 Alright, I think we're back. Are we back? Do you see me? Do I see you? Hello? Question mark. I am sorry about the technical difficulties, everybody. I don't know what happened there. YouTube just crashed and I lost the feed. So I'm starting this up and so this is... Okay, so everyone's on the chat in the new video. New video. Sorry, go to new stream. Oh, okay. That's frustrating. I'm very sorry guys that the live stream did that weird thing. So, which is this one? It's the one here. Alright. Alright, so now we're back. Boom, boom, boom. Okay, I am back and you are back. I've got the chat pulled up. Hello everybody who's here. Now that there's a second stream and it pinged you again. Good to have you back. And I am sorry that that happened. So, welcome to part two of Westrin's video where we get into the lower levels of his War of the Squirrels. So, we were talking about Adendamay. I love Adendamay. Adendamay has multiple crosslinks to different SCPs that tell the future in things. It looks like you did your research. I'm not going to go through every single crosslink. I'm going to put my faith in you that you did your research on these and you are doing them in the right character for each one. I'm glad that there are multiple non-series one SCPs, which is a big deal in the community right now, crosslinking not series one. Now I'm going to get into Addendum B. Addendum B is where I start to lose it a little bit. Firstly, because like at a point I almost think you could get from what's the phrase I'm looking for. I think the SCP could work just Addendum A up. I don't actually think you need these documents below. Like when I saw there was more, I was like, there's more. Because like I was entertained already. But again, this is me. This is my opinion. We'll keep going down. Maybe other people do want more. Document A is the one that I like the least personally. And part of it is because now this is where I get into my experience as a writer and such. I don't, I'm not an expert. I am a two year liberal arts college dropout. I have written some theater scripts a little bit. I have written an SCP, so I have like medium experience, no minor experience. And so with a grain of salt taken, I say a lot of these paragraphs just seem not too info dumpy. But the way the sentences are written feels weird. Like let me say this series of sentence, this paragraph. It was a long cabin in the mountains of India. It looked cozy. It didn't have anything to show for it, just a cabin in the middle of nowhere. We arrived and immediately heard talking coming from it. It was just a regular meeting. It sounded like a seminar or something. I don't know. There's two sentences joined by commas. And one with a little, but it just sounds like the same kind of sentence. It was this. It was that. I don't know. The sentences sound too similar. They're not speech patterns. Now I know this guy is like typing this, but or it looks like he's typing an after-action report, but it doesn't quite read like a person typing or talking. We may show called the info dump or we suggest an edit and improve link the SCPs. Okay, so well, they're not necessarily sentence fragments because they do all have a subject and verb at least, but they're just basic sentences. Like it shocks me because everything you had above was very in style and you had complex sentences and interesting paragraphs and it all felt like it read very smoothly and well and it flowed. But then I got to this addendum and I was like, this is not nearly as good as the stuff that's above or it doesn't feel as good as the stuff that's above. Document B, I liked honestly. Like once I realized that this was A translated from Swahili, which is why he was talking with not great grammar and related. Okay, so these are encountered engravings inside of two separate dead trees in Kenya written in Swahili. So I'm assuming these are written by people that these are written by human worshippers, right? That's why they're carved in Swahili. And so these are, no, they are written by squirrels. Okay, that was my first instinct, which is why they speak in simpler dialect, but they're carved in a human language, which is why I got confused as I'm talking about it now. I like it better that they're carved by squirrels because now the squirrels are talking about their war rather than the humans talking about the squirrel war. So I like it a lot better now that it's the squirrels. I don't know that you mentioned higher up in the original documentation. There should be a mention that the squirrels are intelligent enough to speak or write in simple human dialect. That is not mentioned in the above in the documentation, but it needs to be at some point. Because the first time I thought it was written by squirrels because I was on a roll, but now that I've gone back down, I realized, oh wait, that wasn't written anywhere. So part of the containment procedures have to be that the foundation has to, like, somehow contain the fact that squirrels are writing things down. And when humans find it, then they need to do something about that. Because now you have dead trees with carvings and human scientists will find these carvings and they'll be like, what are these carvings? So the foundation needs something to know about that. Like maybe squirrel carvings, I don't know, that's a rabbit hole I'm not sure about yet. But I'm still interested in, again, I'm addendum B number one where it's the after-action report. I could completely leave that. I don't care about the human cult at all. Addendum B, written by the squirrels in the squirrel war, I am intensely interested in. I love their weapon types a lot. Anti-paradox suggests that the cult is actually a front put up by the foundation to conceal the fact that squirrels are intelligent. I think that's genius. Part of the containment procedures is a front of a cult that the foundation has a fake cult covering for squirrels. I love that a lot. That is an idea to twist and work with. And it looks like the author enjoys it as well, so anti-paradox, good game, and I hope that that gestates into a great idea. Back into addendum B, point B. By the way, because these are in addendum B, I'd really like them to be documentation one, two, and three, rather than documentation A, B, and C. Because you're already doing addendum A and addendum B, so just changing that to one, two, and three would make more sense to me. That's more of a proof-reading thing we'll go into in the next phase. But continuing on, documentation, see what I think should be three. Tree Critter manifested within blank of Madagascar, so this is him manifesting to the squirrels. So a squirrel god comes down from the heavens, like squirrel Jesus, to manifest to the squirrels and spread his message. If we can find another way, if we can get a better, like, after-action report there, we're like, maybe these are different documents from squirrels here or there, so it doesn't have to be the squirrel cult again on that front. But if we still have the message of the war and why the war was caused, having the god disappointed. I like the story of the gods, mostly I dig, like, so there are squirrel, there are two squirrel gods. Cause, alright, now I need to go back to the first addendum for the story of the caretaker. So a human named the caretaker went to the town of the squirrels. Okay, so that's weird to me. The caretaker's a human who went to a town of squirrels in trees to buy food from the bakery, which, surprisingly enough, was like a huge carved out oak tree. That's not at all surprising for a squirrel bakery, I don't think. I think it would have to be a huge carved out oak tree. Like, that's not surprising at all. Morgan points out that an interview with an intelligent squirrel might be interesting. Okay, surprisingly enough, it's sarcasm. Sorry, didn't read like that to me anyways, maybe it read like that to somebody else. Which, like you would guess, is a huge carved out oak tree, I don't know. Doo doo doo, doo doo doo, rolling down, rolling down. So yeah, the caretaker being a human makes me think, what's the phrase I'm looking for? Makes me think that it would be a war against humans. Like, the human caretaker makes me think that the humans would want to hurt humans, but instead the squirrels are fighting over whether the caretaker should be forgiven for his past mistake. But