 All righty, let's watch this first. Happy new year and let's go Papa that's a long Okay, hold on. Let me keep playing Play this in full sound All right, so let's check this out again, so Not sure about this whole long intro you do have sound now, and I'm checking your mail here Yeah, the one with the monster in the hallway review this one and said I don't see anything about the beginnings Or maybe I missed something apologize if I forgot or I missed I think to me you can cut in Right before right we start the shot Bam surprise Not sure why we need this and there's no sound unless you want to do something unless Unless you got text and credit and something gonna do later on to do this. I'm not quite sure But then that entrance is cool I think we're also Going away from the character bit too soon because we're still Wanting to we want to see all this cool action and now the camera is already going away. I'm not sure that that is Needed because everything is so small and then speaking of camera. We are very low here. We're starting to cut him off It's like we're expecting something to come out of that ceiling So to me feels like you want to tilt down and and like be closer But stay within framing of that. We want to see Okay, you got sound which is cool tells us what's going on with that big big coil But then this was weird I feel like the sound is happening here. Is he shooting because he's tripping Okay trips and that triggers Hold there not sure about that So watch out for your timing of the shooting and the same thing here. We're still very very high I think just reframing would be good And actually something I miss in that first viewing is that he trips over this just because there's no legs and nothing else But the problem that's happening here is that We're watching him watching creature Creature falls we see this. Ooh, there's a new creature I'm totally looking at this and you kind of miss this so be careful as you're introducing two events This entrance and this making him trip That could be kind of re Jiggled around So if it could be tilt a bit lower it's a bit high there This gets a bit fast and I know this is just step But you don't have to have more time in the shot shots gonna be longer To make that work. That's all cool. I think we're a bit close here Watch out covering The face and again, it feels like that could be maybe around here with the creature here I mean creature is coming like this feels nice. I mean, this is a nicely balanced composition, but then this feels ever so slightly two screen Left, but I mean we can also but then she introduced later on more of a handheld camera Kind of reframing down then and the only other things that we're lingering on this For some time and I'm quite sure I'm not seeing the mail what your plan is with this if you go and animate or if you can animate those thingies maybe this will Start moving down here more like you know like the movement starts to go up so that motivates the camera to go up. Maybe Not sure it's a bit long unless you want to frame up and then you know make a big bit of a mess here reframe again If you want to make this a handheld shock and help you with that as well But that's kind of it still very cool action. It just yeah, I promise mostly that beginning the timing and it's kind of mostly reframing things So we're not so top-heavy If that makes sense. All right, I think that's kind of it's very cool. Love that creature. It's almost like a chicken We're human chicken with two mouths very weird. All right. Thank you All right, there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whatever you want You get 16 submissions either way like and subscribe would be awesome. All right. Thank you