 Alrighty, let's watch this in full first. Can I please do the house salad? Yep, you got it. Can I do a piece of bread on the bottom and on the top, please? Okay. Maybe just throw in a piece of meat in the middle with some cheese on it? Yeah, why not? So cheeseburger? No, I said house salad. Alright, that's all pretty cool. I like it. I'm going to bring down the volume at just a tad. So that's all cool. I like what you have body-wise. You mentioned here that you're doing... Worked more in the body movements, added some facial expressions to see how it's going. I have a couple of general notes about thought process, but... Can I please do the house salad? Yep, you got it. Can I do a piece of... Yep, you got it. Watch out for his weight. I do like that, you know, you already have some details in there. But I would look at, maybe it's because of the shadowing. It doesn't feel like it's enough contact there. I think you have to bring it closer. Maybe bring part of the palm down there and some more contact with the fingers. And kind of look how that is working. It feels like the moment we're releasing, especially through here, your table would already be moving a little bit. I know there's more contact here. I mean, let's go, that's what happens. But this feels a bit off. I'll give this a bit more wiggle. These are already moving. I mean, there's already some weight shifting going on. And then on a technical note, this feels very IK because it's all cut off here. So you have all of that movement, but nothing's happening in here, nor the fingers. I know this is for detail stuff, but something to think about because you don't want to have that IK thing of all of this elbow is moving up while nothing's happening here. And then it feels a bit stiff when you have this and that arm move basically as one piece. My horrible line drawing here. But there's no separation between those. I'll also be careful that this is okay. Yeah, almost. See, this works because we have that break in that arm. We understand the structure. Careful when you get to something like this, where it gets very flat or something, even here where we don't quite understand the bend of the arm. I will keep it so that we always see parts of the forearm. If you can somehow. It feels a bit straight in its path. So we're getting a bit turned and integrated here in terms of just arcs and technical things. But what I was saying about the weight is that there's so much movement with his butt going back and down and the upper body moving back that suddenly once we stop this line here just feels like it's stopping a bit too quickly for someone his size. Because your animation is not super stylized in terms of movement and timing. So if you watch that it just feels a bit strong and fast. Also listen to his um. I feel like the energy of his um is too low compared to the energy he uses here to get up so quickly and stop so quickly. That's why I would reduce this like the speed of it and ease into that a bit more. Maybe even overshoot a bit and come back. And then careful here. We are a bit high. I do have my framing a bit. See here to bring this in. We are fairly high A on that framing. So you might have to either bring it lower or zoom out a bit globally just to reframe. I'm a bit cheating here so this is actually gotta do it like this so you can see the full top and bottom is more like that. Hold on. There you go. So just watch out for that. Also we're hitting this line really harshly. And then it just locks. So again for someone his size and the style you're gonna have a bit more overshoot and back and this longer direction changes and not so sudden stops. So just on the technical side I would look at those things. Even this is a bit fast. I like that you go down and then back. But you could have this and then maybe one in there so it starts to rest this earlier and then it squishes the hand down. Then again technical things watch out you get into the sections and that wrist again is super isolated especially through here with all that elbow movement. So as you move forward just something to think about in terms of IK arms and hands. Maybe just throw in a piece of meat in the middle with some cheese on it. That one too when you go back in terms of weight that line here so when you get to this it's very harsh for someone again leaning over and it's like this comes to stop first but you're gonna have a pivot point off of here of the upper body still moving and then resting the elbow a bit more squish. Same thing here just a little bit especially here because this is his relaxed moment. I can see this being timing wise this you could have a little bit of a jolt the way you have it I would just overshoot and settle a bit more but it's gonna be more active because of thought process and he's realizing a bunch of stuff versus this moment this one this one because this is I'm done with my order I said everything I'm now very relaxed and confident it's great so this to me would be slower really bobbing like yeah okay I'm good cheeseburger and then this one could have a little bit more down and up again or imagine you have a two fold where it's to here and then one more so it's one two if you can if that makes sense right it's kind of like so it's not just to stop feels a bit too it's not super pose to pose we have offsets here but it kind of stops a bit too abruptly these are to me like more the bigger technical things I would look at but on a thought process level so if you watch him that's all great I like that he looks at this hi looks at him goes back into that and then confirmation of okay okay you get it maybe it's a bit too corner pupil here but I want to bring it back a bit and maybe even make the pupils a bit bigger and that's cute because you give him enough time to read and realize oh I want to do this I do a piece of bread on the bottom okay and that's the first thing where I go hmmm reminds me of Hardy here Laurel and Hardy you almost have that on his mustache and black and the hat anyway it's cute face to me it feels like he's telling him piece of bread on the bottom take this off here so please and it's this is like a kind of begging please can I please have that will you understand that I just want this like to me he looks for confirmation and then it goes too soon into maybe just into that new thought process so personally I would hold this longer okay like he's not he's not waiting for his confirmation maybe he doesn't have to but to me just subjectively I feel like he wants to go please hold a bit and you can always kind of go down here and it's the look you can still have a slight post change but you are within that range if it makes if that makes sense like you are this is your pose and you can have a sub pose but you are within that headspace and of I just ordered please please please then suddenly and this could be okay I don't to me feels like right after okay then you switch to a new headspace where he goes wait but I also want this because I don't think you need to be in this for this long to me it would be worth it to just hold this hold the keys delete delete delete delete or get to this right do this transition after the okay and then that way you're just this long in this pose throw in a piece of meat in the middle that's to me the biggest thing where it felt like he's going over too soon switching too soon not listening to him anymore because he's really everything is geared towards the guy you know all that please can I do this please can I do this where I feels like he would he would wait for him a bit longer okay maybe maybe just throw in a piece of meat in the middle and I like that I like that he then breaks contact was now he's he's dreaming like oh this could be the size the burger yeah with some cheese on it you know and that's great see that time it works really like huh right I'm confirming why not okay I'm doing something else now then the second part is this so cheeseburger so to me feels like he's relaxed right as we talked about a long time ago he's leaning towards the waiter everything is fine like yeah yeah and then cheeseburger so cheeseburger but now him saying cheeseburger breaks his sense of illusion of oh yeah I tricked him and I ordered this and people will think it's a salad so for him to go that just feels more like wait a minute what did you just say like it's a bit too like what where I would have a bigger moment of slight down up like it'll take where he's maybe from here to here bit higher he moved a bit over bit higher tense fingers tense here eyebrows up looking straight where he goes this moment of oh boy he caught my you know my deception and then move over this little bit of I see I can't even find anything where I can go in there what would be a moment right he realizes something can I find a pose where you do it maybe here imagine this is his his relaxed pose and then he goes huh into this I'm relaxed so cheeseburger into this that's what I'm imagining going just a quick not super long hold just a moment of oh no and then into no no then he can be slow and pretends and then he's defeated and subjective but these are to me the biggest thought process moments that I will personally change a little bit give a bit more texture this feels a bit too casual burger no no like was it this is what hold on we have to go here you know you can see the range you can see you can't see the full range here I bring all of this in here all the frames I'm drawing instead of pulling there you go so you have all of this all of this all of this this is all basically a ruse like he's pretending for this amount of time and then to after all of this setup to suddenly go that just to me feels a bit too little you want a little bit of a and then oh no anyway that's that could be way too subjective you can of course decide whatever you want to do and that's it alright thanks alright there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome alright thank you