also, like, I feel like this is a time for some like, weird human racism. Like, squirrels are racist against humans. Like, that's a thing. Like, I feel like that's where it should be. And like, maybe the squirrel war is actually a war where like, half... Mmm, there's something about like, a human doing something wrong, and then the squirrels going to war with each other over the human without the humans really being affected. Although I think they are like, attacked every so often in the end. But that looks like more of a thing with humans having dissenting opinions regarding squirrels. So I'm not straight up, like, down with that. Oh, I have been had a squirrel throw an acorn at me, that stinks. Okay, so the neo-squirrels... Oh, and for handsome hedgehog, and for anybody who's on this second video. This is a draft SCP from Western. If you go to HTT, if you go to the sandbox, it's funny because the link is in the description for the first video. So this is the second video because we had an accidental crash. So let me... I don't think you can actually share links in a live chat which stinks. So you'd actually have to go to the first chat video to find the link in the description to go to this box. Hopefully we don't have this problem in future streams. But once you get to that link, we're looking at the war of the squirrels. And this is a draft to become an SCP. So proto-squirrels like humans, neo-squirrels hate humans, and so they're at war with each other, and also neo-squirrels are kind of dicks to humans once in a while, but only mildly. Like throwing an acorn at a human is annoying, but it's not going to war against humans for a slight. Like I almost think like the war is when the neo-squirrels attack the humans, and then the proto-squirrels come to our defense. Red and gray squirrels still being interesting. Yes, that's true. Is genocode supposed to be a thing for genocide? Like is that a reference in Kim's name? Like just like swapping a letter? Genocode is my cousin's last name. So no, it's just a reference to a person. Interesting. But everything changed when the neo-squirrel nation attacked. Damn those fire squirrels. Okay, so that is overall the theory section. Like we've gone over a whole lot of squirrel religion and squirrel cult. I think you're going to take this in a lot of interesting directions now. So the last thing to do is to go through and hit the proof reading. Check the chat real quick before I go into hard mode on this proof reading run. Uh, 3001 reading is like the best thing ever. Thank you so much. Pictures in my heads of squirrels riding the battle with thimbles on their heads in a needle. Wonderful. Riding on rats. Okay, so it's time to go hog wild, squirrel wild, and do proof reading, editing, and things we missed. So scrolling through, I'm going to go into full focus mode. Let's drive through this. If I'll describe an anomaly set on a future date. Information was gained from a nominal phenomena. Love it. So after the future anomaly announced to me by H-M-C-L administration, in my head approved unanimously by H-M-C-L administration should have a V before it. But I don't think it has a V anywhere else. So I don't think you need it there. Personnel are authorized because when activating Operation K-SUM, as the true properties of a certain bubble log, good, good, good. I remember Ketter, as of 95086, K-SUM has been enacted by Werder Blank. Operation K-SUM includes the following procedures, 24 hours to the bottom, Butler County, Kansas, USA. Should have done a no-fly zone. And so immediately NACS is to be denied, to be another president, transferred to Sedgwick County under the cover of a natural disaster. Okay. You capitalize County for Butler County, but you don't capitalize County for Sedgwick County. So one or the other, whichever one it is properly, do that one. Under the cover story of a natural disaster, 129 million lab grown, skewered A-specimens specifically treated, created to be immune to its anomaly. All right. How are you going to make squirrels anomalously immune to wanting to go to war and being intelligent? So you're saying that like all squirrels are intelligent, but then we're creating dumb squirrels and we're going to repopulate with dumb squirrels or smart squirrels that don't want to go to war. I'm not sure about that one. That's another idea thing you might want to think about. Yeah, like dumb squirrels, the author says. But phrasing, but we'll still have half the world is smart squirrels, half the world is dumb squirrels, because not all the squirrels are going to die. Continuing on, specimens are being created at over 200 sites areas, each using a nominal technology to produce the specimens. Upon the appearance of all the specimens are to be released into the public for the purpose of spreading across the earth, which replace most of the squirrels that will participate in the war. Each specimen is to be placed within a security containment and habitation facility. Each SCAF, skimple holding. I love SCAF. That's just a fun thing for me. I don't know. Holding 2 million squirrels indefinitely and 30 million squirrels temporarily. Each squirrel has had formula, class 877 mastery production aerosol recipe, applied to them which causes constant fertilization, females. Can we mention that they're dumb squirrels at some point? Because we mentioned that they'll be immune to the anomaly. I guess that's enough, but maybe created with low intelligence causing them to be immune to the anomalous effect. Maybe. I don't know. Something like that. Mass fertilization aerosol. I love that. 610 offspring at once. Large amounts of squirrels would be really good. Do another SCAF unit if the curl is full. Personal interest would be monitored. We'll fix that when we fix the curl. However, we're going to do that. All squirrel-based anomalies currently on the Brown Nation control are to be having the monitor and go under revised containment procedures during this. Personal science squirrel-based anomalies to be document 226U, operation casem for more information. Okay, so there is no document 226U, operation casem. But operation casem consists of the following procedures of what we just read. So is this all operation casem, or is there more operation casem, or should this section be separated from the special containment procedures as a separate operation casem collapsible? Should this be spread out somewhat so that the squirrel spawning thing is operation casem? And then the evacuation procedures and the fake cult, if you go that way, or whatever we're doing to keep humans from knowing, should be like the regular containment procedures. The containment procedures are evacuation plans and human cover-up, and then operation casem is the third containment procedure, and that is the squirrel spawning containment procedure. That at least makes sense to me. And Hedgehog asked, if someone submitted their SEP for me to check it out and it sounds good? That's exactly what happened, yes. So site 19 has been created in Butler County, Kansas. As an area for foundation personnel to reserve SCP-3761, when it occurs and for the creation of squirrel specimens. A site dossier has been set in personnel with clearance or by request of the site director of site 119. After incident 2A7, site 119 and site 151 administration have unanimously voted for the secondary use of site 151 as a research facility for anomalous entities such phenomena that are suspected to be connected to SCP-3761. Personnel with... So when you say personnel with 33761 clearance, God, that always bothers me personally in SCPs because it just flows better from the mouth to say level 33761 clearance. But a lot of SCP writers do personnel with 33761 clearance and so that's what they write. And it makes sense in a document. It sucks to say it out loud. So my preference is a personnel with 33761 clearance but you're also doing exactly what the site, what the wiki standard is. So I'm going to say it annoys me but you're right anyways and I have to deal with that. Okay. Description. Designation for July 23rd, 2063 which is currently theorized to be the date of an extremely large anomalous event affecting all species obscurity. Okay. So the standard format for genus and species is to write the normal English word like squirrel or common squirrel or all species of squirrels and then in parentheses italics