a bathing suit That's just it I'm gonna pick one up for you. I'm not gonna wear it until I lose maybe three or four pounds when you're right All right, I'm seeing all the updates in there. I got some notes here and there Turn on the sound just a tad here So I like that you included the Turn here, so it doesn't feel like a 2d card anymore. It's a head turn. This is a bit more upright the whole thing that It it feels a bit like it's just up here and it's cut off and there's nothing else there And I think to me it feels like she can come in here and then we actually bring in The frame just a bit more when she comes in and does that so it's not just in here We barely see it. I almost missed it. I think I would Stylize it in caricature and just go broader because it's also the dialogue and the voices everything's very old-timey So when you do this she could have a slight lean back That amount of rotation is okay, but imagine just the head would be further back She's really making a point to be seen. Hey, I'm talking to you But also something for the audience to really notice right now It's a bit too subtle subjectively just to me. I think that could be Could be tweaked Then in terms of his arms It still has the thing. I see some of the changes where the hand starts to have an arc It doesn't cover her which is great I Think to me, there's just some Contrasting broader things but also some technical things like technically if you look at if I'm gonna go crazy here with If I track just that wrist I'm gonna pretend that that's where the controller is to some degree, right? And then I guess it's around here. I'm gonna keep pretending to be tracking Something although at this point I guess it would be lower, but anyway Broadly speaking you can see this transition here how this arm goes up straight and then like that So watch out for your arcs just just from a technical point of view, but it still feels like this is Is a huge move and then This is another huge move. So when you look at that, it's very similar in terms of energy You might argue well, this one's higher. Sure, but this is why I mentioned that I Personally would have kept this one here again. This is it's your shot. Oh all subjective But you are paying for this workshop. So I want to give you my opinions. I'm not gonna not say anything That's my job here. So I still personally would reduce this by a ton You can still go up and do this and then that arm might just be down here Slightly up or I would still just keep it on that table so that when it's here Keep it there. And if he goes all the way up like that, what does that mean? Well, maybe that means that the shoulder might just be lower But it's still in that pose where it's kind of like that And that way you have somewhere to go with intensity same with this this to me feels too big I would go not more than this meaning that you might go from something like this Soft with a little bit of an arc up like that or something small like this But this is small bigger big, right? So this would be the small one slightly bigger gesture and then you finish with the big one And that's why I mentioned this otherwise you have same energy three times just feels very repetitive personally Yeah, I think this just takes away from that Big gesture there watch out Excuse me. Mm-hmm. Never eat crackers before you have a feedback session From a technical point of view watch out as you continue with more detail when you have a lot of elbow movements Like that the hand is completely still you're gonna have to have some keep alive and some impression on the fingers things like that Even that elbow if you watch that boom stops a bit harshly so Keep going on that type of cleanup same thing if you have all of that body movement Watch out for this wrist. There's nothing going on. So you're gonna have to have some movement and compression and changes That's all the awesome polish stuff And there's a little bit of a slight feel of a sudden stop Pong on that That line there. It's not like there's a Arm pop, but still it's just a bit harsh and even this one starts to have it almost like a pin through here Like it's just pivoting off of here and then bigger linear key coming down. So it's just mostly Clean up for that stuff and then This one's a bit odd if you look at his eyes It's very fast Looks over there quickly over there Clearly over there and it's almost like he's looking at camera, but he watches in real time It doesn't it just doesn't quite feel natural and I know it is one of the notes where I Would suggest to have him kind of look at her to see a ditchy ditchy catch on that I'm doing something wrong, but what I would do is if he goes like this. Oh Oh Also again arc-wise if you track that nose It's a massive wall here. Boom. So watch out just overall spacing and and arcs and all that stuff But to me it feels like how is he going here goes like this? I will probably go from here and at this point not as far although I like that eyes lead there, but I'm trying to find a moment where I Mean one of the compromise could be just to have your dart over there and leave it Don't move over there So just kind of like a look because it is corner of the eye it gives you that kind of feeling of is she checking And then at least it will read enough. This is just too much and it happens right before the cut If there's something then cut out of that last dart, but in order to not So I do it in order to have that read better But what I would be if this was my shot what I would do is I would reduce the amount of head movement So you move the head around a lot. You don't quite notice what the eyes are doing. So to me, it's more like a Stop here have a nice little R coming back And then that way there's not too much movement and you settle a bit more. So and then that way you have kind of a Just a clear read of that. I Make sense and Then watch out There's something you did for the note of having A movement in that arm because of this was all the tension and in the post change with but right now It just feels a bit mechanical stops on a bit of a harsh note and It doesn't feel like it's quite part of the moment It just feels like a separate move just added on to me it would be and Ah like this is when he goes up and on that up shoulder goes up and then the chest goes a bit over There's slight rotation and this then goes down and it might even Go off the hip a little bit to be a bit looser, but that's kind of how we approach that The rest is working better here in the second half This is just a bit post-aposive and all of that moves and it also feels like a linear key on that leg Like the roots the leg the arm everything moves bam and everything stops even there's a little bit of continuation here I would have that a bit more like something really would lead probably could lead with that arm a lot Or you start moving your your route over for a shift and then the leg continues But even when he comes down here, I would give it a little bit easier and he's out just a little bit Even though that's a step, but imagine it has a bit of a rotation on that ankle Just kind of soft a little bit, but you still want to feel like well at that point There's no more weight so the hip is going to go up a bit And it's not such of a harsh stop And on that post change it's slightly more forward, but to me I know it's kind of a match with this and he feels fairly straight, but It just feels still a bit more like this I would personally cheat and start that bend in that in the chest around here And you don't have to maybe less with the head, but it's just a bit more of a Like that I love this though, I love that he has that Huh that thought and also you have it here right there, huh, huh? That's great I love that that's in there Watch out this starts to feel a bit too twin there You just have a bit of a different pose arm back in maybe this one a bit further in It just feels not quite natural and I think one of the other notes were that he's just a bit squatty And I know he gets up here, but even here he still has there's still something fairly Squatty there, but it's mostly this just feels off the straight arms twins with that squatty feel there This watch out. There's a tangent right there between her arm and his arm and this is weird as if She's pushing his arms. See that that arm comes over a both of them stop at the same time And they feel like IK arms just because they go in a very straight line. They the arcs are very harsh here They seem like IK arms and then it comes to a sudden stop And it feels like you don't want to overlap things which I understand why you want to keep this clear, but And you just kind of cheat and bring that arm in like that For a bit of a bigger lean over there. I would still push that it's still fairly straight And this feels out so to me it feels like bring that arm in but lean that body over more To get that I'm not gonna wear it. I'm not I'm against you type of feel Same thing here. It's a harsh stop bound So it's a lot of clean up. I think mostly that I would say here So watch out for your arcs and easins and stops and especially arts and arms if they're IK But that's cute The only thing I would say is on That hand here again arcs seems like it goes up and it has a bit of a stop and goes down And then after that it's kind of the same pose wise with the fingers Imagine that hand will be a bit rotated out and then comes in and there's been maybe a bit of a squeeze of the fingers So just a bit more Polish love on that one just overall as well Alrighty, thanks Alright, there's an email you can sign up You can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want to get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome All right. Thank you