 Hello everyone welcome to today's live stream I'm Robin Shaw and I hope we get a I hope not so many people come late this time usually over half the class comes late but there are early students here today or on-time students too let's take a look just looking at the chat Layla's here Anna hello guys Anna I guess Anna is here for long term we've been talking a lot more so good for you Anna sticking around I feel like I'm getting closer to you all the time was I grace hello lolly lolly welcome back Sarah tie tie here again hello and Samira welcome Samira Wayne hello Carrie's here sleepwalker and Alex Alex yeah so a lot of women today where's the men if you're a man please tell me yeah so it's been an exciting week because of my other channel the shy English channel down here as most of you know I got the two two channels I'm pointing down here so the this the shy English channel I think in December it passed one million subs nobody noticed but I did get the award last week and I'll just show you the award if you saw it on me I showed it on Instagram but I'll show it again this this was the award for 100,000 subs so I got this in 2017 on the shy English and then 100,000 subs so that was a few years ago and then this week this big thing came this gold button for one million subs shy English on YouTube so thank you if you're if you are subscribed to that channel and this channel I hope one day I don't think I'll get the gold button for this channel but I hope one day I can get the silver button for this channel anyways thank you guys let's see we're gonna do we're gonna do writing today so I'm gonna start that in a minute or two we're just collecting the students but I'll start the writing Francis Delitas here Magna hello Magna Madi hey I'm the man of the day I'm the man of every day me into kin hello it's called yeah one silver one gold and Madi can you give me the golden one well after this live stream I might just put it I keep my silver in the closet so I might keep the gold in the closet too maybe I should hang in on this board I'm more proud of my university education and my degrees than the YouTube or but anyway thanks for any congratulations guys now we're gonna talk about writing today this is writing writing lab 13 so I'm not it's not a Q&A I'm not gonna answer any English questions unless it's related to the writing we're gonna talk about and the writing I'm gonna take from my writing groups now as you know I have a I have WhatsApp group many WhatsApp groups and I have the VIP member teacher chat daily free chat anyway anyway what the the group I'm interested in today is the daily homework group so this is a group where students put in their daily homework writing or speaking every day do I check it every day I don't check every day but I do check it all and give feedback to help people so I'm going to take the writing out of this group and you guys can join the group if you check the description of this video it's not a free group but I'm going to take let's take a little start out with Layla I can see Merzan joined welcome Merzan we're gonna start here let's Layla gave me permission to put her writing on the on this live stream so we'll put it here and we'll go through the writing find out her mistakes things like that all right so let's take a look at Layla's writing here the mystery of Malaysian flight 370 still continues all right so you're talking about the the missing flight and that was 370 yeah um right here I think it's a specific name so Malaysian flight 370 it would be the name so I'd put a capital there let's see if we can just put my changes in blue mystery of Malaysian flight uh 370 still continues it left Kuala Lumpur and was headed towards Beijing all right so that was uh when was that 2014 I think that happened so so far so good your your writing is okay okay where is the jet all right jet airplane where are the passengers uh two good questions Malaysian government considered what happened was a terrorist act all right so this this right here um something wrong something wrong with this part right here let's see if we can get a red what's wrong with this sentence how how can we make this sentence right here better that's what I want to do Malaysian government considered what happened was a terrorist attack so what mistake can you see in this uh sentence here uh Layla asks how many writings are you going to check I don't know and Mahdi says you you need to cut your hair you look like a Scandinavian old person uh so what's wrong with old Scandinavian people don't they look awesome flight flight 370 so what's wrong with this sentence right here Malaysian government considered what happened was a terrorist attack all right so Layla she's instead of past tense I wasn't too concerned about the past tense but yeah it would be better to make it uh the present tense still they still consider so Malaysian government considers what happened and I'm probably going to fix this as a terrorist act all right there's still one mistake with this sentence right here what's wrong with this sentence her true this and Michelle hello Mahdi says nothing wrong just the past uh I wasn't the past tense there's you could use past or present it's not too uh I'm not going to be too picky about that but I am picky about