is where you put the Latin, the genus. So I think you're supposed, I'm like 99% sure you're supposed to flip those. Species of squirrel, genus scuridae. SCP 3761's existence has been identified by prediction based anomalies as well as multiple texts of varying origins and similar outcomes on the aforementioned date. It's currently theorized that during SCP 3761 every squirrel will dig a hole in the box and make 0.5 meters underneath the current location. If the spacetime anomaly will manifest which means we're going to eat squirrel. Okay. So squirrels are intelligent and they also have teleporting powers. Are they aliens? Are squirrels aliens, man? Because you've got to tell me if squirrels are aliens. Like why do they have teleporters? I'm so kicking my camera stand. I'm just confused by teleporting squirrels. Anyways, that's not a problem. That's just a thing in my brain. Whereby each squirrel will utilize updated spacetime anomaly to return their religion. Whereby each squirrel will dig other holes and will attack each other in an unknown manner. Not... Uh... Alright, wait, I skipped the sentence. In which a spacetime anomaly will manifest transporting each squirrel to 0.5 meters directly beneath Butler County, Kansas, USA. The squirrels will dig out of their holes and will attack one another in an unknown matter. Now, if it's in, then it needs to be in an unknown manner. I don't believe that to be what you mean. Uh... They will attack each other over an unknown matter. Now... Now, here's my question. You did change it... Sorry, I keep kicking my camera stand. You changed it to in an unknown manner, but... We do know that they're going to fight with weapons that we have documentation of. So it's not in an unknown manner, either. Like, we know how they're going to fight. It's like, Godzilla. Let them fight. Yes! One of the best lines in cinema history. Uh... Maybe that should be something like... Because we both know what the conflict is. Uh, yeah. If you strike through in an unknown manner, uh, and then put, like, C document B, or C document 2, as I would like it, then... You'll then... It'll be like, oh, well now we know how they're attacking. So yeah, that's a great idea. I like that. It's currently theorized that SCB 3761 will end on July 24th, 263, whereby each scroll utilizes the stated anomaly to return their original locations. Da da da da da da... It scrolls the SCB's shapes of 80 objects. If you want to see them, switch to a part. Uh, okay. Quick off topic. Mr. Red wants to know how he can submit his draft. That's a good question. I haven't answered today. So you can submit your draft through the Site 42 discord server. If you're a member of that, there's a channel called Critique Lab Show where you can put your draft link, and I will check it out. You can also email it to scpsite42.com gmail.com and I will check it out there hmm back to the script to the skip currently theorized during scp will take a whole approximately point by meters underneath July 27 where by each school utilize space of individual locations okay so thank you mr. red okay so in that next paragraph it should buy it should probably say whereby each where by all surviving squirrels will utilize the stated space-time anomaly to return to their locations because we're pointing out that a lot of squirrels died in the war so probably we want to say whereby each whereby all surviving squirrels will utilize the stated space time anomaly that's just my first thought on it now I'm gonna leave this question to you colt the next section is all of the religiosity and the colt stuff so do you want me to go over that for errors since I think you're gonna do a revamp of that I'm not sure I'm just gonna do it anyways because it's better it's a learning experience for everyone to see what these things look like so things to really disagree the practice of belief of squirrel and human equality members of the group include individuals of varying because because squirrel and human equality isn't like a weird thing I don't think you should put that in quotes I think the belief of squirrel and human equality doesn't need to be in quotes because it's just a pretty basic statement it's not like we're saying anything super weird there members of the group include individuals of varying ethnic backgrounds and age groups most of these members live within an area in blank India that they have dubbed the secluded oak further information on this location is unavailable to the foundation footnote oh I haven't looked at the footnotes yet gosh darn where the footnotes all right so starting at the top rolling down footnote eight largest sites have been here 12 years I-19 the head of creation such undercurrent the jurors of Kim Messer for your 12 state director bank for false I-19 footnote nine lethal force is only to be attempted in emergency situations footnote 10 is currently there as the clue Duke is the birthplace of their deity based on scriptures confiscated from them good scrolling down let's keep rolling mm-hmm have been observed performing rituals to appease their deity which is referred to as tree critter we mentioned maybe doing the serious name I don't know about that that's opinion the nature of said rituals very greatly and have been observed to have been included simple chanting ritual suggests it's squirrel worshipping creation of articles of clothing created from live squirrels I don't know about live squirrel clothing like if you worship them I don't think like because they worship cows so you like the cow is sacred you don't even like eat cows because the cow is sacred so I don't feel like you're gonna wear live squirrels or even dead squirrel garments maybe they wear garments of a similar animal that they use and fashion in a way to look more like squirrels it's like artificial clothing like I think live squirrel clothing is just a weird thing that we're doing to be weird maybe but uh okay so moving on so yeah we talked about the mantra I want the mantra to be good in the best that you can according to confiscated text hand of the trees tree critters the body structure of a human and the facial structure of a squirrel tree critters of the wear only red and white striped a robe with a hood that covers the eye their eyes and his note always carry a large unidentified scroll regardless of scroll is the first copy of the hand of the trees if hand of the trees is going to be italicized and in quotes it should be italicized and in quotes every time so that should be because it's a title of a thing so if you're gonna do that once I think you do it both multiplication attempt to assist in the war however is currently unknown how it will assist in the war author states that it doesn't have a heads of a squirrel it's a human head with a squirrel face which is weirder and there's no fur I don't know quite what that means what we're talking about the closing does that the clothing so they like they don't use fur at all or they don't uh we'll see about that along the way there's a 30-second delay in chat for YouTube that's how they do things oh there's no squirrel on the fur face got it okay the fur face of the deity oh a hairless squirrel face looks sounds like Joe camel to me uh-uh creepy all right so it's unknown how the humans will assist in the war a vigilance of knowledge used to verify its existence 1032s okay so displays a hand that reads war the squirrels which reads midnight event meaning that it will last 24 hours states that they feel extremely uncomfortable whenever they are within butler county Kansas states the entire area is filled okay you say they in the first sentence of 187 and then you say she in the second statement uh you got to pick one it's got to uh keep your pronouns to decide an average squirrel on occasions that it remembers the battle of the tree rats occurring on the day and in the bread I don't know why there's an and there said that it scp-411 has on multiple occasions said that it remembers the battle of the tree rats occurring on July 23rd 2063 it should probably just be in the bread basket of America I don't think there should be an and there for want to say this is not wish to great any more information than this after two three two seven specimens leave instances two three two seven messages almost always found within the subject stomach landing all most likely written with