 Thomas, yours says that the waves quickly crash down, but the storms over so wouldn't they be back to calm and they wouldn't be crashing that quickly anymore, so they wouldn't be going back that quickly, so maybe you should change it to like calmer waves or something, to have calmer waves, because if they're really quickly crashing down it's sort of like there's going to be another storm or something. Apart from that I think it's pretty good, so I think you've done a good job changing it. I like the piece of work here, I think first bit you could add, it says just after the storm, you could like add, like after the storm, or like after a terrific storm, or like after a tremendous storm. I thought that maybe it would be too many now, but yeah, I think I will do that because it doesn't say what kind of storm it was. Because it could have been a small storm, you wouldn't know. But obviously we read more, so we would assume that people would have known what kind of storm it was. I think that probably the only thing you can probably have to do, apart from that it's good, great. So what I think you should do is, how to call them the sand, how to call the sand boss, the ant, and maybe slowly close to her eyes, and if you have just a favourite blanker, you wouldn't really think much, just a brown sheet. So you might want to add something like patchy or knitted, so that might be a different picture anyway. I would see you, I would actually change that after, like change the orange, you could change like how orange this is, like right, or dark orange, you could even add a different colour to it. And you could also watch how they're watching it, like were they watching it like, watching it eagerly for just a good time, or were they just laying down calmly waiting for them to get home.