there is a missing word in this sentence that's the clue there's a missing word very important word and sleepwalker has it right before Malaysian we need to put the the Malaysian government all right we have to identify this uh noun uh so we should start off with the Malaysian government considers what happened as a terrorist act okay now it's okay so uh let's put in that as a blue all right next sentence here possibly lead the pilot we was beyond this mystery but for what purpose all right let's separate this sentence make it uh now there's a lot of mistakes here there's a lot sorry Layla there's a few mistakes uh I'm always happy when students write and I'm always happy when students don't have perfect writing I love mistakes that's how we learn that's how others learn so don't be upset but there's a few issues here why we use present tense because they they they still consider they consider it right now you could use past tense that they considered it at a point at the past and you could use present tense that they still consider it uh so but I said I'm not going to be picky about that right now so the the biggest mistake here was probably the possible possibly lead the pilot was beyond this mystery but for what purpose hmm yeah Alex the Malaysian possibly lead the pilot well actually I'm putting this all in red maybe I should just focus on the parts these are all the parts I have I have problems with all right well lolly lolly comes in with behind yeah so we want to say behind this as uh not beyond this what was behind this so we use the expression what what what is behind behind the mystery what is the reason for the mystery so we say behind Alex the leading pilot lead of pilot lead of the pilot oh leila so yeah I I think these two words we can switch them so possibly the lead pilot the lead pilot was behind this mystery but for what purpose all right and you can see what's wrong here a little bit of delay and and a yeah it's a question mark for what purpose for what purpose why that means a why so we definitely need a a question mark here for what purpose why is pilot the same as plot no those are different words they're not connected pilot and plot are different and we don't need this past tense mirror just for what purpose for what purpose we need that question but for what purpose it's a question you're asking why this was just speculation that's okay the victims families wanted to know let's separate that the victims families wanted to know what happened and how the investigation was going now this is okay all thoughts and prayers went out to the victims that's okay this was a big tragedy uh big tragedy i think big big tragedy just checking because uh big tragedy i want to use a different word here big's okay big's okay there's nothing wrong but we might want to this might be a good place to use huge tragedy so another let's try the using the word huge another synonym might be great this was a great tragedy and this great it's not in a positive way it just means very very but we're going to go back to huge just means very big tragedy so i like that all right so that was leila's writing not too many mistakes leila usually does a great job with her writing and usually she doesn't have this many mistakes so i'm very happy so i'll just quickly review the mystery of malaysian flight 370 i thought the this should be all capital still continues it left koala lumpur and was headed towards beijing where is the jet where are the passengers the malaysian government considers what happened as a terrorist act possibly the lead pilot was behind this mystery but for what purpose this was just speculation all right there's a very good word speculation now what is what does speculation mean you're just guessing you don't know the facts you don't know the truth you're it's just speculation so the lead pilot was behind this mystery we don't know maybe the lead pilot there's no evidence so this is just speculation guessing the victims the victims families wanted to know what happened and how the investigation was going all thoughts and prayers went out to the victims this was and i i changed i changed it from big to huge this was a huge tragedy or a great tragedy all right good for you good for you leila shocking tragedy yes shock shocking tragedy terrible tragedy i just don't like to i don't like students using big or small as adjectives now these these are the these are the easy english words big or small but i like students to try and go to a higher level of vocabulary instead of it was a it was a big room it was a big it was a big tv you know try to use something a little it was a it was a extremely large room or something like that okay we're gonna go on to someone else's writing we'll probably do carries she's watching i'm going back to the homework group here where's carry carry there she has a long one here copy that delete all this hope you're watching leila put in carries there carries writing she's writing about her corona experience all right so what does carry say here let's make this big screen it's been two weeks since my parents got covid 19 and i started to be in self quarantine okay make sure it's been two weeks since my parents got covid 19 and i started to be in self quarantine and this uh to be in i