their claws for time to escape non-tapsy instance reveals that it reads so remember war it was an extremely important event to them and states that it would rival the crusades woodchucks that is unknown Kansas USA is actually the Middle East Dejeure country of Palestine after extensive research I don't know what Dejeure is like I know Dejeure in French like of the day but I don't actually know what you mean by that so that's a thing where I go to Google and say what does that mean according to rightful entitlement or claim by right by law it is unknown what this refers to additionally scp 2050 thinks that Kansas USA is actually the Middle East Dejeure country of Palestine after extensive research okay this might just be my personal lack of knowledge on how Dejeure works but I feel like that sentence works when you say it out loud but I don't think it means Dejeure means that Palestine is by law name of it but it really isn't called that in practice okay that makes more sense so what this is saying is 2050 thinks that Kansas USA is Palestine that's what it's saying okay data and expunge of 2707 is live beyond it's suspected natural lifespan it's supposed to be decommissioned the day before the war when you say CK I want you to put a hyphen slash class or hyphen class just because it's normally a CK class dominant shift scenario also I don't know if there's a hyphen between dominance and shift in my head it's CK hyphen class space dominance space shift in my head anyways that's my first thought now I'm gonna look because there's the sweet deadly mooses K class scenario list cool you got it you fix it nice I like it good you got it sweet all right addendum B level 3 sir clearance required access the following files documentation with a security memetic all right it's fin from mobile test force tau 63 vermin supreme after operation did it out quick summary of the mission now I mentioned that I don't like a lot of the sentences here my feeling is that they don't feel like how someone talks it's a lot of two simple sentences so let's just remember that as we go through I'm gonna be proof reading them for like grandma grammatical errors and such I'll try and tell you how I would change things along the way so here's a quick summary of the mission I think that should say mission brief wait it's not a brief visit yeah it should be mission brief because that's not a summary of what happened in italics that's a oh cuz after that is the mission's summering okay there's a really good chance you won't be keeping this part in anyways still gonna run it down for the knowledge of everybody capture single member for interrogation at site 551 personnel equipped with formula class some do members advise non use non lethal methods log have in the mountains of India wait a minute isn't site 551 near Madagascar making me pull up world maps I have I learned so many things right so Madagascar on the world map zoom out zoom out I'd say that's fairly far from India like so site 551 is in Madagascar right we saw that in document C so possibly it interesting so they're doing a mission to India to bring somebody back to site 551 in Madagascar that's alright you have a reason for that they went by aircraft you got a reason for that all right still rolling on log have mountains video so here's a big thing anytime you do ha yes there are birds outside my house making noise I apologize for my low-budget non recording studio welcome to my home there birds everywhere it makes it very hard to record scp videos sometimes phrasing phrasing when you have two sentences that are complete sentences that are related you can separate them with a semicolon to make to change the structure so it was a lab log cabin in the mountains of India is one sentence it looked cozy is a second sentence those could be a semicolon because it look cozy refers to the log cabin it didn't have anything to show for it just a cabin in the middle of nowhere it didn't have anything to show for it I think that could be phrase better like you're saying it's not a big it wasn't huge or anything I think would be better phrasing really her talking coming from it it was just we arrived and immediately her talking coming from it we moved closer and could hear talking coming from inside something more like that as we closed in we could hear talking from inside we could hear heated discussion or we could hear discussion because it was just a regular meeting yes this thing we arrived as it as we moved as we moved in we could hear close talking coming from inside that might be better it was just a regular meeting it sounded like a seminar or something I don't know I would say it was just a regular it was just rather than it was just a regular meeting as period it sounded like a seminar or something I don't know maybe it was like a meeting or a seminar or something I don't know maybe that'll seem a little more sentencing we knocked on the door with our stabilizers ready there shouldn't be a comma there preparing for some shit that can be a comma they're good they looked through the window and began to open the door pretty slowly that doesn't need a comma they said hey what are you doing in here or something I don't really remember that doesn't seem important enough to say like the way it is like it's not really remark and also when did they go in like we knocked on the door with our stabilizers ready preparing for some shit they opened the door and said hey what are you doing in here that doesn't make a lot of sense to me hey there toking welcome to the stream toking is here to help with the critique lab huzzah thank you yellow for looping him in if you look at the stream for the first video you'll see the link for the for the draft that we're looking at the stream crashed and this is the second stream for it so I was not able to put the link in this description it's in the first video's description the war of the squirrels is the tab by the way for everybody who's new in the stream so okay you fixed a cult fixed the thing where they actually went inside we didn't take that shit we didn't really take that shit we came to do the mission said we started spraying the room with the aerosol aerosol I think a semicolon we didn't really take that shit semicolon we came to do with the mission said we started spraying the room with the aerosol we managed we didn't manage so it should be we managed or we did manage it shouldn't be we did managed to strap one of them into a straight jacket a straight jacket is s t r a i t right it's not like straight like a line yeah straight jacket is one word and there's no g h in it so you can fix that at least on wikipedia there's no g h in it it's a straight jacket one word no hyphen or anything and no g h I have this gash on my head when they managed to hit off but I have this gash on my head where not when yeah when they managed to get a hit off or where they managed to get a hit off I don't like that structure at all either way but one of them managed to get a hit off on me gash worst headache I've had in a while or gotten in a while seems like a better structure for that set of sentences but before we could get them back into the truck I take the butt out and just start with before we could get them into the truck one of them yell at us and told us to listen they said hey if you want we can explain what this is all about I'm I'm a little weird it out about them just like explaining their whole religion like hey don't take our guy will tell you everything like we don't care we tell everybody about the squirrels they're great man you should really hear about the squirrels we're like Jehovah's Witnesses for squirrels that's at least that's what it feels like for a second there it did be interrogating a person so we accepted I don't feel like that makes sense I don't feel like they would deviate from the mission because they were all just a second ago like hey we're going to complete the mission no matter what so like when the guys were nice at first the SCP guys like charged them anyways so like they're cooperating like I feel like they cooperated and then we fought them but now they're cooperating again and we're cooperating back structurally in the story that feels weird so we accepted it did be interrogating a person so we accepted but Harry told the guys to keep their finger on the triggers just in case we sat down at