 All righty, let's check this out. Let's put the whole thing Chocolate you must have chocolate everybody loves chocolate say you do say All right interesting so You're talking about that you have other background elements So you can put stuff here like other mannequin parts or some shelves that you're saying here and you're not super happy with the face But you're going for this creepy guy weirdo kind of thing I think there's definitely a creepy weirdo thing of holding this now This is all very subjective. I'm not sure if It all depends where you want to send this, you know company-wise if this is for your real how Creepy is this too creepy is this inappropriate is it just getting into this weird obsessive Guy obsessing over a woman type of thing You know, this is all something that you will have to decide Technically I'm not to be honest. I'm not super sure that you need a Full-body shot all the time This is probably okay because it's your big reveal and yet a big move to then show this it's a bit Cut off and it's bit top heavy and framing and you kind of cutting it off right here I don't know. My first thought was Depends how serious you want to do this and I know you're saying here that you're going for something weirdo type of thing that being said this could also just be a neutral mannequin and Then you could almost have an arm dangling here. So you have a bit of interesting overlap. I know this is more work I'm just thinking out loud and then you can always have, you know, some mannequins hanging there and on shelves and hanging if you want to do this You know, or you do all kinds of different types of mannequins, so it's not so so creepy in terms of what's going on here or I Know this changes everything and I'm not saying you should do this I was going to throw out ideas just in case you're you're open to this What if he holds a cat and it's just the guy that's really obsessed with his pets and wants to talk to his pet And talks about chocolate and all that stuff that could be something so you could have some Interesting facial shapes of a creature freaked out and holding here shaking and then maybe a tail around it You know, like the other things you could do technically I would definitely but I like your idea of adding more stuff It just feels like this is just the background Added and it's a guy in an empty room and I'm not sure if that's that appealing to watch And that's why my my biggest thought was you start like this and once you go here You frame it like this and then you just do a close-up. It was once you're here Do we need to see the body? Like is there anything that we need storytelling wise in terms of seeing the whole body? No, and if you do this Again, this could all be framed in something that's a lot tighter So that will be my first suggestion again, this is also objective you maybe you want to do everything in one shot That's all you have to you So again, I mean it all depends what your final purpose is. Do you want to send these to companies? What companies do you want to consider the content for those companies? This is something just for yourself It is a practice thing You can always email me and let me know and then we can talk about this in email form and hashing things out Well, yeah, my first thought was why wouldn't it be funny if it was a pet and then you can have some additional animation and Then you go from a full body to then something closer because you are talking about I'm not happy with the face at all. That's your comment there But because you are so full-bodied, you know, it's yes, you got to put in facials But it's not as important as if your shot was like this, you know If you had close-up you would put more detail into this generally talking about your face So to me the main thing is that it's just all very very small the shapes are very contained They're very minimal, but if I listen to him Chocolate like to me. I feel a lot of on a chocolate and just pushing those shapes You must laugh like even that is almost like he's so desperate that to me There would almost be a bigger push of eyebrows and maybe slumping of shoulders and maybe leaning just really pushing also the Emotion through the body. You know, just the face Everybody like even that would be just much more accentuated in the shapes And this is your right I can scrub here, you know, I mean, this is your so that it's just so minimal So to me, I will go absolutely bananas and push those shapes Look at look in the mirror and just exaggerate How he's talking and then you can always scale it down then we can pick moments where oh, this is appropriate here Maybe this is too much there. I do like your pause here How you go up and hold and that which kind of matches the energy of the audio delivery I'm just again thinking back wouldn't be fun to just have an anime Yeah, I know I think about a cat per cat, but I freaked out cat Shivering and that with that little, you know flick with the finger on the nose where the then the creature could react to this But again, that's just me and I would love to have a discussion with you in terms of what you are willing to do and change and what your Goal is ultimately for the shot. The thing that's okay to me is this big move It's very theatrical in and you know over Acted but I mean given his delivery. I Think it's appropriate. It's okay But the feeling that I get with something like this That's very clean in its move and its presentation. This seems like This seems almost like a stage of a theater and he is auditioning and he's just overacting in terms of big theatrical moves That's my other impression whereas This feels more character-driven So if you're going for creepy stuff, I'm not sure if this is the right move for if you want to go for a creepy weirdo guy This might just be an eccentric person and I think to me there's a difference there and there could be something if you If you hold something else again, this is just going with the idea I'm very obsessed with adding a pet here that he will be holding a chocolate bar Maybe here or when he does this it's him holding, you know a chocolate bar that will be You know imagine the hands bit here and he would hold and it's out of the fingers the chocolate bar hitting the nose And I'm not saying this would be the post because the silhouette would be bad But something where you would use the prop because he's already talking about chocolates So yeah, so I mainly have more questions than Feedback for this because I think from a technical point of view Let me turn off the sound here. I think from a technical point of view. It's all nice I mean, there's some moments when this arm goes up That feels a bit even in timing and Spacing wise this seems pretty fast and right through there It just slows down a lot suddenly and then it's a bit floaty and even going up. I Think once you get to here, you can be a bit more detailed with the fingers for contact And I think a bit of a wiggle in the knees So from a technical point of view, there's some things here and there But I think it works pretty well. So I'm I'm less worried about Your animation skills per se in terms of oh, this is tricky to animate and you need to work on your on your Posing and your timing. I think that's all good. So I feel like I could talk to you in terms of just performance only So that's why it's a rambling. I'm gonna stop it here And after you watch this email me and let's talk about this Let's see what we can do and obviously you can say no I want to do exactly this which is more mannequins and then I will continue to critique that But for now, these are my thoughts and comments. All right. Thank you All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want You can submit whatever you want you get 16 submissions either way like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you