 Alrighty, this is spline version. Let's plate it in full first 1037 and NJ here's pink Floyd Alrighty, it's really not a volume in just a tad loud here for me 1037 and NJ here's pink Floyd. It's cool stuff. I like it. I would say The couple things I think the three immediate impressions were 1037 and NJ a bit of a stiffness through here 1037 and NJ When you hear the sounds 1037 and NJ And in the head It's mostly just all in the jaw and I think even though I know he's all tired and depressed and all that But I think and no one sees him But you could still slightly pretend with a bit more energy through here as in Changes in the head accent so that the head has a bit more up and down and side to side and Even with a bit of a straightening of the of the body and down not so much in the root But like a little bit of up and down just a bit more contrast in there like this is great That type of stuff And I don't think it would take you away from this so it's Just a bit more and then you have that at the end This feels a bit soft and not that this is like a Like a buzzer that he has to hit pink Floyd There's just something I think it's also in terms of how much you drag the fingers and then how they go down This gives it all bit of a weird sausagey soft feel. Oh, that's a weird comment to give but I think I'll watch out for that And then the other one is once we get to here There's just always stuff moving I do like I do like all of this from a technical point of view But you're getting to a point where goes back and immediately bounces back a lot. It doesn't This feels more like someone pushed him from behind and then this is almost a bit distracting in what the fingers are doing It's almost like for me. It feels more like a tech demo then a Character shot if that makes sense where it's like I'm really distracted by the fingers And I know that's a lot of work put into it So I hate to give this type of notes, but it feels like you want to do the couple things. Let's go one by one here Even this here where and I know it's kind of getting ready there to do this and then all right I like the hesitation in the hand Not sure if that's something you're playing with hesitation kind of almost a bit of a shake, but This was more like there's a key in and there's a spline and there's the move down So I will probably a not go as high. This is something good question for you. What lens this is? He seems to have really massive hands I know that's because we're closer to the to the camera or If that's how he is because you know looking at this here So it feels like maybe you have to go with the longer lens and then reposition the camera to get into the same composition Probably while we're up there. I will probably keep that hand a bit more here the fingers just for the silhouette It's not all right around here It's something like that feels nicer in terms of the usage of space Even down there a bit But I would look at like the main impressions that everything's a bit floaty and always moving. That's my main concern So it's almost like you want to It's almost like this is too much of a focus that he has fingers down against his very subjective, but fingers down Excuse me fingers down here and then Going all the way up. It's such a big focus Where I feel like it could be something where he's like this and he's barely moving and also just because I'm talking about the beginning There's any way you can move that arm down with like a Ben bow Get a bit more of a shape Into this it doesn't feel it feels almost broken back there, but it feels like you want to be in an area like this where Maybe like he's tapping some of the knobs or something a bit more quiet Maybe the eyes are a bit wider and then you can see some darting in the eyes Unless you really want to just kind of space out and then I would just make this really just Less energetic like this seems like oh, I'm ready But to me feels like you want to do all that the tiredness and comes up and even then the fingers would would only be You know like this far and Then when he does this it's just right at the ends. He brings out the fingers For this and this will be the moment of now. I got to turn back into being more animated where you could even Push I don't know if you want to do that. I bring the hips back So it's not so straight. It gives you just like an overall feeling of of curvature And down and depressed And then when he pushes this it could be like with a little bit of an adjustment in the hips And then you got that visual feel in the back And I mean the the arm might hide that but then it's a bit straighter. You know me like even this Um, then you have that feel I like all of this But you know the the fingers are tighter there the fists and everything It's just a bit more liveliness like this in the head. That's cool And that way you have a bit more contrast of just less movement less of a bigger shape there And then he starts this 1037 and nj here Oh, there's an nj and it's just a bit more up and down like I said a bit more activist pink Floyd And then the thing is maybe this will be with a fist since you do have a flat hand like this It's a bit repetitive So maybe that could be a bit different just a bit of a difference, you know or Or he's like this and just Maybe that's what you could do is you could have the fingers like this and it's just kind of slowing putting And I know I'm totally changing the shot. I'm putting out that idea. So obviously you can do whatever you want to but Maybe it's something where it's like, you know, like I'm looking at the shapes Everything is just round and down even the fingers are round and down Just because it adds that feeling of just I don't like this and that's almost too Straight and active and and energetic where what if you stay like this? And he puts like this side Of the hands on the buzzer or you know like the on the air button So that it's more of a fist And not like an angry fist but kind of like just like that side curled and that way you have The contrast of that shape Right where it's almost like this kind of pose but it hits this on that And then when he's done Then you have this because he's still in the energy mode that makes more sense It's contrasting to the beginning. So it's not the same And then I would also not take these out at the same time It gets a bit too twin then you can easily just offset these and like this arm will go first that way This doesn't have to be so fast. So you can leave this here Bring that arm first bring that one up And then watch out this feels a bit too IK where those arms go straight up The hands and it's very clean where this is kind of locked in space while the head goes back this way So I would try to go with this first then this gives you asymmetry Moving the headphones forward. So you have this kind of move and this kind of move in the head And then that And then to me it feels like you want to just stay there and not shoot forward I know he has to get there. So like whatever you can do for me To just go Oh, maybe he only gets this far like this pose Is what you hit here? And I know you want to go back and do all the rocking I'm just looking at it in terms of It's quiet like rounded shapes. Everything is down, right? Like I said the fingers and down then boom contrast straighter more energy more movement and then back to Oh rounded And quiet and nothing is moving Then moving into this and doing maybe that like that is kind of it. Maybe going this far So that you have more contrast because I'm concerned that There's just enough movement is a bit too active But then you have movement movement movement movement movement movement movement movement movement and then we're gone in terms of contrast and changes and especially this feels really too big Which I hope that makes sense right so offsets all of this and then maybe not going as far Or you go as far and you make the shot a bit Oh, there is sounds, but you are fading it out. So maybe you can go back here and just hold this for a moment I know you want to maybe not make the shot longer, but maybe this for a second of Just this moment of quietness after all of this activities is like this It is way and in way and then you go And it wouldn't be this forward rock, but it's more like You slowly getting into this pose And again, I this is very subjective, but I'm massive distracted by those fingers there This is almost like aliens and it's a face hugger like some creature that goes over his face I'll be totally fine with him going Hold and then And that's your end Like this to me is a stronger visual pose than this. This is if you had his eyes open is What should I eat today? Spaghetti or meatloaf? Whereas this could even be a bit more depressed, but this has a nice feel of just You see the eyes. It's a nice simpler shape holding the head Versus this might even be a bit too complicated in terms of a last pose, but it could work But yes That is that I hate to give such crazy destructive notes, but that's just my feeling to it Obviously sure to other people and see what other people say, but That is my thought on that. It's definitely a lot. I mean, I like to shout a lot too But since you are signed up for this and you're paying I just want to give you my my honest opinion, which is of course subjective. Alrighty. Thank you All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want You can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you