 All righty, let's watch his first zero Whoa easy on the shrimp Those are supposed to be for everybody. I took a few hundred. Why put that back Yo, keep this girl away from the ocean That's what the shrimp said Oh, it's good. All right So it's been a while since I've seen this but it's cool to see it again, and I think my main impression I think it's mostly about him Where I would tone down some of the moves, so let's see Like here already now. I'm changing my junior. It's not for this part. It's not toning down. I think it's more It's more focused moves where He's looking this way. It has a fairly soft turn to the left and Whoa, even though It's you know sharp enough in here if you look at the body It's always moving to the right. So it feels to me like This should be a bit more calm where he looks over and he can look over with a little bit of body movement and then You have to decide. I'm as strange since you were in my class and these are these are my previous notes But I'm looking at when he takes that step I think what you could do is a little bit of movement and you can take the step to look I'm just concerned that now this this step with all of that body movement takes away from this It's almost like it's almost like you want to take that step, but not be You know further to the right than this So when there's a reaction you can go whoa like you can actually move the body fairly To the right if that makes sense like the translet would be moving a little bit moving and whoa versus now It's just moving all the time until whoa The whoa seems to be mostly in that head up and shoulder up and finishing That translates hope that makes sense. I feel like it this could be just a bit more Accent and watch out your translate and your rotation gives us almost a bit of a pivot here And that in that ear section. I think you want to It will help translating a bit less and keeping that turn It's that way that way you won't have that constant immediate movement in the in the body So imagine you're moving a lot less to the right head stays the same in terms of the amount of rotation That's just kind of the move and then there's a little bit more movement as he finishes that turn And does a bit of a side step, but then the side step. He's a bit more like this like he is balanced Looking at this and then when he has the whoa You can finish that sudden translate over to this But then here I Feel like there needs to be more in the head Well, he doesn't really move it's almost like that that head is an I came out of world space Where it would be like easy on the shrimp like even a little head up and down And even on shrimp you can have a little bit of root up and down Those are supposed to be for everybody Those are supposed to be for everybody and then before everybody everybody would have see Actually, now all my notes are about emptying it up instead of turning it down But that's for later. So everybody is same thing I would have a little bit of maybe a little bit of a lean forward a little bit of root up and down in the head accent Everybody must be for everybody. And then you can relax back down to the right and what you have Everybody and the same thing here. He goes down and it keeps moving to the right Into this to me. It would be this come down and hold so he's not really moving so we can look at her And then he goes But then that move It's almost like you want to lead with the head. It's the head up This that almost pulls the body to the right And that's the thing even though it makes me laugh Watching it now. It feels fairly big I would reduce the forward and back like 20% Just a little bit And then same thing here once you're done He keeps drifting to the left back into that. So it's like keeping it here and then And then he goes forward like that forward drift that forward for him for but for us left I would hold that a bit. So go back hold a bit and Then go forward Why put them back and the back to me feels like a little bit of a Sharp head up here. It's almost like he gestures back on top of this And the same thing here once you're done back immediately Rotates and moves. Yeah, keep this girl and it's always moving just it doesn't overall softness to it So it's almost like get back hold and Then it's almost like, you know hold to making sure she does it then she goes, okay And after she says okay, then he moves was that way also we know where to look So he's not always going attention and always holding are always moving Yeah, keep this girl with the ocean And here ocean feels this is all a bit One move I will keep this slow slow slow and then ocean that part a bit stronger than all of this That makes sense instead of one big move. It's slow big ocean That's what the shrimp said That's what the shrimp said And then watch out This is a bit too post to pose where this goes up and then it feels a bit too close I feel like it's almost uncomfortable Or maybe you want to raise a little bit in frame Maybe that might be here, but I would I would keep this maybe to here Maybe to here give a little bit of space and not overlap And not too opposed to posting where the head is down the same time as this is up. That's what the shrimp said That's what the shrimp said and on this part. That's what the shrimp That's where all the shrimps are like even like a little shrimp a little bit of a an accident that head moves So it's not just that's what the shrimp a rotation up. That's fairly smooth That's what the shrimps and then you Simplify these a lot where you wouldn't have those big one frame pops in the jaw Like one frame close one frame up You're going to keep this over two three frames. You can simplify this a lot You have a lot of chatter in the corners as they go out and then in and then out So it will be simplifying this by by a lot of shrimp said I just see a lot of chatter And strobing in there all the shrimp said all the shrimp said That's what the shrimp said That's what the shrimp said This is to me the biggest thing some stuff about the eyebrows, but I would just there's a lot of body changes that I'm suggesting So I would I would start with that because it's gonna have to refocus where we look Easy on the shrimp. Oh easy. I feel like there's something a bit too strong in that second Move down. It's almost like she's hiking a trail here Maybe a bit less forward. Oh easy on and then on the back I would overshoot the chest a little bit. It feels like we're going from this To this and it's fairly locked. I like that this continues to move But I would soften this almost a little bit And I know if that's an IK arm, but you're getting into a fairly straight path here. Watch out Yeah, it feels a bit IK sometimes it feels like it's stuck in in space Same thing here, you can see that move back. It's fairly straight It does feel a bit like an IK because you have movement in the elbow up and down or here up But the rotation is the same here So you're gonna have to align this a bit more with the forearm So even if there's an elbow movement, you're gonna have a bit more effect on Forearm and that's going to affect the wrist a bit more Just be for everybody I only took a few Yeah, I took a few hundred Alright, put that back Okay She's so good though Hundred Alright, put that back Okay Yo, kid I only took a few Yeah, I took a few hundred Alright, put that back I only took a few Yeah, I took a few hundred Now seeing this now and I know, you know, maybe maybe you've worked on things I feel back giving all those notes and since I don't know who who gave you notes Or if you continued or this is my failing But I feel like there's too much movement on her as well If she goes This is now she explained herself and she wants to see how he reacts And we are going over to look at him So I wouldn't bring her head down because it distracts You need to keep looking at him So to me it feels like you want to stay there Yeah, I took a few hundred Into this you just delete that look down So she stays from here to here and then Alright, put that back And then she goes down into the ocean That makes sense Looking, looking, looking And now she heard what he had to say and then she can do this And that's that Alright, so these are kind of big rich notes Let me know, let me know what you think And how you want to move forward And you know, the errors you want to keep and change And all that good stuff Alright, thank you Alright, there's an email You can sign up You can start whenever you want You can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions Either way, a like and subscribe would be awesome Alright, thank you