 All righty, let's play this in full. Oh Nice like your gloves wall All right You are saying here that you are well into spliting now and you got the gloves rigged up We saw that here, which is awesome You turn on the arms and change some of the timing then other times you watch it and you feel like it's gotten worse. I Know that feeling. Let me see. I Subjectively as always all the critiques are you know subjective here I feel like these guys Swinging forward here are a bit too twin and it feels a bit too deliberate It's like, okay. I gotta swing my arms and stop here. It doesn't quite feel like I'm just taking a stroll going whoa so that's that's Missing to me the feeling of I'm just doing whatever because he seems like he's whistling Can I yeah, yeah, and then Getting a bit more of a snap out of this You can almost see also the twinning and supposed to pose With you know slight offsets on the sand. It's not completely, but it has just that slight feeling And I think you can do if you do this and you look up I would probably push this and do again a bit more of a casual swing I least to me that on his arms and then huh and then I would hold Where it's almost to a stop he goes here. I was like what's that whoa and then the jump versus now It's kind of a it's a bit soft and it's holds and then he has that long expression like oh What's coming and then this I would personally take some frames out and really make this hmm And then and then that expression quickly and then the jump But again, that's up to you Just kind of this it to me It's overall feeling that it just feels it feels soft and spliny like for instance this room here And that means nothing when I say won't hear Those arms so these guys when those arms come down again a bit similar in their posing And then as they stop it just feels It feels almost Presentation like I got a swing those and make a nice arc versus Like to me this is an opportunity to go a bit more chaotic and dirty was whoa You know where you can really snap into this and then quick landing and then he can go whoa Who's that but then if I look at this here? This feels a bit weird So you have this big jump and I'm looking as I can general the the flow and them the momentum Whoa, and then you get to this and when you do this Root and stop it feels like this is a very quick stop on the root and Upper body root is like he has to hit that pose one Where this almost feels Like that arm is swinging, but just for a moment It feels like it's holding on to the hips It also almost becomes a bit too casual imagine that arm would be would be dangling there like on what happened here And it feels like it needs to have a bit more out of breath and panic and just Going from panic into whoa was that the other thing that strikes me as a bit too much is that weight shift there? He just on it to me feels like he's trying really hard to be relaxed versus holy crap this almost killed me or you can almost have a bit of a Again, not to change your animation, but me thinking out loud seeing this going whoa. What was that? Not I would see this blind now it feels almost slow, like I said slow and casual and soft versus Whoa, and then maybe some darts like head darts going Imagine is looking here and then here and like whoa. Whoa. That was close and then you can relax going Huh, that was kind of crazy, and then you can have that slow look here And then wait what and then the second one that's kind of how we'll play it where you have panic in it I guess so wait second one. Whoa, and then this Which I think is cool The only thing here is that this Feels like the chest and head Are parented together as one unit going down. I like that move But yeah that moment feels whoa just a bit I Think I will probably also take some frames out and then on something have the head drag more where it's really just like the quick Getting out of there But if you do what I said with the head be careful, then you have Then you might you have something like this Feels a bit too broken. So you might just have this and then like two frames later maybe stay in this Shoulders up head, you know big face like a stretch in the face not deforming the skull But just a stretch for whoa and then into this Just a bit Snap your verses this whole mass moving over there for the anticipation to go over And then same thing here when you land Sounds like a plane you have an airport by the way those play Petaluma airport So this here again has a slight feeling of these guys traveling a bit two together and Then and then he goes back into being slightly too spliny casual And then oh You know with With this shoulder up and in that leg going, huh, huh? Or I will keep it here meaning that you do this whoa and then same thing again worry Maybe maybe it's the smaller faster steps. It's like whoa. Whoa And you can have a bit of maybe maybe What I just tried to pin to my meter silently there or not not with visuals where it's a bit more breathing up and down like oh Whoa, and then a big exhale Okay, you know and then you can maybe play it up to where you have a little bit of a pause of that big exhale and then Then that step Okay, ha ha funny funny funny And then that way you have that contrast again of fast fast fast slow trick in the audience everything is okay and then that fast pop there This I'll be careful the up and down on the shoulders feel very separate. I feel like you want to have that Ha ha ha like that ha ha ha comes out of his chest. I don't see anything in the chest there It's mostly in the shoulder So the couple things a shoulders are very separate in there up and down. Maybe I should Be fancy and change colors since the red on right here and then so Shoulders up and down but the chest has nothing except just a rotation forward But through all of this there's nothing really here I would try to do this where it's more become the laughter comes out of the chest from the breathing Which is also affecting the shoulders, but they're both kind of doing a lot But because of that the roof goes up and down and even in your Move forward and that into this If you track the nose it would still have a little bit of this because it's influenced by this Right, so this to me is the center the epicenter. I think and then very radiating out and then watch out It's a fast move back bam into a stop. So it's like he waits now for this So what he could do is probably just maybe hold inhale for his last laugh back mouth open and Imagine like on this frame. It would shoot up meaning that When this shoots up or when this comes up here, right? You're finishing that move back So you really this is interrupting the laugh and think and making the audience think artist is all okay now and Then I will probably not go forward just yet that would keep that head back So when this happens this goes up the head is still back. He's still laughing and then bam Then you can have the compression. However, you know pose compresses and into this Hope that makes sense I like the leg at the end there. It's extremely picky, but I wanted to after this You want nothing for three more frames and this is so picky, but I feel like we just need to smidge in more Nothing and then That's that last little button at the end again You almost want to trick the audience again that it's done and then it might just be three three four frames Might not be, you know, the most elegant pose there, but for some reason. I like I like that outward stretch there Maybe oh, maybe you do both and it's just this Full on twinning but we're just both legs Just a bit more, but yeah, that's it the gloves are great Maybe that last one again picky That last move here up that deformation up and down feels like now There are fingers in there doing something versus the bounce and squishiness of an object again super picky But you are saying please feel free to tear this apart. So I'm just giving you my incredibly picky Silly notes here. That's it though. It's really cool. So just like yeah little things here and there just the general note feels It is things got softened out a bit And I think the character of freaking out and everything could come back a bit more But that's it. Thank you Alright, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you