 all right so let's take a look at this all right so uh checking your mail you mentioned first off you mentioned the spear going through what i was imagining with the spear but i can see the problem you have with thingy you know you can imagine that maybe that thing that holds the spear is not that long and imagine he has it kind of slung around around his like below his arm and around the shoulder and then he's got like a tiny tiny thing to keep the spear there so that the spear could be maybe like more like that and you can animate it so then as he takes steps it would you know it would wiggle up and down and turn a bit just to be a bit looser um but yeah but i can see the problem that you have so it wouldn't be definitely like it's more straight out so it would be this this might already give you a lot more room uh while he goes here um the main thing to me is timing it's a bit it's a bit slow and i think what what i would do to speed things up i love this here i love that and i love the landing grabs the guy ask a couple issues with some of the poses this depends what you're going for so my main impression was that he can just crawl crawl crawl and then do this and then he looks left and right to see okay what's going on oh i see what's going here i'm gonna over here hide a bit and then go and fight it because right now you have he comes down here then you stop he looks around but he looks around and then keeps on going down it doesn't feel like i'm looking oh i saw something here that makes me start to hurry to go down and go over there so i would just stick with straight crawl no looking here continue right into this jump look left and right pick this guy up and then this just feels like it's too casual it's there the pose they're too casual and the timing is a bit too casual it's i see that he speeds up at the end which is good there's just something about this feeling yeah it's kind of like a Sunday walk where i'm where i'm kind of you know hunched over so it will be something where you might want to stay in this pose a bit longer and then as he goes over here it's still a bit that's a fantastic drawing a bit lower right and you would have here but his arm will be out and the other arm might be ready for for the spear something where it feels more like he's ready to attack but then he has to kind of run and then hide behind here where it's a bit more of a leaning against the trees that oh the creature almost saw me and then i'm coming out and then he goes for the thing but this takes massively forever step step step step step step and that so to me it would be comes in jumps looks around sees oh it's there starts going kind of more duck than more like a ready ready and have to be stealthy like hiding and then he sees oh the creature saw me speeds up towards the towards the thing and it's a bit more flat against the tree and then looks around sees the coast is clearing goes and immediately like one two and then and shooting more this way and this still feels like he is about to shoot this i don't know how far away so that would be that would be my my thing and i like i don't mind the tree and you can always have some some vines hanging in the background going around the tree and stuff there and you know make it kind of interesting jungly or almost the south america and the south they have those those the bayou they have all those things hanging there um did a quick quick google here see where it could be something where trees could be something like this that's kind of cool it seems like from pirates but you know where you have your big trees and then stuff could be hanging down you know that could be a sort of your your setting but that's about it it's just to me i would really nail down the feeling and not just the poses i mean again i love all this but it seems overall for a hunter that takes so much time to to sneak in and land like this sneaky like that's your that's a very specific like i'm gonna try not to be you know super loud and kind of hiding that type of field doesn't continue on in all of this it takes too long and and it could have a moment i think if you do the more crouched thing here and he goes oh he almost saw me and then starts speeding up and hiding behind the tree it gives it for the audience some excitement where oh we don't know what's gonna happen and he almost got caught and then he goes out and immediately kills the creature which means you know you don't have to pan as much to the right you could just be here then shoot the whole thing and then shoot it down so we can imagine it's just off screen and then you get some branches or something falling into screen and he's ready or you actually do animate the creature going we'll be at the end i don't know just something to me it seems like there's there's no sense of urgency or like him being the hunter if i'm if i'm watching this it doesn't feel like he is that concerned and it's not like this feels like from here on he saw some creature that's really far away really far away and it's going to be really lucky until uh if he gets that guy all right i hope that makes sense all right there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome all right thank you