don't really like it here i i started to be in i i think we can just cut that right out and she can say it's been two weeks since my parents oh make sure you guys watch this now this is a contraction for it has not it is it has and usually in writing if you're doing formal writing you should never write any contractions in an essay and if uh like if this was a diary it's fine but let's let's pretend it's a little more formal writing you shouldn't write a contraction for it has i know in speaking native speakers always use this contraction that's okay but let's let's write it out here which would make better for writing a little formal writing so it has been two weeks since my parents got covid 19 and i started self quarantine all right so that's i have to get the second covid 19 test tomorrow morning so i have a problem with this the i have to get the second covid 19 test tomorrow morning so she's identifying it as something special uh are covid test specials like the first test is special but the second test is special through uh there's a sense here that each uh i know you guys are thinking oh every covid test is special but the sense here is that there's a process of getting covid tests and there's a detailed plan of getting covid tests and i don't think that's true so we shouldn't really use the and i'm just going to change this to my it's just talking about her experience not everyone's experience so the focus is is going to be on the my not everyone else uh not everyone might get that second covid test i don't know so i have to get my second 19 my second covid 19 test tomorrow morning okay i felt frightened that i may get a positive result because if that will happen i have to be locked in the treatment center at least for 10 days and that would drive me insane all right so we're going to separate this sentence right here and what i find with kary's writing kary is very developed in her speaking so she she can speak english very well and she writes a lot how people speak english but a lot of you know speaking english and writing english are a little bit different so for example going back to the the contraction of it has of course native speakers will always say it's but for writing we cannot say it's so looking at this paragraph she she is writing exactly how native speakers speak and i would say for formal writing i can't do that can't do that we gotta make it a little more structured all right anyway right away looking at this paragraph immediately what's wrong with this paragraph i'm gonna take a quick break drink the tea see what you guys what's wrong with this paragraph lope is watching you from haydie you get you guys are starting to focus on the grammar of the paragraph before you even read it what is wrong i don't even have to read it and i see a big mistake well there's a little delay i hope you guys out here the tense is not the problem the problem is the sentence is too long all right this sentence is too long before i read the sentence i can see oh we got too much happening so what's happening here there's a comma because there's a comma here there's an and all right so she's trying to write a very complex sentence and good for her but uh for i wouldn't i wouldn't try to add so much information in one sentence the more information you're adding the the bigger the possibility the reader is confused the bigger the possibility your grammar has some problems so i might split this up let's see now you guys are focused on the i've felt i've felt frightened all right this is okay i have felt frightened so up until now now she has felt frightened that i may get a positive result because if that if that um i felt frightened that i may get a positive result because if that i'm gonna take out this will and we're gonna say happens let's put this back to black we don't need a comma we don't need this comma well let's yeah we can put this comma here as a pause i felt see you know it's complicated so you know it's a little it's gotta be very careful even when i'm editing because so much information good for her to put all this information but uh we shouldn't have such big sentences in english i felt frightened that i may get a positive result because if that happens all right so i'm gonna change this just because if that happens if that happens we're talking about the future i have i have to be locked in the treatment center at least for 10 days and i'm gonna yeah i'm gonna move this at least for 10 days here for for at least 10 days so it's a little change there all right let's see what the how many information how much information should we insert in a sentence well you shouldn't have you shouldn't have so many commas a because and an and uh you know every sentence is different but i would say don't only use one conjunction she's using two here and i would say as a rule just use because or and or but one time of course there are exceptions you can break that rule but as a to be safe don't use two conjure conjunctions like this all right so i have to be locked in the treatment center for at least 10 days and i am going to put the period there i think that is enough in information for our writing of course if we're speaking and as i said kary likes to write as she speak when someone's speaking when people are