this huge table and they asked us if we want anything to eat we passed and they sat down to tell us a story asking them if they need something to eat right here is a needless detail and I'll tell you why we're talking about check off's gun one of the best things in writing love it so when you said they offered us food and we passed I was like okay they were gonna try and poison the troops with something and being smart the mobile task force said no so later in the story I was expecting them to offer them food again and someone was dumb enough to accept and then got like turned into a squirrel or something I don't know what the food does but instead they asked again if we want anything we denied and left that just it's anti-climactic check off's gun is the concept that if you put something in the story it has to have a reason to be there otherwise just don't put it in the famous example is if you're watching a play and the set designer took the time to put a gun up on the wall the gun has to be fired before the show is over otherwise there was no reason to have a gun so in this case we took the time to mention they offered us food how about this instead of disagreeing the author says they they take the food to site 551 for analysis and find out that it was poisoned or something um yes that's a good way that's a good thing to do it makes the food useful you then want to test it on a d-class and see if it does anything if it's not just a regular poison you want to find out if it's like an anomalous poison and if it if they do point try and poison the foundation if this is all front then there needs to be retribution or some kind of cover up because now they're like a hostile group so there needs to be consequences for trying to poison the foundation members uh yeah the author says the food is secretly the Kool-Aid that's not a bad idea you just need to make sure that if they try and poison the foundation there is appropriate consequence of the foundation doing something or containing them or keeping a closer eye on them or treating them as a hostile entity in the future and not falling for the nice act that they put on so that's something you got to think about in the story what's the next step if we do this okay so we they offered us food we sat down and tells the story and you'll fix that we're instead saying we passed and they sat down tells the story we took the food and now they said that they knew that we knew all right they said that they knew that we knew what SCP 3761 was there has to be a better phrasing for that because they knew that we knew is always like a silly thing yeah I know that you know that we know that they know there's got to be a better way they admitted that they knew about our investigation into SCP 3761 that seems like a more to me that sounds like a better sentence Aaron welcome to the stream this is the critique lab where we're critiquing somebody's draft very nice to have you on board if you'd like to check the link in the first site 42 critique lag video for west the link to the draft we're doing is in there this the stream crash so this is the second video of this critique lab it's a two-part series now okay so they wanted more info they told us about the religion and they stated that SCP 3761 would end when half of the squirrels died and they would return to their original places so I have a question about this number one SCP 3761 is specifically the war correct number is the war and specifically the date dash one is the religion there's no designation for the squirrels yet uh the squirrels need a designation right because they are something or other they're they're intelligent and they fight and they keep records they probably need a designation as well and also the containment procedures say that SCP 3761 is the date but it's also the war so it needs to be clarified that SCP 3761 is a large anomalous event taking place on 723 2063 so that needs to be clarified up in the containment procedures I believe they told us more about the religion they stated it would end when half of the squirrels died and they would return to their original places now is this is it that alright so when half the population of all squirrels die they just call the war over like what happens after that does is it like is it got to be does it have to be a mass extinction event where one side of the war is completely obliterated or is it just like when we lose 50% of the squirrels of all squirrels we're just gonna call it quits and at that point who decides who was right or wrong at that point I think that needs to be expanded upon if we can somehow because right now that's a little weird to me we asked what the religion was about and they told us we asked what the religion was about possibly a semicolon there they told us that they could give tell us a story on how it came to be they told us of this event that gave the war quote purpose this is what they said the war was planned after a person named the caretaker who was a normal human went to a town of squirrels in the trees and began to buy food and bakery which surprisingly enough was a huge carved out oak tree that is a long sentence with a series of splices I feel like that's not great I feel like that has to be simplified actually down to some separate sentences maybe again not a real proofreader maybe that's fine he ate the bread that he bought and then he began to throw the wrapper on the ground all of a sudden without paying attention okay so why does he litter why does he like throw it on the ground what is like is that just like foreshadowing of his carelessness before he steps on a squirrel because it happens one line before he steps on a squirrel so I don't think it's early enough foreshadowing maybe instead of all of a sudden which I don't know maybe all of a sudden spine it was way back from a draft for the stories around him littering okay again so like Chekhov's littering if it should maybe have a purpose hold on so let me cover a couple off-topic things real quick so for carnival nice I've got your draft in the email fantastic we can work on that hedgehog I don't want to really talk about off-topic things too much I want to focus on this I don't want to like it's already a long stream so during skip dictation live when I do behind the scenes of scp readings then I'm willing to like riff a little more off target exactly token stay on target but during critique lab I want to keep us focused on the critique in hand I have a feeling I'm gonna say that every episode like I feel like that's always gonna be a catchphrase all of a sudden without paying attention care taking her to large crunch and a large screech he looks down and sees that he accidentally stepped on a squirrel killing it instantly they say that every citizen of the poor saw as one of their brethren's life was taken away instantly alright so they all saw it but they're denizens of a forest maybe maybe that's fine but honestly could it be like the force where they all felt it and like all the squirrels felt a tiny life being taken from their ranks I don't know it seems like more to me at that place maybe we don't need that a large light flashes throughout the forest and a large bright humanoid that looked like tree critter so why does it look like tree critter why isn't it just and tree critter came down from the heavens or tree critter appeared in front of the caretaker I think it's weird that a large bright humanoid that looked like tree critter came out it's a younger version of tree critter but if you say unless like he changes over time like he reincarnates or something like that if you saw me five years ago you wouldn't say hey a guy I saw a guy who looks like Sherman you would say hey I saw Sherman he was younger I don't know it's like unless a younger incarnation of tree critter if you want him to like because some gods reincarnate like a phoenix and they come back through cycles I was just hearing about what's the phrase I'm looking for I was just hearing about Egyptian gods and how raw the sun god dies and comes back to life every day so every day is a different iteration of him basically so if you want to if you wanted to be that I would clarify it a little bit otherwise I would just say it's tree critter because even if he's younger and he looks slightly different when I was younger I look slightly different and we don't say it was