 Here are three mistakes GCSE students make in the essays that teachers absolutely hate. Number one, stop stating the obvious. Stop describing what's happening in the extract. Your teachers read the same thing, they're good. Instead, what you need to try and do is talk about what's implied between the lines. What's the author's message? What's the impact on the reader? Talk about that instead. Number two, stop explaining the meaning of a technique that an author uses. Don't write, the writer uses onomatopoeia and onomatopoeia is when blah, blah, blah. Don't do that. Mention the technique and then launch into what its effect on the reader is. Number three, short paragraphs. Now, when I'm personally marking my students' essays and I see that the paragraphs are less than five lines long, I already knew they're not gonna go into enough detail and enough depth. It's better rather than writing, say, 10 short paragraphs, aim to write three paragraphs which go into lots of depth and detail. Now, if you wanna see examples of model answers, especially English, GCSE, grade nine, model answers.