speaking of course they give a lot of information they would say exactly what she wrote here for speaking but for writing we got to uh get less and right here i would put a that would drive me insane i'll put the new sentence and for emphasis let's put an exclamation that would drive me insane insane all right i would literally do anything to get a negative result on the second covid test and to be free on this sunday all right so let's go down here okay again she's she's writing as she would speak so literally this is going to be a problem for that's ugly this is a problem this is often used for speaking native speakers always use the word literally which means i would seriously or sincerely or certainly do anything uh so that's a spoken expression but for writing nope you can't use that in writing especially formal right well your diary again guys in your diary self diary you could write anything you want but i'm trying to teach a little more formal here we shouldn't use the word literally that's a more of a spoken term so i would do anything to get a negative result on let's again change that to my second covid test and to be free this sunday well i'm going to break this up here again this this is this is okay i would do anything to get a negative result on my second covid test and to be free on this sunday but it's it's kind of two separate pieces of information i would do anything to get a negative result and i want to be free on sunday so i'm going to split that so i would do anything to get it or actually to keep it together i'm going to use a conjure a conjunction here i would do anything to get a negative result on my second covid test and i'm going to put it because i think that's a good word to put there because i want to be what's that i want i want to be free on this sunday all right what's wrong here guys you i'm going to take a break you guys tell me what's wrong with this section right here on this sunday i'm checking drive me crazy that would drive me insane yeah we could also say drive me crazy that works but i think insane is stronger than crazy so she wanted to say insane i noticed in formal writing they start the sentence with but so when we uh you uh very rare you want to start a sentence with but in formal writing and leila you never you i might do that in the future but not today don't worry about that leila and anna how to use literally well okay so if i said i don't use this expression literally insane uh literally is used to mean 100 percent or certainly just it's an emphasis word to emphasize that i'm really really insane i'm literally insane you might hear native speakers speak like that i don't use that expression and i don't really teach that expression so that's all i'm going to say about that but you should know it all right sleepwalker going back to my question so something wrong here i want to be free on this sunday now actually sunday is okay so the the focus here is on this sunday and we can say on sunday or we can say this sunday all right so she has to she can't use on this she has to choose which one on sunday or this sunday can't use both so i because i want to be free on sunday or i want to be free uh this sunday it's a choice this one or this one not on this okay for the last two weeks being stuck in my house i couldn't focus on the things i should do and i just want to get my normal days back all right so again looking a little long for the last two weeks i'm going to put a comma here we have a time expression and depending on the teacher some teachers like the commas some teachers don't like the commas or don't care i prefer if you have a time expression here comma for the last two weeks tomorrow yesterday always today put a comma put a comma for your time expression being stuck in my house all right comma comma i couldn't focus on the things i should do and i just want to get my norm again a lot of information if the sentence is okay like grammatically it makes sense but it just seems like a lot of information in each one of her sentences and i would i would just put that there for the last two weeks we being stuck in my house i couldn't focus on the things i should do i just want to get my normal days back more normal days uh i i would change this to normal life i want to get my normal life back instead of days i know what she means my normal days back but i think a native speaker might just say my normal life back all right i want to walk outside inhaling the fresh air go to the dentist let's move it down i want to walk outside inhaling the fresh air go to the dentist to be treated for my tooth and gum damage and have a normal social life okay long sentence but i think we can make this one work say grace by sunday i want to i want to be free by sunday that could work by sunday but again be careful you can say on sunday this sunday by sunday that can work so good comment say grace natural life i would just want to get back to my natural life yeah that could work my natural but i think normal life is what a native speaker would use but if you said natural life or she said normal days that's okay i'm just trying to choose things i think are more what native speakers would say now she has inhaling is there a better word yeah inhaling means well inhaling is okay she can