a humanoid that looked like Sherman five years ago and that's as far as I can tell on that front face is the caretaker he pointed the finger toward him and said I'm sorry caretaker but you have committed a crime against the force and I shall ask you to leave or die under squirrel law the caretaker refused saying he had to stay to get food for his family the humanoid looked down and whispered I'm sorry I did not wish to do this he began to fling large amounts of light at the caretaker each one destroying the environment but what but he barely touched the caretaker so why does he attack the caretaker if he's not gonna hit him and if he and secondly if he's not gonna hit him why does he apologize that's a weird thing the squirrels described as a monster that ran through their lands without remorse or thought one that does not care for lives around him or something they both got tired and the humanoid disappeared by morphing a large flower around him getting engulfed as soon as he was gone report state that he said I need to leave I shall tend to you in a later bit my child if you truly care persons grow kind you will leave to before he disappeared into the flower alright I had something about that so yes I don't under the caretakers dodging the light beams so because you need to say that the caretaker is running and avoiding them because that just says I'm sorry I did not wish to do this he began to fling large amounts of light at the caretaker each one destroying the land around him but barely touched the caretaker so right now you're not saying that the caretakers fleeing so what I see here is that he's just like standing there and you know in those movies where a guy doesn't want to shoot his best friend and so he like it's like point break it's like point break where you ever shoot into the air like that's what this is like in my head it was like I don't want to kill him so I just shoot around him that's what it reads like right now so you definitely need to mention that he began to fling large lights of amounts of light at the caretaker and the caretaker fled that way it's more action because I definitely didn't know that the caretaker was running second this is random caretaker does that name mean something we already went over tree critter and that name had meaning but what does why are we calling him caretaker because right now he is the opposite of a caretaker like he doesn't care and he stepped on a squirrel because he what he did not care so like ironic names aren't normally a thing in mythology so what does he take care of because right now his name doesn't have any meaning to me like at no point does he take care of anything while you're answering he's a shepherd what is he a shepherd of for sheep and all that I think all right is caretaker a proper name is that a name you took from something like does it have to does the name caretaker have to be it because in my head if you just said he was a shepherd then I think you do a lot I think it'd be fine if he was a shepherd because a lot of folklore has a young shepherd came in and this happened but because he's a caretaker it seems it's the only name in here that doesn't have a real meaning so it's a funny way of saying shepherd yeah I think caretaker takes away from it myself I don't know maybe the chat thinks differently I think it actually works better with shepherd just because it's like a shepherd walked into the tree the forest to get food for his family and then there were bad things that happened and it was an accident but and I think the let's see the caretaker might have to show a little more remorse that way we know why the squirrels are on his side because right now it's just kind of like he stepped on a guy or he stepped on a squirrel they said leave or you will die and the caretaker refused saying he had to get food for his family but he didn't express remorse he is like I I'm not saying I thought this but I can definitely imagine him being like no I have to get food for my family I can't go I think he needs a little remorse I'm so sorry I'm so sorry but also I didn't mean to kill him but I didn't also need to get food for my family please forgive me something like that okay so we've talked about that paragraph a lot how about I add the fact that when he was running oh please don't kill me I'm sorry don't hurt me that might be a little too light in tone for a folk lore myth but your he needs to say the thing before he's attacked because right now you've got tree critter saying I'm sorry caretaker but you have committed a crime and either you leave or I kill you but he then needs to speak his peace there he can continue pleading for his life while he is fleeing but I don't think he needs to plead his case when he's in trouble hedgehog has a point of maybe he apologizes or says oh no immediately so it's like oh gosh okay I'm gonna move on from this paragraph but you understand that this paragraph needs something going on the squirrels the private is a monster that ran through their lands without remorse a thought one that does not care for the lives around him or something they both got tired and the humanoid disappeared by morphing a large flower around him getting gulped as soon as he was gone reports state that he said I need to leave I shall tend to you in a later bit my child which will reverse and scroll kind who will leave to before he disappeared in the flower I would say the squirrels described it it should either be caretaker or shepherd whichever you choose to go with the shepherd or the caretaker as a monster and it should probably be about what's the phrase I'm looking for it should probably be the neo squirrels that describe it as a monster the neo squirrels specifically described it as a monster because I mean the the proto squirrels forgive him so we got to differentiate that there maybe you even say some squirrels described as a monster they both got tired and the human only disappeared by morphing a large flower around him so when you originally said it I thought that he materialized a flower around him like the pedals closed and then he disappeared kind of like the Venus with the clamshell except it's a flower kind of like the flowers in a Zelda breath of the wild the flower fairies but now I'm imagining like he's turning into a flower stem that then sprouts is there a reason for that transportation transformation because that particular transformation of like turning into a flower stem and then sprouting a flower seems weird to me like I think that's weird is there a symbolistic like religious thing you got that from okay cool that's cool all right then I think it's weird but I think a lot of religious stuff is weird I mean some people juggle geese right you need to describe that transformation better because maybe he morphs morphing morphing is always a weird word I don't like morphing and I don't think we see it a lot on the site maybe he transforms from foot to head into a flower stem from the chat handsome mentions a couple changes to the transformation I don't think we should change the transformation if there is in fact a hindi god which is where we're getting some of this from I think it's good to keep it site 22 are you dr. Bright no I am researcher Joseph Sherman either way it works continuing on subscribers of monster that ran through their lands without remorse of thought but one that does not care for the lives around him or something they got tired transform so yeah you need to transform the transformation be a little more description that would be a little better for the transformation because that didn't make a lot of sense to me I need you to leave I shall tend to you tend to you means that he's going to help him and I think you mean I'm going I will take care of you later which could be taken as take care of you in a good way or a bad way that can work both ways a later bit should probably be I shall tend to you later or at a later time I don't like in a later bit as a sentence even in a later time would be better if you truly care for us in squirrel kind you will leave to okay before he disappeared into the flower I will tend to you in a later date I think you should say I will tend to you in a later time I think time is the best word to go after later myself tend to you is fine I'm not too worried about that I can kind of like that the last thing is with the story