 Let's examine how you can craft a top grade nine response to question number three of the English language paper one exam. Now when it comes to this question, this is basically the structure question. You always tend to get asked by AQA how the writer has structured the text to interest you as a reader. Now that you know hopefully what to anticipate for question number three, I'd like to show you how you can write a top grade nine response based on the 2020 paper. Of course, with this response, have a think of how you can also apply some of the elements within this response to other question threes of paper one exams. Okay. So this question, as I mentioned, relates to the 2020 Rosie exam. This is the one to do with Rosie and the stranger child. However, of course, as I mentioned, this is a grade nine response, but think about and have a think as to how you can apply some of these methods to other question threes of language paper one. As I mentioned, this question is the structure question. It tends to ask you how the writer has structured the text to interest you as a reader and you're always interested as a reader. Okay. You never say that you're bored out of your head. Even if you find the text quite boring, you're always interested and you find elements, structural elements that illustrate your interest. Okay. Now, my suggestion when writing a response to this is I would suggest adopting the peel paragraph structure. Peel basically stands for point evidence explanation and link. Okay. You open with your point, which I've written in blue. Then you move on to your evidence, which I've put in red. Then you add your explanation. Okay. So this is where you talk about technique in this case, structural technique. And then you start unpacking that. That's the bulk of your marks. That's where a lot of your marks will be taken from. This is in your second in your pill paragraph. This is your explanation. And then of course you end by linking it back to the question. This is what I've written in purple, linking it back to the keywords within the question. So let's have a look at how to write a four mark paragraph for the 2020, 20 question paper. Okay. And this is a four mark one paragraph. I suggest you do these times two for the eight marker for question number three. So of course, as I mentioned, the question asks how the writer structure the text to interest you as a reader. And my suggestion in terms of the keywords in the question is always structure. So you're thinking about structural technique as opposed to language techniques and how this structure interests you as a reader. You were always interested. So let's have a look at the point that had made relating to structure for this particular question where Rosie sees a stranger child and then it disappears. So this is an opening point, the writer successfully interests us as readers by using a circular narrative at the start and the end of the passage. Circular structure is a really powerful device. If you're able to spot it, it's a great grade nine technique when it comes to structure. Circular narrative simply means it starts in a certain way and it ends in a really similar way. Okay. So for example, within this extract, the passage starts with an empty garden and it ends with an empty garden. It's in the middle where we meet the stranger child. However, it starts empty and ends empty. That's basically what I'm starting off with, but I don't stop there. I add an additional sentence to my opening point. The garden seems eerie and abandoned at the start and the end. And we wonder whether it is enchanted. Not only have I mentioned the use of circular structure and circular technique by the author, which is structure, but equally I've talked about beginning versus end. I'm juxtaposing the two. So I'm really hitting all the different points in my AOs and what the examiner is seeking in this question. Okay. So that's the opening point relating to structure and how it interests you. By the way, if you're looking at an extract and it starts at one point and ends at a different point, you can still talk about how structure is interesting where it begins at a certain point and ends in a completely different place. That's still a really good structural technique to talk about. Let's look at the evidence. Okay. And obviously here within the evidence for question number three, I will suggest if you juxtaposing beginning versus ending in this case is structure, how it's circular at the start and the end. You want to find a bit of evidence from the opening paragraph and a bit of evidence from the end to support what you've written in your point. So this is the evidence. At first Rosie's children were playing in the empty overgrown garden. That's my first bit of evidence taken from early on in the text, but then I juxtapose it even if Rosie sees a child by the end when she stepped aside, the child was gone. I've added two bits of evidence, one from the beginning, one from the end to juxtapose the two. Now I'm going to launch into my explanation talking about the use of structure by the author. The writer uses a complex sentence. Again, I'm adding even more structure to really make my answer compelling for my examiner. My examiner has no choice but to say, this is an amazing paragraph. OK, so the writer uses a complex sentence, additional structural technique at the start of the extract to illustrate how empty the garden is. Aside from Rosie's children, it seems eerily empty. Yet Rosie sees the stranger child, but when she approaches it at the end, the final declarative sentence takes us back to an empty garden, which captivates us as we wonder whether Rosie is hallucinating or not. What I have done in my explanation is the first half of my explanation in my first two sentences. I've talked about how the opening is like. I've said in the opening it's basically empty and the writer uses a complex sentence to emphasize this. However, I've then juxtaposed it at the end. OK, and I've said, OK, the declarative sentence at the end actually also shows it ends off in an empty garden, even if in the middle there's a stranger child actually Rosie steps out and sees there's nobody there. By the way, if you're not sure what structural techniques there are, please do check out the language and structural techniques video that I've done where I'll go over a list of these different techniques. OK, so if you're not entirely sure what complex sentences or declarative sentence, just check out that video. It's only about five minutes. OK, anyway, so going back to this, the bulk of your marks are here. OK, so of course, you need to still for create foregrounding with your point, your evidence, right? You're setting out your argument as to why it's really interesting. You start off with your point, say circular structure. You then have your evidence from the beginning versus the end. However, you then now need to make a case and really dissect. OK, at the beginning, this is really interesting because it's empty. Even if there's a child in the middle, actually, by the end, the garden is still really empty. We have this eerie sense of feeling. And on top of that, I keep on referring back to us as readers. It captivates us. OK, I never lose sight of the fact that I have to mention this in relation to how this interests us as readers. Now, I then have to still add a final step in my pill paragraph. This is linking it back to the question. Hence the writer maintains our intrigue. So this is our interest as readers by using a circular narrative to create curiosity around the stranger child. We are keen to read on to discover if it will reappear in this overgrown garden. What I have done is ended by linking it back to the question and relating it to how it interests us as readers using two separate sentences. OK, so this is a perfect, I would argue, grade nine paragraph response. And you want to aim to do two of these in your question. Number three for language, people want. This is a structure question. OK, so do make sure you just have a look back at this video. Look at how I go over the separate parts of my pill paragraph in and try yourself to apply this. OK, try to apply this in your own writing for question number three.