she can say inhaling the fresh air but as lolly lolly points out probably a better word would be just breathing that would be a better choice now inhaling can work but let's let's let's fix it a little a little bit better 1% better breathing the fresh air so i want to walk outside breathing the fresh air go to the dentist to be treated for my tooth and gum damage and have a normal social social life all right she's she's got a list here so breathing the fresh air one go to the dentist to be treated for my tooth and gum damage two and have a normal three she's got a good list she's got a comma she's got a comma all right and she's got a comma before her and i like that and have a normal social life so actually it's a pretty good sentence she's got a lot of information but uh she she has the great grammar especially this middle one here where she she wants to go to the dentist to be treated for my tooth and gum damage because she had an accident uh with her teeth a few days ago or a few weeks ago so this is a pretty good insert of a lot of information so this is a pretty good paragraph enjoying the fresh air i want to walk outside yeah enjoying her her word was inhaling that can work that was not all those can work enjoying the fresh air get fresh air i want to walk outside to get fresh air but uh we don't want to use get because we want more of that continuous ing i want to be breathing inhaling enjoying ongoing action she uses normal life again which is correct in the last one yeah she she's normal days up here normal life down here uh so be good good point maddie now she says normal social life so she says up here i just want to get my normal life back i want to walk outside breathing for the fresh air go to the dentist blah blah and have a normal social life uh i might even say just delete this because it's kind of uh redundant she repeats herself i want i want normal life a normal life she uses back which is a good expression so because she said it twice i'm going to remove one of them so good point maddie all right even though even though i'm an extreme introvert remember introverts they like to stay alone and not go out too much so she uses even though i'm an extreme introvert and always enjoy indoor activities but still being locked away in my house against my will for over two weeks is definitely not a pleasant experience for anyone all right so right away looks pretty big again and we might keep it let's see even though i'm an extreme all right she wants to emphasize good word here extreme guys uh in your writing again try to stay away from very or really extreme is a really good word to use for emphasis she's an extreme i'm an extreme introvert she really really uh remember opposite is extrovert someone who likes to go out and socialize she's the introvert someone who likes to stay home not do anything not be people so although so even though she she's an extreme introvert she enjoys staying home but this lockdown even though i'm an extreme introvert and always enjoy indoor activities i'd put a comment here so even though i'm an extreme introvert and always enjoy indoor activities i'm going to cut out but still don't need that even though i'm an extreme introvert and always enjoy indoor activities being locked away in my house against my will a lot of information even though i'm an extreme introvert and always enjoy indoor activities being locked away in my house against my will for over two weeks is definitely not a pleasant experience for anyone. Now you guys will see that I put in these commas here. I didn't put them all in, she had some, but let's highlight these commas. This is a very good lesson so you guys should definitely be watching what I'm going to talk about now. I'm just checking the chat, see what you guys are talking about. Lopez, I'm sorry I don't understand what is going on. Lopez, it's a writing lab, I'm just fixing up students writing. Samira, we can't use even though, though, although, but in one sentence. We, well, though, though, although, even though, even though, though, although, this similar to but she can say I'm an extrovert, but, but she started even though. While a stream extreme, they're writing a verana. To be honest, it's like reading someone else's journal. Leila to avoid using very big. Okay. Ah, Marty, we can use ultimate to emphasize we use ultimate. But it's not the ultimate is not the same as extreme ultimate is very big. It was all the ultimate experience. So it was a really great experience, a high level experience. So yeah, ultimate can be used for emphasis, but not here. I'm an ultimate introvert doesn't work. Lopez, I just got here. Well, my name, hello. And is even if correct in the sentence? No, even if so if means she's not. But if she was, it doesn't work here because. So even if I'm an extreme introvert, that means she's not an extreme introvert. So even though I'm an extreme introvert, she is definitely an extreme introvert and always enjoy. All right. All right, going back to the lesson here. These comments. Now, if you guys know, great, but if you don't know, this is very important to English. Why are these all these commas here? Now, comma, comma, comma, comma. Now, when you have two commas, you're adding information here. So I'm going to highlight