you cut off when the caretaker leaves and says I need you to leave or I need to leave but we don't know what the caretaker does what does the caretaker do now because did he leave did he leave the forest did he stay in the forest even though the tree critter left so yeah that needs to be clarified a little bit because the tree critter leaves and then the caretaker just I need I need an end yeah see the author says the caretaker immediately leaves the forest never to be seen by the squirrels again perfect two groups of squirrels formed after the event ones that rebelled against the caretaker for and for what he has done I don't like rebelled because he's not in charge of anything even hated the caretaker sounds better or despised the caretaker and take away the and after caretaker so ones that hated or despised the caretaker for what he had done has done I don't know if it's has done or had done maybe the chat knows something pause put a thumbtack in here Colt mentions in the tree or in the in the tree in the chat that possibly later the tree critter appears to the caretaker for a stern talking to maybe in the final document where the tree critter appears to the squirrels in Madagascar he should mention that he met with the caretaker and that he talked to him and that he had pardoned him on his deathbed and that's why the squirrels freaking freak out in Madagascar because their God just straight up forgave the person they hate the most and that's why they start freaking the frick out that would be a very heavy story point that would be fantastic that would be a great thing to put in there sorry I just got really excited about that story point that sounded so good like that's a great thing to do so yeah at the end of this one the tree critter goes away because he's tired the caretaker leaves never to be seen again and then in the final addendum document when tree critter Jesus appears he tells this story and the squirrels freak out and have a miniature war on the spot okay I'm calm like you guys can't see but like I am like hyper actively like leg shaking down here because I'm so excited about this like I am squirrely because of how that is a good idea I love when an idea comes together and of course this is just my idea so maybe freaking like Western's like that's a stupid idea I don't want to do that but hey welcome to fatigue lab so ones that hated the caretaker for what he had done and ones that forgave the caretaker for his actions and did not wish his prosecution prosecution or persecution I think it should be persecution likely soon the ones that dislike the caretaker made a plan to dig to Kansas and to destroy his homeland so from earlier I feel like we ought to have mentioned that the caretaker was from the far-off land of Kansas just because like we didn't mention that until this point I think it could have come up in his introduction the ones that forgave the caretaker heard of this plan and secretly planned a counterattack on the same exact day whoever won the war would decide whether they would show the caretaker mercy or death well the caretaker died way before it could happen but they didn't know that in my head I just wanted to be unbeknownst to them the caretaker died of natural causes a few years later never to see the date of the great war something like that ever since that e-squirrel would carve what would happen inside their trees so that new generations would carry the legend of the war because the lifespan of the average squirrel isn't that long but the message is the squirrels alright why did they plan a war so far in advance why why did they do that like just so far in the future is there a reason for that like the it's like squirrel ragnarok up in here I don't know man confused cuz like why would they put the war so far out of their lifespan like I don't know anyways but the messages the scores right we're literally crude pictures of the glowing humanoid and the caretaker tagging each other would have these images to pick in caretaker being covered with flower petals and the other half picking covered in squirrel droppings first of all covered in squirrel droppings okay next it's the author says it's not planning a war it's the needle squirrels planning an invasion of Kansas proto squirrels are like now we're gonna intercept you on that day okay fair fair but secondly why are they planning the invasion that far ahead of time like why are they planning the invasion of Kansas that far in the future rather than doing it within their lifespan cuz right now to me at least it just reads as I wanted to have a future anomaly so they planned it to be in like how many what's a lifespan of a squirrel lifespan of a squirrel all right so a Siberian chipmunk can last six to ten years an alpine mark pardon marmot can last 15 to 18 years so somewhere in the 10 ish range wow hiccups oh god I have hiccups on a live stream this is the worst thing that could possibly happen Jesus why why why hiccups go away please okay so because yeah we don't know from the time there's no time so gosh every time I don't have hiccups until I try to talk and then the hiccups come back this is the worst thing that's ever happened in the history of mankind okay so because they're trying to plan their technology is why they said it that far in advance I can see that I need that spelled out a little bit like in documentation B what when we talk about like weapons and we're hearing from the squirrels we should mention that they're delaying their attack to build these weapons like that's why they haven't attacked already because I didn't understand that before but the message of squirrels right we're literally crude pictures of going humanoid and caretaker tagging each other so why is the caretaker being covered in flower petals or squirrel droppings that's because they're on different sides okay so half the squirrels do one half the squirrels do the other I can see that dang hiccups okay they asked again if we wanted anything we denied and left and you're gonna talk about the poison food maybe give it back to remember we put on GPS at the clothing some of them track them but yeah no casualties and the yeah should have an H at the end if you're doing like yeah like yes like that's yay like a yay merrily read us on stock moving on nope casually the business kind of a success I'm gonna file out the humongous amounts of paperwork for the mission now because we didn't get a member to interrogate I don't think you need to say that because you did get the information so it was a success I don't know maybe they still have to do paperwork because they didn't complete the mission to the letter that could be fine alright document B alright so I love everything about document B maybe add in that they're doing their thing so that they can they're delaying the attack so they can build up their weaponry because right now it's war in blank years must must prepare even if you just added three words are not we are not ready war in blank years we are not ready must prepare maybe if you say we are not ready okay so I can see where your idea of the delay for weapon kind is why they're delaying it just needs to be a little more clear in the second document I see what you're going for just make it a little more obvious to me who doesn't get things incident on blank link 2009 and entity okay so why is the date of tree Jesus redacted um you didn't redact the day that operation case some wasn't acted you did not redact the date of the war you did not redact any dates except for the date they found the engravings and the date that tree Jesus showed up so why are those two dates secret but the other two dates are not the original tree critter manifested within redacted city Madagascar which was blank kilometers from site 551 a small group approximated 2,000 squirrels used a spacetime anomaly to travel to the entities location foundation forces presence like 501 were deployed to administer amnestics to witnesses of the event these enemy BMS feet the squirrels once the entire population was near its vicinity I would ask my grandma about it do you know what they said they said she's nothing but used to spare yes I was impatient by decision to punish the caretaker yes I was a child at that point and only just been granted power eternal but he has since passed away and my children are still soup squeak hiccup weird he