 Okay, new version with shots there is sound yep, I said it before and I'll say it again Life moves pretty fast. You don't stop and look around once in a while. You could miss it All right, all right So this version I be careful. It's a We have some tweaks in terms of the background everything. I this seems better in terms of the integration This gets a bit too dark. I Understand the chin this because I know the rig, but it's a bit hard to understand what's going on there We need something in here and then this is really really dark. I don't see anything in your Email explaining and what your plan is obscures if you're still having characters Falling on a table stuff in the background here. I guess it's a bit dark there. The music's gone too. It's interesting So let me know what your plan is. It kind of also changes the mood without that music Other than that this verse well, I like that combination here exhale With all that that was well ago details in the fingers With sliding there careful that we don't have arms sliding and stopping at the same time Feels like this guy's gonna stop a bit sooner. This guy's gonna slide a little bit more because there's more Pressure here with that extended arms gonna push out just a bit more in its way Because he's more there's more weight on this and resting it's gonna be a lot more pushing here and then watch out Right when we end here Feels like there's such a big move in the head here All right, we go down and watch out. It's a bit straight You know a little bit of an arc Not too much just because you're finishing with a little move over It was like it feels like you're going down and over versus a bit of an arc and over But then we were a bit locked watch that head here Right there. It feels like we're suddenly locking and there's just some movement in the brows and in the hips Yeah, this seems almost a bit too separated like this section is really locked But then only the hips are moving So with that hip movement, you can have a little bit of movement in the chest Let's don't keep alive in the head Yep. Yep Yep, you got some movement. It's like a lip smacking sound Yep This seems a bit slow here. Yep he says Yep But it's kind of a yep This was more like you So that lip sync and the sound don't really match and then yep that energy there Yep Fuzz also you Was really slow there So that needs a bit more work Watch out you overextending and popping a little bit that arm there So as you come down, it's it's a strong pose Yep, then we have a lot of wobble then in the shoulder and elbow. I said it before and I'll say it again I said it before and I'll say I said it before and I And this move feels a bit on to be honest This feels more like you're going and it's a bit slow and then this move feels like such a translate I said it before and I Versus more of a rotation where he might tilt that head over first and then rotate in Y It seems a bit dislocated there from the rest of the body This feels a bit better because now you're getting into more rotations again I said it before and I'll say it again And then even this one life Feels a bit it's not super safe, but just the body and the head are moving Almost as one. It's like if he moves over there and he's holding the gaze you might Move that neck over a little bit and rotate the head and why just kind of hold that It's not crazy it's a smaller note that on the bottom of those life The thing that sends up more is the next move. I said it before and I'll say it again That is really fast again It's this thing of his voice is so even and the body goes over and whoa, and so he moves over So it's he doesn't move while he's talking which helps because they would really not match the sound But just more wise in his weight and everything it just feels really really fast Because the thing too is that there's such fast movement that you would think well He has to push off with his arm to be that fast It doesn't just come from the root because it's the upper body that kind of tilts like this right it rotates tilting off of here But it doesn't quite work because there is no pressure on this arm. There's a little bit of Maybe perceived pressure, but this to me seems more like the fingers are flattening because they're dragging on the surface So he's moving while this hand is slipping meaning there's no real push off here Which makes this just not as believable again It's just a bit too fast given the mass And then after that it feels like he would say life like this more like like it not an exhale But you know if you do something really fast and strenuous the voice is going to change But life just sounds like like he just like he would say it here So to me it seems like instead of moving over this way and so far this way You might as well go Straight like that. So instead of over this and this way shorten that path It will be you will slow it down and it will match the energy of the voice a lot better life moves pretty fast This is a tricky one moves pretty fast. It's almost not visible. What are you doing with? This here and it still has that feel of well, we're we're down here I think I mentioned that before where it feels like well, it has to come like this, but now we're up here Like I know like this is so far away. You mean that path. It's gonna go this way that candle The head is all the way over there and now it's only up here and it's it's also very dark Very dark here. It's it's a bit tricky to understand what he's doing there. It's pretty so you could change the color it's pretty fast and Instead of having this Coming so fast so straight here The candle and this hand snap to the left. It's a lot of fast movements. You might as well go Over here bring that arm here up already. So basically at the end of this frame here Shot that hand is already open here ready to receive this candle and Different colors it doesn't blend with the background and then when we cut to this Shot that hand is already up here frame one is already this So it doesn't have that pop in the frame That's your first frame and that hand stays so throughout the whole thing that hand is in this pose Ready to receive the candles all you're seeing is a little bit of a move to the right and only the candle going Like that and at the very end you can do maybe like a one frame grab like this But but don't go in so far that way. There's not so much moving and we have a clear view of oh There's a candle flying his hands and then there you go. You don't stop and look Said it before and I'll say it again life moves pretty fast This also lip sync wise fills with soft pretty fast Pretty fast pretty fast It's an odd Like all these shapes here pretty fast Pretty fast I find now I think I would close that mouth sooner frame or two And then keep it like because it's an S fast and then you open the mouth and not do this That's an odd shape to say fast say it again Life moves pretty fast. You don't stop Yeah, it seems more like fast Like this fast Open the mouth then keep that mouth. I will keep that mouth open until you Until you so you go from This shape to you shape and don't close the mouth here. It seems it seems a bit off It's pretty fast You don't stop and look around once in a while and then with so much moving here You don't stop especially on this one You want a little bit of down in the in the head and up again It's such a pull by the jaw that it feels a bit too isolated Like his head basically does a very very slow rotation Well, all that stuff is moving and then and then and I hear that that rhythm in the voice Just seems not really reflected in his body rhythm. You don't stop and look around once in a while Look around once in a while Around once in a while and this closes too soon once in a while While I would have a strong extreme on the corners open that a bit later Stop and look around once in a while. You could miss You could miss it you could miss and this seems a bit too early you could miss it Stop and look around once in a while you could miss it Once in a while, you this also seems a bit fast. I probably saw this down like two three frames You could miss it So what happens is that you have a really fast move and then a sudden stop and It's almost like if you would do it that way you would have a Slightly tighter grip so that during this stop the fingers could relax a bit could miss it and then no drift here Meaning that if it's that fast it feels like there's more tension to it and you would hold that more but right now it's this odds change from fast to a sudden stop you could miss it and then like a slow drift where it doesn't feel like he's holding this like All of this movement seems separate from this You could miss it You know something could miss it move like that the body this would move a little bit over First too floaty and then I would if you're going back like this I would probably keep that candle a bit higher over here Come down and then and then come to a stop around here. It also seems a bit Come from a bit too low But then you go over to the left and immediately go over to the right It's such a fast object on frame here on screen to go left right I would simplify this and just have this comes towards him towards him ease in Into this so that this is the bigger thing moving. We have such broad movement here And then they're very connected there they move So connected there and then back down and ultimately feels like you want to come in a bit straighter into this pose ease in This comes in and that candle is still Like you still have that Here and at the end it might be here again with a little bit of a drift So it is reacting to the body going forward but not so much And if you're going to do a effect where the the candle blows again, it will be a bit Composed if that thing was here And if that's an issue then I would just have it, you know lower but still stay there And then I'm not quite sure what you're doing here. Just because again everything is missing. He's not animated Yeah, so let me know what the plan is for this and that's that thanks All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want You can submit whatever beyond you get 16 submissions either way a like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you