this. And let's put it yellow. Because this is her writing is advanced. This is advanced writing. She did miss a few commas. Now notice the information in the commas here, comma, information, comma, down here, comma, information, comma, this is extra information. This is extra information. And we can remove these, this extra information. So I'm going to remove it. Boom. And the second one here, boom. And if we remove that extra information, the paragraph still makes sense. Even though I'm an extreme introvert, being locked away in my house is definitely not a pleasant experience for anyone. All right. All right, that's the core. That's her sentence. It works. So if you're going to add little bits of information, you need these commas, these, I know you guys, some of you, I know that, but some of you are like, I don't understand Robin. Okay, I'll say it again. She want this is additional information, even though I'm an extreme introvert and always enjoy indoor activities. So she's adding more information, comma, comma, being locked away in my house against my will for over two weeks, she's adding extra information is definitely not a pleasant experience for anyone. So again, that extra information can be removed. And we are left with the, the core sentence, even though I'm an extreme introvert, being locked away in my house is definitely not a pleasant experience for anyone. So it's very important that we are adding extra information put in these commas. All right, so that's a little bit advanced for you guys. If you don't understand, don't worry, you don't need to just carries a little advanced. All right, let's finish up carries the feeling of isolation and a state of distress. You cannot even go to the dentist and go, oh, she's got a lot of information here too. All right, the feeling of isolation, good word. Let's make it pink. The feeling of isolation and a state of distress that you cannot even go to the dentist and go to a job interview will make you insane. The feeling of isolation and a state of distress. I think we don't need that the feeling of isolation and distress. And I'm gonna, I'm gonna use distress up here, just to make the sentence more concise. The distressing feeling of isolation that you do you, that doesn't really work. So much information. The feeling of isolation. Here, we're going to move, we're going to take out the stress. This is the problem. I'm going to put that down here. We're not going to throw it away. The feeling of isolation, the feeling of isolation is that you cannot even go to the dentist and go to a job interview. This can be solved with or the feeling of isolation that you cannot, that you cannot even go to the dentist or a job interview will make you as insane. I would, is distressing. There's other ways to fix this paragraph. This is one possible way because she said insane earlier. Let's focus more on the distressing. So we're not repeating the feeling of isolation that you cannot even go to the dentist or a job interview is just distressing. And let's put our, our word of today extremely distressing. And let's put, so I think this will capture her emotion of insane. Insane is just a general drives me crazy. Okay, but let's, let's get a more little more specific. So I think she feels it's extremely frustrating and distressing. So this, this would be a good ending to this paragraph. All right, that was Carrie's. Good job, Carrie. And let's, let's see. Who's here? A for Anna? Is it okay if I use your writing A for Anna? Add more words in this sentence. So what do you mean? What did I put? The feeling of isolation extremely frustrating. So the feeling of ice race is frustrating is ongoing, ongoing during the isolation. She is feeling so I'm just frustrating and distressing. Instead, I feel frustrated and distressed. There's a, we could use that other grammar. There's other grammar ways to express this sentence. Why you change your emotions? Well, she's not here right now. But if she was here, I would probably ask the student, you know, what kind of feelings did you have instead of just insane, because insane is not really a feeling. And then when the student says, I feel sad or depressed. And then I would put that in here, depressing or whatever, because study English, you can check the description to join the WhatsApp group. Do we? Hello. So I guess we'll do A for Anna's. Let's take a look at A for Anna. Let's see. I'm walking in the homework group. I already checked a lot of these. Anna have any writing? Oh, here, I'll do your, this one. A for Anna. All right, carry. Boom. So this is from Anna's. This is Anna's. If I were a fish, I would like to dive underwater deep down under the sea at a place where nobody hasn't discovered yet. All right. All right. If I were a fish, I would like to dive underwater. Now I'm going to be picky here because fish are already underwater. So I might add deeper. If I were a fish, I would like to dive deeper under underwater, deep down under the sea. And I would combine these two sentences. All right. If I were a fish, I'd like to dive deeper down under the sea. I think the two sentences can be combined. We were just doing writing, writing, writing lab. I'm just fixing a few students lab, a few students writing at a place where nobody hasn't