 Hello and welcome to a video showing you a step by step breakdown of how to write an amazing level nine model answer to the English language paper one question five creative writing exercise. My name is Barbara and in this video I'll go over with you how to write a model response for creative writing question for the English language paper one exam. Don't forget we've got an amazing GCSE AQA English course covering everything you need to know about this portion of the exams. This is language paper one as well as English language paper two and the literature portion of the exams including paper one, paper two, as well as all the texts included in this course. Therefore, if you want to know how to secure top level nine marks in your English GCSEs do make sure you sign up for it using our link below. So let's have a look at a creative writing past paper question and how to write a strong model response. Now let's look at a past paper question so always remember that the creative writing question is always question five and it's worth 40 marks therefore you should spend 45 minutes out of the one hour 45 minutes that you're allocated for the English language paper one exam. Now the question is usually structured something along these lines you have section B which is a writing and you're told to spend 45 minutes on this section and you must write in four sentences and it's always essential to plan your answer. Now this question in particular states you're going to enter creative writing competition your entry will be charged by a panel of people your own age so other secondary school students write a story suggested by this picture. Now what I would suggest is you should always spend five to seven minutes planning this story this time is sacred you need to have a clear idea of how to plan your story. In terms of the structure to use for a plan I would suggest having let's say four or five paragraphs each of which can go into a beginning so you have your opening this is where you set the scenes of course with this image the scene has been set it seems to be in a park setting you have different people who appear to be part of the same family perhaps or the same extended family there's a young girl in the middle who it seems to be her birthday and then so in the beginning you basically set this scene then in the build-up you create some action some kind of interesting adventure something that is happening which you're going to go over then you can have a problem always remember a story should have a twist this is what makes it interesting for your reader then you've got a climax this is the scariest part of the story this is most interesting part of the story whereby we're not sure what's going to happen and then the resolution resolution can also include a cliff hanger as I've mentioned when you're planning it would be good to use this type of structure one paragraph for beginning one paragraph for buildup one paragraph for problem one paragraph for climax and one for resolution of course do bear in mind you can have beginning and build up as one paragraph then one for problem climax and resolution but try not to have fewer than four paragraphs okay now with this kind of question if I were to look at it I would obviously as I've mentioned set the setting in a really beautiful park during the daytime the atmosphere is probably quite happy quite jovial quite playful and it's her birthday and what I will do is I will write it from this lady's perspective so she is the grandmother she's looking at perhaps one of her grandchildren and it's one of perhaps her elder grandchildren's birthday so let's say it's her 18th birthday now the buildup perhaps is maybe there's some kind of change so for instance if we look at this other character she's looking at something in the distance as is he okay so now the buildup is there something happening in the distance maybe there's a change of weather that's causing them to not focus on the festivities as everybody else then the problem is maybe this issue is a tornado and now the setting starts changing everything becomes dark now the climax is perhaps a start running for the cars and now this main lady so this is the grandmother is trying to get all her children to safety and then perhaps she loses her nephew or rather her great grandson and the resolution could be either a cliffhanger something happens maybe the granddad so let's say him he has to go in search of him but maybe we're not sure what's going to happen okay so now let's look at my model response to this question swarms of children running and screaming around the park as bubbles floated in the air and the fluorescent balloons drifted around aimlessly on the floor and in between branches of trees there were multiple birthday banners draped across the mahogany stalks and branches I gazed at my granddaughter and classed my hands with pride she had just turned 18 my tremulous hands classed together and I turned to my left and looked at my youngest granddaughter as everyone gathered around her to sing happy birthday and watch the cake cutting I could not help but notice something my youngest granddaughter was fixated on the sumptuous chocolate cake the pearly white cream was dotted with petals and slices of perfectly cut fruits we began loudly singing happy birthday as my granddaughter took out a knife to slice the cake I turned to my husband who wore a blue checkered shirt and I irritably nudged him to fix on his granddaughter yet his focus never once waned as he held on to his wine glass and he stared intently ahead my brows knitted together as I noticed that someone else was distracted staring in the same direction my brunette head granddaughter who donned a white and black top was also staring straight ahead what were they looking at I waved my head around as I felt strong gusts of wind suddenly rustled the trees around me my eyes widened as my jaws dropped when I noticed millions of emerald scarlet and ruby red leaves swirling around furiously in the distance I tried getting the attention of the birthday girl whose head was bent down focusing on cutting the birthday cake the wind whistled and wished as everyone's focus left the cake and looked in the same direction the turquoise sky was brightly turning ash and gray as a furious tornado formed in the horizon the monstrous apparition danced and swayed as it drew closer to us the cheers and laughter transformed into cries and screams as I shouted at my grandchildren to run my oldest granddaughter flung her cake to one side as we backed away from the oak table and ran towards our cars my heart raced as we sprinted to our cars to save our lives we arrived and I counted everyone the tornado was closing in we do not have much time suddenly I noticed my only grandson was missing I looked around through the fog and the gray ghosty clouds he had vanished as tears rolled up in my eyes I noticed my husband run back directly into the eye of the storm his blue checkered shirt disappeared into gray watery tornado now here as I wrote this I decided that he would be the grandfather okay so perhaps also this is another granddad maybe from the mom's or dad's side so this is her husband okay now bear in mind with this creative writing answer I'm using metaphors I'm using very vivid language such as swarms of children I'm also using lots of adjectives fluorescent balloons because what you want to do is give your reader really really vivid descriptions of course as you can see here this is the beginning of the story okay going back to this plan I've written the beginning as one paragraph and I've made it really really positive the atmosphere is really really amazing okay then I've started adding more detail I've also added lots of adjectives and adverbs as well as verbs loudly singing adverb and then also I'm mentioning really obviously certain characters so that they are really related and clearly indicated in the image so the blue checkered shirt here I've also mentioned for instance I'm clasping my hands to really make it clear that I'm mentioning this particular individual in the image okay make sure you are answering the question the story suggested by the picture okay then as you can see here I've now had my build up then I'm now adding my problem there's a certain change okay and my problem then goes into what I've combined as my climax and resolution and I've ended with a cliffhanger and an ellipsis okay so do bear in mind that you need to have very colorful language with your creative writing you need to have a good set structure and the most important thing that's really sacred is do make sure you plan your story so that's all if you found this video helpful make sure you give it a thumbs up and consider subscribing to our 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