was a kind of he's a little not mean harm so so yeah you need to characterize the shepherd slash caretaker so that we fought that in the first place we find him to be a kind and friendly soul and who did that by accident because right now we don't feel that about the caretaker from the initial story this is the last time we'll come to earth and talk to you I wish you did not care it's war with the breadlands I don't wish you to exit the world like this all right so he says I wish for you to not carry out this war fought followed by I do not wish for you to exit the world like this he's saying I do not want you to do two things but he also says has different phrases for each and I feel like he would say I wish for you none to not carry out this war within the breadlands I wish for you to not exit this world like this or I do not wish for you like I feel like he would keep the speech pattern the same for both because he's giving like a speech and speech patterns you do repetition like that in public okay so here's the thing when we're talking about interesting writing it's often important to change up sentence structure that way it's interesting it keeps it fresh so it's not just like sentence sentence sentence and it drones but when you're speaking in public speaking it is important to use repetition to get hiccups to get people on your side with your cause Mark Martin Luther King I have a dream that this and this look up any of the great speeches and you'll see repetition is a huge thing so that should definitely there should be some repetition of phrasing like that there is when you are still family you are still brothers and sisters that's excellent speech giving hands out parchment take those to your brothers and sisters do not disappoint me prayer and if you can survive the ground the air watch the grow population run at different directions scroll to the notes trees in the midi area and look up at the entity but you can open the notes and look at them 30 seconds after the war scoping and tying each other through physical manipulation find out and have the squirrel been killed in the rest of the population which are their locations what's the footnote note if you do not fight this war love your siblings in swahili so yeah this whole parchment thing if you do the the he admits that he talked to him and forgave him on his deathbed that would be a good replacement for the parchment and it would I feel like would be a better cause for the war like the miniature skirmish here while this happening the entity covers their face with one of their hands and after the incident it would be a better reason for the neo squirrels to be a little more angry with humans after the fact covers their face with one of their hands and begins to rub their temples as they de-manifest why did he have to make the fucking god of squirrels of all things is heard from the entity so I don't understand that sentence because who is he why did he have to make me the fucking god of squirrels of all things is heard from the enemy now who is he and I assume if this he is above tree critter then he needs to have a capital H and second oh and again at the top of incident 2 a7 you mention that this is again an entity that resembled tree critter so I don't know if you want to be like it's an entity that resembles tree critter or it is tree critter I don't know if you want to be certain of that or not certain I feel like certainty is the thing but it's okay I guess if you don't want to be certain like the entity referred to as tree critter is actually I like that and the entity referred to as tree critter manifested within I think I like that but this is that's opinion why did he have to make me the fucking god of squirrels of all things is heard from the entity yeah okay I can live with that on notes from junior researcher Kim Jenna code okay so in your footnotes earlier up you have Kim Messer and now you have researcher Kim Jenna code is there a reason that there's two Kims with different last names on this on research for this SCP just naming conventions okay cool fix that up along the way after the incident the average behavior of all squirrels on earth appeared to become more aggressive more number of tax from squirrels on humans I've been avert observed than ever before I think that should be the average the hmm after incident 2 a7 the behavior of roughly 50% of all squirrels on earth appeared to become more aggressive because are all squirrels now mad at humans or is it just the neo squirrels have up to their game because they're super mad now I think that should be story wise I think it should just be the neo squirrels are more angry humans with dissenting opinions regarding squirrels have been observed to be attacked the most no just neo squirrels it just looks like all squirrels I don't know the author sorry the author says no just neo squirrels it just looks like all squirrels if you can find a way for yeah the average behavior of all squirrels appear to become more aggressive so yeah on the average I I want a way to specify a little closer that the neo squirrels are acting up because the foundation seems to know about the neo squirrels or maybe they need to speculate that neo squirrels like the average behavior of all squirrels on earth appear to become more progress aggressive this is likely due to increased aggression from the neo squirrel faction like I feel like a little bit of specificity is needed there humans with dissenting opinions regarding squirrels have been observed to be attacked the most so are you what you say are what you saying so is what you're saying that they are attacking anyone who is not a member of the squirrel cult is that what you're saying or is it humans with poor opinions of squirrels because dissenting dissenting means they disagree with somebody however this information was recovered from victims of tax so it's unknown whether that felt for the tax or their opinion change when you use the word dissenting it means they're disagreeing with something so humans with disagreeing opinions regarding squirrels dissenting doesn't make sense in that sentence humans with poor opinions of squirrels humans with humans who dislike squirrels humans who agitate squirrels humans who synonyms check oh cell phone why I'm a jerk welcome back fans I'm a jerk I'm sorry so yeah hate your thesaurus and find something that says poor opinions rather than dissenting just because that would be better I got attacked by a squirrel there's a neo squirrel in the house okay however this information was recovered victim of the tax so it's unknown if that is what they felt before the tax or after their opinion was changed okay so dear God we made it to the end another long script skip but I think we did some good work today site 42 critique lab so any final questions comments or concerns in the chat regarding Western's wacky war of the squirrels man where the squirrels overall I like it like they're things I like they're things that could use some work but you're you're on your way this is gonna be an SCP for sure this current iteration probably a five like there's a lot of things like I still don't like number letter a of the documents there's still a lot of like you were fixing typos along the way and what I did is I know that I haven't looked at I don't I didn't refresh it so I haven't seen the changes because I wanted to go with what we had at the time so after the reading after our edits you'll probably I'll probably talk it like a six because we fixed a lot of like the grammatical stuff and a lot of the little things getting the final like ideas flattened out I think for sure this is going to be a skip I think it would still get downvoted now because it's not like finished but you're definitely you've got a solid rough product and I think you're gonna I think this will be a winner with a little more elbow grease man oh man that was a good I'm I'm very happy with the war of the squirrels idea that is a fun concept whoo hmm alright so here at the end of stream I'm gonna give you my usual spiel a thank you guys for tuning in thank you guys for helping out with site 42 critique lab this has been another very successful episode where we really helped I hope we help this story I hoped we helped where people learned a little bit about more writing 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