discovered yet. At a place where nobody or nobody's at a place where nobody, okay, you got a double negative. So this doesn't work place where nobody has discovered yet. So I'm going to cut that right there because nobody is a negative and hasn't is a negative. That's called a double negative. We don't want that at a place where nobody has discovered yet. However, it might be frightened me a bit to be honest. Okay. However, it might be frightened me a bit to be honest. And you guys, well, how can you fix this sentence? Right here. Right here's the problem. I'm going to drink my tea. You guys tell me what's wrong. How can we fix that grammar? However, it might be frightening me a bit. Hello, Alyssa Lopez saying a little instead of bit. Well, yeah, you can say a bit or a little that's not a problem. You can use both. It might be however might fright me a little it might fright me a bit that means the same thing a bit or a little. Okay. Layla, is it considered a big mistake if we use double negatives? In your writing? Yes. In speaking, native speakers are always going to use double negative sometimes. But for your writing, no, we shouldn't use double negative. Lollie being honest, it can be frightened. However, it might be frightened to be honest. Must be frightening. Okay. Yeah, you guys are focusing. That is another problem here. Sorry, Anna. Don't cry. It's a little awkward to use however and to be honest in the same sentence. It can be in the same sentence, but it's a little awkward. And actually, native speaker, usually we begin the sentence to be honest. That's more that can be used at the end. But it's more, I think, my opinion, at least it's more of a beginning phrase of a sentence. So I'm going to change that. I took out the however I deleted that. I just put to be honest, which kind of means however, I kind of mean the same thing. Let's cut out that. So to be honest, it might be frightened me a bit it might and a friend. Oh, he ran a fix. Okay. To be honest, it might frighten me a bit. All right. That's what you said. Might frighten me a bit to go to that place. I've read that the deep sea I read that the deep sea creatures are scarier than normal sea creatures. Let's take a look. I read the deep sea that the deep sea creatures. You can use this the. I think it works better without it. I read that deep sea creatures, all deep sea creatures in the world are scarier than normal. Maybe we'll put it in. I read that the deep sea creatures are scarier than the. Well, if you put the and the you got to put do. But I think we can get away with just saying I've read that the I've read that deep sea creatures are scarier than normal sea creatures as a general. Okay. A lot of questions keep bugging in my head. All right. And she knows because I told her there's a problem with this word. We shouldn't use word. If you're in the writing group, you might have saw how I fix this. We can't use bugging in my head. And I wasn't sure what she meant, but we can't use bugging. So this word is wrong. What's another word we can use here? Not bugging. I use one of you. A lot of questions keep bothering in my head. Questions keep asking in my head. Well, Anna, it's your chance. What do you have enough? You know the word I suggested in the homework group. But do you have a word that do you have another word that you might use there, Anna? Because I didn't know what you wanted to express. So I suggested a word, but I don't know if the words are correct. So I and I recommended the word popping, popping in my head. So this, let's let's connect it with popping in. So when something pops in your head, it suddenly is in your head in your brain in your mind. So a lot of questions keep popping in my head. So we use this expression popping in my head, especially with questions. Where's another use popping in popping in my head. I think that's, that's mainly where we use it popping in my head. I don't know another situation we would use popping in my, I could say a lot of students are popping popping in my chat. So here we have popping in I'm talking about the live stream chat. So a lot of students are popping in coming in popping like popcorn popping in a lot of questions are still in my head. Yeah, that could work. I don't think the questions are bothering her or running through in my head or running a lot of questions keep running through my head. I think running through my brain. So interesting Lolly Lolly running through my running through my head. Yeah, I guess I could work a lot of questions keep running through my head. Yeah, so Lolly Lolly has a good expression here running through my head that could work too popping but I like popping because popping. Anyway, let's move on. So let's look at the questions. How do they survive? Okay, with a low light intensity, it is almost ridiculous to be alive. And yeah, I had a big problem with ridiculous to be alive in that condition because of the low oxygen supply. Alright, so definitely ridiculous means something is very funny or stupid. That's ridiculous. That's funny and stupid ridiculous. So this word doesn't match. So maybe you guys can suggest a better word. So how do they survive with a low light intensity? So there's not much light in the deep sea. It is almost to be alive in that condition