 Hello, and welcome back to yet another GCSE revision video. Now, I put up a poll on YouTube and asked you guys, what do you find the most challenging to prepare for in your English GCSEs, okay? And an overwhelming majority of you guys said that creative writing still probably arguably the most challenging part of English and knowing how to start each paragraph within your creative writing story. So guys, I'm back again with yet another creative writing sentence starter which you can use this time in your buildup paragraph. Now, remember when it comes to creative writing, especially when you go for the story in your creative writing question, okay? That's usually what I suggest all my students to go for the story, use a story mountain structure, your beginning, buildup problem, resolution and ending. I'm now gonna walk you guys through the perfect first sentence to use in the buildup of your story, okay? If you've missed my video where I go over the perfect first sentence to use in your beginning paragraph, make sure you watch that video. However, this is the second video to follow on from that and I'll show you guys the perfect phrase that you can use in your second paragraph which is a buildup in your story, okay? And then what I'm gonna do after I read it, I'm gonna show you guys how it hits both your AO5 and your AO6, which is what's tested in your creative writing story. So let's begin with the buildup phrase, okay? You can use this whether it's in a forest setting, if it's in a beach, if it's in a city, regardless of the gender of your protagonist, just use this phrase in your buildup, okay? And this is the phrase, the wind swalled around me as the air grew crisp, ellipsis. What happens in your buildup paragraph in creative writing? Remember that the beginning, paragraph number one, this is where you establish a setting, okay? And you set up the mood. Your buildup is now where your protagonist and the main person in your story begins their adventure. And what you want to do in your buildup paragraph is to create a sense of anticipation because you're working your way through to the problem paragraph, where there's obviously gonna be an obstacle or something that poses a threat to your main character. And this is a great way to create that buildup. You've got the wind which is swirling around, okay? Obviously the wind can swirl just really nicely, okay? So it's not completely veering off from what you've started off in your beginning paragraph, but equally, you're not adding little tiny elements in your story to show that your protagonist is on this adventure, but they might face an obstacle later on, okay? So now here also what you're doing is being quite tactful and putting in little hints that foreshadow this problem, okay? Now, let me walk you guys through why this is such a perfect buildup paragraph phrase to use and why it would hit your AO5 and your AO6. When I say AO5, it's assessment and objective five and AO6, assessment, objective six. Now, AO5, which is super important, okay? It counts towards 80% of the marks available for creative writing in this part of the exam. Remember, AO5 tests your ability to communicate imaginatively. It tests whether you're using ambitious vocabulary, ambitious language. And equally, AO5 tests your tone style register and structural features. Now, why is this buildup phrase so perfect and why does it hit all the different points of AO5? Number one, in terms of the first aspect of AO5, can you communicate imaginatively? Of course you are. You're using pathetic fallacy to show that the mood around your protagonist is changing ever so slightly as they embark on whatever adventure you're taking them on, okay? So the weather is responding, but in this case, it's still a little bit ambiguous. It could be responding positively or negatively, but the wind is just swirling around you, okay? And the air is getting crisp. It's not freezing, but it's not too hot, okay? Also, there's lots of ambitious vocabulary, swirled, crisp, instead of saying, you know, the wind moved around me, okay? That's not very ambitious in terms of vocabulary. You're saying that the wind is swirling around you. Instead of saying, oh, it started getting a little bit chilly, you're saying instead, the air's growing crisp. Equally, tone style register. In terms of tone, you're creating a tone of anticipation. You tone that you're writing in. You know, there's this sense of expectancy that you're creating in your build-up paragraph. Equally, your style is obviously kind of engaging. You're using a complex sentence to engage your reader. And in terms of register, which simply means it's just a fancy way of saying, is it informal? Is it informal? Of course, you're writing formally. Finally, structural features. What that means is your sentence type and also interesting punctuation. Firstly, I wanna draw your attention to the use of ellipsis hair. This is a powerful structural feature that you can use and incorporate. Don't do too much, okay? Use ellipsis maybe once, max twice in your story, but it's a really powerful structural feature you can include, and of course, this is a complex sentence. But let's also talk about why this fulfills AO6. AO6 counts towards 20% of the marks available for this part of the paper, but it's still important, okay? AO6 tests your technical accuracy. Are you spelling correctly, right? Is your spelling and punctuation being used accurately? It is in this phrase. And equally, are you making use of complex grammatical features, okay? So for example, are you using your long and short sentences? Are you using interesting punctuation? Colons, semicolons, and in this case, ellipsis, okay? So literally, this phrase also hits all these three points, okay? So guys, when it comes to your build-up paragraph, paragraph number two in your creative writing story, make sure you use this, and then of course, add onto it, okay? So guys, thank you so much for listening, and of course, make sure you come back for the third phrase that you could use to begin your problem paragraph in any creative writing story.