because of the low oxygen supply. incomprehensible. That's a word. That's a big word. It's almost surprising to be a sleepwalker unsustainable. You guys have a lot of you guys have bigger words than me. Anyway, you guys have good vocabulary. But I went with the simplest word, which was impossible. incomprehensible. That works, but that word is kind of too big. Unsustainable. I think the best word that works here is simply just saying almost impossible to be alive. So sleepwalker, you and I are thinking alike. So almost unbelievable to be alive. Oh, Gertrude also has impossible. Unbelievable. It's almost unbelievable to be alive in that. Yeah, these words work, but I think just impossible is the best word here. Also, how do they adapt with the higher pressure without being okay? So she put crashed. Something wrong here. This word. What word was she trying to say? She said also, how do they adapt with the higher pressure without being crashed? So crashed is wrong. What is the correct word? Gertrude is not able to see is almost not able is a little awkward. Again, I'm just going to stick with impossible. Also, how do they adapt with the higher pressure without being crashed? So crashed is a big mistake here. Not a big mistake. Damaged, harmed. Layla Robin, sometimes I want to use big and advanced words, but you want to use simple words. What, what we should do? What should we do? What should we do? I think there's a basic vocabulary or set of words. And there's a middle level of words. And then there's a very advanced level of words. I, you know, depending on what you're writing, I would always shoot for that middle level. There's two advanced. And I've seen a lot of students try to put the biggest, the biggest words they could possibly get in their essays. And it just looks wrong and awkward. So I would go for that middle, middle area of vocabulary, not too low, not too high. And that would work. Well, you got to know all kinds of vocabulary. But like I said, up here with this one, impossible is the best word. You could use bigger words, but it would just make it a, you know, just makes it 1% awkward. And just 1% awkward shows it's, you know, impossible is the great word, the best word. All right, let's see what's going here. Going on here. All right, so she put crashed and I thought it was a spelling mistake. Crash is when you crash a car, crash. And the word she wants to use, I'm changing that A to a U, crashed. She's talking about in the deep sea, there's high pressure, high, high pressure. So if there's high pressure pushing down, things are going to be crushed, crushed. So how do they adapt with the higher pressure without being crushed? So this is the best word. That's what the word she's looking for. You could say damaged, damaged, hurt. That works without bursting. That works without popping. That works. But I think the best word again, I'm the judge. The best word is my word crushed. That expresses what she wants to say. All right, the deep sea is still mysterious and fascinating to discover. All right, so there's no problem here with her final sentence. Now, Anna, you're going to say, well, you didn't give such a detailed editing in the homework group. Yeah, in the homework group, I can't really talk to the students. So when I make changes for all of you, if you're in the homework group, when I make changes, I got to make basic changes that you can kind of learn yourself. So there's a lot of things, like to be honest, I didn't really go into too much detail on this paragraph because it takes more of a face to face editing or explaining. But you got the most of it. All right. Thank you to the guy, the students, I did Layla, Kara, Kerry and Anna. Thank you for allowing me to use your writing. If you didn't allow it, sorry, I used it. I'll do another writing, writing lab in the future. And in the future, I will try to use other, other people like Jonathan or Michelle or someone else in the future writing lab just to give everyone a chance. If you're not in the writing lab, you can, or in the homework group, you can join in the description of this video, but it is not a free group, guys. Now you can join the group and here's the group. Let's see if people joined. There's a Merzan and there's another person you joined, but you cannot participate in the group. You can watch the group, but you cannot, you cannot submit any writing unless you officially joined the group. And in the description of this video, it'll tell you how to join the group. All right, guys, that's an hour or 17 minutes. Thank you Lopez for coming. Thank you, Michelle. Okay, Michelle, I'll try to do your writing next time I do a writing lab. And thank you, Anna, for coming. I hope you liked the video. Please like the video to let me know that you enjoyed it and you want to see more of this kind of video. And I hope we learned something today. Thanks for watching, guys. Thanks for supporting the channel. And it was good to see some new people today. Sleepwalker, thank you, Gertrudez, thank you, Leila, Sarah. Writing lab is always the best. The best for you, you know, other students, I don't know. All right, goodbye, everyone. See you next week. Well, you can join the other teacher, Sherry's video live stream in a couple days. See you, guys.